The Dark

Rebound

Rebound #1 · Oct 26th, 2012 · · ·

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No.

TranscriptBrony

TranscriptBrony #2 · Oct 26th, 2012 · · ·

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No as in what? lol

LukeZaz

LukeZaz #3 · Oct 26th, 2012 · · ·

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Is there a chance of applying this concept to Rainbow Factory in any way?

TranscriptBrony

TranscriptBrony #4 · Oct 26th, 2012 · · ·

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Possibly....

TranscriptBrony

TranscriptBrony #5 · Oct 26th, 2012 · · ·

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I intended it just to be the speech of Pinkie and the victim, but thank you for your criticism, it helps a lot

Axolu

Axolu #6 · Oct 26th, 2012 · · ·

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Interesting perspective on an old concept. I likes!
Just out of curiosity, will you be continuing this with the other horror/gorefic stories (exp. of TS, RainbowFac., CG, etc.)?
And also agreed with Insanity. If we're seeing it, then we're supposed to be seeing it, not just hearing it (and why can't we taste or smell, or feel some bloodsplatters?).

I caught two spelling errors.

So special is my special place....the name says it all right? My bumble abode, as some would say.

Did you intend to say 'humble' abode? Though bumble abode is still a pretty good pun.

I now it burns, Toppy, but please don't squirm.

Just a quick letter addition and you're good.

Tbh, I found this to be a bit short. The original Cupcakes was 3914 words, this is 1717. Adding details as I noted above should do well to solve this, but if you'd prefer to stick with the dialogue, you gotta' get creative with the slicing and dicing.

Also, you've given me a horribly shanazzy idea. I probably won't use it, but I'd be more than happy to share it.

Anyway,

Ave,
Axôlú

askireet

askireet #7 · Oct 26th, 2012 · · ·

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I don't know about other ponies but here's how I feel about this.

Any Cupcakes-sequel-esque material really ought do more than just squick the reader and eliminate more canon characters. It may or may not even have to do that. What it should do for one is bring a few laughs or smiling; albeit dark, technically Cupcakes was written as a joke / satire, though not everypon knows this. Next you ought to tap what Trees tapped by channeling Dexter a little bit (if you haven't seen Dexter, you should watch it, though feel free to skip Season 6 entirely and jump right into 7). If you're doing it right, you're making a bit of a lovable (anti)hero; Sergeant Sprinkles made Pie a villain clearly, but since then she has taken on a life of her own and for it to be more than a oneshot, you need to expand on this. What motivates her? What makes her justified etc.

Xenonic

Xenonic #8 · Oct 26th, 2012 · · ·

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This...I don't know what to say. It's well written. But I don't know whether I upvote it or not.

TranscriptBrony

TranscriptBrony #9 · Oct 26th, 2012 · · ·

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I may continue with other spin offs of other popular horror fics but I will remember to add some detail, oh and thanks for the spelling errors that u found Axolu, I'm actually laughing at the bumble abode one, but thanks for pointing the out!