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Something is definitively up around here. Applejack and Fluttershy have been spending a lot of time together without the rest of the gang. Well, Rainbow Dash is on to them! In fact, she is sure this is the no-good friend-stealing Applejack's doing, and she will not stand for this - whatever this is.
Also, Rainbow Dash wears a corn hat.
I read this from a link on EQD. It's one of the most thoughtful, compelling, well-written shipfics I've read, and turned me into a committed AppleShy fan. My only complaint is that Rainbow Dash's motivations for her behavior are somewhat... mysterious, even though RD's characterization overall is quite effective.
Thanks for the upload, Cloudy Skies!
Good to see this here! This story is a perfect example demonstrating your talent as a writer, and my love of your work. Appleshy is a ship that I never believed could work, but somehow after reading this, I took everything I'd ever said against the ship back. The characters were so magically in character, and the style was just... relaxing. This was very sweet, and I loved every minute of it.
Keep up the amazing work, Cloudy!
I know Applejack's feeling all too well here. Sometimes it's just too easy to go a little overboard- Sometimes it seems like the best words to hurt someone just flow so easily. Very good work- both in writing the chapter and in proving to me that I'm not the only one that occasionally loses his ability to love and tolerate.
and then I finished it. I liked this, alot. You really are quite good, my friend. Also, a shipfic with no tragedy- My heart is relieved. I've felt kind of melancholy, having read so many sad shipfics on this blasted (yet beloved) site. So, good sir. Enjoy this thumbs up, muffin, and brohoof.
I am delighted this has been put up here.
I think it's the best-written pony fiction I've ever read. The narration is incredibly rich, but it treads the line between gorgeous language and purple prose perfectly. The pacing is beautifully spaced, giving us plenty of time to enjoy what is a very well-written story.
For what this story is, it's absolutely perfect. Really the best-written shipping story I've read in the fandom; it completely succeeds in its aims and reads like very mature and confident writing. I learn a lot about it for my own writing, but then I have to try hard not to copy things straight out of it into my own stories!
For anyone unsure; set aside some time and give this a read - it is well, well worth it. I never liked Appleshy myself, but this story is so good that honestly doesn't matter. WELL DONE, Cloudy Skies, you have all of my praise. 
I don't ship ponies at all -- and yet I found this story utterly fantastic. Cloudy Skies has a way of getting ponies together so convincingly, his descriptions and scene work are lovingly rendered, and you even forget at times that someone actually sat down to write this once. Such is the smoothness of his narration. Unfairly shafted on EqD 'cause haters'll hate, this was well worth the time I spent reading through.
Thank you for all your comments! It may be impractical to reply to them all one by one, but I do read'em!
>>306933 Getting to poke at this felt very, very liberating for me too; sometimes, things get a little too formulaic.
>>322418 You are far too kind, but thank you all the same! That said, the "confidence" certainly wasn't there when I was writing this, hah. I'm still kind of a wreck.
>>346109 Can I ask why you think this is the case? I mean, my personal approach is that while the mane6 are the bearers of their elements, they're not infallible paragons at all times (Rarity is hardly a perfect icon of generosity at all times). Dash is at least partially aware of her own hypocrisy, but sometimes, knowing better doesn't mean doing better. Still, thank you for your thoughts!
It's lovely to watch Fluttershy and Applejack take the first tentative steps into a romantic relationship, and the friendship between Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash is beautifully depicted and explored. Also, Rainbow Dash wears a corn hat. There's that, too. Hee.
This is the story that converted me to The Way of AppleShy.
This is...wow.
I don't tend to read Applejack stories but this? I'm really glad I read this. I think you captured the characters perfectly - your Fluttershy is both hysterical and adorable, your AJ feels like she should and your Rainbow Dash...
I love that Dash's parts of this story are essentially her being insecure, because that meshes perfectly with what I see as a large part of her drive and motivation. You did it perfectly, I think. And her destroying the inside of her house was awesome.
So yeah. Well done!
Wow that was beatiful. I could praise you for many things - believable characters, charming mood or rich vocabular.. But I want to specifically point out two things, that I absolutely loved about your fic.
First is pacing. It was perfect. It never rushed a scene that could be prolonged, nor it drag on something, that should be already finished. Big grats on that.
Second is AJ and Shy "second date". It was probably the best date idea I've read on this site. Most authors just go for pony versions of human's date (which is fine, but rarely stunning) , you thought of something that could be described only as a pony date. It was very charming.
