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  • 58w, 5d
    to whom it may concern (apology)

    it's no secret that i'm a completely stuck up asshole.

    wait, let me start over.

    it's no secret that i take writing—including fanfiction especially—way too seriously. for most people, writing words about cartoon horses is a hobby, a minor creative outlet, a way to have fun. to me, it's been a way of life. i guess that's the side effect of making it my sole means of creativity for a while.

    as such, it's not uncommon that i've espoused a volatile opinion here or there, or said something that stepped on someone's toes in some way or another. i don't mean to imply any inflated sense of worth or importance on myself here—but people have gotten mad at me for various reasons, i've gotten mad at them for just as many, and there have been times where fanfiction, something that's supposed to be wonderful and cheerful, has been miserable.

    one of those instances (or several of them, really) has been in regards to 'riffing'. i have to say, as i've said before, that i don't have anything inherently against the concept of a 'riff'—in the same way that i can look at something dumb on the internet or tv and laugh at it with friends, i think sharing in the communal mockery of something in good spirits can be fun. i've never really enjoyed Mystery Science Theater 3000, or Rifftracks, but i understand why people would, and am ready to accept they're just not for me.

    what i have a problem with, however, are riffs that constitute little more than personal attacks, or even just reductive, repeated commentary about quality. when people riff something, the idea is to make jokes about the content; references, allusions, or taking the absurd qualities of the content and using them as a launching point for observations. it's not to relentlessly mock the perceived quality of something. watching a movie and saying 'holy cow this is shitty' isn't funny—it's just simple-minded and uninteresting, and the same can be said of writing. that's why i had a problem when reading 'riffs' on some of my stories; repeated things like 'wow look at these big words this guy sure is full of himself', mocking the quality of the writing, word-choice, sentence structure—all of those things should be separate from the premise, which is kind of the point of making fun of something in that way. i don't feel like people 'got it'.

    that said, this isn't me giving a dissertation on what comedy is. it's meant to be an apology. for as much as i can say i have justifiable reason to have lashed out at the people who have 'riffed' my stuff in the past, i don't want to hold a grudge anymore. i feel like a creator lashing out because of a perceived insult against themselves or their work is a lot more justifiable than personal attacks over a perceived grandiloquence—but that's not really the issue.

    i want to say i'm sorry. i take myself too seriously. i take writing, and especially fanfiction, too seriously. i don't want to harbour any ill will to people who were using my stories as a vessel to have fun, or to make other people laugh. while i fully believe my reactions were not entirely unreasonable, the extent to which i construed mockings of my work as a personal attack is not acceptable. while things turned into legitimate personal attacks later, i feel if i had started out on the right foot and not blown up by being overly sensitive in the first place, things would have gone much better in the long run.

    to that end: people reading this who i've pissed off in this fashion—i'm sorry. consider this a wholesale apology. i'd like very much to bury the hatchet and go to bed knowing i'm bowing my head and wishing to make amends to anyone i've wronged in this fashion.

    if there are any people from this group that i have blocked, please find some way to let me know and i will be happy to unblock you. please take full license to make fun of my stories as much as you want in whatever fashion, though again i will say that i feel the difference between mocking the content and mocking the author is what makes a good joke.

    if you're unwilling to accept my apology, i understand, but would like to extend it regardless.

    and, to anyone who has no idea what the fuck i'm talking about, is wondering why i'm not posting more porn, or who just wants me to shut up—sorry to you guys too. i'll stop typing here.

    42 comments · 2,306 views
  • 60w, 21h
    nevermind

    i lied

    sorry

    26 comments · 1,042 views
  • 60w, 5d
    not with a bang, but a whimper

    i'm back

    (sort of)

    expect horseporn in a couple days

    also possibly other things.

    after that, i dunno.

    22 comments · 954 views
  • 62w, 2d
    i heard you like anthrobloom (shameless horsesex promotion)

    i haven't made a blog post in a while because i'm dead inside but i don't feel like talking about that right now

    IBP posted a new story just now that i'd like to pimp because i edited a good chunk of it. i forgot to give it a final oversight, but it had made some major progress last i checked, and even though i hate anthro, it involves a naked Applebloom getting filled with a million dicks, which is okay in my book.

    go check it out if you need something to sate your masturbatory longing without me actually writing anything. IBP's a good kid. he needs your vote to become president of the horsepornography republic. stay staunch, comrades.

