• Published 20th Nov 2012
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Running from Slender - Undead_Non-Brony



my name is Michael. i went on a hunting trip with a couple of my freinds. worst idea ever.

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Gotta Admit, It Was Pretty Funny

I rushed forward.

Two Slender Beings rushed at him, and he delivered a falcon kick to the first, which sent it flying into the second. I ran to them, and said, "Tell your dentist i'm sorry!" and stomped on their faces! Another Slender Grabbed me with his tnedrils and lifted me into the air. My tatoo's pulsed, and he dropped me with a savage cry, emitted from a torn open mouth. I tackled him, took his head in my hands, and snapped it sideways. A tendril shot out of a group of theem, and it peirced my arm. I cried out, not in pain, but anger. I made a tendril shoot out of my back and it peirced at least two Slenders in the crowd the tendril had come from.

I was an absolute beast, tearing through the entire crowd of Slender's in only a few minutes. By the end, only three others were in the room. Slender Man and his surviving lackeys. He started applauding and said 'congratulations! you have single-handedly defeated an army of slender beings! unfortunately, it was in vain. you will not defeat me.'

"in your words, We Shall See."

I rushed at him, pulling a katana out of a passing shadow. He took a stance and sharpened his tendrils. I swung with precicsion at his leg, only to be parried away. He swung two tendrils that, if they caught me, i would have been halved. I jumped straight into the air at least 8 feet, and avoided such a fate. Then I got thrown back by a tendril I hadn't seen.

'hahaha! you talk big, but you fail to live up to your words. you can't even defend yourself! i'm surprised that your dog even made it past being a pup!'

For the second time that day, he fucked up. I got up, and grabbed he and his friends in my crushing tendrils. Slowly, I started to glow silver. I kept getting more and more intense until It hurt to keep my eyes open. But I forced mysef to do so, I wanted to watch these three die as painfully as possible. The light was starting to sear my skin, and it was doing even more damage to the Slender's. They were writhing and screaming in pain. They tried to escape my vise like grip, but it was pointless. This was their end. Suddenly, I heard a voice in my head.

'michael! you have to stop! if you don't, this entire castle will explode, along with the surrounding area's!'

"I don't care! They killed my dog! I would burn this entire world to see them die an excrutiating death!"

'what!? if you let this happen, Colmillo won't get buried!'

That made me think. Colmillo? Not getting a proper burial?

"FFFUUUUUUUUUCCCKKKK!!!!!!!!"

With a burst of strength, I etched a message to Celestia on the marble wall, and cocooned myself and the slenders in tendrils. There was a flash, then nothing. Silence. And a crying goddess.

***

Celestia watched Michael scream in anger, then he carved something in the marble, and dissapear in a flash of silver. She started to cry. She sat in the doorway where she last saw him and cried. After a few minutes she got up and walked out to the crowd of ponies. She composed herself and wiped the tears from her eyes.

"Citizens of Equestria! There is no need to fear! The threat has been vanquished, and it will never return again!"

They broke out into wild cheers and applause. Then they started chanting "Ce-les-tia, Ce-les-tia, Ce-les-tia!!!" but she silenced them.

"I am not the one who defeated the Slender Army."

Luna stepped forward. "Sister, where is Michael?"

Celestia looked at her and shook her head. The crowd suddenly realized what had happened in the castle, and they bowed there heads in respect for the human who had saved their lives.

***

It had been three years since Michael had sacrificed himself so his dog could be buried. The castle had been repaired, but Michaels last words had been left in the marble, a way to honor him.

Colmillo had been given a hero's burial. A grave in the roayal garden where he played while Michael had been in a coma was granted, along with a statue of himself and his master, which stood in the town square of Canterlot. A plaque was placed at the feet of the two, and on it was Michaels message. 'Stand Up For What You Believe In'.

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He woke up in a seemingly familiar forest. It was night, and he couldn't see very well. Behind him was a fence, and next to him was a flashlight and a note. On the note was 'Don't let me catch you'. He stood up and tried to climb the fence, but when he did, he fell backwards. He picked up the flashlight. 'allright, ill play your game'.

He walked around, not really sure of what he was supposed to be doing. Then he saw a peice of paper on a tree. On it was written, 'don't stop moving'. He figured it would be a good idea to listen to this note. He moved on, and soon found himself facing an old truck and a dilapitated shed. he walked around to the back of the shed and found another note.

