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  • E No Recipe For Perfection

    Rarity struggles to overcome an art block. It takes a very special pony to show Rarity who she is.
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  • E Twice as Bright

    Celestia likes her routine. Tax reforms, grants, laws and construction projects are all a princess needs to be content. It's just her luck that for Pinkie Pie, "content" is not nearly enough.
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  • E Ode to Friendship

    Octavia feels trapped in the stage that is her world. Will a certain pink pony be able to help her?
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  • T Within and Without

    Luna takes the Elements of Harmony on a journey in more ways than one.
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  • E Building Bridges

    Action-and-confusion-filled fast-paced shipping, yay!
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  • E Lost and Found

    AJ and FS are lost, trying to get home. Meanwhile Dash struggles to understand what FS means to her.
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  • T Taken for Granite

    Ask Applejack, and she'll tell you Pinkie Pie can be a few apples short of a bushel. They've always been good friends, but what could they possibly have in common? Turns out there is an answer to that question.
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  • E Where Earth Meets Sky

    Rainbow Dash suspects Applejack is stealing her oldest friend from her. Is it really that simple?
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Blog Posts31

  • 63w, 6d

    First, I want to thank everyone who's contributed to, or read, Taken for Granite. The comments and the mails have been far in excess of what I expected from an ApplePie ship-fic not featured on EqD.

    I still wonder if I did the right thing in detailing in the authors' notes how hard writing that particular story was for me. Usually, I strive to minimize my own personality because I feel the stories are more important than the individuals who write them. That's the theory, at least, but I think I'm doing a worse job of it with each fic I write. Either way, talking about the process that led to a story is relevant and perhaps interesting to some individuals. Complaining about it being "hard" isn't. At best, it's begging for sympathy. At worst, it changes how people see the story, and that notion fills me with dread.

    Regardless, the story has been well enough received, and now that it's all over, I can say I'm glad to have written it. We're moving on.

    Those who read these blog posts will know I've had quite a few different stories and ideas I've been toying with. I'm really liking the idea of writing another grand adventure along the lines of Lost and Found and Within and Without. I have a temporarily shelved RariLuna political intrigue/adventure/peril/shipping fic, I have a FlutterDash longer-than-long romance that may become adventure-romance, and I have a number of other less-interesting stories that I want to get around to. Which is it then?

    None of the above. I'm going on hiatus for an undetermined period of time.

    A while back, I promised myself I would never give people estimates, and that I would never set deadlines for myself. They are sure-fire ways to kill my joy for writing, and this promise helped me recapture much of my love for putting pen to paper—or hoof to keyboard, as it were.

    I broke another barrier when I managed to let dead fics lie and kill my need to stick with a story until it was done. Being able to not pick back up the FlutterDashFire story I had, being able to shelve RariLuna for this recent ApplePie, those were all victories.

    It's not enough, though.

    My relationship with writing has been problematic for a very long time, and it's not getting better. Some people use ponyfic as therapy, as a means to cope, and as relaxation. AbsoluteAnonymous was very vocal about exactly this. Unless I misunderstood or misremember this, writing was a temporary hobby to her, a process of healing that led to her coming out on top. Me, I think I've written myself sick.

    Until I can figure this out, I'll be out. I'm sorry for not responding to comments in the foreseeable future, and I'm just as sorry that if I return, my OCD attitude to comments will result in a batch of week, month or year-old comments being replied to.

    Naturally, my promise not to set deadlines or give promises might work both ways. I may be writing again next week. I may be writing tomorrow and start posting chapters of some long adventure-fic, but I find it unlikely.

    I'm not saying goodbye forever, but right now, I need the peace that comes with a break.

    36 comments · 1,569 views
  • 67w, 4d
    Incoming Story: Taken for Granite

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  • 70w, 4d
    The Long Summer

    First, I apologize for the long silence. I don't expect people will really have noticed, because that implies people sit on edge waiting for something to happen, for me to do something. Instead, I am the one who gets stressed by inactivity. It goes without saying and without putting it into system that two months' hiatus is worth a lot of stress by that token.

