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I loved every word of these new chapters.
Damn. You sure know how to leave a story on a cliff hanger. Can't wait for the sequel to get up.
Edit.
Oh wait, found it on Fanfiction. I know what I'll be doing for a while.
I bucking loved this story!!
My one and only qualm was how 'thin' the passages are!! Seriously! Add some meat to your bones and...
"You'll Go Far, Kid!!!"
But really though, just add more to the words (descriptive, action, write out the entire thing don't have us imagine the individual moves the COLTS make write it all out so that I have no doubt that Macintosh ducks under a lethal blow and viciously upper cuts.) Trust me on this one, I used to write like this but when I started writing better and at a higher level, lo and behold, I got featured.
It's worth it, it does require more effort and skill but it's way worth it.
P.S. Just a suggestion but a small plaque with the words 'Ne Obliviscaris' would be fucking awesome.
(It's Latin for 'Forget Not')
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(Imagine this but for the COLTS)
Fighting soldiers from the sky
Fearless men who jump and die
Men who mean just what they say
The brave men of the Green Beret
Silver wings upon their chest
These are men, America's best
One hundred men will test today
But only three win the Green Beret
Trained to live off nature's land
Trained in combat, hand-to-hand
Men who fight by night and day
Courage peak from the Green Berets
Silver wings upon their chest
These are men, America's best
One hundred men will test today
But only three win the Green Beret
Back at home a young wife waits
Her Green Beret has met his fate
He has died for those oppressed
Leaving her his last request
Put silver wings on my son's chest
Make him one of America's best
He'll be a man they'll test one day
Have him win the Green Beret.