Thanks for the awesome read, and well done 
>>386608 Very glad to hear it, thank you! It seems that the Rainbow Dash I write is very hit and miss with readers; I've always liked focusing on those insecurities because that often makes for a better story, but that doesn't mean for a second that I think Dash is "weak".
>>422100 Thank you very much for reading! I'm always happy with I (randomly) hit on pacing; I worried that the event chain was too tight (what with there just being two dates, really).
The first draft actually had AJ and 'Shy heading to the dinner Flutters mentioned; I had planned everything around a dinner at a restaurant. AJ just felt very, very silly, suddenly, and decided to go for a run, and it didn't feel like I had much choice in the matter. In the end, I'm glad I went along with it - and twice as glad that some (like you) felt it worked!
D'awww! It just had to work out! When I first started watching MLP, I always wondered to myself who would go with who? I never thought of AJ and Fluttershy, but to my surprise it works very well. Great story too! Expertly written and beautiful, with hits of comedy. Thanks <YAY
your advanced english makes it kinda hard to read, for someone like me, but your choice of line brakeing compensate for it as much as it possibly can
i'm definitely going to continue reading this
Clopenhagen, Københaven? really? 
made me laugh when i read it
you wouldn't happen to be from scandinavia?
>>507287 Well, right back at you, thank you for reading, and for taking the time to leave me a comment!
>>508835 I'm sorry, I am aware that using fancier anguage than is strictly necessary is a weakness, not a strength, but sometimes I get caught up in fancy phrasing, blech. I hate hearing that it's a issue for someone, I really do :|
It's twice as embarrassing when, sometimes, I'm caught misusing fancy or archaic terms. Filly with a fancy new ribbon and no dress sense, that's me.
And indeed, I may or may not be from Scandineighv- err, Scandinavia! Not Denmark, mind, but very few Norwegian towns let themselves ponify.
just reread through this one and enjoyed it just as much always love the cute little moments between applejack and fluttershy, but I have to ask, how do you always keep these ponies so well in character? It must've been kinda difficult with this one because the only time applejack and fluttershy really had a connecting moment was in dragonshy. I've been wanting to write my own fics for some time, but I want them to be accurate with the show. If you have the time, please help
>>512758 Oh wow, um, er, thanks! I'm not rightly sure how to respond to that, actually - I've watched the eps quite a bit (like any rabid pony fan), and I'm of course terribly glad to hear it if they worked, if it came across as in-character!
But okay, I'm gonna try to answer this as honestly as I can, hm. The process that leads to each fic is different, I don't have a real method - except watching eps - but for Where Earth Meets Sky, it really did start with Dragonshy. I watched the ep and thought it really sweet how AJ is the one who never gives up on Fluttershy. No fuss, no comment on it, she just keeps trucking and helping Flutters.
After that, I started looking for more hints of this, and interpreting what little interaction they have in the show (they're not a very close pair), and thinking about how they would work were they closer. I took a moment off to write down notes on similarities and differences, and how these play with eachother (ending up discarding most of it) - discovering that I had quite a few interesting angles I could use.
Applejack was the hardest part. When I started writing this (and to this day, really) she was the least characterized of the mane6. I had to extrapolate some character traits, I had to add to her. She's not an OC, I can't just add habits and desires willy-nilly; I had to find stuff that fit. That stuff gets me nervous.
In the end, I ended up with the angle shown here; them bonding over similar loves for the simpler things, parttaking in more feral aspects of life, really, and applying their own life philosophies to a budding romance spurred by few little acts of, well, kindness. I'm not so delusional as to try to claim this is canon by any stretch of the word, nor is this "it could happen"; it's forever a "what if" situation - but if it comes across as a believable theoretical situation where the characters feel like themselves, then that's the best I can ever hope for!
Sorry. This ended up terribly verbose. Thank you for reading!
>>513118 I'm not exactly sure my work methods are perfect, but I am honored by your words - thank you! I wish you luck when and if you decide to pick up the pen (or, well, right-click -> create new document, I guess, in this day and age).
The best piece of advice, ever, is of course "write". There's a reason everypony keeps saying it; it's too common (and too easy) to sit and plan, theoreticize and think about what wonderful stuff you're gonna write one day, but the biggest and hardest step is actually starting. Once you've written "once upon a time" - figuratively speaking - you're halfway there. If you're also prepared to accept critique whilst turning the other cheek to pointless hatred, well, then you've already won, really.