It didn't say anything, but rather had a crudely drawn dog with blood around the neck area. He ripped it down and stepped on it, feeling animosity towards the drawn dog. Then he heard what sounded like a bass. It sounded familiar, and he felt like he should like the noise, but it almost... scared him. He kept moving.

Soon, he came upon what looked like oil silo's. What they wer doing out here, he had no idea. He started to walk towards them, but then he heard footsteps behind him. He turned and clicked on the flash light and saw... Nothing? He could have sworn he heard something...

He made his way to the silo's, although much more wary now. He walked around the silo's, until he saw yet another note. On it was 'don't turn around'. He turned around. He saw what looked like a bathhouse, but off to the side of it, was... something else. it was taller than him, and had tendrils that gripped onto the trees around it and lifted it off. He got really scared, terrified even, and ran into the bathhouse.

He tried to hide in one of the rooms, but he found a note in the room he chose. this one said 'dead'. he felt a tap at his shoulder, and he knew this was the end. He turned and what he saw was... The most terrifying thing ever. It's face had a fresh glasgow smile, with blood leaking from the cuts, and its eye were pitch black, with a red pupil in the left eye. He backed up as much as he could, but when he did, the thing just put its face closer. 'what are you?' He asked.

"I am the punishment of God. If you had not committed great sins, God would not have set a punishment such as I upon you."

It's voice was low and grumbly, but it also sounded like there were many voices speaking at once. He tried to close his eyes, but found that he had no eyes. He tried to scream, but he had no mouth. The thing just lifted a tendril, and stabbed him through the stomach. He fell to the floor, and passed out from blood loss.

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I took the contacts out of my eyes and wiped the paint off the side of my mouth. I pulled my tendrils back into my body, and palced a hand on Slender Mans wound, healing it. Then I grabbed him by the feet and started dragging him back, my tendrils replacing the notes, and making everything as it was. I soon got back to the face with the unconcious prisoner. I left him there, and walked through a portal that had opened up.

I found myself back in the familiar room my new friends War, Pestilence, Famine, and Death were playing Halo. I sat down on the couch and picked up a Monster. I opened it and took a swig. Death got up and yelled "Dammit! Why Do I Even Play This With You War?"

"Cuz youre a dumbass!" Responded War.

"Hey, could you guys keep it down a bit? I ain't felling to go- BLARGH!!" Pestilence just threw up.

"Hey guys? Why doesn't he have a bucket or something?" I asked. They all looked at me, then at each other, and back to me. "Why Didn't I Think Of That?"

"I told you, youre a dumbass!"

Death tackled War and started punching him in the face. War just kept laughing while Death beat on his face. I got up and used my tendrils to pull Death of him, and Death said "Hey, I saw What You Did In There With Slender Man. It's Getting Pretty Creepy What You Can Do With Those Powers."

"I know. I love using them to scare him."

"Hey, Do have to do that to him? I mean, you've done that every day since you got here." Pointed out Famine.

"He deserve's it! And you gotta admit, it was pretty funny."

"Yeah all right, you got a point."

I got up off the couch and walked to my bedroom. Before I reached the door, I turned back to the whole group and said "Hey i'm going to sleep. If any of you think of coming into my room... Don't."

They all nodded and went back to fucking with each other. I opened the door to my room and closed it behind me. Laying on the bed, I couldn't help but think of Colmillo. Death explained to me that since he was an animal, he passed on another plane of existance. There was nothing that could be done to go and see him, and he wasn't going to try breaking the unspoken laws of necromancy. So, I just pulled his picture out of my wallet and taped it on the ceiling above my bed. It was of me holding him, while he held onto a pheasant that he had caught while hunting one time. It was my favorite picture of him.

Fin

Author's Note:

"I am the punishment of God. If you had not committed great sins, God would not have sent a punishment like me upon you."

-Gengis Khan

Comments ( 42 )

D:

good ending, but I'm still sad.

Awesome and random chapter. Great story too!

somebody start the slow clap :fluttercry:

1909340 yeah. i went for that.

1909373 if someone wants too, they can. but i dont know where theyll go with it.

1909461That mean your not doing one? :fluttercry:

I was reading this with my dog... bravo

The liker wuz here but the favoriter is not so in turn I am now watching you, good story guy or girl whatevs

good story...:coolphoto:

The end ?

Comment posted by Undead_Non-Brony deleted Jan 5th, 2013

THAT WAS AMAZING!!!:pinkiegasp:
I loved your fic!! I almost cried when Colmillo and Michael died... But THAT is an awesome ending.

