What if your OC could live in Equestria? Perhaps a background pony who befriends Derpy? Maybe a philanthropist who wants to lend a helping hoof? Or could you be a blank flank simply trying to find your place? Apply to the O.C.I.O and you might be lucky enough to become a citizen of Equestria!
These are the ponies who... didn't make it through the screening.
(An ongoing collaborative effort. You present a purposely bad OC to me and I'll give you the go to write a chapter. If it meets criteria, I'll edit and post here. Be warned posting will be slow.)
Chapters (21)
Hmmm... How do one commision an OC? If that is possible of course.
It is a really interesting idea, liked and faved.
Hah! I took the first spot! You mad "first" commenterzzzz!?
2208039 You write out the chapter yourself in a google doc and send it to me. I go over it and tell you if there is anything big I would like for you to change. If there is nothing huge that needs to be changed, I'll just edit for grammar and formatting and add your name to the table of contents and to your chapter (the OC name if a link to the author's page).
The interviewer doesn't have to be Twilight BTW, it can be a made-up pony too.
Hah. This is pretty good. I guess that some people are annoyed by the amount of moon-themed OC's that are created?
Anyways, I'll definitely be keeping an eye on this for the next case studies. Good luck making it to the featured box!
2208057 Aha, might write a chapter. I have two OCs to choose between anyway.
If i find the time, of course.
2208121 Sure, not a problem. When you have time.
2208128 Time...
The one product we never will be able to produce more of...
Dang, what a turn-down. I was sorta hoping for more humor. But it's a good story nonetheless.
I, could grow to like this. A very interesting idea that has been well-executed so far (I'm always one for meta antics). I look forward to what bizarre OCs Twilight (or whoever else decides to conduct these interviews) have to deal with.
I'm half-considering submitting a giraffe character to this as sort of a spoof of my thought process while creating an actual giraffe OC for my own story. Because I'm weird like that.
2208605 Go right ahead! lol.
this is....interesting....i likez what i readz
HAHA! YIS! I love it!
Aww... Poor guy...
2211097 Don't worry, this particular case study has a happy ending. As I mentioned, this was more or less my actual thought process while creating a giraffe OC for my own story.
Hmm...Hey, what would I have to do to submit an OC for this story? Or, well, something like that.
2212576 Basically, write out a story where an OC you create gets rejected entry into Equestria because of something obvious or something ridiculous, put it onto a google doc, and PM me the google doc.
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Would it be OK if I could just make it as an unpublished story here on FIMfic and then link it over to you? I don't have access to Google docs.
2213761 ok sure. or you can PM me the text and I can format it myself?
*Laughs* Oh my god I cannot express how much I want to see more of Geno, he sounds so sweet and great fun. Is it bad that derimi immediatrely made me think of Banko-Kazooie?
2214309 Honestly, I didn't draw the parallel to Banjo-Kazooie when I came up with the idea for Doreimi, but I kinda see where you're coming from.
Besides the mindset of making this a parody of my thought process while creating a giraffe OC for my own story, I intentionally made Geno a lot more pleasant than some of the other case studies. I did this because unlike OCs such as Shining Moon or the countless black-and-red alicorns that'll no doubt be referenced innumerable times, this is actually an original idea that just needed a few tweaks, and I wanted to reflect that in his character.
2214405 It never occured to me that you had, i'm just an oddity at times
It
s definitely nice to see a gentler OC than the really out there cases.
Damn those OC alicorns, ruining the chances of normal ponies.
Lol, I like it Type.
2216434 You should read my entry "Golden Lining," to see an Alicorn get rejected. (Shameless self-promotion)
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That could work, I guess.
2217525 Whichever you prefer is fine
*Grins* Oh this needs more Type, you know it does. This needs another story.
2218096 Care to submit an entry?
how do we apply because i want to put in one of my friends OC in here without asking
2219844 she cant do it her self because she cant get her fim working
If it's okay, could one of my OCs be in here? :3
2220996 Yep :) go ahead and write the OC rejection story on Google docs and shoot me the link :)
This is hilarious! Really, really funny seeing all the mary sue-ish characters and resonable ones alike rejected.
I don't think my character would be eligible for this fic though, seeing how he's an altered G1 cannon character. (He doesn't even live in equestria!)
I love seeing you guys continue the trend of all being in kind of the same setting as the chapters/stories before. It makes these snapshots feel very real.
2222089 Well...there has been a giraffe.
Wanna know something funny? I had an idea for something very similar to this, though kinda involving the PPC as well.
These little snippets are a good chuckle, and you seem to be doing a fine job hitting all the cliches for the rejected characters. I can't wait to see what's next
!
Part of me is hoping we'll see a Dragon OC eventually...
2225643 Actually, I only wrote the chapter with my OC and the preface. So, if you want to do a dragon OC, you're more than welcome to do so.