Grammar, show vs. tell, formatting - all that junk? That's easy compared to actually getting started and having the proper mindset. Ponychan, the guides at EqD etc; there are plenty of resources that're useful for that.
>>510177 it seems i derped off at some point 
seeing that not matter when i go i keep forgetting to add my own life issues into my comments, to make them imply what i intended to imply... long story short, i have reading and writeing issues of a kind, i get fussy-minded/tired from reading and writeing, even minor things have an impact of a kind, that i can feel, but there are things i just, out of heart, feel a need to do...
even if what you say is true, that "fancier anguage then necessary is a weakness", i must say that when you write a frist chapter, with content that makes someone with read/write issues, like me, determined to read your story till the end of it, even if it takes me forever! now that's something
so let your "fancier anguage then necessary" stay as it is, i say
>>519186 Aw jeez, now I feel bad about having misinterpreted you, sorry! All the same, I shall take this as a compliment, then. Truly, thank you. The point still stands - as you say - in that clarity is goal #1, but on the same hoof, I have to admit I am a huge fan of writers who play around with words, too (Miéville springs to mind).
Not sure what direction my own writing is developing in, but I am going to try to control my impulse to use fancy words just because I can - if there is another alternative that gets it across better!
>>519978 well, we all derp a bit now and then don't we? but i do thing this was kind of my fault, since i was the one who forgot to add information, that could had avoided you misinterpreting me
personally i don't know much about writers in genneral, it's only resently i picked up reading as free time hobby and for the time being, i only read fanfictions of fim
well, reguardless of what direction your writing will develop, i will, once i'm done going through my stack of "i-think-i-wanna-read-this-stoy/fiction" list, go through what ohter storys you have uploaded here, to see if something else will catch my eye
Wow... I've always been an AppleDash shipper, but this was amazingly well done! I'm not gonna change my shipping preferences, but in your own little universe these two are obviously happy and that is the most awesome thing ever! Thumbs and favs and all that for you, also have a Scootacute just because. 
^_^
Hard to comment effectively on a story that's both this long and this uniformly well done, but what I will say is that it was highly enjoyable, very detailed, and possibly the best portrayal of Neuroticshy I've ever seen, particularly in the first chapter. Rainbow Dash's farm invasion was also handled fantastically; for me, the fact that she eventually started running out of insults based on AJ's name was the nicest touch. Overall, an amazing story, and one that I'm thoroughly glad I read.
I honestly have no idea what it is with you and your writing, and why I can see these ships emerging so clearly from your stories -- but they do. You have some really great gems in your sentences, too:
"She had never before quite figured out where in the body “bravery” resided, but she was pretty sure hers was now a lump of ice dissolving in her belly."
"The four ponies had spent the entire morning and a portion of the afternoon trying to devise alternatives to Twilight’s aqueduct. “Asking Celestia really nicely” and “finding like, a lot of buckets” had been the best suggestions so far."
" “Probably” was simply not good enough for her to leave it alone. “Probably” belonged with “maybe” and “possibly”. They were vague, indecisive and dishonest words, shiftier than a sapling in a storm."
There you have it: Fluttershy, Rainbow Dash, and Applejack. Their characters come through so clearly and so concisely in strands like these that it's little wonder I'm comfortable buying into this budding romance. You just have a very... stately... way of approaching these characters, for lack of a better term.
Reading these chapters again keeps me inspired. Not gonna lie.
>>576619 Whupsidaisy, late with the comments here, hi! Yeah, I know how that all works with conflicting OTP's and all that stuff, but hey, people who can read something that's Not Their Ship(tm)? You're my favorite! Thank you for reading, and for the kind comment!
>>584838 Thank you very much! I wouldn't disagree if some felt that Flutters was overdone, even if this was written when she hadn't had her stronger episodes in S2, but all the ponies vary so much I felt there was precedent for what you so aptly call NeuroticShy. Also, it was amazingly fun to write!
Very glad you decided to leave a comment, thank you!
>>595143 Oh hi! It's like quoting out of context, except, instead of trying to portray me in a bad light, you're making me come off as if I've a clue what I'm doing, I like it!
No seriously, thank you for the very kind words, for the glorious little highlight reel, and for being yourself.
It's also the first time I've heard the word "stately" used, referring to me or anything of mine. I like it.
>>629365 Thank you! 
>>643553 I did receive some comments on this before, too, so I won't try to shove the issue under the carpet. At the same time, receiving a short comment like that (Frizzy's) without any further explanation is just frustrating, to me. As a writer, it's imprecise feedback that I can't work with, and that's sad, because feedback is so precious. It's a tease, basically.
