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  • E No Recipe For Perfection

    Rarity struggles to overcome an art block. It takes a very special pony to show Rarity who she is.
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  • E Twice as Bright

    Celestia likes her routine. Tax reforms, grants, laws and construction projects are all a princess needs to be content. It's just her luck that for Pinkie Pie, "content" is not nearly enough.
    52,160 words · 10,906 views  ·  1,274  ·  20
  • E Ode to Friendship

    Octavia feels trapped in the stage that is her world. Will a certain pink pony be able to help her?
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  • T Within and Without

    Luna takes the Elements of Harmony on a journey in more ways than one.
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  • E Building Bridges

    Action-and-confusion-filled fast-paced shipping, yay!
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  • T Taken for Granite

    Ask Applejack, and she'll tell you Pinkie Pie can be a few apples short of a bushel. They've always been good friends, but what could they possibly have in common? Turns out there is an answer to that question.
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  • E Where Earth Meets Sky

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  • 64w, 2d

    First, I want to thank everyone who's contributed to, or read, Taken for Granite. The comments and the mails have been far in excess of what I expected from an ApplePie ship-fic not featured on EqD.

    I still wonder if I did the right thing in detailing in the authors' notes how hard writing that particular story was for me. Usually, I strive to minimize my own personality because I feel the stories are more important than the individuals who write them. That's the theory, at least, but I think I'm doing a worse job of it with each fic I write. Either way, talking about the process that led to a story is relevant and perhaps interesting to some individuals. Complaining about it being "hard" isn't. At best, it's begging for sympathy. At worst, it changes how people see the story, and that notion fills me with dread.

    Regardless, the story has been well enough received, and now that it's all over, I can say I'm glad to have written it. We're moving on.

    Those who read these blog posts will know I've had quite a few different stories and ideas I've been toying with. I'm really liking the idea of writing another grand adventure along the lines of Lost and Found and Within and Without. I have a temporarily shelved RariLuna political intrigue/adventure/peril/shipping fic, I have a FlutterDash longer-than-long romance that may become adventure-romance, and I have a number of other less-interesting stories that I want to get around to. Which is it then?

    None of the above. I'm going on hiatus for an undetermined period of time.

    A while back, I promised myself I would never give people estimates, and that I would never set deadlines for myself. They are sure-fire ways to kill my joy for writing, and this promise helped me recapture much of my love for putting pen to paper—or hoof to keyboard, as it were.

    I broke another barrier when I managed to let dead fics lie and kill my need to stick with a story until it was done. Being able to not pick back up the FlutterDashFire story I had, being able to shelve RariLuna for this recent ApplePie, those were all victories.

    It's not enough, though.

    My relationship with writing has been problematic for a very long time, and it's not getting better. Some people use ponyfic as therapy, as a means to cope, and as relaxation. AbsoluteAnonymous was very vocal about exactly this. Unless I misunderstood or misremember this, writing was a temporary hobby to her, a process of healing that led to her coming out on top. Me, I think I've written myself sick.

    Until I can figure this out, I'll be out. I'm sorry for not responding to comments in the foreseeable future, and I'm just as sorry that if I return, my OCD attitude to comments will result in a batch of week, month or year-old comments being replied to.

    Naturally, my promise not to set deadlines or give promises might work both ways. I may be writing again next week. I may be writing tomorrow and start posting chapters of some long adventure-fic, but I find it unlikely.

    I'm not saying goodbye forever, but right now, I need the peace that comes with a break.

    36 comments · 1,572 views
  • 67w, 6d
    Incoming Story: Taken for Granite

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  • 71w, 3h
    The Long Summer

    First, I apologize for the long silence. I don't expect people will really have noticed, because that implies people sit on edge waiting for something to happen, for me to do something. Instead, I am the one who gets stressed by inactivity. It goes without saying and without putting it into system that two months' hiatus is worth a lot of stress by that token.