2225670 You need to include a vampony, any kind of wolf invoking Norse mythology, and viciously insane griffons.
Too many moon-themed ponies? *looks at all the canon Apple and flower-themed ponies* Wow, that's not hypocritical one bit. I see why Luna became Nightmare Moon with THAT kind of prejudice!
*wonders if he can use this to re-instigate NMM* Evil is so good!
A little grey pony with a white mane and a DNA double helix cutie mark sits outside, making his, checking it twice, finding out who's naughty and nice.. but paying far more attention to the naughty ponies. With a sickeningly sadistic smile he watches yet another pony being rejected, savoring the despair. "Delicious," he breathes. "Yet another recruit! All of them, poisoned by hatred, rejected by the land of their dreams! Desperate... thirsty for revenge, starving for wrath, easily drawn in; brought to us."
He laughs softly, "Why bother emigrating when you can simply invade? And having a huge army of insane ponies who'll do anything to live in Equestria... a clever pony or man always knows how to take advantage of the 'disenfranchised' and delusional." His smile darkens to a savage leer, "You will not need to maintain your facade much longer, my Lord Discord. Our ranks have swelled of late! And with your place near Celestia's side, the swift strike will certainly succeed!"
(Honestly, these aren't the worst OC's I've seen. So far, I've seen none of the most obnoxious sorts. Most of the actual ponies who live in Equestria have less validity than some of those rejected! Soooooo, in the interest of fair play, I'm going to invite them all to the Army of Chaos and launch a brutal attack on Equestria! Because... oh hell, chaos needs to explanation! *cackles* The murderous revenge pony is one of the worst, by the way. So what better cliche to adopt for my nefarious purposes!)
Hmm, I had thought this would be a story about the truly awful OCs. But all I see are ponies who'd pretty much fit in perfectly with the insane Equestrian's of canon.
Well, except for the sex fiend.
Unless Rarity really is a slut...
2214405 *Helix, the mad scientist oozes around you like a cloud, wrapped in his master's chaos* Poor little giraffe! Did those racist ponies deny you for being a minority species? Simply because of your... physiological difficulties (which I do believe you handled so well!) they won't let you live among them! Just think of how the griffons and minotaurs must be treated! And the dragons! And what about those poor bison? Attacked by those nasty ponies who tried to destroy their native culture! Is it any wonder they don't like the namby-pamby ponies and their silly Princesses? *he whispers in your ears* But we can solve those prejudicial problems! Join us... we're all the same here. We're all mad here! Equals in arms, equals in revenge. And we shall create a paradise, a lovely dance of unending chaos with our exalted and erratic King forever enthroned atop his candy clouds! *he laughs* It will be glorious! And no one will ever say you don't belong there. All are welcome in the Kingdom of Chaos! Join us... in Discord's Army.
*tinkers in his lab, watching a computer view screen with all the various bugs he'd planted in the offices* Oh? Another writer, eh? How curious that they reject such innocuous applicants, and yet allow that useless magician Trixie to remain. Well, writers aren't usually good fighters.... I suppose we can use more for he suicide bombing squad... *he titrates a pale yellow solution and tests the pH* Excellent! Now, to schedule my little entry interview...
Poor Twilight, you shouldn't have let becoming a Princess cloud your mind. You've become so sadly jaded and cold. *hmms* Pinkie is still her bouncy self. We can still entice her with chocolate rain as well. Yes... no need to eliminate one who can be converted with ease.
(I actually hate revenge fics... but for trolling purposes, they're a perfect fit!)
you should make one for the ones who did get and how they get into equastria
2226203 Maybe when I figure I've had enough entires. Probably won't happen for awhile though.
hmmm im not good at writing stories can i just tel you my character and you make the story
2226218 I guess I'll give it a shot. Could you send it in a PM?
>>>Twilight merely looked at me with a blank stare. “If you read further into the history books, you would’ve seen that we didn’t engage in any violence whatsoever when it came to military action. We negotiated peacefully with the opposing army and we will continue to do that. >>>
Helix laughs so hard he nearly falls off his lab stool, "Oh yes, dear Twilight! Negotiations worked sooooo well with the Changelings! That little event demonstrated conclusively how pathetic your defenses are! And you only one by the utilization of the most ludicrous deux ex, plot-convenient power I've ever seen! Seriously, that love shield just came out of nowhere! Such a contrivance!"
He thinks for a moment and grins, "Speaking of plot convenient contrivances... Oh my, a loophole has opened up, since this Twilight Sparkle is clearly out-of-character..." He taps the space in front of him and, as he expects, a jagged portal opens, "Excellent! We can now move freely to anywhere we wish, and have access to every OP ability imaginable! This is almost... *he frowns and slams the portal shut with a rasping creak, as though it's a rusty screen door*... too easy! No no, won't go that route! Where's the fun in being so powerful you can just blow up the universe?"