Anyway, my take on it is this: Just because Dash the Element of Loyalty doesn't mean she doesn't have a full emotional spectrum. I cite this example wrt. characterization so often, but I'll happily do it again: consider Pinkie Pie in Griffon the Brush Off. She goes through a bunch of "normal" emotions. Doubt, sadness, frustration - Element of Laughter, yes. Constantly giggling, always happy? No. The mane6 are varied and nuanced personalities.
Sorry. I don't mean to come off as defensive - fact is, I of course agree with you, because you said it yourself: she's failing to deal with her jealousy, she's not being "disloyal" in any respect. I am not getting up on my soapbox saying my characterization is perfect, here. If people feel a character is "OOC", then something is likely off, and in fan fiction, this is the greatest crime. I just want to know why.
Thank you for reading, tho!
Hit or miss? Definitely hit.
I love shipping stories. Starting with a declaration of romance does make this pretty unique (or pretty close to it). Spot-on analysis. There isn't a lot of talk about what happens between chasing after the guy/girl and the proposal in pop culture. Not much discussion of what makes a relationship worth committing to. There's a whole unspoken bit of relationships right there, and that kind of stuff is why well-written shipping can be good writing, not just fluff.
If you're looking for stuff to improve on, you might want to use mid-length and super-long length sentences more often. It might not be worth trying to write differently, but could possibly be something to keep in mind while editing.
While I was on my little vacation I decided that I needed to get back into reading fanfiction, and thanks to Kits poking me about it in the past I decided I wanted to read your stuff. I wasn't disappointed!
I wish I had been logged in and commented on each story as I finished it, so I've forgotten a lot of the very nice stuff I wanted to say, but my highest compliment is really for this story:
Applejack is my least favorite of the mane six, and Fluttershy is either fifth or fourth favorite. I didn't really go into this one with very high expectations except to just enjoy good writing. Instead you elevated the source material and made me like AJ and Fluttershy more than I think I ever have and made me more than happy that I had decided to give it a try despite the two main characters. I now like AJ and Fluttershy more than I did before I read your story, so you must have done SOMETHING right!
>>647924 Whupdihey! Thank you for your comment! Having written ship since, and writing even now, I find myself liking this variant more and more, actually. So many fics to write, but I know I love the idea of having (yet another) PinkieDash fic where we get some insight into what could have to happen between them before they were left a stable, working relationship.
Regarding style, I am very thankful for the feedback, and it's actually quite interesting; while sentence length wasn't the primary emphasis of this, I was consciously trying to write in a certain style for each PoV here. In addition, my regular non-fanfic style includes extremely labyrinthine sentences - to the point of detriment. I did not expect to have somepony "requesting" longer sentences, but I'm eager to re-read my own work now and see where this applies!
>>667366 Oh wow. Um, no, just.. wow. Thank you! You hear a lot of nice (and some not-so-nice) things when you write, it seems, and I fear I overuse one response, but I'm heartfelt when I say that's among the nicest compliments I've ever gotten. Twice as much because I adore these two ponies so much, it's not even funny; it makes me very, very happy to think somepony out there likes them a tiny bit more!
Well seems you can just do about anything huh, read one of your other stories and this one and yet I am hungry for more none the less. Keep up the good work and thank you for sharing your wonderful fanfictions with everypony
Oh and Hhhhhhnnggghh -holds chest- AJ and Flutthershy's moment together at the end.......so...cute and.....-tries to not have a cuteness overdose-
Pinkie Pie had gotten up and was standing almost unnaturally still, staring at her with unblinking eyes. “What?” Rainbow Dash asked. “You’re kinda freaking me out here.”
“Oh nothing, you just looked like you were having a monologue. I was waiting for you to finish!” Pinkie chirped.
Dammit, Pinkie! Fourth wall breakage FTW! I actually almost fell out of my chair, was NOT expecting that one. Well done, chap! God, I love your writing style!Bravo!
I am really impressed with how you characterised Fluttershy in this story. All too often people write her as just kind of nebulously afraid for the sake of plot but your introduction really worked it into a kind of cohesive whole. Honestly it reminded me a lot of the symptoms of depression.
I enjoyed the way you had both AJ and Fluttershy thinking about the security of home. To me showing that two characters share ideas like that is infinitely more effective than stating that they care about each other outright.
