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Twilight despises chocolate milk. She hates it. Defiles it. She throws it on the ground, and spits in its puddle of calcium goodness. Chocolate milk has haunted her since her childhood, and Twilight vows to never drink it at all. She can't stand it! However... somepony in the Ponyville community dares to bring this sweet treat before her, and the innocent peace offering doesn't end very well. This is the tragic event that takes place on a summer afternoon in Ponyville.

Author Notes:
~ Pictures are done by GrapeParfait (His Photobucket page.)
~ Inspired by Twilight spilling chocolate milk.
~ [Tragic] because a dairy product was the unfortunate victim.
~ A story to celebrate the first day I registered on this site. :twilightsmile:
Unfortunately, I couldn't finish this in time for April 25th. :pinkiesad2:
Still hope you can enjoy it.:derpytongue2:

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 117 )

Noooo! Not chocolate milk!
Oh well at least it isn't STRAWBERRY milk :pinkiecrazy:

Okkayy... Slowly backs aw- IMUSTREADIT! *Nom*

Yaaay! The new story's out! I'm so excited! :3

multiple, destructive mega spell.

Spells. Plural. :moustache:
Also I can see in my mind a Twilight first looking at the glass of chocolate milk, then carefully placing a hoof on the edge of it, carefully tipping it over, and then breaking the subatomic bonds that keep the chocolate milk and the glass exiting.

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Thanks for catching that mistake.:pinkiehappy:
Also, did you get the reference?:derpytongue2:

I am intrigued, now to see where we go!

Judge: Twilight sparkle, for this unforgivable crime, I sentence thee to die by molten chocolate milk. May Celestia have mercy on your soul.
XD

2514718
The true drama hasn't started yet, and already you're giving her the verdict.:rainbowlaugh:

2513825
Just to warn you, the ending may be not what you're expecting.:trollestia:

2512837
I'm glad you are.:twilightsmile::heart:

2512449
Who knows? Maybe it'll become the next victim. Maybe it will not.:trollestia:

2514815 So far I expect Twilight to accidentally drink some chocolate milk and go 'Huh, so that is why this is so popular...'

2514876
It's a nice little ratio I've got going on here so far.:ajsmug:

2514896
How do you favorite it without liking it... its instinct.

2514902
You know what?
... You're fucking right.
The likes and favorites should be equal!:twilightangry2:

Comment posted by RealityCheck deleted May 2nd, 2013

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Oh hello fag.
Let me quote you.
"This is fan fiction."
It doesn't necessarily need to make sense, and keep in mind that I've tag this story to be Random.

EDIT: Also, I mostly wrote this fan fic for fun. Mostly... but I don't mean for this fic to be "high quality", so stop trying to dumb it down. Please.

2514912
I have Faved this fic, BUT I REFUSE TO LIKE IT! Muahahahaha, I'm so evil! :derpytongue2:
Also...

or maybe an entire apocalypse was forced upon the land, caused by the means of multiple, destructive mega spells.

yay, Fallout:Equestria reference!

2515125
Aww... and yay!
Finally somepony gets the reference. Or at least commented about it.:rainbowwild:

2512957 I believe I did. Although I always might be mistaken

Twilight seems to be more of a coffee milk type of pony.

I like this. Chocolaty is awkward spelling for such a nice word, and that's the legit spelling. It looks off, but hey, that's English. Now, FINISH IT!

2514912
If that were the case, then my story would be breaking 200 likes right now.

I haven't even read this but TWILIGHT DON'T YOU DARE SPILL THAT CHOCOLATE MILK. I SWEAR UPON ALL THAT IS HOLY, I WILL BRING THE FORCES OF DARKNESS UPON YOU. THERE IS NO HOPE. THERE IS NO LIFE. THERE IS ONLY DEATH.

Yes, I did get the reference.

“Pinkie Pie,” Twilight groaned, rubbing the back of her head. “you could of shouted a warning.”

"Could have" or "could've", never "could of." :twilightsmile:

Considering that the chocolate milk is already doomed, I hope that the method of murder is table-flipping.

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It's because they combined the tracking and the favorites systems.
Now when you want to see if a story updates you have to favorite it, regardless of whether you'd actually say it's one of your favorites or you're interested but you're not sure if you like it and are curious as to where it's going.
As such likes and favorites are almost always imbalanced and tend to lean more towards favorites than likes.

Perfectly explains what Twilight would probably do: derpiboo.ru/255062?scope=scpe50760aa7782e65d1b47828423f5a2ffcf5364fe9
By the way, no I have not read your story yet.

How do you put someone out of business by buying up all of their product?

Was this the deleted objection by RealityCheck? Or was RC objecting to the use of 'Eternal' for something that clearly had a beginning?

hay twilight, want some... chocolate... CAKE?? its not chocolate milk, its chocolate cake. :facehoof:

I think you need to add a sex warning for that cupcake scene

So apparently, Twilight was thinking of chocolate milk when casting dark magic in the Crystal Empire. You need hatred to fuel it and Twilight hates chocolate milk the most.:twilightangry2:

2516126
It was about the milk thing.
Honestly, I don't like him to begin with and I don't see what's the problem with it. I wrote this thing for fun. I'm not about to have a guy I don't like critize it like it was supposed to be great or something.

2517056
My thoughts exactly.

2517023
So you noticed. :trollestia:

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It's only starting to crack... :pinkiecrazy:

2516007
It was her mind slowly breaking down into unreasonable insanity.

This looks like it'll be adequately silly. :derpytongue2:

Hey uh Twilight, I don't think economics works that way. More likely your aunt just got so rich she just sold the farm and retired to Florida or something. I'm frankly shocked that you never even bothered to pick up an economics textbook in your entire life, or even just picked up how it works from the news and word of mouth. Carrot Top sells carrots to the cakes, right? They then use the carrots to make various things, carrot cake, carrot muffins, cupcakes, etc, etc. If anything, her role is cemented with every sale. I blame Celestia and her vixen's silver tongue, unless that's actually how the author thinks the economy works in which case they need a stern lecture on supply and demand.

2517186 About RC, he can be a bit disagreeable and very opinionated, but believe me when I say that I argued with people much worse.

Anyway, back to topic.

*Achievement Unlocked* Word of God: Speculate something which the author pretty much confirms.:pinkiehappy:

2517305
I'm not going to spoil anything. That's all I have to say on the matter.:trollestia:

2517375
That's an awesome name for an acheievment, and I think I pretty much know RC is hard to get along with.:rainbowlaugh:

Spike cleared her throat to get everypony’s attention

:rainbowhuh:

Also, you're mixing past and present tense in a very weird way, so illogically I can't really get myself to see at as an artistic choice any longer. :applejackconfused: While the premise of the story isn't bad per se, I somehow couldn't really enjoy it.:applejackunsure:

2517703
Wait, whose throat?
*pictures Spike using toilet brush to clean Twilight's throat*

Sib

I don't know how intentional it was, but the fact that the description seems like a direct reference to that pigeon dating sim, "Hatoful Boyfriend" is fucking hilarious all on its own.

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I'll fix it. And there's nothing I can do about the past and present tenses other than go back and fix it myself, but I really don't have the time to spend on editing it myself.

2517887
I have seen the game played by Yamimash, but I had no idea my description had something in common to the game.:rainbowderp:

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