EDIT: I have created a group for anyone who would like to make similar fics.
Tiny Pony
This is based off the semi-popular Warhammer 40k fanfiction version called TinyHammer
What happens when you have teeny tiny ponies living in your bedroom?
How will they take being the size of your thumb?
How will you deal with the Changelings, Minotaurs, Griffons, Buffalos, and Dragons that came along for the ride?
How will Pinkie react to human sized cupcakes?
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Chapters (10)
It's a nitpick of mine, but you don't really need the equal signs as a line break. you can use the built in horizontal break embedded in fimfiction code. Just type "[h r]" without the space.
I don't know anything about Warhammer, so I can't comment on that. I'm also surprised you got this by moderation; they don't allow stories that are below 1,000 words, normally.
It's an okay start to a story. Human and ponies are just kind of thrust together in the first chapter. You see that a lot in fimfiction stories, so I'm not all too worried about that. The only real problem i see is that the narrative kind of jumps around a little. Sentences can be a little abrupt or only there to bridge two other thoughts. This could use a little smoothing out between scenes and pieces of dialog.
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Yeah I'm already working on a rewrite, and I think it's because I gave you a direct link...
I'm adding on a lot more dialogue and hope to spruce up the first encounter scenario.
Oh gawd so much *sqeeeeeee!!!* alright I've calmed down...
Hm...
Go on.
Ha ha ha! So cute
! Also, could you maybe make the chapters a little longer.
Are they gonna grow,
that would be interesting.
Continue.
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*Peeks outside of the Flame Bunker*
I'm still alive? WOOHOO!
Thanks for the positive reviews, I appreciate them a lot.
As for you question sugarush, I don't plan on them growing to "normal" size. As stated in the description, I basically planning on turning this guys house into mini-equestria. Otherwise I'm going to try and not give anything else away.
Very well. You have my attention. Chapters could stand to be longer, but overall interesting.
hmmmm Celestia as the minture god... so many evil things come to mind........ but enough of that keep on writing!
I DEMAND THIS BE A FULL BLOWN, "Human has a miniature Equestria in his room." THINGY!!!
I don't see how any of this could go wrong.
I love it.
Oh my god! This is just too cute!
2686895 Ha! Mini Equestria, I'd like to see how that turns out!
(In a positive way of course!)
Hey, tiny chapters for the tiny story about tiny ponies. Fitting all around.
Well, in terms of getting rid of the ponies if it comes down to it, guess guns are no longer effective. Time to invest in a flamethrower.
Also, I like how they can't speak the same language. More oppurtunity for antics.
2692269 My rough draft involved Pinkie needing to go and our hero thinks his guest wanted some water.
What if you dropped them in water and they grew to full size, kinda like those capsule foam thingies?
Okay, so a few things. Firstly and most importantly, 800 words is not a chapter, 800 words is a footnote. Short chapters are fine, but not that short.
Secondly, that bright yellow and cyan text is nearly unreadable. I would recommend either making it much darker or dropping the color-coding altogether.
2693476 How do I do that?
Oh sweet Celestia don't give me a heart attack like that again please! He nearly ate pinkie pie! *He took a deep breath to calm himself*
But enough with the dramatics.
Please write more.
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How do you write longer chapters, or how do you make darker colors?
2694355 I didn't know if I would be accused of vore or not. Thankfully, so far I haven't.
2694423 Darker color.
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No idea. Doesn't sound like something that would be too hard to look up, though.
There is too much awesome in this. One: the guy doesn't seem to be a brony, or is a much better less crazy brony.(wish I coud read more stories like that)
Two: Language barrier. Always a win.
Three: gagging on pinkie?
it was funny though. perfect too.
four: there be a ninja in dem flowers.
BTW error here:
2693207 To add to the idea, they would shrink over time. just like those foam things.
2710741 I just feel that the people who like MLP but are not Spanish Inquisition fanatics about it should be represented.
Edit: Fixed
2711685 Good on you for that sir.
EDIT: Erm, or is it ma'am? maverick sounds like a guy's name but... you never know...
Nice little fic. Quite short, I would like to read more.
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2723039 LOL
WOW, half a month of nothing, and when another chapter finally comes up it's only 500 frakin words big... I was NOT expecting a reason for the ponies to arrive that was actually pretty good to explain their appearances. Very nice.
Damn shame all it does is make me more intrested in something that is pretty damn obviously going to be abandoned.
I'm loving the idea it's going around, and the small things (one of them being literal, what with the Equestrians sizes) being put into the fic helps it find it's own unique grounds. Like the language barrier, and newfound lack of magic crippling all of them, I'm lovin that!
But the lack of content is a pretty big alert to the lack of motivation/determination/whateverthefuck keeps writers writing. If this is the rate stuffs gonna come...
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I'm throwing this offensive crap around because I'm finding it really does indeed suck, I was liking this!
I agree with the guy below me. But I know your acking inspiration right now...
The plot on how they ended up there seems quite dark
amazing keep it up
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I hope I don't abandon it. As for updates... this isn't even on my top 20 of priority right now. If I feel I absolutely cannot continue this, I will let it be known. But any ENCOURAGEMENT would go a long way.
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Will be sporadic, but I will keep it up piece by glorious piece.
story thoughts
new poe idea
human walks in steps on him, oops)
great set up for both a reason they left and for a funny
(o no Twiddlywink fallowed us,
needs a villain, Twiddlywink was good but totally outmatched if he fallows them, see above, seeing how this is a random slice of life comedy perhaps a brony hater room mate or parent that are hero has to hide the pony's from
also if Twiddlywink dose end up past, the pony will still be stuck here unless they could be recharged
would need to find a mana well, or something
sorry about going on and on just my thought
to sum up, awesome, totally looking forward to more
*sees 500 word*
*Brings out the Sledge hammer of motivation*
now hold still....
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NOT TODAY! CELESTIA BODY SLAM!
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2783995 I apologize for that confusing mess of a comment that was brought into existance by the great need to sleep, and confusion of not being able to determine whether the day had been crap or excellent.
That's going to be the last time I comment during the midnight hours.
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Tiddlywinks the dark a mad tyrant forgotten god of darkness that used to rule with hate and destruction. He was cast away to a forgotten place lost in the Everfree but his prison weakened and he gathered enough power from the land around him of forgotten souls that hated being where they were and freed himself. He seeks to gain revenge against Celestia and gain the heart of a fair Princess Luna that he used to know as Nightmare Moon before the whole banishment deal. Snips and tuck where ya can if ya want just an idea for a tyrant.