    I'm also sorry for neglecting comments and notes. I'm working on that, and will try to catch up. I've done a terrible job at reading all the things I've said I would, too, for which I am also supremely sorry, but I don't know what more to add to that. I've no real excuse, and will get right back on it as soon as I can.

    On my front of things, I've aborted work on one story, started work on another, and actually sort of almost completed it. It is currently mid-edit and pending cover art, and there is a chance it will be published in a week or two, or a month--thereabouts. Failing that, if I can't beat it into shape, I'll scrap it and start something else.

    I hope you all have had, and continue to have a very pleasant summer. If you're interested in listening to the Muffin Loving Productions guys host me as a guest on a podcast, you can do so here! It was fun, and proves that listening to your own voice later will never be cool.

    Also, I had a birthday somewhere along the line, which led to multiple awesome artpieces being made. Snowtrail and Kits for best pony.

    Back to edits and work.


    13 comments · 390 views
  • 85w, 2h
    Next Story, Ideas and Between Fic, W&W/O eBook

    That's one more wrapped up! Thank you, everypony who took time to read Twice as Bright. It's been an absolute blast to write, but I definitively need to re-think and re-consolidate my writing/publishing strategy.

    By which I mean "Cloudy is a dummy who should've never broken his self-made promise not to publish during the writing process after Lost and Found nearly permanently killed his desire to write." The whole re-thinking line is a lot catchier, so we're rolling with that.

    Anyway! Point is, Twice as Bright is done! I am celebrating by staring at excellent, relevant artwork--holy butts that is beautiful and I almost embedded it but I don't know if that's a breach of etiquette--and by planning more stories.

    Breaks are for, um. Well. People who take breaks. I mean, I've had a two day break, I suppose, but you're not here to read about me drinking sugar, eating sugar, and eating things not made of sugar but still covered in or frosted with sugar. You're probably here for:

    More Ponies

    Whenever I finish a story, I like to cleanse my palate. That's a fancy word for scraping your tongue clean. When I first started writing ponyfic, I watched the entire show at least once between each fic. I find this very useful to re-center myself on canon. It probably sounds pretentious or ritualistic, but it's as simple as me valuing starting from scratch very highly.

    Lately, I haven't done this. In part because there are a lot more episodes, and not-writing hurts. In part because, without going into detail, there are elements of season 3 that I did not enjoy as much as I had hoped. Still, this time, I'm going to begin by re-watching the show. The last thing I want is to get mired in my own headcanon.

    It's been surprisingly long since last I watched season 1, and I absolutely cannot wait.

    Second? I plan to read. I plan to read fanfiction I promised I'd read, because I genuinely want to read more fanfic. I plan to read more fanfiction to make a dent in my Read Later list. I plan to read at least one non-pony thing--probably Daetrin's non-pony book, The Demon of Cliffside. I've been wanting to get at that thing for ages now. Before, during and after all this, I'm going to discuss all the ideas I have with my friends.

    And then?

    We write

    If I sound very, um, pompous here, it's probably for a reason. I'm the kind of pony who, in writing, makes faces. If I'm writing Pinkie making a grimace, I'm making the very same grimace. If Rarity looks arch and scoffs at something, I'm staring at my computer screen like its very presence offends me--you get the idea. That I'm writing a long piece on this is because it reflects what I want to write. I'm leaning towards something longer. Something grandiose.

    That's not to say I'm decided yet, and I've said time and again I hate making promises even to myself. I'm just thinking out loud, and all I know is this:

    *The next fic will feature two or more ponies.

    *At least one of these two or more ponies will think that one of the other two ponies is really, really cute/swell/nice.

    What I suspect is this:

    *It probably won't have the majority of its action in Ponyville or Canterlot.

    *It will probably involve perceived or very real peril.

    In short, I'm thinking another adventure along the lines of Within and Without or Lost and Found. When I say "along the lines of," I really only mean "long adventure," and even that's not set in stone, but I will say I'm looking towards W&W/O with fond memories.

    Add to list of things to do before writing: Re-read own adventure fics.

