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    Rarity struggles to overcome an art block. It takes a very special pony to show Rarity who she is.
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  • E Twice as Bright

    Celestia likes her routine. Tax reforms, grants, laws and construction projects are all a princess needs to be content. It's just her luck that for Pinkie Pie, "content" is not nearly enough.
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  • T Within and Without

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  • 64w, 4d

    First, I want to thank everyone who's contributed to, or read, Taken for Granite. The comments and the mails have been far in excess of what I expected from an ApplePie ship-fic not featured on EqD.

    I still wonder if I did the right thing in detailing in the authors' notes how hard writing that particular story was for me. Usually, I strive to minimize my own personality because I feel the stories are more important than the individuals who write them. That's the theory, at least, but I think I'm doing a worse job of it with each fic I write. Either way, talking about the process that led to a story is relevant and perhaps interesting to some individuals. Complaining about it being "hard" isn't. At best, it's begging for sympathy. At worst, it changes how people see the story, and that notion fills me with dread.

    Regardless, the story has been well enough received, and now that it's all over, I can say I'm glad to have written it. We're moving on.

    Those who read these blog posts will know I've had quite a few different stories and ideas I've been toying with. I'm really liking the idea of writing another grand adventure along the lines of Lost and Found and Within and Without. I have a temporarily shelved RariLuna political intrigue/adventure/peril/shipping fic, I have a FlutterDash longer-than-long romance that may become adventure-romance, and I have a number of other less-interesting stories that I want to get around to. Which is it then?

    None of the above. I'm going on hiatus for an undetermined period of time.

    A while back, I promised myself I would never give people estimates, and that I would never set deadlines for myself. They are sure-fire ways to kill my joy for writing, and this promise helped me recapture much of my love for putting pen to paper—or hoof to keyboard, as it were.

    I broke another barrier when I managed to let dead fics lie and kill my need to stick with a story until it was done. Being able to not pick back up the FlutterDashFire story I had, being able to shelve RariLuna for this recent ApplePie, those were all victories.

    It's not enough, though.

    My relationship with writing has been problematic for a very long time, and it's not getting better. Some people use ponyfic as therapy, as a means to cope, and as relaxation. AbsoluteAnonymous was very vocal about exactly this. Unless I misunderstood or misremember this, writing was a temporary hobby to her, a process of healing that led to her coming out on top. Me, I think I've written myself sick.

    Until I can figure this out, I'll be out. I'm sorry for not responding to comments in the foreseeable future, and I'm just as sorry that if I return, my OCD attitude to comments will result in a batch of week, month or year-old comments being replied to.

    Naturally, my promise not to set deadlines or give promises might work both ways. I may be writing again next week. I may be writing tomorrow and start posting chapters of some long adventure-fic, but I find it unlikely.

    I'm not saying goodbye forever, but right now, I need the peace that comes with a break.

    36 comments · 1,576 views
  • 68w, 1d
    Incoming Story: Taken for Granite

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  • 71w, 2d
    The Long Summer

    First, I apologize for the long silence. I don't expect people will really have noticed, because that implies people sit on edge waiting for something to happen, for me to do something. Instead, I am the one who gets stressed by inactivity. It goes without saying and without putting it into system that two months' hiatus is worth a lot of stress by that token.

    I'm also sorry for neglecting comments and notes. I'm working on that, and will try to catch up. I've done a terrible job at reading all the things I've said I would, too, for which I am also supremely sorry, but I don't know what more to add to that. I've no real excuse, and will get right back on it as soon as I can.

    On my front of things, I've aborted work on one story, started work on another, and actually sort of almost completed it. It is currently mid-edit and pending cover art, and there is a chance it will be published in a week or two, or a month--thereabouts. Failing that, if I can't beat it into shape, I'll scrap it and start something else.

