Bright Bishop, a unicorn that's been living in Phillydelphia, has been living there for five years. Most days after work he goes to the Dragonfire Inn, he doesn't drink himself but enjoys the food and the ponies who go there. One night he can't help noticing a strange mare sitting alone at the bar in such a gloomy state that he can't at least try to help her. Just what is wrong with this mare tonight?
(Story contains events that happen in the story Return to Society, so there will be reference to it. It might be a little confusing if you don't read that first, but you don't need to read it to enjoy this story.)
Chapters (8)
An OC/Main Character shipfic that isn't horrible? Gasp!
I'm guessing the thumbs-downs are from people who judged it based on the premise and didn't actually read it.
I don't normally track stories like this, but I think I'll give it a chance. A little variety won't hurt.
Glad to see people enjoying the story, your feedback is greatly appreciated.
I really liked the setup you have going, but it felt a little bit rushed towards the end. I understand Twilight was a little buzzed, but finding out you don't have a room is a pretty sobering experience.
I have high hopes for this though!
Yay another silent sir fic!
And for once it isn't fluttershy, after reading your last two I thought it would be her again. (not that there is anything wrong with that of course 
) Your doing a great job and I hope to read much more! 
First time I have seen one of your fics must say i enjoy it please continue .
Thank you for the good feedback, unfortunately my writing will be pretty slow this weekend. I will be working on this story a little, but nothing will be posted until monday, most likely.
Excellent start! I shalt wait for some more good sir!
Like and fav for you...Oh and a moustache for you
Looking good so far. Odd... even though I'm tracking it, the site didn't notify me about this update, nor did it change the number of unread chapters I have. Why would it do that?
2422776 That might be my fault, I was writing kind of late one night and I clicked publish instead of edit. I didn't finish this chapter until the ninth or tenth, but it says that I published it on the sixth.
I regret to inform the readers that my writing will be seriously slowed for a time. My computer broke on me and I don't know how quickly it can be fixed. I have a backup PC, but it's shared so I won't get in that much writing.
*thunderclaps*
*jumps out the couch into the floor*
Are you o-o-okay?
There's one grammar issue that you seem to misunderstand. You need to capitalize the first letter of a quotation. It's the start of the sentence the person is speaking, despite the quotation being part of another one. Think of it like a sort of sub-sentence. For example:
"Looks" is the beginning of the sentence that Bishop is speaking, so the first letter needs to be capitalized. Actually, come to think of it, that particular sentence is a poor example, because there's something else missing. Here is how the sentence should read, with the changes highlighted in red:
Adding "and said" connects the two parts of the sentence together properly.
Great chapter! I find Bishop to be a refreshing character and I love the slow meaningful development between him and Twilight so far. The male character being the one afraid of the lightening is an interesting twist, and I'm keen to see how you pan it out without (hopefully) robbing him of his masculinity.
I am a bit surprised there are so few thumbs up on this story, keep up the good work and I'm sure they'll start rolling in!
2469977 Hmm, interesting. Well this means one of two things: I need to pay more attention in English class, or I need a better English class. Maybe both, but anyway I appreciate the help. I really try to avoid such grammatical errors.
when twilight started begging him for the letter he reacted near the same as i would
This is amazing. No other way to say it. I'm glad I Favorited this when I first saw it. Even though I don't normally read romance fics (Grimdark is more my style), this is one of the few I like.
Aw, sweet chapter :). IS Niccolo's based off the restaurant in your area?
2532911 Thank you for the feedback, but the restaurant is an ordinary outdoor cafe. I can't recall ever being at one or that there's even one in my area. It was really an idea that I wanted to use in the story. Why do you ask?
Let me guess, this relationship will be the complete opposite of his other three? He'll be the one braking Twilight's heart? This is the only non grimdark story I'm currently reading, and it's nice to have a change from those. And I should stop before I start rambling.
Cute chapter, let's see what happens in that fancy restaurant!
Yay
now if only the other people I follow will get off hiatus 
I am quite the impatient fellow when it comes to the good one's
(just realized next to all the fics I love have OCs, cool)
I loved this chapter, same as all the other ones.
I have just realized how hard it is to scroll through a story on a little iPod, while balancing a big bowl of ice cream on one knee, and eating it with a spoon, while scrolling through the chapter. No chocolate stains though! (I hope)
Glad to see that this chapter is on par with the ones before it. I'm sorry you all had to wait so long for it. Looking at three more chapters for this story to finish it. I'm going to be posting a new story after I finish this one if you want to check it out.
2707346 You are an impressive multi-tasker, glad to hear about the lack of stains on your iPod. Since it would make it difficult to read the next chapter.
2707494 could you give us a basic summary of the next chapter. Well, more of a general overview, such as which characters, which genre, that kinda stuff please?
And I was speaking more about my pants, really. Is it even possible to stain an iPod? They don't have a fabric part, so I don't think so, but who knows?
Brilliant. That's all I have to say, even though it doesn't come close to describing how great this is. Keep it up.
I love this story so much. I can't wait to see a sequel!
A few errors I noticed, however. Do with them what you wish.
Fix is a bit obvious here.
You used the wrong one here. "Two" should be "too".
3009708 Thanks, but those errors are a byproduct of writing a story at two in the morning. I'm just glad to have readers who can help point them out.
3009714Stayed up till two writing? I love doing that!
3012602 Sleep deprivation shuts off the part of my brain that likes to chastise my work. Screw sleep I gotta write!
I read that you said this chapter was on par with the previous? You couldn't be more wrong, this chapter (in my opinion) is the best so far. I haven't read the coming chapters but can tell it's going to be spectacular.
I have no idea what to say. This is just stunning, amazing, brilliant, wonderful, emotional, captivating, aw-inspiring, electrifyingly good! I love how you have put all your stories together in such a way that they seem to be a sequel to one another. I think this should be published as a book! I would so buy it!!!!!!!!!
I love this!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I want MORE! I wish i had as much talent at this as you do but as a reader I was on edge the entire time. Please do more!!!!!!!!!!
3039171 I... I guess the best thing to say here is thank you.
I haven't had someone praise a story to the point of which they would buy it. So uh, thank you so much for the support.
I just read the last chapter again and i squealed like a little girl. I don't know why it did but this cause me so much emotion. I wish the real world could be like that. I again say that i wish for more romance and whatever slice of life is. I am addicted and will be so for a VERY long time.
Can i ask how old you were trying to get this Bishop character to be? in real or pony years, it doesn't matter
3058553 20 with the mane 6 being around 18-19. That's just my head canon about their ages.
3039573If this was a book, I'd buy it...
It's less than a week shy of a year since the final chapter. Did you forget about the epilogue? Have you changed your mind about writing it? Or have you become like me and just lose focus every time you write? I home I'm not becoming a bad influence...