Luna was in her room, quietly reading a book while she waited for the sun to begin its descent for the night. It was still a long way off, but Luna didn’t feel like sleeping right now. Celestia had THE book, the book that could ruin her plan.
“Luna, let me in.” Luna raised her head, and her ears went back in pallid fear. Celestia had found the page.
“What is it sister, I’m kinda busy-OW-right now…”Luna had slipped on her blanket as she stepped off her bed; she was currently laying with her bottom on the bed and her top on the floor.
“Luna” was all Celestia said, and Luna’s spine tingled and her wings fell to the floor as a shudder went through her body. Righting herself, she sighed and gently walked toward the door, and undid the spells that kept it locked. It opened easily to the Celestia’s touch. Luna noticed she had cleaned her back and on it sat a curious filly.
“Yes my dearest sister?” Luna tried flattery, and as usual it didn’t work. The face on Celestia spoke business, and she hadn’t seen that face in over a thousand years when she had been nightmare moon, not pointed at her.
“Luna, why is this next page in the book enchanted so only you can read it?” Luna flinched as the book was thrust into her face, and she gently pushed it away with a gentle, and hesitant magic.
“Please don’t ask me to answer that sister.” Luna saw Celestia lower the book, and her gaze hardened.
“What is on this page Luna, is it the cure?” Luna tried to remain as poker faced as her sister, but she failed and Celestia’s eyes hardened even further.
“Then tell me Luna, why is it you don’t want Twilight to be cured?" Luna raised her head, stricken with horror.
“No no it’s not that sister! It’s the fact that-“ Celestia cut Luna off, her horn glowing, and her stance dropping into one that spoke danger toward her foe. Luna took a step back, tears brimming her eyes as she realised Celestia was going to force her to open the page.
“Don’t you trust me sister?” Celestia paused, and then relaxed her stance. Luna broke out into a hopeful smile, which faded with Celestia’s new words.
“If Twilight isn’t cured in seven days, instead of banishing you to the moon I might try the sun instead.” Luna’s face fell, her wings going limp as open fear was pasted on her face. It was hard enough being imprisoned in your own element, but in your polar opposite…
“Sister” she whispered, tears streaming down her face, “Does thou care more about Twilight, then our own sister?”
Celestia walked toward the hospital in Canterlot, a frown on her face. She had two things to work out today. Twilight had grown more, thought Celestia didn’t notice, being around Twilight all the time. She had to figure out what parents did with their kids to stop the toilet problem, and she could only think of the maternal ward at the hospital. Celestia didn’t get out much, in fact it was rare for her to even fly by herself, as she was doing right now. Coming to land, a doctor greeted her.
“I wish to visit the maternal ward if it is ok.” The doctor bowed, and led her to the head nurse before going back to his job. Celestia gazed at the babies, and then pointed to Twilight.
“You haven’t used diapers before?” Celestia frowned, and the nurse rolled her eyes and brought out one as a demonstration.
“You put it on fillies until they are old enough to be potty trained." Celestia nodded, and gently floated over Twilight, who was gazing at the fillies and colts in the beds with wonder. After the nurse briefly explained how to put the diaper on, Celestia smiled, knowing she would become yellow no longer. Suddenly, Twilight threw up on the viewing window, giving everypony a very nice view of brown
“Uhh, your majesty what has this filly been eating?” Celestia hovered Twilight away from the window as a janitor came to clean it up, and told her what Twilight had eaten.
“You’re kidding right, are you trying the kill the poor filly!?” Celestia blinked; shocked she had been such a bad parent. The nurse sighed and walked through a door, Celestia waited.
“Here, this is a bottle of baby formula. It’s a substitute for milk from…The mother…That they need.” Celestia gently took the bottle, and hovered it close to Twilight with just enough time for her to blink and realise it was gone before the bottle was emptied of its substance.
“How will I know when she is old enough to eat solids?” The nurse pulled out a size chart and handed it to Celestia.
“Anything else princess, the babies need to be rocked.” Celestia shook her head, before changing her mind.