    I hope you all have had, and continue to have a very pleasant summer. If you're interested in listening to the Muffin Loving Productions guys host me as a guest on a podcast, you can do so here! It was fun, and proves that listening to your own voice later will never be cool.

    Also, I had a birthday somewhere along the line, which led to multiple awesome artpieces being made. Snowtrail and Kits for best pony.

    Back to edits and work.


    13 comments · 391 views
  • 85w, 2d
    Next Story, Ideas and Between Fic, W&W/O eBook

    That's one more wrapped up! Thank you, everypony who took time to read Twice as Bright. It's been an absolute blast to write, but I definitively need to re-think and re-consolidate my writing/publishing strategy.

    By which I mean "Cloudy is a dummy who should've never broken his self-made promise not to publish during the writing process after Lost and Found nearly permanently killed his desire to write." The whole re-thinking line is a lot catchier, so we're rolling with that.

    Anyway! Point is, Twice as Bright is done! I am celebrating by staring at excellent, relevant artwork--holy butts that is beautiful and I almost embedded it but I don't know if that's a breach of etiquette--and by planning more stories.

    Breaks are for, um. Well. People who take breaks. I mean, I've had a two day break, I suppose, but you're not here to read about me drinking sugar, eating sugar, and eating things not made of sugar but still covered in or frosted with sugar. You're probably here for:

    More Ponies

    Whenever I finish a story, I like to cleanse my palate. That's a fancy word for scraping your tongue clean. When I first started writing ponyfic, I watched the entire show at least once between each fic. I find this very useful to re-center myself on canon. It probably sounds pretentious or ritualistic, but it's as simple as me valuing starting from scratch very highly.

    Lately, I haven't done this. In part because there are a lot more episodes, and not-writing hurts. In part because, without going into detail, there are elements of season 3 that I did not enjoy as much as I had hoped. Still, this time, I'm going to begin by re-watching the show. The last thing I want is to get mired in my own headcanon.

    It's been surprisingly long since last I watched season 1, and I absolutely cannot wait.

    Second? I plan to read. I plan to read fanfiction I promised I'd read, because I genuinely want to read more fanfic. I plan to read more fanfiction to make a dent in my Read Later list. I plan to read at least one non-pony thing--probably Daetrin's non-pony book, The Demon of Cliffside. I've been wanting to get at that thing for ages now. Before, during and after all this, I'm going to discuss all the ideas I have with my friends.

    And then?

    We write

    If I sound very, um, pompous here, it's probably for a reason. I'm the kind of pony who, in writing, makes faces. If I'm writing Pinkie making a grimace, I'm making the very same grimace. If Rarity looks arch and scoffs at something, I'm staring at my computer screen like its very presence offends me--you get the idea. That I'm writing a long piece on this is because it reflects what I want to write. I'm leaning towards something longer. Something grandiose.

    That's not to say I'm decided yet, and I've said time and again I hate making promises even to myself. I'm just thinking out loud, and all I know is this:

    *The next fic will feature two or more ponies.

    *At least one of these two or more ponies will think that one of the other two ponies is really, really cute/swell/nice.

    What I suspect is this:

    *It probably won't have the majority of its action in Ponyville or Canterlot.

    *It will probably involve perceived or very real peril.

    In short, I'm thinking another adventure along the lines of Within and Without or Lost and Found. When I say "along the lines of," I really only mean "long adventure," and even that's not set in stone, but I will say I'm looking towards W&W/O with fond memories.

    Add to list of things to do before writing: Re-read own adventure fics.

    I have no details, and I have tons of other ideas that may make it into fic. A lot of authors seem to do these compilation posts of ideas for fics and such, and I don't know how interesting it is to most, but if I can mention in no particular order:

    RariLuna slightly-dark/adventure/political/mystery.

    Those who read my earlier blogs will remember this one. It is one of three ideas I had in my mind a while back. Also, when I say "slightly dark," you have to keep in mind how incredibly resistant I am to darkfic and such. What I call "dark" when I write probably doesn't match others' definitions.

