You know, it feels like you're focusing slightly more on Rarity's character than anypony else. I fully respect that, but I just don't think that everypony is getting their fair share of their perspectives. You know what I mean? I know if you include ALL of their perspectives it would be boring at the least, but it just seems that way to me... Also, this comment is obviously meant for what one should've read from the start until now.
I think I'll be asking too much but here it goes (also, way too late but I don't care): If I interpret your ways of showing the variety of perspectives between the mane six correctly, you seem to focus on Rarity's colors more than the others (As said before). With this being said, do you think you can give them like "parts" or something? As in, one pony interacts around more in a specific scene, and then it continues with another scene and so on and so forth.
It's a really good story so far and it feels like that this is a good place to stop the story (obviously you didn't... Thanks!). So I thought the ending was pretty nice, and I didn't expect Twilight to put in such a way, as showed in the story above, as I expected. So that was a little bonus.
9/10 - To show the fact of every mane six character in one chapter (or part or whatever you want to call it)? It truly needs some time to think about. That is, if you want to be precise with the details. I can't even get one mane sixs' perspective purely correct! Although there may be more in this story that I want to cover, I can't get the details as correct in a way that I want to tell it, so I'll just leave it at that!
I can just imagine Celestia reading that letter. "Did she? No, she couldn't have. But this.. No no, it has to be innocent. But these specific verbs and adjectives... What did you do, Twilight?"
I personally wouldn't mind a few chapters without clop if it would add depth to the story.
2026630 you... you like plot with your clop, too?
I love plot and clop
You some times put Pinkie PIe. I saw it twice, but it wasn't a problem, I was too busy drooling to care.
Invite Luna and Celestia over!
Yum.
You know, it feels like you're focusing slightly more on Rarity's character than anypony else. I fully respect that, but I just don't think that everypony is getting their fair share of their perspectives. You know what I mean? I know if you include ALL of their perspectives it would be boring at the least, but it just seems that way to me... Also, this comment is obviously meant for what one should've read from the start until now.
I think I'll be asking too much but here it goes (also, way too late but I don't care): If I interpret your ways of showing the variety of perspectives between the mane six correctly, you seem to focus on Rarity's colors more than the others (As said before). With this being said, do you think you can give them like "parts" or something? As in, one pony interacts around more in a specific scene, and then it continues with another scene and so on and so forth.
It's a really good story so far and it feels like that this is a good place to stop the story (obviously you didn't... Thanks!). So I thought the ending was pretty nice, and I didn't expect Twilight to put in such a way, as showed in the story above, as I expected. So that was a little bonus.
9/10 - To show the fact of every mane six character in one chapter (or part or whatever you want to call it)? It truly needs some time to think about. That is, if you want to be precise with the details. I can't even get one mane sixs' perspective purely correct! Although there may be more in this story that I want to cover, I can't get the details as correct in a way that I want to tell it, so I'll just leave it at that!
Not bad!
spike always seem to be at canterlot in clopfics where the mane 6 have a orgy together
I can just imagine Celestia reading that letter. "Did she? No, she couldn't have. But this.. No no, it has to be innocent. But these specific verbs and adjectives... What did you do, Twilight?"
3292565 Psst come here I'll whisper the answer to you........HE'S A FUCKING CHILD!!!!!!