    I have no details, and I have tons of other ideas that may make it into fic. A lot of authors seem to do these compilation posts of ideas for fics and such, and I don't know how interesting it is to most, but if I can mention in no particular order:

    RariLuna slightly-dark/adventure/political/mystery.

    Those who read my earlier blogs will remember this one. It is one of three ideas I had in my mind a while back. Also, when I say "slightly dark," you have to keep in mind how incredibly resistant I am to darkfic and such. What I call "dark" when I write probably doesn't match others' definitions.

    FlutterDash long ship.

    Lost and Found really made me want to explore FlutterDash on a deeper level. This is it. The problem is that I'm not sure I can write another non-adventure ship just yet. It'd be fairly intricate and emotional, but I've done a lot of those lately.

    Other ships/stories I want to do:

    TwiJack - I have an angle that could work. It's Ponyville-centric, so the problem is the same as with FlutterDash, but I really want to do this.

    RariLight - I have some very specific unicorn-centric ideas that could be good. May even be a friendship fic. (Cloudy writing non-ship? Ha!)

    FlutterDash - I have no less than three other ideas for this ship of varying length, though the goal is to use as much as possible for the fic above.

    PinkieShy - Of all the "pure" ships I want to write, this one is very high on the list. Again, same issue as above with it being a pure ship, but if I could make it part of an adventure, I'd be very happy.

    AppleDash - Problematic in that the ship's been done to death. That in and by itself isn't the issue, but that I don't know if I'm stepping on others' hooves is. I have two possible angles, one being rather different from the usual ship formula.

    ApplePie/RariPie - I have semi-similar ideas for these, but I've written so much heavy emotion Pinkie Pie that this will probably go on the back-burner. Also, it's actually the closest to sad that I'll ever want to go. I could write an ApplePie that I'm sure would be a decent read, yet I'd have no desire to read it myself. That is an odd position to be in.

    RariDash - Painful sweetness here, but it needs a framework I haven't worked with yet. One that is neither adventure nor simple long-ship. This will be a challenge, and I'm not convinced yet.

    That's basically what's in my head at the moment. The two ideas I had in the last ficwriting deadspace are still very strong, those being RariLuna and FlutterDash. The PinkieShy idea has basically taken the spot of CellyPie now that that's done. Still, I am almost positive that in reading, watching and talking in the coming weeks, I'll have far more ideas to choose from, and hopefully I'll land on one that convinces me fully from the get-go.

    If you've read this far, well, damn. I thought about cramming some images in here, but I have no idea what those would be. Sprucing it up with images just to make more people read it is silly anyway. I figure people will read if they're interested, and if they are--if you are--I'm flattered.

    In Other News

    There's a reason for that Within and Without tag other than "hey I may write something similar." If you've problems with the downloadable formats available through FiMFiction, there's an awesome guy by name of JeffersonPeters who took it upon himself to provide a superior alternative. Here is a downloadable ePub variant of W&W/O for all your reading pleasure! I don't have a fancy reading thingermabob, but I'm told it's quite good.

    It's worth noting that he used alternative cover art in the .epub file, and the artist hasn't yet responded to the request for permission to use it, but there should be a link with attribution and everything in there. The real problem, though, is that the artist's dA has been taken down since, and redirects. Still working on that.

    That's it! Thank you for your time. If you hate me for abusing your eyes for italics, well, at least I didn't use comic sans. I'm gonna get around to replying to comments on TaB as soon as I can, but know that I've read them all, and that I'm floored (and thankful!) for all the comments!

    53 comments · 763 views
  • 87w, 6d
    March Apologies, Twice as Bright

    I am just leaving a quick note here to say that I'm sorry for not responding to PM's, comments or mails for the moment. I've tried to keep on top of things, but it's just not working out. If you're just tuning in, or if you've recently left a comment or sent me a PM, I am very happy to make your acquaintance, please don't doubt that -- I can only apologize for the delayed response.

    I'm having a bad time of it, and I need to readjust. There's no drama, and everything that's failing is related to my lacking ability to deal with things that are beyond my control.