    4 comments · 803 views
  • 64w, 10h
    PFV Interview and some housekeeping

    howdy all

    as seems to be the custom when these things happen, i'm obligated by ethereal demand to say that A Single Step was posted to the Ponyfiction Vault. you can click on that linky thing to read my interview, super-extra-special-early edition—and of course, next week, the one that everyone will see will go up on fimmyfics proper.

    so.

    i'd always kind of hoped or dreamed that something i'd write would get the nebulous honor of some guy saying 'this is pretty good'. like all goals in life, i have to say the euphoria that came with it was kind of fleeting—but, that being said, it makes me sort of happy when i think about it, if for nothing more than saying that i've contributed something worthwhile to a community i care about.

    anyway.

    Bad Horse wrote this blog thing about 'Why we write?' for One Man's Pony Ramblings. he originally asked for my help putting the post together, but scrapped the stuff i came up with when it wasn't easy to fit it cohesively with his own writing; i don't know if i'll get permission to post my own essay on the same topic, or what. in any case, it's a subject i thought was worth discussing, and Bad Horse is a cool dude who says neat things. so go check it out, if you feel like it. if i get the okay, i may share parts of my version later.

    lastly, my favorite ponyfiction author in the world AP wrote a story about... well, it's pretty obvious. it made me really upset to read but that's good because life is a process, and if we run from the things that upset us we'll never overcome them. i can't say it was as impactful as Pink, Blue, and Ivory, but i think it's a meaningful story that people should read anyway. herein lies the link

    to anyone wondering about new stories: i'm having a bit of a rough spot. life is really tough and shitty right now and honestly i feel like my stomach is eating me from the inside out. i've gotten scraps and half-finished drafts of about five or six stories right now (mostly porn), but can't convince myself to finish any of them. i dunno how long this new block'll last, or what will make it go away, but i promise i'll try hard to put out some new content when i can get over my shitt feelings.

    thanks everyone for reading, as usual.

    catch you on the flip side.

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Twilight accidentally steps on a snail. This makes her sad. As the years go on, several other things happen.

I thought this was my first story rated 'everyone', but it isn't. It kind of is though? Anyway.

First Published
16th Jul 2013
Last Modified
16th Jul 2013
#1 · 67w, 4d ago · 46 · 1 ·

Twilight accidentally steps on a snail. This makes her sad.

God it so tragic I can hardly bear to read.

#3 · 67w, 4d ago · 3 · ·

I...I think I need a moment.

#4 · 67w, 4d ago · 18 · ·

Well then. That was a thing.

#5 · 67w, 4d ago · 8 · 19 ·

didnt like it. sorry.

twilight was to shallow.

#6 · 67w, 4d ago · 5 · ·

That was a really harrowing story. While I know Twilight is doing the right thing throughout it, the way she sacrifices her morals and her sense of compassion for other life forms in favour of the greater good made me feel a bit...hollow.

Nonetheless this is a brillant story and really captures the idea of true immortality rather than the eitheir 'gone mad over time' story or they lived 'happily ever after' story, I usually see. Nice to see a new angle on it. Also the snail bit is quite funny and sad in a weird way.

#7 · 67w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

An interesting thought, is it a play on the fact that there is twilight at the beginning and the end of the day?

As for the execution of the idea.......I liked it, mostly. I could understand most of her actions, up until the whole take over the world part anyway. I really don't think Twilight would do that, but an eternity is a lot of time for a pony to change....

An odd concept, but well done.:twilightsmile:

#8 · 67w, 4d ago · 2 · ·

Spike held his clawsx to his chest and beamed

Beautiful, dude. Love it.

#9 · 67w, 4d ago · 2 · ·

Heh.  This...  Yeah.  This was.  I don't actually know.

But, hey, was well written.

~Skeeter The Lurker

#10 · 67w, 4d ago · · ·

I'm... I'm not sure how I feel about this...

