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I like how this is going gonna read more
i love a good FMJ reference
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Yeah, so I couldn't help myself
I would just like to say, I've been following this story since it first came out on fanfiction.net. I never had an account for the site, but now that it's up here I'd like to say this.
C.O.L.T.S was an absolutely fantastic read. I loved every bit of it, the action was described in great detail, the characters were memorable and the romance between the characters was portrayed fantastically. I'm loving C.O.L.T.S 2 at the moment, another really great add to the series.
There is just one thing I didn't like about C.O.L.T.S, and that was that the grammar and punctuation was off a lot of the time. If you need somebody to edit your chapters, feel free to message me.
Thanks again for making this fantastic story and it's sequel, I'm thoroughly enjoying it.
"Of course not! I knew you were trying to help him and it actually made me pretty made that all the ponies ran away from you after you helped him." Big Mac continued. Lolz spelling error
2001029 buck me! I suck at editing! Thanks for catching that
SAS?
Or more realisticly either of the Spartans.
Great story by the way.
The rangers?
IM going with spartans from halo
Big Mac said as he shook the stallions hand.
he shook the stallions hand.
the stallions hand.
stallions
hand
did he? did he really?
LOL JK i like it.
Well shit
One little point of frustration.
This only applies if they are Marines taking after U.S. Marines. But instead of Ha Ooh, it should be
OO RAH!!
Two things.
1) Broke the bold print, you desperately need to fix it.
2) The rescue of Shining Armor was too easy, too convinent and would have contributed more to the story had Macintosh been the one saving him.
I have no clue.
Soooooooo rushed.
Really, I'm being semi-hypocritical sense I was notorious for it as well.
Just go a little more in-depth, add a little more meat to the passage. I really loved this story but I flew through it sooooo gawddamn fast.
But why Thunderlane?!?
2356129 it will play an important part in the sequel
...
I've cried and only one other fic has pulled that off.
Be proud, or sad, I'm confuesd as to which one.
Hm, i sense a hint in here. That somehow the Elements of Harmony will be used to restore them to there former selfs......
This story is bitter and cruel now...
Nice USMC quote, made me feel all warm and tingly inside.
Plus, Shadow seems to be overpowering his rampancy...
nice chapter. and i loved the quote in the end xD
how in the name of everything that is unholy can you get out so many chapters at once?
Not that I'm complaining or anything.
2362541 this story is already on my account on fanfiction.net. I am just transfering the chapters from there.
The landing on normandy, omaha beach i think. the rising of the flag is on Iwo Jima.
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Ah. Makes sense.
Forgot to say this last chapter...
For all the 90's kids!
The COLTS being place in baskets and floated down the stream like a can of whoop ass reminded me of BIONICLE
Fracking grifs
Why do I get the feeling like this chapter was inspired by Lord of the Rings: Return of the King? Anyways awesome story so far.
Almost looks like what I'm writing right now! I'll keep this open to read once I finish up homework.
I loved every word of these new chapters.
Damn. You sure know how to leave a story on a cliff hanger. Can't wait for the sequel to get up.
Edit.
Oh wait, found it on Fanfiction. I know what I'll be doing for a while.
Oh wow, I can't stop laughing now!
I bucking loved this story!!
My one and only qualm was how 'thin' the passages are!! Seriously! Add some meat to your bones and...
"You'll Go Far, Kid!!!"
But really though, just add more to the words (descriptive, action, write out the entire thing don't have us imagine the individual moves the COLTS make write it all out so that I have no doubt that Macintosh ducks under a lethal blow and viciously upper cuts.) Trust me on this one, I used to write like this but when I started writing better and at a higher level, lo and behold, I got featured.
It's worth it, it does require more effort and skill but it's way worth it.
P.S. Just a suggestion but a small plaque with the words 'Ne Obliviscaris' would be fucking awesome.
(It's Latin for 'Forget Not')
Lieutenant Dan.
Big Mac is AWESOME!
sgtmaj johnson halo
Who kill the ursa major? Or was just a rumor?
2970584 it was just a rumor.
Big Mac, but Deadeye also have very good reasons to be mad.
This really good. I must read more
The feels!!
Why!!!!!!!!!!!!
Deadeye tore them a new one!
are the C.O.L.T.S. going to be like the SPARTANS from Halo, kinda seems like it to me.
Yeah LunaMac
. Also I must ask, will the ponies be using gunpowder weapons or melee weapons? I personally think it should be melee because in the show there is no evidence that they have the ability to manufacture or use firearms. 
no no no no, a you never give a straight up complement to your recruits, every drill Sargent
knows this.
Marines, really
? (I shall now use the royal canterlot voice to help get my point across) Ah-em... MARINES ARE SEA TO LAND FORCES THE WAR IN THIS STORY IS MAINLY LAND TO LAND AND LAND TO AIR MARINES WOULD NOT BE USED IT WOULD BE THE ARMY. By the holy alicorns how do people got confused so easily between the army and the marines, further more EQUESTRIA WOULD NOT HAVE MARINES. Sorry for getting worked up about this but it just ticks me off.
The SPARTANS from Halo
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Marines are also useful for breaking through heavy resistance in order to establish an FOB.