The Equestria Scrolls V: Skyrim

The Mane 6 learn of a new evil rising in Equestria. Alduin the world-eater, a powerful dragon, has returned to destroy Equestria. Twilight and her friends are given the task of finding an scroll of magical knowledge, so that they can stop Alduin before it's too late. They are sent to Skyrim Temple, in the tallest mountains on the north edge of Equestria, where the dragonborns used to roam. Do they still exist? Can Alduin be stopped in time?

Chapters (4)

Prologue · 31st Dec 2011 · 130 words
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Chapter 1 - Dawn Meets Dusk · 1st Jan 2012 · 579 words
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Chapter 2 - Seeker of the Scrolls · 3rd Jan 2012 · 687 words
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Chapter 3 - Alduin Has Awaken · 4th Jan 2012 · 366 words
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7x9000

7x9000 #1 · Apr 17th, 2012 · · · Chapter 3 - Alduin Has Awaken ·

Awesome story, chapters could be a little longer, but overall, AWESOME!

Chaotic Note

Chaotic Note #2 · Jun 15th, 2012 · · · Chapter 2 - Seeker of the Scrolls ·

Has potential but could be spaced out better so the paragraphs don't look so smashed together. Shouldn't be cancelled, only delayed.

Chaotic Note #3 · Jun 15th, 2012 · · · Chapter 3 - Alduin Has Awaken ·

Man this is incrediably short, my advice? Work a little on it every day until you get 1,000-2000 words on it.

Gaven

Gaven #4 · Sep 22nd, 2012 · · · Chapter 3 - Alduin Has Awaken ·

I'm still new to the site but as an avid reader I agree with the others. A short chapter is okay every now and again but four short chapters in a row is kida pointless. Your doing a good job you just need to add length to the chapters. Course using a bit more imagery is another thing. Afterall even with a fan-fic a writer should try to paint an image with their words.
(Note I know the last line I put is kinda lame but its my opinion from years of reading books.)

icedude94