The little grey pony, shock of stark white mane bobbing, trots to a chemical hood to fill several small vessels. "Still," he muses. "Never say never. At the very least, it's there as an option. Only a fool refuses to utilize an ultimate strategic advantage."
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Um, yeah. A bit too late there, Helix. The necessary tweaks were already made before I submitted this chapter. Your argument is somewhat sound (which is ironic, considering it's presented in a crazy way), but I still don't think your recruitment effort would've worked. Unless you planned for Discord to join forces with Ahuizotl.
Twilight Sparkle, the PMS Bitch Princess, is sitting angrily, shuffling her papers angrily, and generally doing everything she can to be nothing like her canon self as Helix merrily comes trotting in. He hops up into the chair in front of her intimidating desk with a careless flippancy and prods his goggles, taking them off to wipe them while humming "Ode to Joy" loudly, oblivious to Twilight's twitching eyebrow.
"Soooo, Mr.... Helix, is it?" the new lavender Queen Meanie grumbles while clenching Helix's application paperwork in one hoof, the rejection stamp gripped tightly in the other. "I see you're a scientist. Well, we have magic in Equestria, and we don't need your anti-religious rhetoric defying the might of our glorious goddesses! Myself now included, of course!" She sniffs haughtily, secure in herself, delighting in crushing OC creatures' dreams.
Helix yawns widely, "Hmm? Oh, so sorry. It's hard to take you seriously. You're boring. You're boring me." Leaning forward with his goggles in his hooves, he stares into her eyes with a disturbing coolness that sends a chill down Twilight's ignorant spine. "Besides, you've made the wrong assumption. I'm not interested in becoming a citizen of Equestria at all."
Twilight's slight trace of concern faded from her face, which resumed its previously angry glare, "The other OCs sent you, didn't they? Just to tick me off?"
Helix chuckles, "Not exactly, though I do represent quite a number of them... quite a large number... a legion of them, one might say." He leaned closer, "No, I'm here for another reason entirely."
Twilight leaned on her forehooves with a smug grin, "And what might that be, Mr. My-OC-Is-Just-So-Awesome?"
"Well, simply this..." Helix placed the goggles back over his green eyes. "... to get close enough to do this." His hoof pressed a tiny trigger on the edge of his glasses and a concentrated gas jetted straight into Twilight's nostrils, timed perfectly by the brilliant scientist to coincide with her next inward breath.
Twilight's eyes bulged for a moment, realizing briefly what had just occurred before the powerful sedative took effect. She attempted to light her horn, but the chemicals had quickly reached her central nervous system through the nasal epithelium, and she slumped unconscious from the table and slammed to the ground while Helix watched with sick satisfaction. Casually, the truly brilliant scientist (who can actually construct such devices and synthesize such compounds, mind) clopped around the table and lifted the limp head of the new Princess so her cloudy eyes met his.
"Such a shame that Equestrian neurochemistry is virtually identical to ours. I didn't even have to invent a new compound. You know, you should have accepted as many of those OCs as you could. Your country really could have used the numbers. Now, they're all ours, on our side, willing to do whatever we tell them for the promise (which we fully intend to fulfill) that they will be able to live whereever they wish in your world." His hoof dropped her head carelessly, and it hit the floor with a thud. Then, he opened the plot-hole portal. Reaching into his mane, Helix pulled out a small iron ring and jammed in on Twilight's horn. "Ugh, magc-restricting rings. Ridiculous, cliche plot devices. But, effective, undeniably so. Time to depart! I have all manner of fun and games planned for you, Twilight! But you'll survive them all, if not exactly in the best of physical condition when I'm through. I want you to see Equestria crumble to the OCs you so cruelly threw aside. I want you to watch your beloved Celestia devoured alive by the demon you so eagerly welcomed among yourselves. I want all hope to drain from your body, mind, and soul until you're nothing but a broken husk. Perhaps I'll let Chrysalis drain you dry of love. Oh, did I forget to mention the Changelings joined us? They were quite eager to assist!"
Helix put a hoof over his mouth to muffle his voice to a breathy, exaggerated rumble, "And only then will you have my permission to die." He cackled, "Oh god, that never stops being funny!" And with that, the madpony grabbed Twilight's tail in his teeth and unceremoniously dragged the purple princess prick to the doom awaiting her in his power.
(PS: See how cheap and easy it is to write revenge fics? I just banged this out without even trying!)
2226289 Why not! The more villains, the merrier! And you know, Discord can bring him into being with a single snap of his fingers. (JOOOOOOOOOIN USSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!)
2226443
Geh, two paragraphs in and it's already forgotten that Twilight has been a scientist before...