    FlutterDash long ship.

    Lost and Found really made me want to explore FlutterDash on a deeper level. This is it. The problem is that I'm not sure I can write another non-adventure ship just yet. It'd be fairly intricate and emotional, but I've done a lot of those lately.

    Other ships/stories I want to do:

    TwiJack - I have an angle that could work. It's Ponyville-centric, so the problem is the same as with FlutterDash, but I really want to do this.

    RariLight - I have some very specific unicorn-centric ideas that could be good. May even be a friendship fic. (Cloudy writing non-ship? Ha!)

    FlutterDash - I have no less than three other ideas for this ship of varying length, though the goal is to use as much as possible for the fic above.

    PinkieShy - Of all the "pure" ships I want to write, this one is very high on the list. Again, same issue as above with it being a pure ship, but if I could make it part of an adventure, I'd be very happy.

    AppleDash - Problematic in that the ship's been done to death. That in and by itself isn't the issue, but that I don't know if I'm stepping on others' hooves is. I have two possible angles, one being rather different from the usual ship formula.

    ApplePie/RariPie - I have semi-similar ideas for these, but I've written so much heavy emotion Pinkie Pie that this will probably go on the back-burner. Also, it's actually the closest to sad that I'll ever want to go. I could write an ApplePie that I'm sure would be a decent read, yet I'd have no desire to read it myself. That is an odd position to be in.

    RariDash - Painful sweetness here, but it needs a framework I haven't worked with yet. One that is neither adventure nor simple long-ship. This will be a challenge, and I'm not convinced yet.

    That's basically what's in my head at the moment. The two ideas I had in the last ficwriting deadspace are still very strong, those being RariLuna and FlutterDash. The PinkieShy idea has basically taken the spot of CellyPie now that that's done. Still, I am almost positive that in reading, watching and talking in the coming weeks, I'll have far more ideas to choose from, and hopefully I'll land on one that convinces me fully from the get-go.

    If you've read this far, well, damn. I thought about cramming some images in here, but I have no idea what those would be. Sprucing it up with images just to make more people read it is silly anyway. I figure people will read if they're interested, and if they are--if you are--I'm flattered.

    In Other News

    There's a reason for that Within and Without tag other than "hey I may write something similar." If you've problems with the downloadable formats available through FiMFiction, there's an awesome guy by name of JeffersonPeters who took it upon himself to provide a superior alternative. Here is a downloadable ePub variant of W&W/O for all your reading pleasure! I don't have a fancy reading thingermabob, but I'm told it's quite good.

    It's worth noting that he used alternative cover art in the .epub file, and the artist hasn't yet responded to the request for permission to use it, but there should be a link with attribution and everything in there. The real problem, though, is that the artist's dA has been taken down since, and redirects. Still working on that.

    That's it! Thank you for your time. If you hate me for abusing your eyes for italics, well, at least I didn't use comic sans. I'm gonna get around to replying to comments on TaB as soon as I can, but know that I've read them all, and that I'm floored (and thankful!) for all the comments!

    53 comments · 765 views
  • 88w, 1d
    March Apologies, Twice as Bright

    I am just leaving a quick note here to say that I'm sorry for not responding to PM's, comments or mails for the moment. I've tried to keep on top of things, but it's just not working out. If you're just tuning in, or if you've recently left a comment or sent me a PM, I am very happy to make your acquaintance, please don't doubt that -- I can only apologize for the delayed response.

    I'm having a bad time of it, and I need to readjust. There's no drama, and everything that's failing is related to my lacking ability to deal with things that are beyond my control.

    Fic updates will go along as planned because quite frankly, I don't know how to stop. Twice as Bright will likely continue at one chapter per week unless something changes.

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  • ...

At long last, the wedding bells ring for Applejack and Fluttershy. Everypony does their utmost to try to make it the best wedding ever, but as the pair discovers, it quickly becomes a question of getting married despite, rather than because of this.

