Finally! The return of the most insane writer with even a much more insane story in his bag! I crackled an evil laugh when I saw this coming up! Continue good sir!

I see you're working your magic again.
It's powerful and vibrant to those knowing the story's first part. And very depressing; especially to me, who let Twilight send the letter and never dared to even look at the alternatives for fear of losing everything gained at such cost.
Happy ending? Alas, it was not to be, and I salute you for that. Right choice.

One thing irritates me; the would-be-assassin.
The descent from deceptively normal to raving lunatic is too fast and invisible to go over smoothly in my mind.
Also, you slipped into present tense with the very last sentence of the chapter. Looks quite odd.

Other than that, damn good work. I like the pace, the detailwork is just right, it gives the overall picture and is still intriguing.
If there's anything you need, proofreading, reviewing or exchanging ideas, spreading the word, anything at all, don't hesitate to shoot me a message.

- your fan, Arkhangelsk

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Excellent! I was looking for pre-readers for this story!
I will keep you in mind. And also, thank you for pointing out the flaws.
I'll get fixing now.

One thing, thought: It is on purpose that the transition between normal and completely insane is very sudden. It will be explained later.

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"It is on purpose that the transition between normal and completely insane is very sudden. It will be explained later."

Then it would be a good move to mention or lampshade it in a way to make it a weird reality inside the story rather than something one could mistake for a careless hole in narration.
Just a short line of Twilight being surprised would do the trick.

As for pre-reader, I'm certainly willing to do my best if you decide to trust me with that job.
Not sure how much good I'd actually do, seeing as I'm not native in English and quite new to storytelling, though.

Either way, I look forward to the next chapter. :)

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You do realize that im not native english myself... or not?
Im from germany and didnt speak a word english until i was taught it at school.

Ill add that line. Thanks for the idea.
See? You are already helping me out!

Well, lookie here.

I will write something greater about this, but currently I am on an iPhone.

I shall wait until I have access to a PC. In th time space between now and then I must say that this sequel is very highly anticipated, I am in suspense until the next chapter.

But for now... Goodnight you insane bastard.

To be honest I can't decide if I want to keep reading this story, it seems almost too dark and sad for me, plus I can't remember anything that happened so that sucks.
But, I shall read on.

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Perhaps you should re-read the conclusion Ringing Bells to remember where we left of.
Thats the ending the sequel is based on.

And, yes guys, I know the story is only based on one ending and you would refer to this as canonizing it. But honestly, I would much rather prefer if you see all the endings as true and canon. After all, it was YOUR choice which decided how the story ended! Its just that with Ringing Bells, the story continues.

Just think though of how awesome it would be if you had another MI2 for EACH of the endings (would LOVE to see Twilight trying to protect the remains of Equestria until it falls)

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Let me guess.
Dark exposure or extreme emotional torment drove whoever we are talking about insane. If that's the case, then to date I would have officially predicted two plot points (I remember commenting what I thought would happen, leading to you sending me a PM that was all like Holla Dolla Bill Yall, den it showed up in a later chapter) therefore ur gettin kinda predictable brah.
If not then slap my hands and spit in my face.
Note: I have no idea who we are talking about... I still haven't read the first chapter.

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Hang on... hang on, hang on, hang on, hang on...
You were the first one to comment on this story,
You insulted it and praised it in the same freaking line,
You even offered me a... ow geeze
And you havent even read it?!

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Well I read the original and thought it was pretty good (I started when ur were at about the CH14 mark... I think ) So I think I'm gonna enjoy this ride too
Also what the fuck do you expect? Its me. MindFcuk in Aisles. The epitome of controlled insanity.
Well mostly controlled.
PS Was I right with my assumption?

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This story isn't very dark... neither sad (Sad is debatable because SPIKE IS DEAD! )

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Let me guess.



Your father is called Discord.

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Why would you even think that?
Do I look like some kind of OC queer to you?
Edit: Just so you should know. My fathers name is Richard.
Double edit: If you haven't already simulated an 'oh snap' then let me get that for you... "Oh snap!"

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Got a problem with OCs?
Got a problem with Obsidian Shards?

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Just... click this.

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No problem, I was not serious anyway.
You forget that I'm the sick mind who came up with these stories
If there is one thing i truly enjoy, its disturbing things.
And weirdos are generally my favorite people, since im a freak myself.

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You? a sick mind? don't make me Rofl.

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Once more into the breech! This is guna be good. Poor applejack so worthless now

It's here! It is freakin here! I'm just gonna die of happiness now...

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Wow was this really looked for so much?

Then I read the first chapter, remembered that alot of ponies died in the first story and all I could think was... "Bummer"

2391149 Yes! I don't know about everyone else, but I love a great story more than sweets, and that says something. I love your stories, so naturaly, happy!

It has arrived!!
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This is going to be AWESOME!!

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Its about time you show up here!
I was getting worried

Damm. Forgot MI: The creation had ended so I was still waiting for that to end. Glad I decided to look for this again.

Ohhh I'm late.

But anyway it's back and I like it.

The Master approves

As if I held any power.

Hmm. No grave for Spike?

could've sworn i had already read this sequel but i guess that was just the 1ststory and creation. well, i'll get to this later after some sleep.

Why did you have to do it on this ending