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Vinyl Scratch lives the hard life. She doesn't make many bits a day, and her job is slowly growing old. No-one wants a DJ anymore, specially when Vinyl lives in Canterlot. Everypony is too upperclass for her music, and she slowly finds herself drifting into the shadows of the unknown.
She's desperate, and it falls to the hooves of one pony to truely understand her.

Chapters (9)
Comments ( 58 )

Only thing: Octavia would NEVER be willingly called 'Tavi. :unsuresweetie:

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Considering she is a background pony it's not really something we can judge on. :derpytongue2:

A brilliant turnaround from the norm. Octavia is so often treated as one who needs saving.

Best line in the chapter: "Yes, yes I did." She smirked.

Yep. Liking, faving, email updates. Looking foreword to more.

Been looking for a Octa/Scratch Fic like this... where's the rest of it?

Loving the excitable Octavia in this one. Very original.

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OctaScratch or Vinyltavia I believe. :pinkiesmile: Glad you like.

LOVE IT SO FAR! :)

Moar please :)

Poor Vinyl:ajsleepy::fluttercry:
Thankfully Octavia's there to help her

Great story so far! Keep going. (was that an hint of romance, or will it simply remain a friendly gesture?)

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More is on it's way~
It's a little inbetween, friendly but more for Tavi to let off some steam. :pinkiesmile:

Replace drink with chapter. You wouldn't argue with Thor would you?

Embedding hates me.

:pinkiegasp: The plot thickens! I would appreciate more of this story. :raritywink:
Keep up the good work

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Thank you. :pinkiehappy: Just updated now.

:moustache:
Very well written once again. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Your stories quality seems to be dropping a little bit. It seems like you're rushing to publish fast, instead of ensuring that your story is spectacular.
It's not bad, I just liked the earlier chapters a lot more. Don't take it personally.

Nonetheless, I enjoyed this chapter, and still look forward to when the next is published.
Thankyou my fine fellow,
Fighting_oreo :moustache:

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I think it's mostly because
1. I use way too much dialogue
2. The first chapters were pre planned. I created the story and got what I'd come up with so far down. Now I'm just making it up as I go along.
:unsuresweetie: Sadly all my stories seem to fall into that pit of useless dialogue-filled... crap. :twilightoops:

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Firstly, don't call your stories crap. Ever. If you start calling stories crap, you start believing all your stories are doomed to failure and you stop trying. This then makes your stories crap.

Secondly, dialogue has its place. Too little dialogue is bad too, but I kind of agree that too much dialogue and no other stuff makes Jack a dull story. (If you didn't get it, I feel bad for you). In analogical short using emoticons, :pinkiehappy: is good, :raritystarry: :scootangel: :heart: :raritycry: :facehoof: :duck: :twilightangry2: :pinkiegasp: :derpyderp1: :ajsmug: :applecry: is less good.

Thirdly, I think that happens to a lot of writers. In my current story, a minor character somehow became the second main one. The best thing you can do in my opinion, is just roll with it. Become your stories conduit.

If the story has a life of its own, you can be surprised at how it turns out just as much as everyone else.

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I don't intend to have so much dialogue, but I always feel the need for the ponies to converse. And I hate breaking their conversations up to make it sound like they are just standing there silently and making the odd comment about the weather.
When I start thinking about using too much, as I did in the latest chapter, I start to rush it away and round the conversation off a little awkwardly. So, yes, work in progress. :derpytongue2:

Well, now here's a story to put in the JFF's recommended folder! Like it, faved it, thumbed it up, eagerly waiting for more.
Oh, and welcome to the OctaScratch club. :twilightsmile:

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:twilightsheepish: I'm glad you liked it so much. I'm writing the next chapter right now, so you'll be in the loop when that is ready! :pinkiehappy:

She's desperate, and it falls to the hooves of one pony to truely understand her.

> Assumes that Octavia is said pony
> Checks main characters
> Is correct

I'm still gonna fave and read this though, provided that your grammar doesn't piss me off. (I haven't opened any chapters yet).

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I don't think the grammar is atrocious, but I can't say it will be flawless because I'll only edit it when I have finished the whole story. :pinkiesmile:

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Yay new chappie! Every time I see a new chapter of a story I like, I'm reminded what I slacker I am and that I need to update my own OctaScratches... BUT! I'd very much rather read than write :raritywink:

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I know that feeling! :rainbowlaugh:
But I think it is best to feed the fans before trying to find my own stories to feed on. :pinkiesmile:

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Haha, well, yeeeeah, but we both know the overwhelming power of laziness :raritywink:

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The Element of Laziness at it's best. :trollestia:

Okay, now for the actual review.

The characterisation is most certainly the strongest point of the story. I like Octavia's character, especially. I know how hard it is to be original when it comes down to these two ponies (In one of my stories, Vinyl is a jazz pianist. Sue me :ajbemused:), but you managed to dish it out pretty well.
The pacing, though, is a little fast, but then again, I'm not really the one to talk about pacing. Still, the scene where Vinyl leaves for Ponyville is rather anticlimatic and can be viewed as a plot device.
The plot is only being revealed, gradually, so I cannot comment much on it. So far, so good.

And boy, those inner thoughts! I love inner thoughts and motives. I plug them mercilessly into my stories, and I always expect to find them in others' stories. You haven't failed. :twilightsmile:

Keep on writing in a free world, enjoy OctaScratching, etc etc!

~Josh

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I was thinking of writing a chapter to go between the spa scene and Vinyl leaving and slotting it in between them, but it depends if I can think of something worth putting there. :twilightsheepish:

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Well, quoting Interstate 60,

You're the driver.

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It's just me deciding whether to let people moan about the rush between those two, or risk writing something worse just to lengthen it out. :pinkiesick:

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I can't exactly say my advice is precious, but I've written stuff, so it's as good as the next man's: if you feel like writing it, do it. If it doesn't ruin the continuation of the story, do it. If you write it out of spite, don't. It will only be worse.

Cant wait for the next one! :pinkiehappy:

Nice chapter, though the blackout is somewhat strange. Also, I thought it would be longer :twilightsmile:

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It was supposed to be shocking, not really something you would guess, but taking a sudden step back on a small stage will do that :rainbowlaugh:
And, I just aim for anything roughly 1000+

I'm glad I gave this story a shot because wow! I love it! I like how you're progressing both parts of their stories and I felt great reading through this. The pace is just right and I can't wait for more! Awesome story!! :heart:

Life is just full of surprises,some good and some bad....

Though Octavia can play violin, She does so in Nightmare night, on the stage she is playing violin.

Neat story, can't wait for the next chapter

Dafuq vinyl she's trying to apologize:flutterrage:

Wow!:raritystarry: Awesome! This stories progression and seemingly intensive plot twists have me hooked.

Talk about Shipping it like FEDEX.:rainbowlaugh:

Though I must say this is my first OctaScratch story that ive read where its Octavia being the bold one. This is very interesting to me.:yay: I like this approach very much:twilightsmile:...though maybe a bit fast and a bit nonchalant for Octavia's style :raritywink:

Still I must read on! I must!:twilightsmile:

Certainly a good story, but not great. Feel as if the chapters should be longer as the story progresses far to quickly. Keep on writing, practice makes perfect!

Eh...I like the concept of shy Vinyl and bold Tavi, but the pacing really just shoots itself in the foot. Octavia saves her from getting raped, lets her stay at her place, and then the next chapter, they're best friends. Next chapter...

Not bad, but not really good :/

Is there going to be a next chapter? Please say yes...

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