    I'm also sorry for neglecting comments and notes. I'm working on that, and will try to catch up. I've done a terrible job at reading all the things I've said I would, too, for which I am also supremely sorry, but I don't know what more to add to that. I've no real excuse, and will get right back on it as soon as I can.

    On my front of things, I've aborted work on one story, started work on another, and actually sort of almost completed it. It is currently mid-edit and pending cover art, and there is a chance it will be published in a week or two, or a month--thereabouts. Failing that, if I can't beat it into shape, I'll scrap it and start something else.

    I hope you all have had, and continue to have a very pleasant summer. If you're interested in listening to the Muffin Loving Productions guys host me as a guest on a podcast, you can do so here! It was fun, and proves that listening to your own voice later will never be cool.

    Also, I had a birthday somewhere along the line, which led to multiple awesome artpieces being made. Snowtrail and Kits for best pony.

    Back to edits and work.


    13 comments · 390 views
  • 84w, 4d
    Next Story, Ideas and Between Fic, W&W/O eBook

    That's one more wrapped up! Thank you, everypony who took time to read Twice as Bright. It's been an absolute blast to write, but I definitively need to re-think and re-consolidate my writing/publishing strategy.

    By which I mean "Cloudy is a dummy who should've never broken his self-made promise not to publish during the writing process after Lost and Found nearly permanently killed his desire to write." The whole re-thinking line is a lot catchier, so we're rolling with that.

    Anyway! Point is, Twice as Bright is done! I am celebrating by staring at excellent, relevant artwork--holy butts that is beautiful and I almost embedded it but I don't know if that's a breach of etiquette--and by planning more stories.

    Breaks are for, um. Well. People who take breaks. I mean, I've had a two day break, I suppose, but you're not here to read about me drinking sugar, eating sugar, and eating things not made of sugar but still covered in or frosted with sugar. You're probably here for:

    More Ponies

    Whenever I finish a story, I like to cleanse my palate. That's a fancy word for scraping your tongue clean. When I first started writing ponyfic, I watched the entire show at least once between each fic. I find this very useful to re-center myself on canon. It probably sounds pretentious or ritualistic, but it's as simple as me valuing starting from scratch very highly.

    Lately, I haven't done this. In part because there are a lot more episodes, and not-writing hurts. In part because, without going into detail, there are elements of season 3 that I did not enjoy as much as I had hoped. Still, this time, I'm going to begin by re-watching the show. The last thing I want is to get mired in my own headcanon.

    It's been surprisingly long since last I watched season 1, and I absolutely cannot wait.

    Second? I plan to read. I plan to read fanfiction I promised I'd read, because I genuinely want to read more fanfic. I plan to read more fanfiction to make a dent in my Read Later list. I plan to read at least one non-pony thing--probably Daetrin's non-pony book, The Demon of Cliffside. I've been wanting to get at that thing for ages now. Before, during and after all this, I'm going to discuss all the ideas I have with my friends.

    And then?

    We write

    If I sound very, um, pompous here, it's probably for a reason. I'm the kind of pony who, in writing, makes faces. If I'm writing Pinkie making a grimace, I'm making the very same grimace. If Rarity looks arch and scoffs at something, I'm staring at my computer screen like its very presence offends me--you get the idea. That I'm writing a long piece on this is because it reflects what I want to write. I'm leaning towards something longer. Something grandiose.

    That's not to say I'm decided yet, and I've said time and again I hate making promises even to myself. I'm just thinking out loud, and all I know is this:

    *The next fic will feature two or more ponies.

    *At least one of these two or more ponies will think that one of the other two ponies is really, really cute/swell/nice.

    What I suspect is this:

    *It probably won't have the majority of its action in Ponyville or Canterlot.

    *It will probably involve perceived or very real peril.

