Star Shooter has always had a secret. One that if she told anypony, would ruin her life. But, one day when she is called upon for a special job, everything goes wrong. Now she has no choice but to take the young filly and leave behind nearly everything she has known. But things get worse when she and the filly are caught. And by the worst pony possible. Can Star Shooter and the filly hide from her friends? Can she protect the filly from everypony? But, can they also escape their captor before they are brought to Canterlot?
Chapters (6)
Good story, but breaks between speakers makes it easier to read. Less wall of text syndrome.
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Thanks for the tip, I'll try to keep that in mind.
Ugh need more spacing!
This chapter came out longer than expected.
I hope every one likes it! 
Every time someone speaks, it is a new paragraph. Also, I am very confused. Slow down and take the time to describe what is going on. What does Star Shooter and her friends look like? What is this continnet? don't be afraid to describe things. Here is an example.
He was shot.
This is a basic line that tells you what happened. it can be so much better. Lets change it up.
Red flowers burst on his chest.
This is better. it is called imagery. this line can be improved so much more. This line gives the where and gives you an image on what happened.
Crimson blooms burst violently open on his chest, ruby tendrils of life pulsing out to color the world as he crumbled to the ground.
This lineperfectly describes as well as gives action of the scene. We readers can't read your mind. take the time to explain, and remember to start a new paragraph each time someone talks.
The only thing I see that need corrections is the speaking and description of well, all kinds of discription.Besides that, good story my sister.
I don't like much idea of Cutiemarks for changelings but that turn of action is enough good to ignore it xD
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I didn't plan that, it just popped into my head for a way to tell them apart from regular Changelings
I'm now thinking I shouldn't even include that. Their different abilities and not hearing the Queen's voice would probably be enough without that. 
You wrote images5.fanpop.com/image/photos/30600000/Queen-Chrysalis-Wallpaper-my-little-pony-friendship-is-magic-30609434-2560-1600.png
like she was EVIL!
Upvote, but PLEASE consider this.
1: Changelings feed on emotions.
2: Humans eat meat.
3: Ponies eat grass
4: "And as Queen of the Changelings, it is up to me to find food for my subjects." -Queen Chrysalis
Sooo...
-Ponies kill their food
-Humans kill their food
-Changelings don't kill their food, and in fact need it alive.
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Think of it this way;
1) Chrysalis gets rid of Shimmerflame/Glimmerwater/Both/All 4 and takes over their kingdom AS them.
2) Changelings get food from the ponies because all the ponies show love to one another, and if a Changeling is lucky, them
I hope that makes at least a bit of sense. But Star(Shooter), Stark, and Hope aren't normal Changelings, thus they have no need to feed off emotion. They accuatly feed off physical food (just like the ponies do) so they don't need a Hive to survive.
If something is still unclear, please tell me and I'll try to explain it better.(Or atleast until it makes sense.) Hope I helped!
2164463 Oh, OK. But I personally think that if Celestia and Chrysalis were each other, Celestia would launch the changeling invasion. They both care about their people to the point of obsession.
No two characters should EVER speak in the same paragraph. If someone needs to speak, but someone else has already spoken in that paragraph, you MUST start a new one first, even if it means having paragraphs that have only one sentence. This is a rule. You've been told this several times, yet you keep on making that same mistake. Why do you not listen?!
As for the plot... well, I can't keep track of what's going on because of that mistake you keep making.