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darf

Joined April 2012
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Stories (13)

  • Pony Verse: A Collaborative Collection of Pony Poetry
    A wide-ranging anthology of verse from nine of FIMFiction's top poets.

    8,439 words · 1,463 views · 178 likes · 1 dislikes
  • A Single Step
    Twilight accidentally steps on a snail. This makes her sad. As the years go on, several other things happen.
    5,797 words · 4,095 views · 568 likes · 18 dislikes
  • Brevity
    A gesture of appreciation — a song-story from another world — a sudden revelation — a dark time in youth — the sweet sadness of the snow: five short stories about ponos, and the things that happen to them.
    11,420 words · 583 views · 89 likes · 1 dislikes
  • What You Can Imagine
    A Pony's deepest desires brought to life aren't always what they expect.
    9,921 words · 3,796 views · 206 likes · 7 dislikes
  • Moonlight
    8,341 words · 2,282 views · 159 likes · 5 dislikes
  • Pieces of a Grey Cloud
    6,132 words · 3,888 views · 399 likes · 23 dislikes
  • Unfamiliar Skin
    6,246 words · 1,867 views · 255 likes · 13 dislikes
  • Quotidian
    9,626 words · 2,402 views · 261 likes · 16 dislikes
  • As the Days Go
    3,552 words · 3,351 views · 281 likes · 19 dislikes
  • Same Love
    20,825 words · 948 views · 101 likes · 13 dislikes
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Twilight accidentally steps on a snail. This makes her sad. As the years go on, several other things happen.

I thought this was my first story rated 'everyone', but it isn't. It kind of is though? Anyway.

First Published
16th Jul 2013
Last Modified
16th Jul 2013

Comments ( 132 )

#1 · 59w, 8h ago · 46 · 1 ·

Twilight accidentally steps on a snail. This makes her sad.

God it so tragic I can hardly bear to read.

#2 · 59w, 8h ago · · ·

Enough said.

#3 · 59w, 8h ago · 3 · ·

I...I think I need a moment.

#4 · 59w, 8h ago · 18 · ·

Well then. That was a thing.

#5 · 59w, 8h ago · 8 · 19 ·

didnt like it. sorry.

twilight was to shallow.

#6 · 59w, 8h ago · 5 · ·

That was a really harrowing story. While I know Twilight is doing the right thing throughout it, the way she sacrifices her morals and her sense of compassion for other life forms in favour of the greater good made me feel a bit...hollow.

Nonetheless this is a brillant story and really captures the idea of true immortality rather than the eitheir 'gone mad over time' story or they lived 'happily ever after' story, I usually see. Nice to see a new angle on it. Also the snail bit is quite funny and sad in a weird way.

#7 · 59w, 8h ago · 1 · ·

An interesting thought, is it a play on the fact that there is twilight at the beginning and the end of the day?

As for the execution of the idea.......I liked it, mostly. I could understand most of her actions, up until the whole take over the world part anyway. I really don't think Twilight would do that, but an eternity is a lot of time for a pony to change....

An odd concept, but well done.:twilightsmile:

#8 · 59w, 8h ago · 2 · ·

Spike held his clawsx to his chest and beamed

Beautiful, dude. Love it.

#9 · 59w, 8h ago · 1 · ·

Heh.  This...  Yeah.  This was.  I don't actually know.

But, hey, was well written.

~Skeeter The Lurker

#10 · 59w, 8h ago · · ·

I'm... I'm not sure how I feel about this...

The words in this story were appeasing to me.

#11 · 59w, 8h ago · 15 · ·

Multivac didn't seem so cruel as this.

#12 · 59w, 8h ago · · ·

Twilight Overpowered Sparkle in rare form. Also feels. :twilightsmile:

#13 · 59w, 7h ago · · ·

This was a fantastic story. :fluttercry:

#14 · 59w, 7h ago · 19 · ·

What her mother told her the moment she stepped on the snail influenced Twilight's decisions that would ultimately result in her ending Heat-Death and recreating the Big Bang.

The universe is a loop completely hinged upon Twilight Sparkle of forming the universe out of will alone and creating the conditions for another like her to ascend to power and start the cycle anew.

Darf, my mind is fucking blown right now.

#15 · 59w, 7h ago · 2 · 1 ·

um..............................................................................................................................................i-i don't know what to say about this, it was, wow, i don't know what to think about it, it was yeah...... i give you a :eeyup: for this, no clue how this was supposed to make me feel, just kind of left a confused feeling as to if i should feel something

#16 · 59w, 7h ago · 1 · ·

Snails are pretty great :v

#17 · 59w, 7h ago · 5 · ·

Courtesy of Issac Asimov:

http://filer.case.edu/dts8/thelastq.htm

Also:

Lyrics: http://www.darklyrics.com/lyrics/persefone/spiritualmigration.html#11

The most horrifying moment of my life

At the bottom of my heart

My inner child is crying, scared, shouting,

Shocked

Deep and hidden fears are unlocked

My childhood

My loved ones

My entire life...

All is being lost

I am living my death

It's time to

Face my death

Liberate myself from Samsara

I transcend this spiritual step

Losing my being, my ego

To live only present

I detach from my body

It's not what I really am

It's not what really lives

I know I'm an eternal soul

Quitting and leaving the matter

I join the spiritual world

The invisible kingdom

Where I belong

Oh... Great reality

The Heart of the universe

The source of all life

I let myself go...

#18 · 59w, 7h ago · · ·

There would be casualties, of course.

Doctor Livingstone, I presume that isn't you.

#19 · 59w, 6h ago · · 1 ·

A snail as the eventual recreation of the universe...

...

...

...

EH?

#20 · 59w, 6h ago · 3 · 1 ·

>>2882450 I agree.  This thing made barely any sense.