    In short, I'm thinking another adventure along the lines of Within and Without or Lost and Found. When I say "along the lines of," I really only mean "long adventure," and even that's not set in stone, but I will say I'm looking towards W&W/O with fond memories.

    Add to list of things to do before writing: Re-read own adventure fics.

    I have no details, and I have tons of other ideas that may make it into fic. A lot of authors seem to do these compilation posts of ideas for fics and such, and I don't know how interesting it is to most, but if I can mention in no particular order:

    RariLuna slightly-dark/adventure/political/mystery.

    Those who read my earlier blogs will remember this one. It is one of three ideas I had in my mind a while back. Also, when I say "slightly dark," you have to keep in mind how incredibly resistant I am to darkfic and such. What I call "dark" when I write probably doesn't match others' definitions.

    FlutterDash long ship.

    Lost and Found really made me want to explore FlutterDash on a deeper level. This is it. The problem is that I'm not sure I can write another non-adventure ship just yet. It'd be fairly intricate and emotional, but I've done a lot of those lately.

    Other ships/stories I want to do:

    TwiJack - I have an angle that could work. It's Ponyville-centric, so the problem is the same as with FlutterDash, but I really want to do this.

    RariLight - I have some very specific unicorn-centric ideas that could be good. May even be a friendship fic. (Cloudy writing non-ship? Ha!)

    FlutterDash - I have no less than three other ideas for this ship of varying length, though the goal is to use as much as possible for the fic above.

    PinkieShy - Of all the "pure" ships I want to write, this one is very high on the list. Again, same issue as above with it being a pure ship, but if I could make it part of an adventure, I'd be very happy.

    AppleDash - Problematic in that the ship's been done to death. That in and by itself isn't the issue, but that I don't know if I'm stepping on others' hooves is. I have two possible angles, one being rather different from the usual ship formula.

    ApplePie/RariPie - I have semi-similar ideas for these, but I've written so much heavy emotion Pinkie Pie that this will probably go on the back-burner. Also, it's actually the closest to sad that I'll ever want to go. I could write an ApplePie that I'm sure would be a decent read, yet I'd have no desire to read it myself. That is an odd position to be in.

    RariDash - Painful sweetness here, but it needs a framework I haven't worked with yet. One that is neither adventure nor simple long-ship. This will be a challenge, and I'm not convinced yet.

    That's basically what's in my head at the moment. The two ideas I had in the last ficwriting deadspace are still very strong, those being RariLuna and FlutterDash. The PinkieShy idea has basically taken the spot of CellyPie now that that's done. Still, I am almost positive that in reading, watching and talking in the coming weeks, I'll have far more ideas to choose from, and hopefully I'll land on one that convinces me fully from the get-go.

    If you've read this far, well, damn. I thought about cramming some images in here, but I have no idea what those would be. Sprucing it up with images just to make more people read it is silly anyway. I figure people will read if they're interested, and if they are--if you are--I'm flattered.

    In Other News

    There's a reason for that Within and Without tag other than "hey I may write something similar." If you've problems with the downloadable formats available through FiMFiction, there's an awesome guy by name of JeffersonPeters who took it upon himself to provide a superior alternative. Here is a downloadable ePub variant of W&W/O for all your reading pleasure! I don't have a fancy reading thingermabob, but I'm told it's quite good.

    It's worth noting that he used alternative cover art in the .epub file, and the artist hasn't yet responded to the request for permission to use it, but there should be a link with attribution and everything in there. The real problem, though, is that the artist's dA has been taken down since, and redirects. Still working on that.

    That's it! Thank you for your time. If you hate me for abusing your eyes for italics, well, at least I didn't use comic sans. I'm gonna get around to replying to comments on TaB as soon as I can, but know that I've read them all, and that I'm floored (and thankful!) for all the comments!

