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I just kind of skimmed the first bit
Small error.
This is pretty good. We need more good authors who decide to write clop.
You keep this up I love you long time.
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Ahh, noticed it and fixed!
Thank you and I'll do my best
>have gotten
>she's get
huehue
Artist is KP shadowsquirrel, though I forget who did the coloring.
As for the fic... it's okay. You're hitting a lot of cliches though, wounded animals, a trip to canterlot, pinkie taking care of the babies and so on. You could do with twisting the situations a little and using different ideas.
Also, you seem to do a lot of "tell" vs "show". As in, you tell us the situation, rather than having the character themselves be the one describing the situation for us.
Have a look at the EQD prereader's omnibus. There are a lot of good tips there which you might make use of. I'm tracking this as it looks mildly interesting, but it could do with some tweaks :)
Oh no it's going badly I just know it!
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Colored version, but I agree with linking KP-ShadowSquirrel as they actually made the piece.
Hmm, pretty good so far. I'll see where this goes.
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That would be me.
Nice chapter. Can't wait to see more.