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seems like you got some haters
I hapen to like your work..... minus the rape
LOL!
You did it, Anon.
/mlp/ delivered.
Congrats.
Hmmm.. I can't really say anything other then "not bad" until the next bit is unveiled. Though I am a fan of Milky Way so i'd love to see how this goes.
Ew Milky Way
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im ASSUMING i got the down votes because there is no sex in it YET. which is so unbelievably fucking stupid.
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my editor wants me to continue this story so that there are different chapters about different ponies... like next they pick up derpy or something.
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yeah, i made a thread about it on /mlp/ but didnt really get that much of a response... its actually pretty crazy that you found this story since i didnt post the finished result on /mlp/
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well yeah, i mean this is just the setup... so i can jump straight into the sex in chapter two.
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how can you say eww milky way? milky way is great. if its because you dont like croch tits, you shouldn't read the next chapter... cause it will be about croch tits... and milk.
I like it.
P.S. Maybe you can read my story, "My Day In Ponyville"
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im assuming your story is somehow related to mine in theme or context?
i suppose i could look at it, but you didn't really explain why you want me to.
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Nevermind it's not like yours
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did you really just request i look at it for views?
not even a critique or anything?
i looked at the stats of the story, and HIE stories arent that popular. especially two humans at the same time.
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your....appearance...reminds me of a certain succubus
Ok...I hope I was not the only one getting a mental image of Mrs.Cake holding her wine glass swirling it and looking like a smug Bond villain...
alright onto something I personaly hate doing....being a critic -shiver- please forgive me my friend
I liked how you played milky way as what little I have seen or read of her you got her spot on. When the two were scouting milky and they looked at each other I would have figured that it would have been the other way around, you know carrot asking cup, not cup asking carrot. Then again Cup might have a thing for big mammories.
I do not critic grammer....it would be the pot calling the kettle black with how bad at it as I am.
All in all I look forward to seeing just who they get to make these movies with
2166255 I love Crotch Tits. I hate Milky Way as a character.
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oh hush, molly is adorable.
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that wasn't much of a critique... originally it was going to be a lesbian scene, mrs cake x milky with mr cake recording. thats why cupcake asked. but i think im going to do something else with it now.
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why?
2167104 Just... overuse. They beat here to death like Little Pip and Nyx before her.
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I saw the thread some nights ago, and I frequently browse Latest Stories. I was actually scouring for stories with more dislikes than likes and coincidentally came upon this. Sad that it had to be posted here as the userbase of this site is incredibly close-minded.
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No idea who nyx is.
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I thought this story would do well, vanilla clop seems to be liked alot on this site. Normally my stories get down voted because I write about foal-con or rape
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True - according to my research, sex stories are around 50% more viewed/liked/favorited than non-sex stories. I guess it's because this site is full of KV-NEETs. (Kissless Virgins Not in Education, Employment or Training).
Oh well. I can't say I expect more from men with emotional growth stunts.
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So im not sure why I got immediate down votes. Maybe cause there was no sex in chapter one?
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Most likely.
Or the fact that there's gonna be Milky Way.
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whats everyone's problem with milky?
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well what ever you do with it I look forward to it
Good stuff! It's rough around the edges, just like most of your stories, but it's certainly got potential.
Maybe one of these times you should get me to make an editing pass on your story before submitting it. I wouldn't be surprised if the grammar faults got you a few more downvotes than you would have otherwise.
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There's no sex in any chapter of my story...yet. And it's doing fairly well.
Maybe it's just readers who don't like the premise, and/or characters.
Yeah. I'm going to go with that.
I, personally can't wait for more!
Downvoters don't know what they're missing!
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wilted flower, right? i thought there was sex in that...
anyway, like we were saying subject matter definitely alters people's judgement of the story.... when i first came out with my longest story (sparkle family secrets) it was like all downvotes because "i portrayed shining like a pedophile" whatever, incest in the best.
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No sex...yet. I'm building up a slow-burning romance first, then plan to make their first time the best either has ever had.
And I enjoyed "Sparkle Family Secrets". Maybe I'm just a sick individual. Hell, I love talking about horse sex!
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you are a sick individual... yes.
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Preeeetty much this. I love crotchtits as much as the next person, but Milky Way is way too popular, for being such an unimaginative OC.
Luckily though, from what I can tell, her popularity has been steadily dying off ever since the Tiarawhy flash.
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Well, milky way is an introductory character, further chapters can be about other characters
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adorable?!ADORABLE?!?!?!?ARE YOU INSANE?!?!?!
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like derpy.
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aww look at her! shes so cute...
2170110 Ew Derpy
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i didnt plan on doing any of the mane 6 or the princesses. so maybe lyra and bon bon (they will be together) viynl or octavia, or both... im not sure, berry punch?
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Alright
Why do you keep switching between Cup Cake and Mrs.Cake? Pick one or the other.
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because either way works,
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But constantly switching between the two names is disorienting. Especially when you're switching between two names in two sentences right next to each other.
Either use "Mrs.Cake" or "Cup Cake", don't use both.
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its same way how if im talking about like.. shining armor, for instance. i can say "shining armor" or i can say "the white colt" or something along those lines.
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Referring to a character by name, and then referring to them by a physical description is acceptable. Constantly referring to a character using two different names is not.
It's like if you kept switching back and forth between "Pinkie" and "Pinkamena Diane Pie" all the time...it's just disorienting and confuses the reader.
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well... i suppose if i add anymore chapters to this story, ill just call her mrs. cake
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Alright im replying to EVERYON who ever left a comment on this story....
im asking you all whether or not you want this story continued, i came to this page to change the status of this story "completed" but i ended up reading the comments again and I'm wondering if you would like to see more.
id be continuing with the idea of mr and mrs.' cakes porn thing but with different background ponies. i dont think id add in any of the main 6 minus maybe pinkie because... you know, she lives with them.
She had gotten lucky;
That's because I'm here!
no space
Mrs. Cake leaned back in, only thing time lower, planting her lips on Milky’s neck, and moving lower. She slowly kissed down the yellow mare’s body. She pushing Milky onto her back as she went down,
Thing typo, pushing typo
on typo