    Fic updates will go along as planned because quite frankly, I don't know how to stop. Twice as Bright will likely continue at one chapter per week unless something changes.

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  • ...

Applejack had long since taken the Hearth’s Warming Eve story for fact. When she and Fluttershy find themselves in an untamed wilderness, they’ll learn that not all history is preserved. In their struggle to find their way home, the two will unearth secrets unknown to any living being, pony or otherwise.

Half a world away, the others have problems of their own. As Rainbow Dash struggles to discover exactly what she is to her oldest friend, Twilight must face the stunning truth about her long-time mentor.

In the end, what is lost, and what is found?

First Published
25th Aug 2012
Last Modified
29th Sep 2012
#1 · 117w, 5d ago · 2 · · 5. Ponyville ·


Cloudy rides again!

I've had the privilege of reading some 80-100k of this fic so far. It is adventure on an epic scale. I remember in 2011 when we had several long adventure fics that were the center of the fandom's attention. This fic is like those. It's world building on a large scale. It's history. It's shipping. There's action and tension. It's pretty much everything you could ask for in a fic. Is it worth reading the estimated 170-200k? Hell yes.

Looks interesting I will have to add this to my read later  20k words straight out of the starting gate.  Thats a way to start for sure.

1. Awesome

2. Fic starts off with 5 chapters totalling 20k words. (2 prologues? :derpyderp2:)

Damn,it's 2:30am and while I normally go to bed at 4~5, I have to return to at least going to bed at 1 if I want to get anywhere in school, so I'll simply put this in 'read later' for now.:ajsleepy:

This has "epic" written all over it.

Oh crap, a Cloudy Skies story? MUST FOLLOW

Starting with 5 chapters.

A Cloudy Skies shipventure?

I think I broke the tracking button.

Kits basically nailed it with his comment up there. It's been quite a while since I've had the pleasure of reading a long adventure fic, and Cloudy settles right into filling that niche with Lost and Found. It's been a wonderful read so far and the only reason I haven't read more of it is because I'm a screw up when it comes to time management. This story's worth the read just for the worldbuilding alone, which Cloudy executes on a consistently high level. Can't wait to see where it goes.

I think I must have favorite'd and unfavorite'd this story a hundred times based on how many times I clicked the favorite button.

Silver: Sir, we are taking back Karalia.

Me: Good.

Silver: The reinforcements we landed on Volna Beach have reported heavy fighting along the coastline. 80% of Karalia is under our control again and it won't be long til we can retake our capital.

Me: Things are going TOO well. What's the bad news?

Silver: It appears that a huge force of Cloudy Skies' rebels have been spotted advancing toward our position from the jungles.

Me: How big?

Silver: Trust me sir, you DON'T wanna know!

Me: No matter! Deploy our new Cobalt, Magnet, and Katana Battalions... and send the Dragon Busters with them while keeping the Skilla unit in reserve!

The former Cloudy Skies' citizens that flocked to our army will be VERY useful to us. Send them out. I wanna see how loyal they really are.

Silver: Roger!

I'll be back to read this one later Cloudy but I'm a little occupied at the moment. :pinkiehappy:

Silver out!

Well, I'm excited for this. :pinkiehappy:

Instant-Track and I'll get around to reading it very soon. I must say I'm fairly excited about this, I have no idea why, but the description sort of gives me a bit of an "Off the Edge of the Map" vibe. It could be that I reread that recently, and the FlutterDash just set off those triggers, but all the talk of mass-scale world building and whatnot sort of puts it in my mind. Not that this is at all a bad thing, mind you, also not trying to compare your work to something rather old and great, and creating unfair expectations, I just... don't know, I just woke up, me brain no function today. Bleh.

Anyway, I'll just say preemptively that I've always found the Mane 6 x Royalty ships to be sort of tragic. The fact of being immortal (or, a VERY long life span), and watching all of your loved ones die seems very depressing to me. Even if you offer your lover a way out to become immortal with you, they have to share your heart ache of having to see all of your friends, family and loved ones die around you while you live on, it seems sort of depressing to me. That all said, I have no idea how you plan to tackle their relationship, so it'll definitely be something worth finding out.



