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The Old Queen Celestia has passed away, and her younger sister Luna rises to the throne. After a mysterious expedition to unknown territory, she changes, becoming the tyrannical Queen Nightmare Moon. Twilight Sparkle, the daughter of Celestia and an aspiring mage, lives in the Castle, sheltered from the outside world which the Queen is bringing to ruin. But one day, a tragic choice forces her to leave, and her life is changed forever. Rebellion looms. Equestria needs a Hero.
Eventual Twi/Dash (Stress on Eventual), Character Death, Violence, High Doses of Awesome.
(For those that have played Fable III, no spoilers to the others please.)
I'm currently borrowing gimpcowking's awesome image for the preview, but it doesn't really fit as I'm not actually casting Rarity as Reaver. Anyone skilled at Pony art willing to make me a more fitting image?
I knew it would happen eventually, Fable and ponies
An odd pairing but then again so is (about to list many video games that don't mix well with MLP) Fallout, Uncharted, Portal (yet the hilarity is endless), Deus Ex, Total Carnage, NARC, Mortal Kombat, etc. I'll read because I did find Fable enjoyable, until the game ended 
This has loads of potential, I'm excited to see where this goes.
Wow, very excellently written, happens exactly like in the game except with all the 'good' decisions, perhaps one with 'evil' decisions might be written later? And exquisite read and I urge anyone to track this immediately, great job
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Oh you left out the part where when you're going with Walter, the people in the kitchen scene, but still great nonetheless
Eventual TwiDash... hmmm how dark is this going to be?
TwiDash is all I need but how dark is it going to be since I can only stand a certain level of dark/grimdark
39500 Since the fic is based on the game Fable III, there will not be anything too dark. I've played, enjoyed, and beaten the game and nothing that's too grimdark should happen in this fic if it's so closely based upon it
whoa, totally keeping track of this, need to read it to say more
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The Fable series as a whole switches rapidly between serious and random/lighthearted quite frequently, so expect something similar here. There will be dark themes (Oppression, executions, monsters, etc.) but I will try to never make anything too graphic or bloody. I'll also try and follow up a grim and serious chapter with one of the more silly Fable sidequests to keep things positive.
39537 I have played the Fable series 1-3, so if its not getting any darker then those, I am good for this :)
Damn this is good,cant wait for more heh
will be interesting to see what happens next, didnt play Fable 3 but might if my PC allows it lol
Is Twilight gonna go insane and turn evil that would be awesome
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Sorry, this will be a strictly 'good' playthrough. No random stealing/villager killing sprees/inflating taxes massively here.
However I will put more emphasis on difficult moral choices that have no true 'good' solutions later on.
Love this so much. Nightmare Moon makes an excellent Logan. I can't wait to read more.
>> Xeddrief how do you do that name thing? you know when you reply to someone? XD
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just click on the "reply" button you see on the upper right side of the comment
44530DoctorWhooves but how!
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Like that.
44611 HOLY SHIT!
jsbdvfiABSv That was EPIC BEYOND COMPREHENSION. I have never heard of Fable before but now I want to know about it sooo bad. SOO EPIC *faints*
39537 i wonder... maybe something about a haunted book?
AH, what the fuck, im enjoying this and cant wait for more. Tracked!
56577I'm seeing you everywhere... coincidence? anyway Xeddrief, i am looking forward to more chapters!
can you make rainbow dash the leader of the dwellers? because you mentioned it being a 'she'. Also, i wonder how twilight and APPLEJACK will react when they get to Revears place. (please don't make Reaver a member of the mane 6! sometimes i wish i could kill him myself after what he did to Garth at samarkand.)
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Heh...all of the 'casting' has already been decided I'm afraid, but rest assured Reaver is NOT a member of the mane 6.
ANd yes, the haunted book will be in this- actually, which haunted book are you talking about? The Normanomicon, or The Ham Sandwich? Because both of them will be in there. I'm aiming to integrate as many of the sidequests into this as possible.
