I think this chapter is alot better than previous ones.Mainly because it didn't feel rushed.I personaly could have done with more details such as more dialogue between characters and the thoughts of said characters as they act.Overall,I say good job and I can see the extra effort you put into this story based on the quality.I hope to see more.
1780598 thanks for the helpful advice and I do need help with this story so it is nice of you to offer. The reason why Chrissy is so obsessed with sex and meat is that she is an omnivore that had barely had meat so for her it's kind of like a paradise. Sex is because she in and of it's self is a very seductive character. Often using her voice and manipulation skills for her own personal gain. Another reason for sex is because she has different morals than Tyler and her culture is totally different. The third reason for sex is because she loves Tyler and wants to show him how much her love for him is, as in her head a kiss isn't enough affection for her feelings. I hope that clears the meat and sex question up for you and I will probably have tyler ask the question you just did because it will add more to the story. So thanks for choosing to help me and hopefully we will make an awesome team
1779157 Hey what would you think if I made the story around 20 chapters long? It's just that I have plans for the general story of this fic and I was hoping for your advice.
ok back. is kinda hard because i dont know how do you want the story end, and all that stuff but what i know is
1: maybe describe a little more how go the relation between chrysis and the human. 2: Add 1 bad event XD 3: maybe describe more how the human react when he was not with Chryssie. Like at is job etc...
i dont say to slow your story, just add more description about the feeling they have for eatch other, this way we wil care more about the character
1789545 Thanks i'm actually writing the chapter right now. I have added more description to his work but not much as I didn't see it fit for people to be bored, watching every move he made.
haahaha XD dont descripte all the thing, like how many step ge do or how was the color of the clothe of everbody else in the background, just add more description about their feeling
i dont know why, but the only word i have in mind when i read this chapter is The calm before the storm.........
I think this chapter is alot better than previous ones.Mainly because it didn't feel rushed.I personaly could have done with more details such as more dialogue between characters and the thoughts of said characters as they act.Overall,I say good job and I can see the extra effort you put into this story based on the quality.I hope to see more.
Hmmm…five days and Chrysalis has not abandon the idea of sex…did she is by any chance is a little nymphomaniac?
1780598 thanks for the helpful advice and I do need help with this story so it is nice of you to offer. The reason why Chrissy is so obsessed with sex and meat is that she is an omnivore that had barely had meat so for her it's kind of like a paradise. Sex is because she in and of it's self is a very seductive character. Often using her voice and manipulation skills for her own personal gain. Another reason for sex is because she has different morals than Tyler and her culture is totally different. The third reason for sex is because she loves Tyler and wants to show him how much her love for him is, as in her head a kiss isn't enough affection for her feelings. I hope that clears the meat and sex question up for you and I will probably have tyler ask the question you just did because it will add more to the story. So thanks for choosing to help me and hopefully we will make an awesome team
1779157 Hey what would you think if I made the story around 20 chapters long? It's just that I have plans for the general story of this fic and I was hoping for your advice.
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20 chapter it seem good, but what kind of advice do you want from me
1789380 What would you like to see happen or maybe stuff I should go into more detail with instead of skimming over.
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hum...ok let me think about it, i will be back in 5 minute with a answer
ok back. is kinda hard because i dont know how do you want the story end, and all that stuff but what i know is
1: maybe describe a little more how go the relation between chrysis and the human.
2: Add 1 bad event XD
3: maybe describe more how the human react when he was not with Chryssie. Like at is job etc...
i dont say to slow your story, just add more description about the feeling they have for eatch other, this way we wil care more about the character
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FOr you, a dancing Luna
1789545 Thanks i'm actually writing the chapter right now. I have added more description to his work but not much as I didn't see it fit for people to be bored, watching every move he made.
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haahaha XD dont descripte all the thing, like how many step ge do or how was the color of the clothe of everbody else in the background, just add more description about their feeling
1789545 nice.