“Actually, where’s the place to get these materials?” The nurse blinked, turned to face her, and then pulled out a pen and paper and drew a hasty map before vanishing through the door. Celestia blinked, and robotically walked out of the hospital and headed towards the maps destination.
“Ehh, that will be 1429 bits your majesty.” Celestia blinked; the items she had hovering in the air around Twilight. She frowned, and fished into her mane and brought out a purse and pooled the money on the counter. After finishing paying she took the items, and the filly and teleported back to the castle, more specifically her room.
“Ok Twilight, bottle time” Celestia spoke, filling a bottle with the formula thing as the instructions said to, and brought the bottle over to Twilight. Twilight gave one look to the bottle, and then glanced away, shoving the bottle away with a powerful thrust of magic, forcing it to splatter against the wall. Celestia gritted her teeth, tired from a long day and made another one.
“Drink it.” Celestia’s eyes grew more and more furious as she battled Twilight to get her to drink the bottle. Each time the filly would manage to miss getting any milk on her lips. Celestia blinked, and something inside her snapped, and she began releasing all her magic on the filly, who blinked in shock as she was suddenly forced to hold the bottle and put it into her mouth. Twilight struggled and fought with all her strength, but when Celestia got serious she had no chance in the world. Tears began to stream down her face as she was forced to drink the milk, until not a drop remained before she was released. Celestia sighed, relaxing in one swift moment, her mane that had been blazing a moment ago back to normal.
“Come on Twilight time for be…”Celestia trailed off, her eyes following the trail as a purple filly headed into the corner farthest from her, shaking in open fear. Celestia blinked, her wings flaring as she realised what she had done just a moment ago.
“What, why did I act like that?” Celestia sat down on her bed, taking her head in her hooves as she realised she had just forced someone to do something, just like this morning.
“I tried to force Luna, even threatened banishment!” Celestia was astonished with her behaviour. It was almost like, almost like Nightmare…
“I’m sorry LuLu…I’m sorry Twilight.” Celestia let the tears fall, failing to notice Twilight until she had come to curl up into a ball beside her on the bed. Her tears stopping, she realised Twilight had forgiven her too easily, but then she was only a child. Glancing to the sun, which shouldn’t be down for another hour, Celestia through a good gift to her sister to say sorry.
Luna lifted her head up from her book, trying to forget what she had just seen of her sister, when she noticed the setting sun and noticed how early it was. Walking to her balcony, she raised the moon and glanced in the direction of her sisters tower, and turned and walked out her door, making a beeline for it.
Celestia received no notice of Luna’s arrival until the door opened and she stood there, tear stains down her face. They gazed to each other, and Luna gave a forgiving smile and dove for Celestia. As they hugged, they glanced down as a third form joined them and smiled, enjoying the comfort of the group hug.
“Nunty una Nunty Estiwa.” Celestia and Luna blinked, and glanced down at Twilight.
So Luna did this to teach Celestia a lesson?
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Nope
Well I guess I'll keep reading then, I could swear I missed something 2305611
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I can't exactly spoil the story so sorry no clues
Funny how somepony as old and as wise as Celestia knows nothing about childcare.
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I know right?
There it is, a mystery yay! MOAR! ... this is why we need a mystery tag! 2305620
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*Scratches head* but it's more focused on comedy, and it's not a big mystery.
It's one you'll go back and read it and say 'Ooh I see it now.'
It is more focused on comedy, yes. But a Dark story that is REAL DARK can still have some comedy in it for example so you slap on a comedy tag too. I guess it's not that important but I swear this site need a mystery tag... 2305634
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I dunno, I just write the story I don't make the genres.
its going to end happy with everypony back to normal right? an twilight will be normal again?
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Spoilers? I'm not telling you that.
Twilight's first word!!!
I am so proud! Wait... wasn't I suppose to be dead? *dead*
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noooooo ooh candy!
2305715 It's not candy, It's ice cream!
MINEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!
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Aw, cute
This chapter felt very rushed compared to the others There are several points at which you omit the closing parenthesis of a quote, and a few other minor errors to boot.