This story is a standalone, but is set after the events of Where Earth Meets Sky and Where Your Heart Is.

First Published
24th Dec 2012
Last Modified
6th Jan 2013
#1 · 100w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Commence read.

She ate the oven mitts...well, I could see that. Wonder what Dash's nickname for Pinkie is?

Twilight keeps on staring. Rarity on hyper drive.


#2 · 100w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Yay! New Story! (Clears schedule)

#3 · 100w, 4d ago · 3 · · Chapter 2 ·

This story is amazing. Usually wedding fic are one of two things: either short, sweet, and forgettable, or romantic comedies. This is neither. It really captures AJ and Shy's worries well. The problem is believable and doesn't feel forced at all. Even though it's primarily an AJxShy fic, the other four ponies are given their own parts and motivations.

I'm really glad to have helped with this. I'm super happy to have been able to do the cover art too. This entire series has been amazing and wonderful and I'm so glad you wrote them.

#4 · 100w, 4d ago · 1 · · Chapter 2 ·

Good start. Such a tender relationship. Looking forward to more!

“Sugar? That’s a ‘yes’. A ‘yes’, a ‘you bet I do’, and a ‘I’d like nothing more in the whole wide world of Equestria, thank you very much’.”

This line made my insides all toasty.

#5 · 100w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

As far as Christmas presents go, Cloudyfic isn't a bad stocking stuffer. Will say more when I get done with this.

#6 · 100w, 4d ago · 1 · · Chapter 2 ·

Gotta like them CLOUDY WEDDINGS

#7 · 100w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Ever since lost and found I've wanted to read a Appleshy fic from you.  Awesome!! :pinkiehappy:

#8 · 100w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Finally a Futtershy x Applejack fic. Y is it I never see these? Is there a group 4 this?

#9 · 100w, 4d ago · 1 · · Chapter 2 ·


Um yes. There is a folder in the shipping group.

Also, this is a sequel to another appleshy fic

#10 · 100w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


Can you tell me the group name or send me a link to it?

#11 · 100w, 4d ago · 1 · · Chapter 2 ·


The group name is "shipping". The subfolder is Applejack x Fluttershy. Here.

#12 · 100w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


Oh hehe :twilightblush: ty much appreciated.

#13 · 100w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I can't stop squealing in anticipation  :rainbowkiss:

#14 · 100w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

*chapter 1 read finished; Commence Squee*! :yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay:

#15 · 100w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Oh my god, Cloudy MAKE IT STOP THE ADORABLE AAAHHHHHH :raritycry: it hurts of cute :heart:

:yay::ajsmug: cannot wait for more.  best christmas EVER

Happy Holidays all!

#16 · 100w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


That's me just now.  Cloudy, your stuff is always fun to read, and this is utterly adorable.

#17 · 100w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

so great, so great. I'm afraid I can't really put it into better words then that

#18 · 100w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

never seen a apple x shy ship before..... .I will give it a try :twilightsmile:

#19 · 100w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Oh hey, unmitigated chaos with a wedding. That's...painfully familiar to me. My every day.

Still, loving this.

#20 · 100w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·



#21 · 100w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Just got around to finishing Chapter 2 as a Christmas special, and still loving this fic, Cloudy.  I like that you have ponies who have real worries that aren't world-shattering, but are just as important to them as if they were.

#22 · 100w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Eh. I'm still not feelin' the Appleshy.

But since when have I let something like that stop me from enjoying a good story? :pinkiehappy:

#23 · 100w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

So far, so good.  I really liked how both Fluttershy and AJ were planning to propose to each other, and especially how Flutters was the one who popped the question.  That was pretty adorable.  Other than that, Rarity seems a bit overbearing about the wedding, no surprise there.  Although I could see how this could lead to Fluttershy and AJ feeling like their wedding is being hijacked.  It's going to be interesting seeing where that goes with everypony trying to plan their own version.  Overall, I'm liking this, just like I usually like your fics, and I'm eagerly awaiting the next few chapters.  I hope you had a very merry Christmas and and happy Hearth's Warming as well!