Great... now I wnat to play fable 3....
anyway awesome story! I can't wait to meet the mane 6 and see their role! PLEASE WRITE MORE!! (sorry for the royal Canterlot voice
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57097 i see we have something in common!
57010 the ham sandwich. with the lady and the jester and the menace GLUHYVAN! i swear i wonder if i have the same story making as that book... terrible...
Are you still writing this fable?
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Yes. I'm sorry that there has been such a huge wait for everyone, but there's a lot of crap going on IRL right now that takes precedence. I don't know when I'll be able to start putting up chapters again, but it will happen.
give twilight some TATTOOS!!! tattoos are awesome especially when they GLOW IN THE DARK!!!!
Well now... this is an excellent and gripping beginning. I cal easily see how the rolls are filled at the beginning though I'm curious as to how the others shall fit in...
I really do hope that Rarity will be a lot more helpful then the butler was in the actual game however.
Hmmm... All very interesting. Its interesting for Rarity to show interest in Sir Colter I think... and more interesting for it to be TRIXE to play the role of Theresa.
I'm interesting to know about the decisions that will be made in the future...
*SPOILER ALERT*
Like the money problem as well as the descion about what happens to the Nightmare Moon.
In any case, I cannot see wait to see what happens next... and I really hope that Rairty will be more useful then Jasper ever was.
I'm very sorry for the long wait on this one. A lot of personal stuff went down over these past few months, and I had little time or motivation done to get much writing.
As usual, comments, constructive criticism and highlighting any typos I missed will be appreciated.
Great chapter! Just keep the Fable elements in their place along with the pony elements and you'll be just fine. Note! Might want to change the cover when you get the chance as it's a bit misleading.
273563 Yes, I know- Rarity isn't actually playing Reaver so it might confuse people. But I can't find any other good Fable/MLP images.
YES! ... YES! IT'S UP!!! Thank you! You answered my prayers!
P.S. personal? Oh no... did someone important to you ---? I'm so sorry...
39491 what is this Uncharted crossover? I must read it those are like my favorite games
Very nice. Keeping the Fable elements quite canonically but still having MLP elements. Also I knew. I just KNEW that Applejack was going to be the leader of the dwellers! Quite good to see Rarity coming out - unlike the butler - and as I've said plenty of time already. I hope she plays a more active role then he ever did. Surprised not to see the request for food as well however...
Hmmm... now I guess Rainbow Dash might be part of the Wonderbolts who are the regiment that they visit in Fable with the major being Soaring... just a guess. Though she is equally as capable as being the underground leader.
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And the Auroran Leader is going to be Fluttershy I think.
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Personally I was thinking of the Auroran Leader being... Ze... Zeorca? Well, the Zebra anyhow.
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Zecora, and OH CRAP YOUR RIGHT.
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Close enough... now we'll just have to wait to see who will be right
GLOW-IN-THE-DARK TATTOOS!!!! MAKE THEM SO!!!
275967 Fable 3's tattoos were awesome, but I'll have to have a legitimate reason for Twilight to get some other than 'They look bad ass'.
277390 i was thinking on awesome evil red tattoos, but twi's gonna have to do some horrendously evil things in order for that to happen.
278275 I'm afraid Twilight will not be doing anything evil any time soon.
278388 i figured... well she's a good pony, with a heart of gold, so... white glowing tattoos?
279711 We'll see
"Twilights mother had noticed their growing closeness and encouraged the relationship, signing the betrothal contract barely months before her illness claimed her."
Should be Twilight's.
Same with: "She had been Twilights whole world" later in the paragraph.
Wheeeeaaa just popping by to get all picky on ya!
""But there are no rainbows anymore." Said Twilight quietly, gazing out of the smoky cloud that rested over Canterlot. "
Should be a comma after anymore, rather than period, and lowercase 's' on said.
""And it's even worse down in the city," Continued Caramel, glancing at the smoky backdrop behind them"
The 'c' in continued should be lowercase.