    53 comments · 762 views
  • 87w, 3d
    March Apologies, Twice as Bright

    I am just leaving a quick note here to say that I'm sorry for not responding to PM's, comments or mails for the moment. I've tried to keep on top of things, but it's just not working out. If you're just tuning in, or if you've recently left a comment or sent me a PM, I am very happy to make your acquaintance, please don't doubt that -- I can only apologize for the delayed response.

    I'm having a bad time of it, and I need to readjust. There's no drama, and everything that's failing is related to my lacking ability to deal with things that are beyond my control.

    Fic updates will go along as planned because quite frankly, I don't know how to stop. Twice as Bright will likely continue at one chapter per week unless something changes.

    52 comments · 537 views
  • ...

In the aftermath of one of Pinkie's parties, an innocent query leads Dash to question why she's still living with Pinkie Pie. Why does she feel trapped when there's nothing holding her back?

And how many buildings can Pinkie Pie destroy before insurance companies stop covering 'acts of Pinkie Collateral Damage Pie'?

This story is an indirect sequel related to Where Earth Meets Sky, but can be read just fine on its own. It simply assumes a previously established relationship.

First Published
15th Apr 2012
Last Modified
20th Apr 2012
#1 · 136w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I commented first because I can.

Cloudy writing my OTP makes me smile about as much as Pinkie

:pinkiehappy::rainbowlaugh: forever

#2 · 136w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

this story is really adorible. I can't wait to see more of it

#3 · 136w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


Should you have posted a direct link to this when it's not published yet? Well I guess it doesn't matter if it's ready anyway.

#4 · 136w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


Yes, I already asked and Cloudy said yes.

#5 · 136w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·






Don't worry about that meaniepants anymore, Kitty (or is it Hawkie?) He won't be yelling at anyone for a while.:pinkiehappy:

#6 · 136w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


you had me at spreaderbar

#7 · 136w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

very interesting and adorable:rainbowdetermined2:

#8 · 136w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Nice, another Cloudy story!

DashPie is a great ship and this one sells it well. :yay:

#9 · 136w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Best author writing second best ship?

I think my heart just melted.

#10 · 136w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

guys i'm calling the twist ending



#11 · 136w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


If someone actually shipped those 5 together I would read the story just on principle.

#12 · 136w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Love the characterization, it's a fic that makes me feel something, always good for a romance story. :pinkiehappy:

#13 · 136w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Ahh, Cloudy. You amazing person, you! I'm gonna hold off for a bit with any kind of detailed comment, so for now take this: :heart:

...I hope that it's acceptable!

#15 · 136w, 20h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I'm going to cop out too for now on the detailed comment, and just say, for now, that I think this could well turn out to be one of the best Pinkie/Dash stories ever...:pinkiehappy: I'm already dieing here just waiting for a new chapter. No pressure. :rainbowlaugh:

Many of the characterizations are more spot on than I've seen in...well, I don't even know. Especially Pinkie. Pinkie saying she loves all her friends, but that Dash is special to her...perfect. :heart: The sort of...gentle approach to the relationship between Pinkie and Dash is wonderful, and feels much more 'real' in the universe of the show. Pinkie not turning into a total psycho mental case, but having an obsession with muffins for a while was a refreshing and funny touch, and again, something that I could actually see happening in the show.

Also, fluffies and solid cores = best cloud descriptions.

Please tell me you're submitting this thing to EqD. If not I may have to slap a filly. :trixieshiftright: Some of the writing doesn't flow as well as it could in parts I think, but otherwise it's fantastic so far.

#16 · 136w, 20h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


*cough* I like that Rainbow's and Pinkie's feelings are revealed to themselves through impulses--Dash to fly, to escape, and Pinkie to bake, to find more rainbow sprinkles (nice metaphor, by the way!)--as these are two very impulsive characters. They're not the type to sit down and ponder things over, as Twilight might. They're DOERS, not thinkers. The way they're handling things feels very in-character to me. (I especially love Pinkie just baking and baking and baking--it's funny and heart-breaking, both at once.)

