Pieces of a Grey Cloud
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Oh god. A sad Derpy fic.
Well, time to feel like an emotionless husk for the next few days.
Commence read.
Derpy.
For around 400 words in each chapter, this was pretty damned good.
Wow, this was really good.
Alt. Title: "Flowers for Derpy"
Well done.
Commence repair on the feels
Why Derpy, Why? Dear god those feels.
Oh god, My feels just went through a rollercoaster...
- Ditzy fic by darf: Yay!
- Sad tag: Umm, I think I can handle this.
- Gore tag: Maaaybe not..
- Praise in the comments: That's a good sign! But still...
I'll... I'll give it a shot. Something about the first and last chapter only having three words really draws me in.
Holy shit...
HOLY... that was freaking good! one of the best Stories I ever read!!!
So, so sad.
Right now i only want to hug and kiss derpy and don't want to let her ever go again... dear god... aw.. i mean; dear darf...
Dear you forgot a Tag... the ART tag... that was art and no fiction... *bows before you*
2178786 the only perfection we can reach is the perfection of the 0(zero), leaving as much things out of it, till only the necessary parts are left.
P.S. I thought "ok if Happy dies... I'm gona feel sick for the rest of the week... but it will probably be worth it..."
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I really wish i could write half this well.
Just finished reading the story and I'm finding it hard to describe how I'm feeling right now. I didn't hate it, I didn't enjoy it, but it made me very sad but also very happy at the end. Well, as happy as the story would allow me to considering that though it was a dream, she still has to continue on with her daily problems. In every chapter there was something that made me want to reach out and just fix for her. I'll admit to this being the first Sad fic I've read since I've joined here, but that reaction isn't normal for me. Not even in other forms of media, where I actually enjoy a tragic or dark or story, has that happened. Congrats.
This hurt me, but I'm happy for that. Even though it touched me in that way, I still feel okay and happy. Which is weird, sad stories should make one sad, but I have this overwhelming emotional neutrality due to... mixed signals? Very strange. I thought it would turn out much differently, and I'm glad that it ended like it did; but it still hurts.
This was wonderful, darf. Thank you.
(P.S. Chapter 13 had some fantastic delivery.)
Fuck, man. I feel all kinds of stuff, like it can't make up its mind but it wants out anyway.
Holy Jesus.
Wow. This is wow.
I love the style of this, the way it's written, simplistic and touching.
Wow.
Darf uses Sadfic!
It's super effective!
ClopperNumber42 is sad!
Welp, nothing to do now but slothly crawl into bed, curl up in a ball, and probably have a nightmare involving Derpy and the cruelty of life.
A darf fic without porn
World is ending
Oh god
Who can save us?
Jesus Christ darf. That was horrifying.
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And you are destined for the podium of the Sarcastic Olympics.
Allow me to suggest the motion that it ends without chapter 14. The story sort of loses it's touch if it ends with it aaaaalllll being a dream, although it's executed decently here it doesn't mean that it still isn't a bit disappointing. Although then again, it's hard to tell how exactly one would end it.
Oh, fuck it. It's darf, the man can write anything, fave, upvote, promise him your children.
This feels like abstract art. I know something is there, something meaningful, something incredibly powerful, and I can feel it, almost, it's just at the edge and I can feel some of it, but there is so much more that I know that I am missing and I can not care because it is so beautiful. Thank you.
Still shaking. That was horrifying and I don't even know what I feel right now. Really awful, mostly. I don't even know what I'm trying to say, I just
It was really beautiful. I don't know why, but it really truly was.
Wow...I feel...weird. It's kinda hard to describe this. Like a...cold rainy day. Hmm, I'm going to go lay down now.
Good to see you're capable of writing somerhing other than pornography.
That's a pleasant surprise, and the story was a good read, as well.
That's the closest thing to a compliment you're likely to get from me.
Treasure it.
Pretty sure my heart just exploded.
A very well written story, but damn it, it hurts.
I'm almost compelled to make a sequel JUST to make this less depressing.
I hope your glad that you made me sad 
bastard!
I just...I want to go through my gif folder to find the right reaction gif to this. But I know I'll never find the right one to explain these emotions.
~Sylpheed Dashstep
Goodbye everyone, I'm going to cry in the corner for a few hours, or days, or forever.
Anyway, Bravo Zulu, you are my favorite writer. I wish I could follow you again.
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An excellant story for it's small size!
On the one hand, I feel like I have to point out that writing the story from the fragmented perspective of a clearly mentally deficient Derpy was, in the words of the Internet at large, "cruise control for sad". On the other hand, the style is unique and written with a good deal more tact and attention to detail (which I sincerely hope I picked up on as much as I'd like to believe) than is to be expected from the genre, and Chapter 13 featured some very interesting and, in my opinion, effective stylistic oddities that I'd love to get a chance to pick your brain about at some point.