""I'll see you later." She said," Again, period should be comma and 'she' rather than 'She'.
I'm not going to point out the dialogue tag punctuation errors anymore. Figure y'got the idea.
"Twilight had to agree— the tension had been building for weeks, like everything was coming to some sort of a head. She hoped the results would not be too catastrophic." Extra space between the em dash and 'the tension had been building'.
Anyway, you tend to use ellipses (...) a bit too much, but I am quite enjoying this crossover. Only played the first and third fable games, but they were fun, and plus ponies??? The fun has been doubled!
*sidles in, whistling*
"“It’s time to pay our respects,” Whispered Colter softly."
As before, 'Whispered' should be 'whispered'. Not mentioning again. Though I should throw in that even when you end a piece of dialogue with a question mark (such as "“Twilight?” Asked Spike fearfully."), the dialogue tag (that's the word modifying how whatever was said was said, such as "asked") should still be lowercase. Really truly not mentioning again now!
"“There are other parts to which I could have brought you- your memories, your natural unicorn magic, your emotions- but these are all familiar to you.”" Again, extra spaces after the em dashes. I've seen these written with a space before and after, or no spaces at all, but never with only space around them. In published work, every single usage of them I have seen there are NO spaces, though plently of fanficion authors use them. Up to you, I guess...
Same thing in the next paragraph. Will not mention theses again either.
A couple more paragraphs down--"Still sceptic, Twilight inched close to the gate." 'sceptic' should be 'sceptical', I'm assuming.
"“Oh thank goodness,” gushed Rarity, walking over to inspect the young princess for any damage. " PERFECT!! Heehee, I know I said I wasn't gonna bring these up again... but really, you did it right here! Woo!
Now, I'm not absolutely certain on this next one, but I am pretty confidant. "Even as she pondered, she could feel an energy within it, not dissimilar to the power she had felt in the Seal (Which lay to the side, temporarily forgotten.)" The parantheses here do not contain a seperate sentence, so you wouldn't capitalize the 'which', and the period would go outside the closing parenthesis.
"In the dim light, she could see a vague natural pathway winding its way through them, though were it lead she couldn’t say."
Were should be where.
"Rarity broke the silence as she flinched away from yet another
group of the luminescent bugs." I think you may have accidentally the enter key.
"“Ponyville? That’s quite a way to walk. “Twilight said with a frown." Just an extra space here on the wrong side of the quotation mark!
*sidles out again*
Hello again!
"The trio set off swiftly, the sound of their breathing and leaves parting beneath their hooves (Or claws, in Spike’s case) breaking the eerie silence of the forest." The 'Or' shouldn't be capitalized.
"We ‘aint in any shape to be helping anybody right now.” She stomped her hoof in frustration." The apostrophe in ain't is in the wrong place.
"“But now of course there aint any guards there anymore, they’ve all been dispatched to some place called ‘Mourningwood’, Queen’s Orders.”" aaaand this ain't is missing it completely.
"Twilight nodded. Shaking Spike awake (It seemed he could sleep through nearly anything), the group headed out into the town. It was much livelier during the day." I'm sure you know the drill, 'It' after the opening parenthesis shouldn't be capitalized.
...same here: "What greeted them was a large and spacious lounge area, with plush sofas and armchairs, a roaring fire in the hearth (Which Twilight assumed was magical, since it would make no sense to have a chimney under a lake), and a thick, fluffy carpet beneath their hooves."
and here: "After applying and tightening her bandages (Which was much more difficult to do with her teeth than her horn), she pondered the puzzle in front of her."
There were also a few tiny comma errors through this and the preceding chapters, but I didn't feel like going through them
The one last thing I'd add is that I'd recommend using "okay" rather than "ok". The latter is pretty informal and slangy seeming.
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Crap, now I have to WAIT for the next chapter.
278388 Uncertain how that'll work out for Equestria.
This is shaping up to be one of those works that's so good ya don't mind if it takes ages for a new part to be put up. Tracked and favourited.