On top of that, the entire hospital scene felt off, dialogue, description and all. You weren't very clear about what was happening, or why. The doctor was not very responsive and didn't seem to really fit with the scene, at least as a doctor should have.
Finally, and probably most damning, was your depiction of Tia in this chapter. I get that (for some reason) she is deliberately OOC, but you failed to convey that this chapter, especially for the outburst with Luna. Instead of feeling like she was being influenced, it felt like you were just writing her poorly. For a scene like that, you need to convey the emotions as well as the action. I got that she was abusing Twilight, but what was going through Tia's head at that point?
Please not this:
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Why would I use ? Your arguments are not meant as a joke and are valid.
I had trouble writing this chapter, mainly because I was unsure how to tackle the situation of Celestia vs Luna over Twicure. You've given me a lot to think about, I'll probably rewrite this chapter.
I'll definitely take what you said and at the very least revise this chapter.
AND IN THE END ITS "MY LITTLE ALICORN" ALL OVER AGAIN.
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Pardon?
Note: I dont use grammer to much and such and i type faster than i think at times so spelling and grammar suffer for it heavly. dont read if you dont want to becuse i agree with you exept on one case. the 2nd one is a shorter but less explain version so i recommand that one more.
2306161 I agree with most of what you said excluding the part about Celestia, honestly that makes sense to me since anyoneforced into motherhood/fatherhood would be dramticaly stress deffently if they never had to be in that role before, and sicne its commenly beleaved (whether the author says it or not just commen beleaf) that alicorns dont reproduce or at the very least Celestia hasnt that said its not strange that she'd be stressed and very easly be angered becuse of it.
I think Celestia is acting pretty much like most first time parents couple that with her use to everything going her way would be annoing for her (let alone piss her off like hiding somthing very importent.) Luna is also at fault for instead of giving up the fact shes been cought she persisted to hold her silly game (which added further to the obvious guilt luna had and Celestia's rage) so stress compiled up quickly and celestia found herself in somthgin new unfamilier and very out of her element, shes maybe motherly in personality but that doesnt mean she knows how to be one. shes like the sun that way sometimes alittle to much. hopfuly that help explained what happen in my mind.
sorry if it looked lie ka rant! and am sorry if i annoied you, dont hurt me please.
Hm so Celestia knows the counter spell, so why doesn't she just cast it on Twilight and have everything go back to normal?
2306466The one with blueblood foal napping a filly Celestia and gets turned into a colt himself. I am not really saying you copied anything. Cause you didn't! It just came into my head for some reason...Hah.
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Celestia doesn't, Luna does.
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The last chapter she gets diapers.
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Originality doesn't exist, every story is similar to another story.
2308825 I thought she found out Luna was hiding the counter spell or did she just find out Luna led to her without looking through the book?
2311834 She found a page, Luna had hidden with magic she and she alone could break.
2311837 Oh I see, either I missed that when I first read this or you didn't clarify.
SO.MUCH.CUTENESS !!!!
2320679 ur pic makes ur comment very exaggerated... quite creepy actually
The one who said she was trying to kill twilight one pic in mind.
But cant put it on it was funny.
I fell sick and happ. Im sick but happy.
I'd be pissed at my sister too if she did the thing Luna did in this fic
2944703 same here bro
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turn that into a , and bring that next set of dialog after the coma like so:
“Sister” she whispered, tears streaming down her face, “Does thou care more about Twilight, then our own sister?”
That shows everyone that it's the same speaker. Otherwise it looks like two speakers.
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I am not seeing it. What did Tia do for Luna?
Not sure. Did twi it call luna and celestia naughty?
Anyway, loved this,... Though I felt a twinge of anger when celestia threatened to banish luna and luna asked if celestia loved twi more than her. That hurt
Glad they made up though. Next chapter
4172654 she said aunty
Can I join the hug?
The feels are real!
LIKE FOR GROUP HUG
ow owwowowowowowowowowowOWWWWW not the feels
well sweet ending... on too the next
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