1932020 is that supposed to be a insult?

Comment posted by xErickKingx deleted Jan 10th, 2013

1934634 ok. I dont want to sound like an ass, but I didn't write it for you. I wrote this for myself, mainly, to stay occupied. If everyone had clicked the dislike, I still wouldve continued it. If you dont like it, make your own story. I could understand if you were giving constructive critisism, but you arent. until then, your opinion wont get very high up on my list. Please dont take this the wrong way.

Comment posted by xErickKingx deleted Jan 10th, 2013

1935081 as author, I call upon my powers of... DELETE!!!

Comment posted by xErickKingx deleted Jan 10th, 2013

Okay, I'm sorry to say this, but you making sense out of Slender completely ruins things for me. Slender is meant to be a horror. What makes Slender the worst is the UNKNOWN. He watches you from various locations at various times of the day. You have no idea why. He infects you with a terrible disease. It makes you that much more paranoid. You go insane in a very bad way. And then he takes you. But you never learn why. But here, you have Slender as a mere hunter. Yes, a tall, creepy thing with tentacles, but a hunter nonetheless. LAME! Slender has been the only one to EVER give me the shivers. I find not trying to live up to the horror as a horror is just a complete through-off. Also, it's VERY rushed, from what little I was able to get through so far.

1942197 That almost makes me want to scrap this and start over. Maybe slow it down, develop the hunting a bit more on earth, a bit more violent. Now that I think about it, I might actually do a sequel. You sir have made me realize how much better this couldve been. Thank you, i'll be brainstorming ideas, and if I hit an intellectual vein, I'll do a sequel.

finally a story where slender get completely fucking screwed been waiting for this for years no words to describe the feelings of happiness this brings me so instead :moustache:

1944120 I have one question is the undead meant to be Hollywood Undead?

Is this Michael from RoosterTeeth? I don't know why I want to know if he is or isn't. It would be hilarious though if it was him.

Is it meant ironic. Being hunted after hunting himself?

3280407 I Don't know. I got bored one day, I was tired and had read some slenderman creepy pastas. I cannot fathom how this got as many likes as it did. This sucks ass.

3368114 HAHAHA!!! You have no room to talk! 9 likes!? 34 dislikes!? HAHAHAHAHAHA!!!! But yeah, it does suck.

666 views... coincident? I think not!!!

4105841
"In this game call Hip Hop,
everythings twisted,
You rap about drugs and guns and people listen!
You mention how you flossin' yo whip,
and how ya DIP it,
an' your biggest VICES become their ADDICTION!
Why?
Who knows,
but you gotta SUPPLY it,
you gotta PROVIDE it,
'cuz you know they'll BUY it!
They don't like the good,
they're in love with the bad side,
like how many niggas' you done clapped last night,
an' how many chicks did'jou hit from the backside,
an' how many keys do you need to get'cha cash right?
Yeah!
I geuss crime pays these days,
so don't get upset when talk this way.
Imma' say whatever I want,
whenver I want,
ta' whoever I want,
these are just my devilish thoughts!
I'm not looking for salvation,
i'm just a really good person in a FUCKED UP situation!"

-SwizZz, Lucifer Effect

"I'm really high."

-Me, Just Now

Reading this a 2nd time.... it was jist as good and funny as the first time, only with a hint of nostalgia in it

4404035 You have nothing better to do with your time?

4405654 Hey, it is a good story, and the main character is a seemingly badass person, unlike most main characters that are frail and weak pussies. It was about a man and his dog (obviously), and it doesnt get much better than that. Plus, I haven't read this in a long time, so reading it a 2nd time helps you notice stuff that you might've overlooked the first time

i have an idea but it would go in the legit horror class Make a story about JASON!!!!!:rainbowwild::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

4405683
About most other stories having weak protagonists, It's because there's an unspoken law in writing that you should always avoid a 'Mary sue' Meaning the protagonist is too badass. I mean, Being able to defeat 50 slender beings? that's a bit OP

Please make a sequel this is my favorite story I have ever read and you are genius to come up with it I don't care if it takes a year or so im ok if you take your time but please at some point make a sequel unless you don't want to or there's not meant to be one.

5338973 That won't ever, no Never, happen. But thank you for the compliment, I appreciate it, really.

5708924 I got an erection reading your comment.

6374759 Yeah, mos def. I wrote this when I thought ponies were cool, like almost 4 years ago, so its shitty.

This. This story was awesome! Complete, unadulterated awesome! So worth reading in a single sitting!

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