This is a one shot for the NaPoWriMoJul13.
Prince Blueblood gets into a little bit of trouble, and his title can't help him.
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Question: Why did you delete comments?
2940780 Because it was Iron's notes and revisions. I didn't think it was necessary to have them after the story was submitted. Also, they were really long.
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Oh okay, just checking XD
2940800 Yeah, there was no malicious intent behind those actions. Don't worry.
I'd suggest trying to do a bit more showing instead of telling.
You've emphasised several times how arrogant and/or stupid Blueblood is; that could perhaps be done better through dialogue and action. Don't tell your readers what to feel, try to guide them to it instead- you did so with Dusk Light, after all, showing his noble spirit and humility without spelling it out. Try not to pick sides; do that with all characters you intend to characterise.
On a personal note: I've never been a fan of bashfics myself, especially since you built up a semi-perfect OC to contrast "author punching bag" Prince Blueblood. But that's a purely subjective thing.
Best of luck!
Congratulations; your submission has been included into the Fimfiction.net - NaPoWriMo mini event for July 2013. I'll be coming back around to read it shortly.
Oh great, another Revengefic about Blueblood. I wonder if Flim and Flam or the diamond dogs have stuff like tihs. because they were worst than him
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Flim and Flam were just two business men trying to make themselves a living, and sometimes, they had to lie or brag about their product in order to get it sold. Nothing personal, just making some money so they could feed themselves. We don't know why the Diamond Dogs were trying to get those gems or why they captured Rarity to do it, and for all we know, they might eat them or have a deal with the dragons that they can't break without getting injured. They had reasons for why they acted that way.
Blueblood, while, yes, probably getting a lot more hate than he deserves, acted like a total jerkwad, just because he thought he was above Rarity. He thought that because he was royalty, he could treat others like dirt. He didn't have a good reason.
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Fo what? its not like there aren't characters Like that (Frollo, Gaston).
Also you gotta take in account that Blueblood had more reasons than Sombra and Discord, Yet these two don't get the treatment he gets. Discord thought he was above everypony because hes a God, Sombra thought he was above the Crystal Ponies because he knew dark magic.
Also he can be used more than A Punching bag. Like a comedy relief character like in that Old Tumblr account. Or like Zapp from Futurama.
Or even a Villain like Scar from the lion king who is cowardly and snobby but has the brains.
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You have a point, good sir. Though I have to ask... are there that many fics like this about Blueblood? Not trying to start up an argument, just curious. Because I've only really seen a couple. To be fair, though, I don't read Blueblood fics that often, so I really don't know what I'm talking about.
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Yes there are. Depending on what you want.
If you want Him redeemed there are a lot of fanfics like that(the best night ever, flight of the alicorn)
If you want him as a Villain theres My Mortal Big Brother, The Trouble with Unicorns, and Theres the Prince and the Gunslinger
2947836 Say what you wish, it was merely an attempt at Comedy. You can say I failed, but that would be your opinion. Nothing more behind this story, I was a bit harsh sure but I don't really care all that much. This is not a story that I put a lot of stock in. It's simply not something I wish to argue over. Just an experiment with an idea that has stuck in my mind.
I want to know why Luna played that prank in the last scene. Also why she did it to both dusk and blueblood? It seems to me that dusk had a proper reason for his actions and didn't deserve to be where he was. Please explain anyone?!