They are both breaking my heart a little. Oh, you silly ponies! Why can't you just tell each other "I love you" and be happy together? *sigh*

I also liked the scene where RD drops by Fluttershy's place and wakes up 'Shy and AJ. That you often include friendship explorations as well as romance explorations in your stories is one of the things I really enjoy about your writing, and I very much enjoyed the dynamics between these three. Fluttershy's confusion, Rainbow's grudging reaching-out, Applejack's annoyed tolerance. I also liked the peek at how Fluttershy and AJ function as a couple, and it occurred to me that RD chose well in whom she sought out. Fluttershy offers patience and sensitivity, on the one hand, while Applejack will give you a kick in the head when you need it, on the other hand.

Can't wait to read more. :pinkiehappy:

#17 · 136w, 19h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Yay, more RainbowPie! And by Cloudy too! ^.^

#18 · 136w, 18h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Rarity shoving Pinkie outside is the best thing ever (more or less anyway) :twilightsheepish:

Great stuff, looking forward to more.

#19 · 136w, 16h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Now you've got me so excited! :rainbowwild:

Great work with the characters. I especially loved Pinkie working through her stress with baking. And I'd love to try a tofuffin just for the experience.

I've got to see how this ends. Keep up the great work! :pinkiehappy:

#20 · 136w, 52m ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

PinkieDash by Cloudy Skies?  :yay:  Very good so far, one of the best shipfics I've read in quite a while. And I've been saying that a lot lately, so... well, it's definitely a compliment. I like that you're getting into both Pinkie and Dash's heads, and showing both their perspectives on this. Not enough stories do that in my experience, and even fewer do it so well. As has been said, your characterization of both is great so far. Pinkie dealing with her confusion by mindlessly filling the bakery with muffins was a nice touch.

Tracked and thumbs-upped. Can't wait for more.

#21 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

A cute and well-written story. I feel you got the characterization spot-on, basically. I especially enjoy the way you write Pinkie. And I must say, those little "domestic" scenes at the beginning were just the cutest thing.

#22 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>453647 I read your comment, and all I can think is "first". You delicious, lovable trollpony.

>>454266 Oh sweet merciful princesses in Canterlot above, don't encourage him, gah!

>>454700 You forgot :twistnerd:!

>>455359 No! Entirely unacceptable! (No seriously though, I wasn't expecting comments or feedback before I posted up the entire story, actually. Not used to doing chapters on an entirely new story here on FimF. Also, hi!)

>>457513 Oh, no pressure, right? Not at all! I'll be under my bed. :fluttershysad: It's indeed submitted to EqD, still waiting on reply/confirmation atm! It feels a little iffy to submit an unfinished story. Haven't done that in a long while.

>>457615 Heartbaking. it's a word now.

Really though, I'm glad to hear that the Flutter-scene was appreciated, because I half feared I wrote it for my own benefit only. It ties into how I wonder whether or not these half-sequel stories are just me hugging my own headcanon/universe or what. Now I just need to make sure I give the unicorns their dues, going forward. The title of the first story already suggests that this is more about the pegasi and the earth ponies, but I don't want to exclude Rarity or Twilight at all; they are not lesser friends by any stretch of the word, they're just not the focus of the story.

@ Everypony: Thank you for your comments, thoughts, kind words, odd mustaches and big cigars! I hope to have the next batch up soon!

#23 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


It totally has been queued. I think with Seth out for the weekend, some of the responses were derped. But my records and email show a "to the queue" (sadly only two "ue"'s)

You already should know every thought I have on this story, having had them thrown at you many times. I'm wary of spoiling anything for people so I'll leave it at this: this is an amazing story and I totally envy your ability to write Pinkie in any given mood that she is capable of having. You know the rest, but in case it wasn't 100% crystal clear: not only are you an awesome friend but you're my overall favorite author in this fandom.