I love it so far. Exciting!

You released!  \o/

Aw, it's not complete. still! X3

Epic adventure is epic.

Uh oh.

Twilight, what did you do?

>>1152047 You're being far too kind, but thank you; I wonder if I'll be releasing yet another adventure fic next fall. Odd sort of habit, this!

>>1152054 >>1152088 >>1152359 I hope it's not intimidating. I debated with myself (and others) long and hard over how much to kick off with, but the simple truth is, unless I want to spend more than two months publishing this, I gotta get them words out!

>>1152818 Thank you for kind words (and for your help!) - we'll see! If it holds your interest, I would love your thoughts, of course.

>>1154270 OtE is definitively (and has always been) one of my main inspirations, so I'm going to take that as potential praise.

You have a point regarding the princesses and such, but my main counterargument is that FiM has never been about death and about the long term consequences; it's not about looking for the shadow side of things when something's nice. I'm not saying ignoring consequences is always a boon, but I've never liked to focus on overinterpreting such things until something lovely becomes tragic.

I'm of course not going to discuss/spoil specifics of this story with regards to this (I'm still writing it, even!), I just mean that generally, I don't let myself be concerned with sad stuff. I tend to favor ignoring or trivializing. The fic Kits linked is a good example of what you can do if you want to frame everything ridiculously tragic, and it's everything I don't want in a fic, be it writing or reading. No offense to the fic or its writer, but it's diametrically opposed to my preferences.

>>1155501 A small (ridiculously long) ways off yet, sorry!

>>1155019 Thank you very much!

>>1155709 Definitely not, I actually enjoyed the continuous read.


I re-read Fo:E for fun, its hard to find an intimidating word count for me.


Never apologize when you can... write your flank off! Rhymes off, but gogogooggo XD

This has potential.

>>1154870 I have now, and it's kind of a bittersweet feeling that TwiDash was added in, considering the cost.

>>1155709 That's fine, but it's something that I tend to over-analyze because I want to avoid the potential for a tragedy. My feelings to those sort of ships were probably formed after I read the fic Our Last Goodbye (a story which I gave a chance on a whim, and interestingly enough, has been the only actual fanfic that legitimately made me cry).

It's completely a preference thing, and I will always like fluffy little ship stories between ponies and princesses, but my enjoyment seems to always be tinged with that tragic sadness that seems to be associated with the curse of immortality.  

*Steel shields his eyes, his computer monitor shining quite a bit brighter than usual.*

Bloody hell, being in this comments section is like being in a church, and the Author is their God...

:twilightoops: "Can something like this really happen?"

I guess so...I didn't kick up the brightness on my monitor recently, at least.

:twilightsheepish: "Well, since we're hunting around for stories, how about this one?"

I think if we open up the first chapter, we'll go blind from the sheer volume of praise this story's getting.

:twilightsmile: "It's not like he writes using white text!"

Only one way to find that bit out.

>>1156980 Oh, I understand and respect that, truly; all I can say for sure is that tragedy is something you will never find intentionally implied in any story I write. There's a profound lack of Sad or Tragedy tags for a reason, but if you autocomplete TwiLestia thus, I understand why it gives you pause. I'm sorry to hear that :|


Have you read Within and Without?  It's a TwiLuna, a damn good one at that, and if you read it you'll get a decent taste for how Cloudy handles the princess pairings.  Now I don't now that's how it'll go down here, probably not, but it's something.

Besides, it's a great fic that, if you haven't read it yet, I recommend you do so with all the haste you can possibly acquire :pinkiesmile:


As for the story, I am hooked and already enthralled.  The concept is interesting, the new setting is interesting, and the mysterious hidden history is interesting.  This story is pretty interesting.