So I guess what that means is that, in my own words this time, you darfed it again. You designed a fic around a trodden and cliché concept, and took a valiant and technically proficient swing at it that wasn't quite good enough to redeem the cliché entirely, but was certainly good enough to make your take on it an exception that proves the rule.
The imagery of imaginary images of
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induced by calligraphic imagery alone makes this worth reading.
this is a depressing story, I thought that Doctor Whooves would come back to her, well because of happy endings, but no, instead Derpy Kills her self (or she was dreaming the whole event) Either way you got feels outta be, and that's what matters. Well played sir, Well played
I... I...
DEEERRPYYY!!!!!
My nametag, I suddenly feel very alone and sad.
So, I'm in an awesome mood,
just got done reading a couple chapters of some hilarious comedies.... and then I read this. 
Whelp. You took my heart and ripped it out. And then punched me in the face with it. Good show, I say.
Oh god.. A sad fic... *hesitantly clicks chapter one*
Dem feels.
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>chapter 12
boy are you in for a treat.
I have sad now.
Jesus that writing was just beyond words, friend. It was just overpowering. That's the first thing I've read in a long while which brought me to actually feeling legitimately sick to my stomach. Most people just yank at the heartstrings. You yanked at the heart! This isn't just "the feels". I can walk away from that just fine. This is something that will stick with me for a long time. Every chapter, I felt like I was there, watching it all through a pane of glass. I wanted to reach out and just help but I couldn't because "f' you reader, I'm a story". Oh. My. Sweet. Lord. Nothing I've read in so long has affected me like this.
. . .
Now if you'll excuse me. I'm going to go curl up, vomit, and cry.
Possibly not in that order.
. . .
Or at least not in such a mutually exclusive fashion.
/ 
2180620 Yeah.....The Calligraphy Was Epic.
Well,Good Job In Making This Sad Fic.I Felt Like I Could Relate To Her.But I'm Not That Sad.Good Job Mate Good Job.You Made Me Feel Like A Zombie...Feeling Nothing But Hunger For More.....But,All Great Things Must Come To An End,Even Though It Might Get A Sequel Or Two.I Think I Want To Read My Little Dashie Again....................TO CUPCAKES.
This Fic Also Destroyed My Feels Sense,Even Tough It Evolved Into Water Gates.It Fainted On Me....
DARF SENT OUT CHAPTER 1-12
THEWATCHER509 SENT OUT FEELS SENSE
CHAPTER 1-12 USED LIFE STORY
FEELS SENSE USED IGNORE.CRITICAL HIT.
CHAPTER 1-12 FAINTED
FEELS SENSE LEVELED UP
WHATS THIS?FEELS SENSE IS EVOLVING
IT EVOLVED INTO WATER GATES?
DARF SENT OUT CHAPTER 13 & 14
CHAPTER 13 & 14 USED FEELS.
ITS SUPER EFFECTIVE.
WATER GATES FAINTED.
THEWATCHER509 HAS NO MORE USABLE FEELSTOPPERMON
THEWATCHER509 DEPRESSED OUT.
2181962 Well I'm Not Much Of A Vomiter Or Helper.....But That Made It So Much Worse.I Felt Sad...Not Just Sad,Depressed.I'm Kinda Depressed Right About Now.How Lucky Can I Get,I Read My Little Dashie THEN Three Notifi-frikkin-cations.Darf Mad a New Story.Already Knew It Was A Sad Story(It's Because Of The "Gray/Grey Cloud" Word).Now Double Depressed Because I Reminded My Self Of My Little Dashie.
I Wanted To Atleast Make Her Happy Because She Is Suffering Very BADLY.But The Logic Part Of Me Kicks In.....FUCK LOGIC
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Shhhhhhheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet.
Freakin' A, darf, you know how to rip out a heart and stomp on it. I mean, DAMN! All those pent-up emotions that come with these conditions, not being able to do a single thing to aid them (my grandfather had severe dementia and I felt like the worst human being ever when I couldn't do anything.) Definitely gonna be a restless night for me now. Regardless, well done.
I have a whole pile of fics in my Read Later list, and I chose this one to start off with because it was short and sad fics don't usually affect me to too much. And now I realize my mistake.
I haven't been this upset by a fic in a long time. And a others have said before me, that calligraphy was truly beautiful. That was art. Favorited.
Like I commented earlier in the story, truly a Gaiman-esque feel, and beautifully done for it.
Well, that was trippy.
2182151 Thanks For The Compliment
.I Know Some People Are Bothered By Some Of My Comments/The Way I Capitalize.I Am Terribly Sorry If I Have Annoyed Or Offended You.It Is Just That I Feel Weird When I Don't Capitalize The First Letter Of My Comments.I Am Sorry For The Inconvenience My Good Sir.
How dare you, Darf.
I have two critiques this week and then you have to go write this masterpiece
Now I am going to have soul-crushing apathy for the rest of the week
Also, much liquid pride was shed.