#24 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Poor Dash. She seems to push herself really hard in all your stories. Can't wait to read more.

#25 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Oh goodness my chest is all tight after reading this chapter. Especially after hearing Fluttershy cut to the heart of the problem when she's talking to Pinkie Pie. And Rainbow's frustration over everything really is pretty heartbreaking. My heart is just begging for them to all be happy, and I'm sure they will be, but it's so hard to see that yet.

#26 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

oh noes..Dash freakout coming up?

#27 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


Heartbaking. it's a word now.

That is a terrible pun. You ought to be ashamed. Or proud. Or both. :twilightsmile:

Really though, I'm glad to hear that the Flutter-scene was appreciated, because I half feared I wrote it for my own benefit only. It ties into how I wonder whether or not these half-sequel stories are just me hugging my own headcanon/universe or what.

I can't speak for anyone but myself, but I've really, really enjoyed the Fluttershy/RD stuff in all three of this universe's stories. Their relationship is fascinating to me--it's beyond a standard friendship but isn't a romance, really, but something kind of undefinable and almost codependent. And given the nature of their relationship, as you've created it in these stories, you almost NEED to have the friendship included in any romance plot. Any suitor of Fluttershy's is going to have to handle and allow room for 'Shy's relationship with RD, and any suitor of RD's is going to have to handle and allow room for RD's relationship with 'Shy. It's ... almost like dating someone who has a twin, now that I think about it--there's a pre-existing, hugely strong bond there that you have to respect, or else it just won't work.

Fortunately, Applejack and Pinkie Pie are two ponies who can handle just about anything. Wonder if it's symbolic at all that the two pegasi are hooking up with the two earth ponies. 'Shy's always had a love for the ground, and you can't get much earthier than AJ. Plus, both are pillars of strength, in their own ways. And of course, Pinkie is an earth pony who defies both nature and gravity to fly--perhaps not unlike a pegasus who was able to do the impossible and pull off the mythical Sonic Rainboom.

I'm rambling now, though. My apologies.


this is an amazing story and I totally envy your ability to write Pinkie in any given mood that she is capable of having.

Agree 100% with this. In case I wasn't explicit enough in my review, I wanted to emphasize--the way that Pinkie's sadness is portrayed here is brilliant. She still feels so very PINKIE even when she's mooning over losing Rainbow Dash, and it's such a delicate balance to get with a character like Pinkie.

#28 · 135w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Agree with almost everyone above.  This is probably my favorite story from you so far, and that's saying a *lot*, because I really like your other stories (the ones I had time to read, at least).  Keep up the most excellent work!!

#29 · 135w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


Honestly: make time. Also, even if clop is not your thing, consider making an exception for "Bonds of Earth and Sky", because >>464885 is 100% correct. Cloudy's FlutterDash relationship is amazingly well threaded and deep. It's one of those things you read and realize that it's possible to be so incredibly close and yet not have it be romantic at all.

#30 · 135w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


Don't worry, kits; I definitely intend to.  I'm just a little busy with my own projects though (grad school is hard)...:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

#31 · 135w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


I hear ya. My job usually keeps me from pony due to the restrictive nature of out network. Luckily, I'm only spending half-time in the lab this month.

#32 · 135w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


I love Appleshy!

#33 · 135w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>462239 Alternatively: I am being a dick to Dash in all my stories. I jest - partially - but the next story I've planned that features Dash in a lead position is very, um, vindicating, hah.

>>464885 You know, the sad/interesting/weird/cucumber thing is that when you put it like that, I almost want to write another story simply because while what you say is true, I never touched upon that. I sort of want to explore Pinkie and AJ's feelings on the matter, but it's hard to do more than give a nod to it. What you're commenting - and praising - is a subtext I haven't done justice. I think it says more about you as a reader than me as a writer, hah.

Still, you flatter me - thank you! One of these days I'll repay you your insights, once I finish spending X hours a day editing. I've been wanting to nip at Of Parties and Rainbows for so long now, but the [Sad] tag scares me a bit.