The words in this story were appeasing to me.

#11 · 67w, 4d ago · 15 · ·

Multivac didn't seem so cruel as this.

#12 · 67w, 4d ago · · ·

Twilight Overpowered Sparkle in rare form. Also feels. :twilightsmile:

#13 · 67w, 4d ago · · ·

This was a fantastic story. :fluttercry:

#14 · 67w, 4d ago · 19 · ·

What her mother told her the moment she stepped on the snail influenced Twilight's decisions that would ultimately result in her ending Heat-Death and recreating the Big Bang.

The universe is a loop completely hinged upon Twilight Sparkle of forming the universe out of will alone and creating the conditions for another like her to ascend to power and start the cycle anew.

Darf, my mind is fucking blown right now.

#15 · 67w, 4d ago · 2 · 1 ·

um..............................................................................................................................................i-i don't know what to say about this, it was, wow, i don't know what to think about it, it was yeah...... i give you a :eeyup: for this, no clue how this was supposed to make me feel, just kind of left a confused feeling as to if i should feel something

#16 · 67w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

Snails are pretty great :v

#17 · 67w, 4d ago · 5 · ·

Courtesy of Issac Asimov:

http://filer.case.edu/dts8/thelastq.htm

Also:

Lyrics: http://www.darklyrics.com/lyrics/persefone/spiritualmigration.html#11

The most horrifying moment of my life

At the bottom of my heart

My inner child is crying, scared, shouting,

Shocked

Deep and hidden fears are unlocked

My childhood

My loved ones

My entire life...

All is being lost

I am living my death

It's time to

Face my death

Liberate myself from Samsara

I transcend this spiritual step

Losing my being, my ego

To live only present

I detach from my body

It's not what I really am

It's not what really lives

I know I'm an eternal soul

Quitting and leaving the matter

I join the spiritual world

The invisible kingdom

Where I belong

Oh... Great reality

The Heart of the universe

The source of all life

I let myself go...

#18 · 67w, 4d ago · · ·

There would be casualties, of course.

Doctor Livingstone, I presume that isn't you.

#19 · 67w, 4d ago · · 1 ·

A snail as the eventual recreation of the universe...

...

...

...

EH?

#20 · 67w, 4d ago · 3 · 1 ·

>>2882450 I agree.  This thing made barely any sense.

#21 · 67w, 4d ago · 5 · ·

>>2882327

The beginning of it with the snail, then the egg, and so on with greater destruction and greater repression of emotion each time, made me think more of The Conformist than "The Last Question."

Up until the very end, I thought that's where this was going.

"It’s alright. There are plenty more worlds around where that came from.” Then Twilight saunters away in search of another species to step on.

#22 · 67w, 4d ago · 2 · 1 ·

Multivac for god, 2013

#23 · 67w, 4d ago · · ·

Very well done

I liked it

#24 · 67w, 4d ago · 13 · ·

Whispered words passed between Celestia and Twilight. They were words only for them.

That was beautiful. There was a certain prettiness to the way you wrote the entire fic, but those ones in particular stood out.

#25 · 67w, 4d ago · · ·

A Journey Begins with One Step.

#26 · 67w, 4d ago · · ·

This story is so... different. It's told in a very zoomed-back way, if you get my mean, and had a very unusual premise.

This was very deep. Like, make me look at things deep.

The use of the snail was very well done, as it escalated and escalated, she finally repaid her first action by gifting new life.

I... don't quite know what to say. Great job.

#27 · 67w, 4d ago · · ·

Very moving. Words simply can't describe it.

#28 · 67w, 4d ago · 10 · ·

I guess Twilight finally learned how to bake pies from scratch.

#29 · 67w, 4d ago · · ·

I didn't catch where this was going until the halfway mark, and I think that speaks to the finesse of the effort. "The Last Question" is one of the first stories that ever made me really think about the direction of technology, so it really stuck with me. Normally, when someone follows that structure, I see it pretty early. I wasn't expecting it in this piece, but it seemed plausibly done all the same, and that's a tricky balance to pull off. :twilightsmile:

#30 · 67w, 4d ago · · ·

I'm to stupid to understand this...:raritydespair:I wish i could.