#24 · 100w, 11h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1849159 I swear I didn't forget the little guy! And hey, if the mitts are baked properly, I'm sure they're a delicacy.

>>1849173 I hope it's to your tastes, and that it's nonshit!

>>1849227 And I am damn glad to have had your help. Thank you, and thank you for your probably-disproportionate-but-still-kind words!

>>1849394 I'm very glad, and I pray it keeps up in your eyes; I'll post up the next bits soon enough, just need to decide on how to do this update malarky, hah.

>>1849593 Hee hee, stocking stuffer.

>>1849762 It's this, from now on. Cloudy only writes weddins'.

>>1849971 Oh! I've actually written an AppleShy fic that's sort of the prequel to this. In case you missed it in the desc, Where Earth Meets Sky is 100% AppleShy goodness. S'far too rare, this ship. Appreciate the faith though, thank you!

>>1850961 I'm glad - I think, hah. Hope you enjoy; shouldn't be too much longer before I post more, and should keep a rapid schedule.

>>1851092 Thank you, and happy holidays indeed!

>>1851288 >>1854147 Your face is pink! You should get that looked at, oh dear. But seriously though, I never really thought about it writing this, but it's true. Perspective and all that, I guess, that's important. Kinda makes me wanna experiment more with non-dangerous drama, perhaps even nonshipping, hum.

>>1852066 Much appreciated, though! I hope the rest of the fic is to your liking.

>>1853163 Hope you enjoy it! There's an AppleShy "prequel" to this (as mentioned in the description) - if you want to go back for completeness' sake, or if you decide you want more AppleShy in your life. I'm a sucker for it.

>>1853347 Are you a wedding planner in Equestria? I don't think "normal" weddings are possible there.

>>1853550 You, sir or madam, have excellent taste in shipping.

>>1855108 Curious t'hear what you think, then! Story's very AppleShy, even for an AppleShy story, so I'm wondering if it'll be to your tastes at all!

>>1855844 I shall of course spoil exactly nothing, but thank you for reading so far, and I hope to not disappoint!

#25 · 100w, 11h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1866593 Alright then. Will have to see when  he appears then and see what he thinks of Twilight/Rarity possibility.

#26 · 100w, 8h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Take your time!  Don't feel like you have to rush anything, sorry if I sounded impatient..

#27 · 100w, 7h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1866615 Oh, alike so; I think I misunderstood your concern. All I can say as to that is that Spike isn't listed as a major character in this fic, so you probably shouldn't expect much from that angle. Sorry!

>>1867343 Oh, no, no, not at all! I'm just annoyed with myself for not posting up more, sooner, really, hah.

#29 · 100w, 7h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1866593 No, but it is at a magical kingdom! A wondrous place called Florida. Home of face eaters and meth labs!

#30 · 99w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Nice,  proposing at the same time:rainbowlaugh:. Still nice that Fluttershy got the punch in first:yay:.

#31 · 99w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Can we say go say hi to Mr. and Mrs. Twilight’s Mom too while we’re there?
Oh, Pinkie :ajbemused:

#32 · 99w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

excellent as ever. My only complaint is that there isn't more to read : (

#33 · 99w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Dafuq Applejack, whats got your panties in a bunch?

#34 · 99w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>1880077 Perhaps because the affair is turning out to be way bigger and way more complex than she actually planned, or even wanted.

Anyway, one of the best things I like about your style of writing, Cloudy, is just the character interaction, and there's a heck of a lot of it here. Half way through, I forced myself to break immersion, and just sat back and appreciated just how well characterized they are. You've done things spot on so far, I had no trouble believing that this was the natural way these characters would interact in these, or any other situations that may come up. I feel it's one of your biggest strengths as a writer, and boy do you play to it.

