What happens when Twilight wakes up the day after her coronation? Faced with fear and confusion, Twilight attempts to find answers, but accidentally summons the Nightmare who uses Twilight to once again cast darkness over Equestia. The main six are the only ponies who can stop the Nightmare using the Elements of Friendship, but now Twilight's best friends with Spike must find a replacement for the element of magic to defeat the Nightmare and save Twilight from herself. They are able to convince Trixie, who is reasonably talented in magic, to accompany them on their quest. . . but is magic the answer, or is it a matter of trust and friendship?
Awesome fan art is "True, True Friends" taken from IamtehPILOT at http://iamtehpilot.deviantart.com/art/True-True-Friends-354682745
One does not simply use that for a cover image.
better put a source on that art
2264305 Done! Thanks for pointing that out
Murphy's law, celestia, THAT is what could happen in 2 days
well nightmare took the whole "transported to the future" thing rather well...
2268886 Exactly what I was thinking!
Famous...Last...Words.
Trixie used to live on a rock farm? And she knew Pinkie growing up? I have to read the next chapter before I write anything else.
Nice short little story. So much more can be done, but it's your time and effort. I must say, this was a great little story. You just have to make better usage of quotation marks.
2272288 hmm Ok, thanks for the commentary. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Honestly, I'm not a fan. From start to finish, everything seemed so disjointed that coherency took a big hit. Also, what plot there was progressed too quickly. And, to be frank, just felt contrived. Trixie goes from her usual self to understanding in the space of a minute or so. Furthermore, declaring the Elements immortal and zapping all five of them into alicorns on the spot? It took the Elements to do that to just Twilight, and Celestia does it to five ponies without a sweat?
Also, it's the "Elements of Harmony".
2287521 I see what you mean, especially about the plot being too rushed.
This calls for renovation when time permits!
alright to help you out as others seemed to not do, and didnt do for me. Complete crap, utter crap, you have the talent to write well, but it looks rushed and you just are repeating what everyone else has done. HOWEVER! that only applies to how you write your characters out. We know how twilight thinks, we know everyone else. You can skip that. And the converstations are dull and not as relevent as needed. Cut them out if not needed. You have a gem, since there are not many nightmare twilight that i cna find, and i somewhat like the idea. but you need to be more orginal. your characters feel wooden and plain. lacking a spark. give them the spark. I can gather from this you can. but you must must try a bit more. schedule's aren't any good without quality. its better to have a great story than update fast.
2318250 This is exactly why I joined FIM fiction--to get good criticism on my writing skills. I certainly see what you mean, and though I personally found the characters' thought processes to be entertaining (hence why I expounded them), I guess they are redundant to other readers, huh? Thanks, and I'll try and cut the crap and make the conversations more original.
I see you really added to this chapter. I like how you added Trixie's backstory. I also like how you had Trixie use her Element with the assistance of a spell they had to create. I look forward to reading your rewrite of the final chapter.
There is going to be another chapter to this, right?
Gosh! This is soooooo exiting!!!
Why....just...why
Don't jinx it.
Will there ever be another chapter? It's been 10 years.