>>824796 Oh damn, that's high praise. Thank you very much!
>>828821 Haha, I'm glad, thank you - I'm always nervous when I use those, because if you break the fourth wall too hard, you ruin everything.
Everything.
>>834619 Thank you for the kind words! Writing Fluttershy, particularly her earlier segments, was a special kind of treat. I can't describe how fun, sad, exciting and frustrating that was, and hearing it resonated is awesome! Similar but not identical to depression sounds about right; I tried to just take nervousness and all its associated traits to their extreme, and aimed for making it a little sad, very adorable, and most of all, to make people want to give her a hug.
>To me showing that two characters share ideas like that is infinitely more effective than stating that they care about each other outright.
Give me hug now. Thank you!
>>836830 >>836887 Corn hats are no joking matter. But yeah, thanks - fact is, this story was meant to have a great span in actual time passed, but it just didn't play out that way because the pacing of the writing took it otherwise. If that worked, I'm very glad to hear it, because I still worry about that.
>>845171 Thank you very much! I really, really meant it when I wrote the thank-you section of the authors' notes, so it's certainly not just my effort, but I'm very glad to hear it if you liked it!
The characterizations of Applejack and Fluttershy were top notch as always Cloudy!
Leave it to you to dig into character physces and figure out how to put them into text with fearsome precision.
I like how your easing into the relationship,you know, building it up from nothing. The fact that Applejack doesn't automatically love Fluttershy from the start already makes this story better than many ship fics on this site. Not that it's bad, but its more interesting to the reader and more challenging tp the writer to ease into the relationship and build it from the ground up.
I wish there was more for me to say, but I can't exactly figure out what it is right now. 
Mirage 1: Hey look! There in the distance! Allied forces approaching! We're saved!
Mirage 3: Who's coming? Can I see the binoculars for a second?
Mirage 1: Let's see...we've got Ensign Silver and his Wardog Squadron, with Sticker Squadron supporting them. Good... we needed fighter jets.
Mirage 2: What else?
Mirage 1: I also see 3 battalions of ground pony units moving up as well. Let's see if I can name them all...Dragon Buster Battalion, Steel Gunner Battalion...and...the Commander advancing with the Skilla Unit?!
Mirage 2: What the hay is the 'Skilla' Unit?
Mirage 1: A Republican Guard Detachment. Our Special Forces.
Mirage 3: Republican Guards? I don't like this. If they've been deployed here, then that means shit's about to go down...
Silver: Alright, I see the Mirage Unit. They've lost 86% of their strike force and they only have three tanks left. We need to relieve them from the front lines and get them some rest and time to replace their casualties.
Commander (Me): Your cleared to engage any enemy units while you cover Mirage's retreat.
Silver: Roger...
Silver:.......Sometimes I doubt the reason behind this war. A lot of ponies are getting killed and for what? A grab for power? We even invaded a peaceful country!! This is insanity...but as a soldier we're not told to think. I have to follow orders. That's what we're for right?
....To fight, die and follow orders.
And to have an obligation to carry those out.
Even if it means following a madpony...
Silver out!
>>889588 Keep at it, champ!
>>897988 Aw, thank you very much! Very glad you like, and grateful for the read. I think the whole idea of a romance not starting with mutual interest and attraction was something that I got from another fic. It's hardly a novel idea, nor is it something you can really steal, but it bothers me that I can't remember which fic it was. Something FlutterDash I think, that ended in Dash being all "let's give it a try". It was so heartwarming and cute, and I really wanted to see it continue rather than end there. Few romance fics go through the motions to arrive at reciprocation.
Really sweet chapter. You kept the excellent characterizations and I like your writing style for the most part.
I really like how you explain what's going on behind each scene, not just explaining the scene itself but develing into the meaning behind each action and giving us readers a chance to see more than just what sitting in front of us. Not just the scene, but also you showed us the emotions behind the scene, off-screen actions that lead to the scene and the interpretation of the meaning itself. You give us so much more than just the action. You give us the full package.
The only side-effect that this excellent writing style has it that segments tend to get a little wordy, but you do it the right way. I've seen writers get WAY too wordy over a scene that doesn't need it (Me... ) but you do it only when nessesary and you cut down the other 'lesser' cutscenes with a simpler format which makes it easier to read.
I am learning this lesson with my own writing...VERY SLOWLY!!!!
Good work!
Mirage 1: Ha ha! This is awesome! Nothing like watching Cloudy Skies' Special Forces and the Skilla Unit kicking the crap outta each other!