As for the ships themselves, well, I wont go into the whole "Everypony's a Lesbian" thing, even if it's a little hard to swallow, but the ships themselves are solid. PinkieDash obviously working well, it took me a little to acclimate myself to FlutterJack, or AppleShy, or whatever you crazy kids call these non-TwiDash ships (=P), I see obvious proof that it can work or I wouldn't be reading. As for Rarilight, and feel free to disregard this part because we don't know for certain if this ship will sail in this story yet, but I'm sort of torn on it. Torn by the fact that really I can't see how it could work, apart from the whole "we're both unicorns pinkiepieshrug.png" thing. Another factor that's probably playing into this feeling is my biases. One of my favorites and my least favorites (as far as Mane 6 goes), getting together, I can only see the negatives of such a pairing occurring. It's nothing on your writing, I must stress, more to do with me.

Another thing when you're taking Mane 6 ships with Rarity into account is she's pretty much canonically straight, so a bit of extra care needs to be taken when trying to craft a Rarity ship (it's even how I feel about Rarijack, the Rarity ship I actively like), into this sort of thing. Sure one could argue that Equestria isn't as hung up about the real world on the whole "gay", "straight", and "bi" labels and whatnot, but Equestria is a different world to our own, with some parallels, and we are but strangers to its customs. You need to show readers about these sorts of rules as part of the world building, or he/she's going to just fill in the blanks with similar scenarios to our own world, and when this stuff comes up, the reader's going to be blown out of immersion by questioning this against their own assumptions, instead of remembering back to that one or two sentences and going "oh yeah, it works like this". This also counts towards the whole "Everypony is a Lesbian" thing.

That said, I'm gonna mention that I'm not a writer (yet), but this is how I feel on this sort of subject, so yeah, take it or leave it. I'll leave it at there, just thought I'd throw in my two bits about the situation. I'm immensely enjoying it so far, and I cannot wait to see how it pans out, there are actually a few secrets here that I'm really interested in seeing what they are. Keep up the good work, friend. =)

#35 · 99w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Heh, I'm liking this budding rivalry that Twi's got going on.

#36 · 99w, 4d ago · 1 · · Chapter 3 ·

>>1870075 Applejack obviously agrees with you there! (As do I!)

>>1877294 It's a bit of a throwback to, er, hm. WYHI, I think? Hah.

>>1878615 Soon, promise!

>>1880394 I obviously don't want to spoil anything, so I'll leave off on commenting on RariLight in this fic here, but I will say that I basically, hm. It's not that I disagree, but I feel less compelled to observe the "Oh, btw, Equestria is tolerant/progressive" thing. To me, it takes something away from it in the same way the whole "It's okay that you're gay" -- "Well, uh, I'm so glad you're giving me permission. Jerk." convo goes, you know? Iirc, there are a few subtle pokes at the fact that it's F/F. I don't ignore it, but perhaps it's a flaw of having written a full dozen shipfics now that actually mentioning this breaks immersion for me to a greater degree than not mentioning it?

That all said? That you're "not a writer" (who the heck says I am?) doesn't invalidate anything, in case you were trying to insinuate that, and you do have a point. I can comment more on this when we're done here, but in short? I decided to just let my mane out and let things be a little silly this time. Rather go overboard and grin all the way to the altar instead of taking myself or this fic too seriously. That's not a defense; it's not a valid counterargument to "I think the rampant F/F shipping is silly". It's an explanation, but not a counterargument. I'm curious to see how you feel about it in the end - and thank you for reading so far!

>>1880692 It's funny actually, because it was a little less pronounced until I did the final pre-publish edit pass yesterday and touched it up. Great fun!

#37 · 99w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Buzzing with excitement! I can't wait for this to continue!