I rather like your take on Fluttershy.  I'll be honest, I normally dislike her in most stories due to her perpetual shyness and all around timidity.  The bold, do what must be done stance--still retaining her trademark idiosyncrasies--is a refreshing take on her.  The mysterious letter is very alluring, too.  I want to say that it does have to do with her parents not being able to make the marriage, but at the same time it's for a reason that may not be all bright and dandy.  She basically spoke a half truth, hiding the segments that deal the damage.  

What does puzzle me is why Fluttershy went to Applejack and not Rainbow.  They've been friends for a longer period of time, Fluttershy obviously likes her and has even told Rainbow about the letters, and yet she flew off to Applejack.  I'd like to think there's a reason for this beyond the farm pony saying that she could come to her at anytime (and that she lived closer), but I could just be over analyzing it...

Anyway, all I can really think about now is rolling fields of golden grass, a hard headed and distraught Rainbow, and two ponies in a land very, very far away... And now that I think about it, something Luna said unnerves me:

Hatred has seeped into this thing, and when it felt the Elements, it lashed out in fear. Sought to throw you as far away as possible. Distance and time, either or both.

There are no good implications here, none at all.  This could be much worse than what we think it may be.

Yep, this story is awesome and on it's way to being another favorite.  Have I ever told you I like your writing style?  I probably have, but repetition can't hurt.  I really like your writing style.

I had a feeling that was where you were going, with the tribes and the pony's elements representing these tribes going to their origin. I had to stop reading mid way through and had come up with the theory, and I'm so happy it turned out to be true~! (That hardly ever happens, I'm so horrible at mysteries and theories :raritydespair:) But, hehe, on towards the actual story and not just me being proud of myself...Very good! I'm a very excited on where this goes, as I haven't read many 'epics' recently, or really any much at all, and it will be nice to read it as it goes along rather than all at once, since it takes the suspence and time of speculating away. Looking forward to more!


No other comments? Huh. First! :trollestia:

Anyway, good stuff as usual. I'd managed to forget how good, really. This feels like the start of something special. Points of interest:

- The time-frame. Setting it immediately after the wedding was done for a reason, I assume, and could mean interesting things for the story. Changeling involvement, perhaps? We'll see.

- The mystery letter. Hmm. I'll guess it has something to do with Fluttershy's family, but I suppose speculation is pointless with four more chapters ready to read.

- This: “Are you feeling okay? I bet you are!” Pinkie said, somehow managing to make it sound like an accusation. “You shouldn’t be okay, you should be super-duper fantastic! What’s up?”  I love this line, for some reason. Your ability to perfectly write Pinkie is still intact, I see. :pinkiehappy:

I'd read on, but it's unfortunately very late here. I'd already be asleep, but the suspense was killing me. So, next chapters will be read tomorrow if possible. Monday at the latest.


No other comments? Huh. First!

you're a bit late bro

So this is off to an excellent start. Within and Without is up there in my list of favorite adventure stories. Also, I can't wait to see where the Twilestia shipping ends up. :twilightblush:

The first update is 20k words. You don't even know how excited that makes me. I love these adventurous world-building stories, and this has the makings of a grand one.

Well hello there, new Cloudy Skies fic. Yes, I would like to track you.

Thanks for mentioning this in your blog, Kits. Somehow I completely missed it being posted.

OMG a new Cloudy Story instant fav to this day Within and Without is still my Number one Favorite.

I love really long Adventure Stories of Worldbuilding with or without TwiLuna Elements.


So the placebo effect doesn't work with magic, then. :facehoof:

Hmm. Given that the Elements were involved in the spell, it seems likely that they were what caused the teleportations. Intentionally, maybe? It could be that they have some sort of plan for their bearers, a lesson to teach them or something. And now that I think about it, the bearers all seem to be ending up in places of significance to both themselves and the Elements. Twilight was sent to the Everfree ruins, where she discovered the power of friendship and first activated the Elements. Dash was sent to her former home of Cloudsdale, which was also the site of the first Sonic Rainboom, which set in motion the events that would eventually bring the Mane Six together.