>>468593 >>469417 Thank you, and thank you for reading!

#34 · 135w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>469600 I just meant she pushes herself physically. Seems like in all her stories she's flying everywhere as hard as she can, trying to run from thinking about things.

#35 · 135w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>469745 Oh. Whoops. That too! She's a very physical creature, as I see her, so it makes sense to me, I guess. Besides, it's very handy to be a pegasus and be able to act on the impulse everypony gets sometimes, no? "I wish I could just fly away"- oh, whoops, she can!

#36 · 135w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>469757 That's a great point, and you're right. I do wish I could do that too. :rainbowdetermined2:

#37 · 135w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

omg! i love this chapter! :pinkiehappy:

#38 · 135w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

Great. Now I have to go get a new heart. The old one blew up.

#39 · 135w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·


Next time I'll post on EqD :V

Posting a comment is more than 10 sconds flat. Rainbow Dash I ain't

#40 · 135w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Stop trying to make me cry Cloudy. Goodness. Especially those last few lines about strawberries. They're such simple, but deep sentences. Goodness I can't even handle them.

#41 · 135w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

Much rejoicing was had. Especially from this soul. :yay: I'd like to see what in Equestria Dash is doing though.

#42 · 135w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Sometimes, you just had to roll with the cards that the lemons dealt you.

Best. Pinky line. Ever. :rainbowlaugh:

#43 · 135w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

Aw. I don't know if there's anyone who could really keep up with Pinkie. You'd have to have such high amounts of patience. But goodness do I want to hug her. Cloudy, my chest is tight. You've really got to stop doing that. (Please don't ever stop doing that)

#44 · 135w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

Great chapter! Hurricane Flare's characterization is well done, fantastic writing!!

#45 · 135w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

Woo! Fimfiction is finally back up! I was reading chapter 3 at uni, click to go to the next one and I suddenly couldn't get on for like 24 hours. It was the worst possible thing!

Man, I am loving this story so much, haha. No one, I reapeat, no one writes PinkieDash quite like you. I love how it is a PinkieDash like Best Plan Ever, but it's exploring a slightly different aspect of their relationship. It really keeps everything fresh and shows a nice range.

Top stuff.

#46 · 135w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

Oh. Mah. Gawd. MRS. DASH'S MOM!

I am in love with Mrs. Dash's Mom (I know she has a name, but Pinkie's name for Flare amuses me). The first thing that Pinkie does is TACKLE the poor pegasus, and Flare lets her in anyway. She is amazingly chill and kind--and very Dash-like. An older, more patient Dash. (I am envisioning some of Flare's possible internal monologue: "THIS? THIS is my potential future daughter-in-law? Are you KIDDING me?")

This part was pure love:

“Do you love my daughter?” she asked. It was a casual and simple question with infinite gravity. She stared at Pinkie Pie as if though her eyes could burn right through her.

“Oh, I have no idea!” Pinkie admitted, giggle-snorting. “I mean, I think so?”

That is brilliant. Oh, Pinkie. PINKIE. Girl ain't got no filter. And then Pinkie keeps barreling on and manages to win over Flare with her honest, heart-felt babbling and, really, probably won over Flare better than if she'd just said something like, "Yes, of course I love her." Well done, little pink pony. Well done.

Also, I find it adorable that, when feeling upset about all of this Pinkie stuff, Dash decided to go see her mommy. Awww.

#47 · 135w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


Heh, sorry if I'm reading more into the stories than is actually there. I really like to dissect stuff, and sometimes I go overboard.

Re: "Of Parties and Rainbows," if you stay skip over "But Where Do They Bury the Survivors?" and "After Every Storm," you oughta be fine.:twilightsmile:

#48 · 135w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

I love how Pinkie's big confession to sleeping Dash scene is a mix of funny and heart-breaking. I loved Pinkie destroying half of Rainbow's house, and I loved Rainbow sneaking bites of the muffin. These two always have such a fun, lovely dynamic when you write them.