#38 · 99w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·


FWIW, I'm never going to bother with "ew, lesbians." To me, Equestria just doesn't work like that. I probably will write about OH MY GOSH PEGASUS X EARTH PONE some day. Which will basically _be_ a coming out fic, in the same way the CMC are about puberty.

As for Rarity being "straight." I think that's more about her being a romantic. There's no indication that this is her sexual preference. Just that she wants a prince to have her story-book relationship. Course, all that does imply that m/f is the norm. Still, I think it's more MLP to pulling the IRL sting and substitue something that is just as (un)important. Besides, Twilight's brother is a prince. This obviously makes her a princess. THE DREAM LIVES ON!

#39 · 99w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Oh gooood... Cloooouuudy... Cloudy why. I just finished my Applejack/Fluttershy vows like, two weeks ago, and now you gotta go upstage me before I even upload them! I can't... Well, at least someone who writes far and away better than I do treats Appleshy with such respect.

I guess I just have to read your heartwarming story and hang up my writing towel AGAIN.

#40 · 99w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>1889205 Well I'm not complaining about it (in fact, it would be quite hypocritical of me to do so), but I'll say again that the reader is essentially an alien in a strange and wonderful world, we don't know all of the nuances and customs of this new world, and since it's similar enough to our own world, the reader is gonna fill in the blanks with what we know.

I dont imagine Equestria's at all like "Ew, lesbians." Though with that said, I feel steps should be taken to ensure the reader understands that there is essentially no conflict about who ponies choose to love. I don't at all expect it to read like "oh gosh but Im not into mares/stallions *blush* *blush* *blush*", and if I may use an example from your fic, Twilight's List to make my point clear, Twilight just decides out of the blue that she's gonna go for her friends (a gross underanalysis of what happens in the fic, but bear with me), which yes is a good way of saying "hey, this stuff doesn't matter" it still left me feeling like I'd been blindsided, but if you would have taken a sentence to basically say something like: Twilight reflected on the sillier times when Equestria was hung up on gender issues of whom one chooses to love, before Celestia put her hoof down (but, you know, in an actual way that a writer would put it); I feel it would put the readers thoughts to rest on the matter, instead of oh, Twilight's a lesbian and she's assuming all of her friends are as well.

I hope you at least see where I'm coming from, the way it was in that fic read into both viewpoints of "It's either okay", or "It's not okay and Twilight's naively made assumptions on her friends". It certainly doesn't detriment to the fic that it isn't in there, but again you're telling a story to someone, and more questions you can answer inside the story, the more a reader will enjoy it without that nagging "what if" question at the back of their mind.

>>1880811 I'm certainly not making complaints about Rampant F/F shipping (again, hypocritical :P), but I feel that there should be a sort of explanation to why "everypony's a lesbian" (and as always, I'm using that phrase tongue in cheek), it's all good and well to say it's not a societal problem in the comments, but until a reader has actually confirmed that, he'll always be wondering. :)

#41 · 99w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

A wild RariLight appeared!

On another note, it's interesting to see how much it's bothering Applejack to have her wedding usurped.  I would have expected it to get to Fluttershy before AJ, honestly.  I'm loving what I see so far, though, so keep it up.  Remember, there are no brakes on the shipping train.

#42 · 99w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Apple... Soup?

I mean yeah okay great story everything's cute except Applejack bugs me blah blah blah, but really I'm just hung up on...

Apple.... Soup?

#43 · 99w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>1888328 Editing fast's I can, captain! Now that we're up on EqD, I can edit and publish faster without fearing giving the pre-readers an unnecessarily silly-long burden. Next chapter'll be up tonight!

>>1889268 See, you say that, but all I can see is that you wrote bloody AppleShy! You got my a christmas/new years/whatever present, yay! Thank you!

No seriously. Self-deprecating leads to me biting peoples' ears. That's how it works. I have no idea why you'd move your towels anywhere on account of me indulging myself by finishing this old story pseudoseries, but hey; I can not wait to read it and/or hear what you think of this one! World needs more o'this.

