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Dreamscape


"1/4 hipster, 3/4 kawaii"

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A new villain, with the help of his faithful minion, Delusional Sunshine, decides to take over Equestria. His plan, use his illogical mind to put everypony into submission. This little colt that some call Illogic is something far worse than any villain before him, or is he? Maybe, he's not a villain at all. Like always, it's up to the very logical Twilight and her friends, along with the Elements of Harmony, to save the day. But that's the logical thing to do right? This time logic cannot win so, Twilight turns to Discord for help. The spirit of chaos then creates a very illogical plan that just might work. This plan involves everyone's favorite villains doing an unthinkable task that has never been thought of as possible before.


Ideas for this story came up when I conversed with a non-brony friend who has a surprisingly large knowledge of pony, about what he would be like as a pony. His name is Robert (Illogic himself). We discovered that his illogical abilities would create a great villain. Day after day of conversing with each other we came up with the basis of this story and I decided it would be quite fun to write. We continued to converse throughout this story's development adding more and more details and story line.

This story is a little bit different than what I normally write. The story already being illogical, I decided to just let the writing flow and incorporate random things that I was thinking of at the time into the story, making a very random and funny tale. But I still stuck with my usual story structure. So, although a more random story than my usual writing, it still has good structure and flow.

Delusional Sunshine was created by Robert and is a very exaggerated version of my optimism.

Ginger Spice was created by the two of us and is based on my red headed buddy, Tanner. I mean no offense from any of the ginger related jokes in this story, just humor. I love and respect all you red heads out there.

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 28 )

I apologize for any grammatical errors I may not have corrected. I am a horrible proof reader.

I can't... wait .... i don't .... im confused how that evan work:twilightoops:

Well, just read all four chapters. And from what I've read, I've really enjoyed it. You created a very unique and intriguing villain and developed a cool story around him. And the concept of his defeat is very interesting as well.

I do think that it's not as much a random comedy as the chapters progress (perhaps more of a dark fic?), but I still like it. A lot. Keep on writing, my friend!

Oh, you mentioned in your author's notes in Ch 3 about not being a good proofreader. I'd be willing to help you proofread your chapters if you so desire. :pinkiehappy:

2291866 Well I'm glad you're enjoying it so far and I'd love to have your help with proof reading. As for the story not being a random comedy, the chapter I'm working on at the moment is quite a bit more comedic than the previous chapters and its just going to get progressively more and more random as the story progresses from this point on.

2298371 Well I shall be looking forward to the randomness that lies ahead. :pinkiehappy:

And if you'd like me to proofread your next chapter, just PM me with some sort of link to it, and I'll be happy to do what I can. :twilightsmile:

"Thanks for all the help, SlipperPutty!

You're quite welcome, my good sir.

Comment posted by Dreamscape deleted Jun 30th, 2013

2116367 What - oohhhhhh......the trash compacter, right.....Other than that, I don't see any references.

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Most all of them were Star Wars ones and holy shit. People still read this?

3757056 I'm most likely the first person to read this in a while. By the way, you should probably get an actual proofreader. I mean, this story has quite a bit of potential, but it's let down by bad grammar. And I only got the references once I knew they were there. I mean, like, the spelling is pretty much perfect, and I'm willing to let the grammar slide when you aren't trying to have good grammar (i.e., "Do you even villain?") but other than that, the grammar is the major letdown. Also, I'd like to see this story continued. Maybe join up with another writer. This is a legitimate good story, it just has grammar issues that are quite obvious if you know what to look for.:twilightsheepish:

3757214
Well I don't have one and no one wants to so oh well

3757742 I'd be happy to if I could find the time. I mean, I know my shit. I'm a teenager, and I've got the mind of a fanfic writer. I could help you out if I got the chance. Possibly next time there's a three-day-weekend.:twilightsmile::pinkiehappy::pinkiesmile::raritystarry::scootangel::yay:

You didn't truly think you could escape me did you?

3788942
Oh my gosh, you're alive! I thought you disappeared from the face of the Earth or something haha :pinkiesmile:

No, I merely took a bit of a hiatus. How has your face been doing?

My face has been rather busy.

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Mine too. So much schoolyness. How goes your venture into the national guard? At least I think that's what you were going into. Correct me if I'm wrong.

I've finished with my NG training and am now currently employed at a lumber mill. Tis interesting to be sure. So how is said schoolyness going for you?

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definitely sounds interesting and its going fairly alright. The whole senior project has kept me up many nights though and the stress gets to me. I guess I've been diagnosed with minor depression issues, not necessarily diagnosed but had to take some quiz type thing and the results were minor depression. I literally think it is caused by the stress.

3811556 Probably. Just don't let it hit you too hard. The entire thing can actually be completed in about 2 weeks. (I know this from personal experience.)

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I'm just worried about the 15 hours with a mentor. I have 0 so far

Lol, my mentor and I bs'd the time sheet. I got rather lucky.

3840841
indeed you did. I wish my mentor did that...she's just horrible at scheduling thats about it haha

She might. Just subtly hint at it.

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