Mirage 2: Guess they don't call them 'Elite' for nothing. Look at those moves! Damn! They are fast!
Mirage 3: Hey guys, check it out. Looks like the Dragon Buster Battalion broke through Chapter 2. Look at those crazy ponies go! Glad that isn't me anymore.
Mirage 1: How's your foreleg?
Mirage 3: Doc says it was just a light fracture and some shrapnel from an enemy tank shell. I should be back on my hooves in a couple of weeks. I can't wait to get this cast off!
Mirage 1: That's good.
Mirage 3: ...Yeah.
Silver: C'mon Wardog! Let's rip this enemy air battalion to pieces! Follow me!
Me: Don't hurt yourself.
Silver: Aw come on man! I'm your OC! People's OCs NEVER die! Everypony knows that!
Me: I wouldn't be so sure about that...
Silver out!
>>346285 I read this in one sitting, and it was worth every second I spent reading it. I think I now have a new favorite shipping fic, because this story is an absolute masterpiece. (On a side note, the entire time that I was reading this, my room smelled like freshly cooked waffles. I don't know why, but I don't care to find out.) All in all, cute, well written, and beautiful, absolutely fantastic fic.
Let me say first that Fluttershy irks me. A lot. Most of the time (*raises flame-shield*). I have a hard time dealing with that kind of personality but I can deal with it.
And sure, maybe this story was full of that, particularly in the beginning. And it was putting me off so hard, but I decided to stick with it because, well... After so much drama, something good had to happen (because there was no Sad or Dark tag, of course), right?
And it did. And it was a really damn cute story in the end. And a very pretty ending.
So, bottom-line. This was so bucking cute. Good job. =3
>>909808 Well, thank you very much, truly! WEMS is easily the slowest and most deliberate thing I've written, and I expected more people to be put off by the "wordiness" you poke at, honestly. Instead, the few points of critique I get are related to the events and such, so I consider that a success in that I didn't go too far, apparently. As I keep saying, writing this was an immense treat at times, because the starts of chapters 1 and 2 were so heavy on my favorite drug.
>>933732 Nippon, not a city, the country! I've seen it used tons o' other places, and I'm sure I snuck it into W&W/O too, hah.
>>916549 Oh wow. I need to slap a label regarding possible interference with the olfactory sense on this fic, now? Seriously though, thank you very much! I'm very glad you liked!
>>919345 Thanks! I like that you liked it, and I'm glad you read it, so yay!
>>921726 Huh, that's a new one! No, seriously though, I can understand it, to some degree, even if I don't agree. I'll freely admit I sympathize and empathize with Fluttershy and those like her, personally; it may not be everypony's thing, but if you found something in the story for you because you "stuck with it", as you say, I'm very glad!
And yes - or no, rather - I avoid the Sad/Dark tags as a matter of course when I read, and when I write, as you say, there's a reason those tags never grace my story lineup. No hatred for sadfics, just preference, and I firmly believe in happy endings. Heck, I probably go as sad/dark as some fics carrying those tags sometimes, I just endeavour to always make up for it in the end, and never break something I can't fix.
Thanks for reading!
A great story for a not-as-well-known genre!
As expected you handled this story very skillfully and you still have yet to disappoint me. This is differently a change from the generic ship-fics that are out there (many aren't even written well) and the interesting take you brought to the table on this one won me over. You write in a ship that is not really widely used but you still make it work to a point where "if any Appleshy people exist, then this story is their training manual" and I applaud you for that.
Great work on this!
Silver: Enemy city captured! "Bonds of Earth and Sky" is an air base and our next target, follow me Skilla Unit!
Me: Dragon Busters and Steel Gunners, prepare to charge "Where Your Heart Is" as a finale! We're ending this!
Mirage 1: Sir, our homeland is under attack!
Me: What!?
Mirage: Apparently, Cloudy Skies' allies are tired of us razing his country and have retaliated by invading Karalia! Our capital city is being shelled as we speak!
Me: Dammit, we're gonna have to finish this quick!
Silver out!
I can't know what you were aiming for, of course, but what you got was quite good. I often find shipping fics to be bland and repetitive, and when I enjoy them it's usually due to other story elements or humor value, but this is one of the rare ones where I really liked the shipping itself. I want to say it's a cute story, but I know that's not quite what I actually want to communicate; it is cute, and I like cute done properly, but it doesn't give me this feeling of complete contentness normally so there's something more that I can't quite put my finger on.
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