>>1889357 Naw jeez, didn't mean to sound like I was accusing you of railing against F/F in general, sorry. I know my first fics made a bigger deal out of observing exactly this, and I've moved away from it since. On the absolutely simplest of levels, it's because I like imagining Equestria a utopia where it's a complete non-issue hardly even worthy of comment.

What I could-and-may do at some point is make more fun out of it. Not as in ribbing, and I'm not sure it'd satisfy your desires here, but I like the idea of going all "I now pronounce you mare and-- well, mare." and that sort of stuff.

>>1890608 How I wish I could comment without spoiling. But hey, dang straight. No brakes. More coal/run faster, earth pony pull-team!

>>1890867 Haha, okay, okay, you have to realize, I was sitting there writing, and I'd already used some new Apple family names, and I was looking for another, right? I spent so damn long trying to find one, moving via Apple types (most of the unused ones are place names, thus not usable.) and rare dishes (Apple Fricassé, anypony?) - in the end, I just said screw it.

Thus, Apple Soup was born.

I hope the following chapters give you cause to sympathize with Applejack. If you hit the end and she still annoys you, I'll consider that a partial failure on my part, but thank you for reading this far!

#44 · 99w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>1891739 Ah but again you as the author implicitly know that, but unless otherwise stated, the reader does not, though I wont go further, lest we get cyclical. I've said my piece, and I'm fine with leaving it at that. :)

And I didn't at all read it as an accusation, merely a passing comment. It's your story, and what you decide to do with it is up to you, it was a non issue to begin with, and it remains so now, and I'm happy we could get a bit of a discussion out of it, and it certainly doesn't detriment the fic in any way. So keep writing, you brilliant person, you. :)

#45 · 99w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·


New chapter for my birthday, yay! La de da, wait what's this - GASP!


Did you retcon her name to be Apple Sauce? Or does Fluttershy misspeak? Twice? I've been thinking up recipes for apple soup all night!

The crack about Applejack was mostly pro forma. The character annoys me, rather than anything she's doing in this particular story. So I do sympathize, I'm just less empathetic than I would be towards others.

But hey, new Cloudy Skies story, yay! And this time it's not exactly what I was writing, only done better and actually completed!

#46 · 99w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

>>1892994 Wait. She's not- wait. Crap. If there's an inconsistency, my brain totally didn't at all notice that soup and sauce were both used, augh! My bad, checking and fixing right now! I did not change anything. It's an original derp, yay!

That said? Congratulations if it's your birthday and all! I hope your day is absolutely marveltastic! Er, and have I accidentally written something you intended to write? Curious now!

#47 · 99w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·


I released chapter one of my first (and so far only) fic like, two days before Lost and Found came out. They share, how shall I put this, "several thematic elements". Since my story was heavily inspired by Within and Without in the first place, I spent a couple of days going "damnit, and it's good, too!"

FimFiction says five days. Close enough.

Thanks for the well-wishings! I must resist a mighty urge to use my birthday authority to make people (who aren't me) try my first attempt at apple soup...

#48 · 99w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

"Balloons dotted the ceiling, forever locked straining against the unyielding stone"

It's the little touches I really enjoy.

#49 · 99w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

they should have eloped.

#50 · 99w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

Another great chapter.  I thought that Fluttershy and Applejack cuddling and talking before bed was particularly adorable, and I think it's starting to make a bit more sense to me why it's been AJ that's been so bothered with all of the spectacle rather than Fluttershy.  Time will tell to see if I'm thinking on the right track.  I guess one of the only unfortunate things about this chapter was that since you were too busy focusing on the two established pairings, there wasn't any time to see more of that cute awkward RariLight, and that's not really much of a complaint at all!  Also, I'm curious, roughly how far into the story are we in terms of chapters/length?

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