18871891887175 I am so sorry but he won't stay that way for long and honestly I didn't know what the fuck I was writing when I wrote this. I was writing on a whim and I never thought most of this shit through. It was recommended by someone that I do this so I did it anyway. But honestly I needed to try something different and this was rushed but I want you to understand that I am the author and this is my story sure things may be rushed some of the time but I need to shape things and mold it for the future. In fact you would probably pissed more with what could have happened (chrysalis tries to change him back and makes him into a colt) I feel more disappointing that you are in fact flipping your shit over a single chapter. Remember I can't always be 100% and I said already that I am just a horrible writer and can't build a story properly. But even further this is why I have never been feature and why I regard this as shit. So bitch all you want but I have to complete what I started and not do what happened with Unknown World. You may not like it and I might not like the negative feedback but this has to happen.
1887175 Also how does he go with the flow? He doesn't know what is going to happen, doesn't know who she is, and beats on her. He doesn't go with the flow he does what he can. And I honestly don't know what is going to happen I'm just doing this off the top of my head.
1887466 Taking advise on a whim, and then rushing a story is never a good thing to do. Also, sorry but i won't be reading anymore. There have been too many times where it was said that a transformation was temporary, but then became permanant. I understand that it is your story to do what you, and I wish you luck with this.
1887498 I never plan to change who tyler is and this is only temporary I never wanted to see you go but I need something new instead of doing the same thing over and over. It gets repetitive and old after a while. I'm saddened that you're leaving and don't have any faith in me as a writer. I truely shows that my thoughts are correct on most things and if you hate this chapter so much it will be taken down. I don't know now what I will do with this story. Maybe hand it to another author to write or abandon it all together since I'm not a good enough writer to do this justice. So I guess you could say that I'm weak and can't take criticism well but that is my nature because I have had such a hard time and such.
1887575 If the story was getting repetative the best hing that could hve been done was introduce a conflict. But things have to be thought out. Trying to rush the story, or force it in a certain direction usually doesn't end well. And please, don't take my disdain personally. I have an extreme biased againts humans changing species. One of the things I really hate. Also like I said, I have really ran into too many stories where a temporary change became permenant, so I am very jaded with that. Plus don't let my dislike for the direction you wanted to take stop you. I am just one reader. Listen to some other opinions before you decide to do something drastic. Others might not have such an extreme reaction as I have. Just continue doing what you want to. At the end of the day the only person you have to please is yourself. I am sorry if I have caused you to doubt yourself.
Ok, the ending I just have to ask, what just happen? This strange woman show and somehow, fool Chrysalis, so she didn't saw that was another changeling queen? Then just grab Tyler kiss him, and when she was about to do him a blow job, he scream…and then suddenly he is in a cell? What the hell? What happen did he just get teleport?
Also, that "He discover that he will never see Chrysalis again"? It only has pass like 30 seconds, how did he just come up to that asuncion? P.S: "Chrysy is taking better than him?" Again, from them he just said things, rather strange, any other will be on rage, especially the slave part.
According to his past, what his ex do to him, plus what this other changeling is planning, oh he is about to be berserker, no go whimpering, oh well it was a good chapter over all, and I think that because the transformation, and the love Chrysalis give him, I bet, there is alot of power about to release inside him and teach that bitch the meaning of human rage.
1887831 Well if you read it correctly you will see that it says that he was being pulled away from chrysalis which I used for the transition instead of 'there was a flare of light and then he was in a cell' And he made that assumption because he's in a cell, he is in an unfamiliar environment, and Chrissy doesn't know where he is. As you know I focused this guy on myself and honestly if I found out that the mare I love couldn't be with me and I could not reassure her I would start balling my eyes out man. He isn't in equestria he is at an unknown location on earth but if I revealed any of that to you then you would ask 'how does he know?' I shaped him after myself and what I would do in this situation. My main concern would be for my lover not myself. So that explains the holes some may experience with this part.