It was meant to be for special occasions. Perhaps Pinkie didn’t know the blanket was special. Perhaps Pinkie never had a reason to think it was, since Dash’d always brought it out when they sat up until the early hours of morning talking and playing games - which was almost every night.

Oh my gosh, my heart cannot even handle this level of adorability. You are totally in love with that girl, Rainbow Dash. Don't even play like you're not, 'cause you are.

I liked the bit of Lyra/Pinkie friendship, how Lyra seemed to genuinely enjoy Pinkie's company even as she was fully aware of Pinkie's ridiculousness. Also, is this story the first time you've written from Pinkie's POV? I can't really recall you doing so to any great extent before--which is a shame, because Pinkie is AMAZING here.

  Pinkie Pie didn’t want to lie. She just smiled still and waved as Fluttershy trotted off down the road. She didn’t want to promise not to do something stupid. She was pretty sure the plans she was making even now were stupid on some level. Probably a lot of levels. If her plans were a cake, all the layers would be made of stupid, and the cream filling was concentrated stupid, but it didn’t matter so long as the cake was topped with strawberries.

Seriously, there is absolutely nothing not to love in that paragraph. Pinkie's self-awareness, her hilarious metaphor of the cake, the funny-then-bittersweet metaphor of the strawberries. This is a serious Pinkie who's still very Pinkie, and I love her.

#49 · 135w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

Awesome story but I can't help but wonder...

You did :ajsmug:X:yay:

Then :rainbowdetermined2:X:pinkiesmile:

So will we ever see something involving :raritywink: or :twilightsmile: after you're done with this one?

(In the same universe/timeline/world/whatever)

#50 · 135w, 3d ago · · · Epilogue ·

>>471545 Aw, well, there's keeping up with, and there's keeping up with, I guess. Pinkie cheats, so it's not really fair!

>>471598 >>471294 >>472220 Thank you very much, truly!

>>471377 And there we go, now you can find out, hah!

>>474551 To be very frank, and very open about this for once - since if I did decide to do RariLight, it'd be clearly telegraphed in the fic title/desc anyway - I don't think I will. I don't feel like chasing that symmetry just because they're the two ones left. Then again, I don't want to actively avoid pairing them up, either; this continuity really is just me going with the flow, writing whatever seems cutest at the time.

What I will say is that when I decide to write a third story in this arc, I will at least comment on it! If you were a gang of friends and this happened, at the very least, you would notice, hah. S'gotta be a little uncomfortable sometimes!

>>473744 I'm glad she works! It was a very, very nervous moment for me, submitting that chapter, because it's basically all the dangers/traps of writing an OC, except the level of expectations is higher considering who she is, guh. I spent over half an hour pining over what to name her, and I owe Kits a cookie for his help, there. I am pretty desperate to get to write Flare and Dash interacting. I may have to facilitate that in the third story.

Heh, sorry if I'm reading more into the stories than is actually there. I really like to dissect stuff, and sometimes I go overboard.

(Borrowing your style of commenting on comments here -)

No, no, and jeez, no. I did not mean to say that, sorry! The only problems that arise from liberal/extensive interpretation are when you tout them as unassailable truths, and even I don't claim to possess such authority. What you do is highlight something, either reminding me of potential lost, or giving me ideas. That is awesome.

And yes, I believe this is the first time I've done a close Pinkie PoV like this - and that's because Pinkie scares me. Writing Ode to Friendship was the first step towards curing this fear, by having Pinkie be the star. This was the next step, and I guess Pinkie is the part I'm happiest with in this fic, actually - thanks!

Re: "Of Parties and Rainbows," if you stay skip over "But Where Do They Bury the Survivors?" and "After Every Storm," you oughta be fine.

Was going to, and then I saw you had written RariPie. Priority shiiift!

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