So it stands to reason that Fluttershy and Applejack have been sent to a similarly important place. Taking into account the story's synopsis, maybe it has to do with the creation of the Elements, or some ancient usage of them. Fluttershy's letter is probably tied into it, too.

The description of Pinkie as a conversational freight train is also worth mentioning :rainbowlaugh:

I generally feel terrible. Cloudy releases an adventure fic, and I have only just carved out twenty minutes to read the prologue. The prologue after like three days! D:

Study law, they said. It will be fun, they said. Let me tell you right now, reading 73k word cases may be a lot of things, but 'fun' is certainly not an appropriate adjective.

Anyway, I have read the prologue, haha. Concise set up, intriguing, and some great character interaction so far. Needless to say, I am looking forward to the next time I can eek out a little more time to continue reading, haha. Hopefully it will be sooner rather than later!

And it looks like you have beaten me quite nicely in the release of adventure stories, haha. I guess that's what happens when you get sidetracked with other projects while waiting for cover art!

Keep up the great work, Cloudy. I can't wait to see this one pan out.

#40 · 117w, 2d ago · · · 4. Lost ·

All right, so my Element theory was accurate. And we're starting to see some of the Hearth's Warming story's innaccuracies being revealed. Three alicorns, huh? I'm not generally a fan of OC alicorns, but I have to say I'm interested in seeing where this goes. Assuming Celestia and Luna were two of them, I'd guess they sided with unicorns and pegasi respectively. So the third one would be the earth ponies' leader/god/whatever, and might have powers related to agriculture or something. I also get the feeling he or she might still be around, possibly leading the descendents of these earth pony villagers.

And we finally got a partial explanation about Fluttershy's letter. So it was from her parents. Now the question is why that's a problem.

#41 · 117w, 2d ago · · · 3. Lost ·

Oh, poor Applejack. I'm guessing you think that since you believed what you were doing was lying, your element reacted to that untruth and did this. Guess I'll have to wait and find out.



Yeah, I know. I was referring to the first chapter specifically.

Anyway, this chapter took some interesting turns. I hadn't thought to blame the 'glittercoal' for the teleportations at all; I'd figured the Elements or some outside force were responsible. Luna's comment about 'distance or time' was also intriguing, specifically the 'time' part. If AJ and Fluttershy might've been thrown through time, that opens up a whole new can of possibilities and directions this could take. Can't wait to see how it goes.

#43 · 117w, 1d ago · · · 4. Lost ·

Look at that! Two more chapters :D And now we have a good ol' fashioned adventure on our hands, people! This is gonna be a fun ride. :rainbowkiss:

Cloudy Skies writes one of his patented longfics wherein one of the ships is Flutterdash... My body is ready.

Handel's Messiah is insufficient to describe the pure, unbridled joy I felt upon seeing the EQD post. Cloudy, I loved Within and Without, and now I'm in love with this and it's only just begun. I look forward to the places you will take me and the roads you will show me. Adventure awaits.

Ooh this is good. gonna nom on this story for a while.

Very nice pace

"conversational freight train that was Pinkie Pie."

this is gold. XD

excellent work

The reason i love your stories is the fact that you can write the mane 6 PERFECTLY and i love the way they interact with each other in your stories. It just makes it feel like an actual episode. On to 4 more chapters!

#48 · 117w, 1d ago · · · 4. Lost ·

one error (Rd wasn't what you call supportive during dragonshy, aj was though.) just pointing it out. still good though,

#49 · 117w, 1d ago · · · 3. Lost ·

hmm a big load of not much :-D

Cloudyyyyyy, it's Monday night! I have work in the morning! How could you do this to meeee?

... Ah the heck with it. *page one*

I wonder if you feel oddly about this fic. I imagine many people (such as myself) will be comparing it to Within and Without - some people might find that to be a lot of pressure. Or maybe I'm overestimating WaW's impact since it was such a major part of my joining this fandom in the first place.

EDIT: Oh hey, this was posted three days ago... >_> <_<

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