#31 · 67w, 4d ago · · ·

Oookaay? I like to think myself a reasonably intelligent person. but without even a notion as to what Twilight's thoughts were....

I find myself rather lost.

Beautiful story. A beautiful story about nonsense maybe, but a beautiful story nonetheless.

#32 · 67w, 3d ago · · ·

I have to say, "well done".

#33 · 67w, 3d ago · · ·

This now makes me question if Twilight Sparkle created our universe. :derpytongue2:

#34 · 67w, 3d ago · · ·

Why can't i thumb this up more then once? Awesome take on the last question.

#35 · 67w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

First, we had The Last Question. Then, RagingSemi wrote Our Last Goodbye. And now, Darf wrote A Single Step. Each story so similar, yet so different.  

That was a superb story. 5 stars!

#36 · 67w, 3d ago · 2 · ·

One small step for a pony...

#37 · 67w, 3d ago · · ·

This is the sort of thing I want to read a book about

#38 · 67w, 3d ago · 3 · 4 ·

I just wanted to SLAP Twilight and Heavy Shift during that part about the forest! :flutterrage::rainbowhuh::trixieshiftleft::ajbemused:

#39 · 67w, 3d ago · 5 · ·

>>2882241 I would expect more care shown towards your gastropod brethren as a Dunsparce

#40 · 67w, 3d ago · · ·

I love it!

#41 · 67w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

What the bloody hell was that? :rainbowhuh:

I can't even...just what did I just read?

It was well written, that's why I stuck around but just what exactly was that? :flutterrage:

#42 · 67w, 3d ago · 6 · ·

It was alright.  Up until the Everfree forest scene, I thought it was going to be 'Twilight becomes a tyrant because of a snail.'  Then, I thought perhaps she would have a period of remorse because there were no more snails.

This, uhm, didn't go that way.  And I'm glad for that.  As it stands, it reminds me of a more fantasy-esque look at some of the older sci-fi writers.  It was by no means bad, but I really had no feelings one way or another.  It happened.  Also MULTIVAC is best computer.

#43 · 67w, 3d ago · 2 · ·

Quite an odd but eye-opening theme to the story.

Chaos theory. A single step can cause an unfathomable chain reaction of events. They are unpredictable and inevitable. I believe this is the point of the story; Destiny cannot be avoided, only accepted.

#44 · 67w, 3d ago · 2 · ·

Really good. I thought this would have been a comedy in disguise, but it was so much more. You describe eternity pretty well and tie in the great factors of actions well within. This one is for the Vault.

#45 · 67w, 3d ago · 2 · ·

Excellent story.  It did remind me of "The Last Question" a bit, but I'm glad it was not just a ponified version of that story.  I liked how Twilight's character falls over the course of the story, and her fatalism kind of spirals out from a single small act.

#46 · 67w, 3d ago · · ·

Choices were made. Poor choices? Eh. Choices.

#47 · 67w, 3d ago · · ·

Um...

Well. That was...

Okay.

#48 · 67w, 3d ago · 4 · ·

This fills me with wonder and angst, reminding me of the most dreadful thing there is: Time. Or rather, the passing of Time, leading to the inevitable change and end of all. Like looking at an old photograph, only the image is that of what will be. It is all so great and terrible.

A good story with a great scope in its small format.

#49 · 67w, 3d ago · 8 · 1 ·

>>2882309  No greater evil has ever been done than that which is carried out under the auspices of 'the greater good'.

For the very belief that one knows what the greater good is in the mind of one who is not thoroughly omniscient is biased at its inception.

#50 · 67w, 3d ago · 6 · 6 ·

>>2884917  Never give god-like powers to people or ponies with chronic depressive or bipolar disorder.  

It does not end well.

I, on the other hoof, have eliminated over 70,000 mice thus far, and I'm still not fatalistic!  

SUCK IT TWILIGHT!!  :trollestia:

Seriously, she didn't know that you can add energy to the expanding unverse by accessing peripheral parallel branes?  Even I know that!  What a pathetic god!  

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