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If someone dares to thumb down this, I'm gonna eradicate them from this planet.
Few things can make me cry... I won't even put the rarity crying emoticon just because it wouldn't fit with this.
Well... a bit melodramatic and over-played in a few parts, but overall a good piece of work.
Well done. (Up-vote)
My deepest sympathy on the loss of your brother. No words can really help so will just say I am thinking of you and yours.
B.D.
Closure on one of life's chapters. Are you willing to move on to the next now?
EDIT: Ah! Of course. Excellently written one-shot, as expected.
Damn.....Death himself can never be fair to any creature, but it's how he was created. The Gods can not interfere with the laws of death, shit. Twilight's and Shining's sins can be redeemed but they are not what caused Armor's death, I'm not one for Shining Armor but you did very well on this, every creature dies, it's the fact of life....unless you're a God, now I feel so bad for Cadence, her mate died, and she is still now and forever, the Goddess of love....how tragic
2102833 This sums up my thoughts perfectly.
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Yes, I know this and did that purposefully.
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RAWR
Speaking as a big brother, this hit me right in the feels.
Still, this was a wonderful piece, and I very much praise this author for such a heartfelt oneshot.
From the bottom of my heart, thank you.
Ouch.
This needs a disclaimer for people who have brothers
. I was worried about losing my brother back in September when his creatinine levels were very high and his kidneys went to shit. He was in excruciating pain and was hospitalized for a week and the speculation was that he had IgA Nephropathy. Miraculously, he ended up getting better and we learned that it was most likely caused by a fungal meningitis infection from a steroid injection for his back a few weeks earlier coupled with his intake of creatine from muscle drinks (creatinine is the break-down product of creatine and is filtered through your kidneys). Still, knowing that my brother was incredibly ill, possibly dying was a big wake-up call to me. I can only imagine what I would have felt had my brother died that week...
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I must say that it is the perfectly wonderful way you wrote this that completely tugged at my heartstrings and made me feel grateful for the family I have now. I'm so sorry to hear about your brother
...but this was wonderful
Emotion is such a difficult thing to weave into a story, no matter the level of skill a writer possesses. It's something all writers reach for, but few ever truly capture.
You caught it, and by God, did you ever catch it...
I read a lot of sad/tragic fics, so much to the point where it takes something truly powerful to make me feel anything. You hit me right in the heart. My brother and I are so close, and I even call him my LBBFF. Everything I read, I immediately associated to my relationship with him, and it got to me even more. The sorrow and depth of emotion is so tangible in your work. Bravo, author you should be proud. I know your brother would be.
It takes a special kind of writing to make it to my Favorites list. Welcome aboard.
With gratitude and sympathy,
-- Dusk Quill
My deepest sympathy of such a personal loss. Death is a part of everyday life, but that doesn't mean it's easy to accept...
I liked the story. A lot. There aren't a lot of mourning one-shots here, but this has been done quite superbly.
Thank you. Fics like these make me value what seemingly little, yet cherishable, things that we all have in life. Next time when my sister gets back home from college, I'm gonna make sure to hug her a little tighter. All because of this fic.
Wow... That brought a tear to my eye. No mere words can describe how sad this story is. This makes me want to give my sister a hug the next time I see her. Well done
Ahh I was like "not gonna cry not gonna cry" but then
I'm feeling a moistness in my eyes.... consarnit.
Beautiful, absolutely beautiful.
"I wait for you, in a world without you." that is the line that continued to play through my head as I read this.
Well, I haven't cried like that since My Little Dashie, and I wasn't a brony when I first listened to it being read. I'm sorry for your loss, I can't say I know how it feels, because it's never the same for anyone. Words can't express
It hurt to read this... I had to though.
If it helps me release just a little of that pain I have held in for all these years, then I have to read it.
Must not cry. Must not cry. Must not-
....horrible choice of words, I know...
Screw it
Twilight was me when my grandpa died. And I also have a big brother so that makes the feels even more, well, feely.....
And I agree with Inferno Demon Dash, I feel so sorry for poor Cadence. It must hurt when you never age and everyone around you dies.
I buried a parent, but I can only imagine how much worse it must be to bury a sibling. You have my sympathy.
God, this is exactly how I would feel if either of my brothers died. This is a beautiful story, and I hope the best for you.
2103187 ah'm sorry for ya loss ah bet 'e was the best and ah losted my nana to beast cancer three years ago
This was beautiful and it made me cry. Kind of funny since the story is called teardrops.
I really liked this story. It was pretty sad, and I felt for Twilight. I'll cry when my brother passes away, too.
Anyway, what I liked in particular was how both Shining Armor and Twilight got their turns to narrate. By choosing to write it this way, it does take away some of the raw emotion, simply because we know Shining was able to hear Twilight even if she couldn't. However, I enjoyed that. Your grammar overall was really good, though there are parts that need improvement. One mistake I noticed several times was this:
When a character is being addressed by their name/nickname in dialogue or narration, it always requires a comma. That's because when you're actually saying it, you pause. You may not notice it, but it definitely happens. So, those two examples would like like this:
However, if a character's not being addressed, then the comma isn't needed. Let me give you an example.
Besides that, there were some basic errors, some awkwardly phrased sentences, and a few other things I noticed. Overall, I enjoyed the story and you should be proud. I'm sorry about your brother. You can have a thumb-up from me.
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By my time of reading this, there are no thumbs-down. Changed their mind? Got rid of their account, maybe?
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Raven: Nicely done....
Dr. X: A moment of silence for Edward and Shining Armour....
I am so sorry for you loss