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Celestia's Academy for Gifted Unicorns.

The name has bothered Luna for the longest of times. She'd seen pony after pony stride in and out of the castle- coming in with dreams of working beside their princess and making their parents proud. But what kind of message did it send when they were not accepted? You're not gifted.

Luna chances upon a pony that might just be the friend she needs to get on her feet after the events of Nightmare Moon and restore the Element of Harmony long forgotten and long been kept from all the ponies who have gone unseen for all these years.

Luna's Academy for Forgotten Ponies.

This story is being revamped! It's been a whole year since I finished this story and wow it was a pleasure to write. But a year of writing and growing older hopefully has given me some new tricks up my sleeve to making this story more wonderful than I thought it was when I first wrote it.
A big thank you to everyone who enjoyed this story when it began, and I hope you are all looking forward to this in time.

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Comments ( 73 )

Yes. Just...yes. Continue with this, for it pleases me

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That gif made me laugh :rainbowlaugh: But anyway, yeah I noticed that, I was expecting it to have a bit more of a gold look to it. :twilightoops:

2170199 Yeah don't worry, the story itself appears to be decent from an outward glance. Just that text, man.

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I'm editing that shit now XD
The more I see it as I scroll past the more I dislike it :twilightsmile:

Genuine pity for Luna and derpy over here...

This was really good. You had a couple spelling mistakes but nothing too major! All in all 5/5 for me. Felt some genuine pity for Luna and Derpy. :yay:

It's beautiful. :fluttershysad:
You have to continue this.

What went wrong, Luna? Celestia created a perfect society and a perfect world. In a perfect world, there is very little place for the imperfect, flawed or unusual. Even though, officially, such behaviour would never be tolerated, it is an assumption that most ponies have that the flawed can be mocked and scorned. Oddly enough, all of the Mane Six to a greater or lesser extent have suffered because of that unspoken rule too.

Following this based on premise alone, though methinks you may need an editor. Seeing quite a few mistakes scattered about. :twilightsheepish: I'm an editor myself, so if you want, I could do it for you. :twilightsmile:

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That's quite alright. I'm an editor myself, and I will go over everything once I have the story down in full.
Thank you for the offer, though.

Comment posted by Scourgeous deleted Feb 25th, 2013

Can't wait for the next chapter.:derpyderp1:

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Glad to hear it! :pinkiehappy: I'm working on it right now.

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:pinkiegasp:(GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAASP!)

:yay::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY!!!!!!

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It reminds me to Gattaca. And, like in the movie, I believe "perfection" leads to stagnation, while the "imperfect" yet persistant are the ones who, by changing themselves, also change the world in where they live.

Well, for whatever reason, my previous comment didn't get saved so, I'll try again:

I've got this strange feeling that Rainbow Dash's rainbows aren't there coincidentally. I wonder if, on a subconscious level, she gets drawn to produce them whenever somepony needs one. Maybe that's part of being an Element of Harmony.

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It seems logical. Loyalty isn't just about being loyal to your friends. :twilightsmile:

This is so good!! Please continue this glorious work :moustache:

oh boy, this is getting serious. :derpyderp2:

If everyone takes a looksie, you'll see there is a new main character that had been added to the list... :derpytongue2: :raritywink:

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Oh boy. SHE'S coming? Look forward to THAT meeting!

Splee! Maybe Luna's fit will be more beneficial than detrimental here!

Welp, first chapter has my attention and I shall read the rest on the morrow. :derpytongue2:

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I'm tired from writing x3
I might have one more update for today though. Just to get the ball rolling.

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That's fine! It's been taking me weeks to write each chapter of my fic lately. Write at your own pace. If anyone tries to make you go faster, just :flutterrage: at them.

Ok, wow, this has been a major play on my feels since I started reading this.:pinkiesad2:

First, I want to say this is an interesting premise. Moreover, I think the idea of an informal Academy via Luna is a nice idea. Her bonding with Derpy would give her a good grounding and motivation to make it work as something different that Celestia's Academy.:rainbowdetermined2:

Just my own personal thought, but I see it as an informal Camp, or study group. Where those who wish to wander in, find welcome, and can talk about their lives and goals. In the sharing, they gain insight from the others, and more importantly, support. It may not solve their problems, but it can become a balm to their weary minds and hearts, and eventual, Dinky would rise from this place and test into Celestia's School...only to return because she likes learning from Luna and being with her mother better.:raritycry::twilightsmile:

Trixie, for all her bluster, is still a skilled Unicorn in her chosen field. She'd make a decent aid for Dinky, and she could learn a thing or two from Luna with a bit of patience. Lyra is another one, who might find sympathy, and even a bit of aid from Derpy in her own personal research if she's into humans here.:heart:

I honestly am real excited by this, and wish you well!:yay:

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I'm glad you see it so deeply and emotionally :pinkiesad2:

Well, I've just posted the next chapter too, so you can see what I had in store for Luna and Derpy. :derpytongue2:

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I did manage to get that next update up :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy:

BOOYA! Take that Chrysalis! :rainbowwild::derpytongue2::pinkiehappy: Epic show there! Bravo! Or would it be Brava? Who cares/ EPIC!

Great idea, hough the element of love thing felt just a little bit sudden. :pinkiesmile::derpytongue2:

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Thank you! I've finished the whole story now. :raritywink:

Not to complain, but that went by incredibly fast...
I'm kinda sad it's over now.

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*shrug* It was supposed to be. They both had doubts about their importance, but as soon as Luna realized that Equestria needed her, Derpy also realized that all they were missing was love, and then with the power of *FRIENDSHIP* they became an element xD :rainbowlaugh: Oh well.

All's well and ends well, and I'm glad you thought it was a good idea. :rainbowkiss:

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Aha, but there WILL be a sequel.
Promise :raritywink:
I know it seemed rushed, but I didn't want to make it really long and boring.

Oh my, that went fast. :derpyderp2: Did not expect it to be finished so quickly.:derpyderp1:

:pinkiehappy:Does not mean i did not enjoy it.

This was a good fic. I spotted no errors in grammar, everything was smooth, overall a good fic. Thank you for writing it.:twilightsmile:

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Thank you very much!
There is going to be a sequel in due time. :raritystarry:

This was an excellent read. Thank you very much for writing this. :scootangel:

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