1888045 Got it, thanks…I can see why you transforming him, I can't wait to see, how did he will escape, I bet in his position, will never cheat Chrysalis, and prefer die before do something with that bitch, I can bet Chrysalis is moving mountains and oceans searching for him
(menacing voice) I will take a sword and shove it up your pussy and start to twist it you stupid queen cunt! HE BELONGS TO CHRYSALIS! (nice chapter by the way)
1887189 1887175 I am so sorry but he won't stay that way for long and honestly I didn't know what the fuck I was writing when I wrote this. I was writing on a whim and I never thought most of this shit through. It was recommended by someone that I do this so I did it anyway. But honestly I needed to try something different and this was rushed but I want you to understand that I am the author and this is my story sure things may be rushed some of the time but I need to shape things and mold it for the future. In fact you would probably pissed more with what could have happened (chrysalis tries to change him back and makes him into a colt) I feel more disappointing that you are in fact flipping your shit over a single chapter. Remember I can't always be 100% and I said already that I am just a horrible writer and can't build a story properly. But even further this is why I have never been feature and why I regard this as shit. So bitch all you want but I have to complete what I started and not do what happened with Unknown World. You may not like it and I might not like the negative feedback but this has to happen.
1887175 Also how does he go with the flow? He doesn't know what is going to happen, doesn't know who she is, and beats on her. He doesn't go with the flow he does what he can. And I honestly don't know what is going to happen I'm just doing this off the top of my head.
1887466
Taking advise on a whim, and then rushing a story is never a good thing to do.
Also, sorry but i won't be reading anymore. There have been too many times where it was said that a transformation was temporary, but then became permanant.
I understand that it is your story to do what you, and I wish you luck with this.
1887498 I never plan to change who tyler is and this is only temporary I never wanted to see you go but I need something new instead of doing the same thing over and over. It gets repetitive and old after a while. I'm saddened that you're leaving and don't have any faith in me as a writer. I truely shows that my thoughts are correct on most things and if you hate this chapter so much it will be taken down. I don't know now what I will do with this story. Maybe hand it to another author to write or abandon it all together since I'm not a good enough writer to do this justice. So I guess you could say that I'm weak and can't take criticism well but that is my nature because I have had such a hard time and such.
1887575
If the story was getting repetative the best hing that could hve been done was introduce a conflict. But things have to be thought out. Trying to rush the story, or force it in a certain direction usually doesn't end well.
And please, don't take my disdain personally. I have an extreme biased againts humans changing species. One of the things I really hate. Also like I said, I have really ran into too many stories where a temporary change became permenant, so I am very jaded with that.
Plus don't let my dislike for the direction you wanted to take stop you. I am just one reader. Listen to some other opinions before you decide to do something drastic. Others might not have such an extreme reaction as I have.
Just continue doing what you want to. At the end of the day the only person you have to please is yourself.
I am sorry if I have caused you to doubt yourself.
Good luck with all of your endeavors.
Ok, the ending I just have to ask, what just happen? This strange woman show and somehow, fool Chrysalis, so she didn't saw that was another changeling queen?
Then just grab Tyler kiss him, and when she was about to do him a blow job, he scream…and then suddenly he is in a cell? What the hell? What happen did he just get teleport?
Also, that "He discover that he will never see Chrysalis again"? It only has pass like 30 seconds, how did he just come up to that asuncion? P.S: "Chrysy is taking better than him?" Again, from them he just said things, rather strange, any other will be on rage, especially the slave part.
According to his past, what his ex do to him, plus what this other changeling is planning, oh he is about to be berserker, no go whimpering, oh well it was a good chapter over all, and I think that because the transformation, and the love Chrysalis give him, I bet, there is alot of power about to release inside him and teach that bitch the meaning of human rage.
P.S: Did Tyler is in Equestria now?
I thought the chapter was good :)
seven....seven!!!!!! .....i shall read
1887831 Well if you read it correctly you will see that it says that he was being pulled away from chrysalis which I used for the transition instead of 'there was a flare of light and then he was in a cell' And he made that assumption because he's in a cell, he is in an unfamiliar environment, and Chrissy doesn't know where he is. As you know I focused this guy on myself and honestly if I found out that the mare I love couldn't be with me and I could not reassure her I would start balling my eyes out man. He isn't in equestria he is at an unknown location on earth but if I revealed any of that to you then you would ask 'how does he know?' I shaped him after myself and what I would do in this situation. My main concern would be for my lover not myself. So that explains the holes some may experience with this part.
1888045
Got it, thanks…I can see why you transforming him, I can't wait to see, how did he will escape, I bet in his position, will never cheat Chrysalis, and prefer die before do something with that bitch, I can bet Chrysalis is moving mountains and oceans searching for him
hmmmm...cliffhanger can't wait for more and excited chapter i love stories like this
(menacing voice) I will take a sword and shove it up your pussy and start to twist it you stupid queen cunt! HE BELONGS TO CHRYSALIS! (nice chapter by the way)