#21 · 59w, 6h ago · 5 · ·

>>2882327

The beginning of it with the snail, then the egg, and so on with greater destruction and greater repression of emotion each time, made me think more of The Conformist than "The Last Question."

Up until the very end, I thought that's where this was going.

"It’s alright. There are plenty more worlds around where that came from.” Then Twilight saunters away in search of another species to step on.

#22 · 59w, 6h ago · 2 · 1 ·

Multivac for god, 2013

#23 · 59w, 6h ago · · ·

Very well done

I liked it

#24 · 59w, 6h ago · 13 · ·

Whispered words passed between Celestia and Twilight. They were words only for them.

That was beautiful. There was a certain prettiness to the way you wrote the entire fic, but those ones in particular stood out.

#25 · 59w, 5h ago · · ·

A Journey Begins with One Step.

#26 · 59w, 5h ago · · ·

This story is so... different. It's told in a very zoomed-back way, if you get my mean, and had a very unusual premise.

This was very deep. Like, make me look at things deep.

The use of the snail was very well done, as it escalated and escalated, she finally repaid her first action by gifting new life.

I... don't quite know what to say. Great job.

#27 · 59w, 5h ago · · ·

Very moving. Words simply can't describe it.

#28 · 59w, 5h ago · 10 · ·

I guess Twilight finally learned how to bake pies from scratch.

#29 · 59w, 5h ago · · ·

I didn't catch where this was going until the halfway mark, and I think that speaks to the finesse of the effort. "The Last Question" is one of the first stories that ever made me really think about the direction of technology, so it really stuck with me. Normally, when someone follows that structure, I see it pretty early. I wasn't expecting it in this piece, but it seemed plausibly done all the same, and that's a tricky balance to pull off. :twilightsmile:

#30 · 59w, 4h ago · · ·

I'm to stupid to understand this...:raritydespair:I wish i could.

#31 · 59w, 3h ago · · ·

Oookaay? I like to think myself a reasonably intelligent person. but without even a notion as to what Twilight's thoughts were....

I find myself rather lost.

Beautiful story. A beautiful story about nonsense maybe, but a beautiful story nonetheless.

#32 · 59w, 1h ago · · ·

I have to say, "well done".

#33 · 59w, 43m ago · · ·

This now makes me question if Twilight Sparkle created our universe. :derpytongue2:

#34 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·

Why can't i thumb this up more then once? Awesome take on the last question.

#35 · 58w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

First, we had The Last Question. Then, RagingSemi wrote Our Last Goodbye. And now, Darf wrote A Single Step. Each story so similar, yet so different.  

That was a superb story. 5 stars!

#36 · 58w, 6d ago · 2 · ·

One small step for a pony...

#37 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·

This is the sort of thing I want to read a book about

#38 · 58w, 6d ago · 3 · 4 ·

I just wanted to SLAP Twilight and Heavy Shift during that part about the forest! :flutterrage::rainbowhuh::trixieshiftleft::ajbemused:

#39 · 58w, 6d ago · 5 · ·

>>2882241 I would expect more care shown towards your gastropod brethren as a Dunsparce

#40 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·

I love it!

#41 · 58w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

What the bloody hell was that? :rainbowhuh:

I can't even...just what did I just read?

It was well written, that's why I stuck around but just what exactly was that? :flutterrage:

#42 · 58w, 6d ago · 6 · ·

It was alright.  Up until the Everfree forest scene, I thought it was going to be 'Twilight becomes a tyrant because of a snail.'  Then, I thought perhaps she would have a period of remorse because there were no more snails.

This, uhm, didn't go that way.  And I'm glad for that.  As it stands, it reminds me of a more fantasy-esque look at some of the older sci-fi writers.  It was by no means bad, but I really had no feelings one way or another.  It happened.  Also MULTIVAC is best computer.

#43 · 58w, 6d ago · 2 · ·

Quite an odd but eye-opening theme to the story.

Chaos theory. A single step can cause an unfathomable chain reaction of events. They are unpredictable and inevitable. I believe this is the point of the story; Destiny cannot be avoided, only accepted.

#44 · 58w, 6d ago · 2 · ·

Really good. I thought this would have been a comedy in disguise, but it was so much more. You describe eternity pretty well and tie in the great factors of actions well within. This one is for the Vault.

#45 · 58w, 6d ago · 2 · ·

Excellent story.  It did remind me of "The Last Question" a bit, but I'm glad it was not just a ponified version of that story.  I liked how Twilight's character falls over the course of the story, and her fatalism kind of spirals out from a single small act.

#46 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·

Choices were made. Poor choices? Eh. Choices.

#47 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·

Um...

Well. That was...

Okay.

#48 · 58w, 6d ago · 4 · ·

This fills me with wonder and angst, reminding me of the most dreadful thing there is: Time. Or rather, the passing of Time, leading to the inevitable change and end of all. Like looking at an old photograph, only the image is that of what will be. It is all so great and terrible.

A good story with a great scope in its small format.

#49 · 58w, 6d ago · 8 · 1 ·

>>2882309  No greater evil has ever been done than that which is carried out under the auspices of 'the greater good'.

For the very belief that one knows what the greater good is in the mind of one who is not thoroughly omniscient is biased at its inception.

#50 · 58w, 6d ago · 6 · 6 ·

>>2884917  Never give god-like powers to people or ponies with chronic depressive or bipolar disorder.  

It does not end well.

I, on the other hoof, have eliminated over 70,000 mice thus far, and I'm still not fatalistic!  

SUCK IT TWILIGHT!!  :trollestia:

Seriously, she didn't know that you can add energy to the expanding unverse by accessing peripheral parallel branes?  Even I know that!  What a pathetic god!  

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