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TheLunarArmy


20 Year old brony Livin' in Grahamstown, South-Africa. Luna is best Dash is second Twilight is third. w00t

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In an alternative universe the ninjas from the hidden village of Konoha discover an ancient temple used to protect a forgotten clan and to test ninja's loyalty. In a complete twist of fate, a team of ninja manages to seal a demon fox inside a stone orb and banish it from existence. But where did it go? And how could this possibly have an effect on the ponies of Equestria?

Chapters (12)
Comments ( 97 )

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

Wow! :pinkiegasp: nice use of the show reference too!

Ok so I wasn't sure about this one but I thought, What the Hell and gave it a shot. I am not disappointed at all, you have done a good job on the crossover, and will be interesting to see Dash finding out that she has a fox in her gut. ~Celestia's Paladin, Ex Solis et Lunae, Providentia et Prospera

Glad to hear it, stay tuned :)

i will be awaiting the next installment

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

Edited version now released. Thanks again Ezn for your hard work! Absolute 1337. :twilightsmile:

Oh boy let the sarcasm and snark off begin, the red corner is the dreaded Kyuubi no Kitsune and in teh blue corner is Rainbow Dash, Challengers begin!

Things look like they are going to get interesting. ~Celestia's Paladin, Ex Solis et Lunae, Providentia et Prospera

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

can't wait to see Dash go all Kyuubi on them Xd

Oh, god, don't tell me she goes kyuubi and kills one of her friends.

Looks good so far I cant wait to see more :heart:

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

WOW, that is one heck of a picture! Shit is about to go DOWN SON!

I like how even in fan-fiction Sakura is useless

Anyway, interesting setup. Gonna keep reading :rainbowkiss:

Good story, mate! I have a bad feeling of what's going to happen next, though...

The start made no sense at all.

First, shouldn't those people insulting him be put to death for talking about the fox in Naruto? Wasn't there some kind of rule that any mention of it would result in death? And why would Kakashi and Sakura get mad at Naruto in this situation? Sakura even hit him for no reason!

Also, why wouldn't Naruto recognize the symbols? Sure, he might not understand what they mean, but shouldn't at least recognize what they look like?

It better end up being the jewel causing those feelings. Since if it isn't then Dash is extremely OoC. She's the element of loyalty for a reason, you know.

Why does everyone seem so out of character?

Twilight attacked someone, broke so many rules it's not even funny, and then suddenly turned into a master manipulator.

Rainbow Dash seems to have forgotten that her element is loyalty, and that it's that way for a reason. It took only a small amount of idiotic reasoning from Kyuubi for her to end up doubting her friends. Also, how could she have failed to join the Wonderbolts? She's never even tried before. The other argument Kyuubi gave about her ending up unloved and alone made no sense, since he said it would happen because she has friends. That's a serious contradiction right there.

I'll keep reading to see if it gets better, but so far it seems everyone is just OoC.

Other than that, everything else seems fine, as I don't see many mistakes.

As far as I know, and as far as both the Manga and non-filler Anime canons, Naruto has no idea of his past until he meets his mother in the Naruto and Bee Arc. So I can easily go under the assumption that Naruto has little care or knowledge what his true origins really are. :duck:
Even though the civilians are not allowed to mention the fox, they still do anyway. Hatred runs deep in the Naruto lore. :applecry:
Sakura didn't really punch Naruto, par say, but tapped him on the head for disagreeing with her. Whether this is in character is up for debate, but since I feel it is, I added it for slight comic relief. :ajsmug:

More info about the jewel / the fox / relationship with dash will be explained. Stay tuned :rainbowdetermined2:

The only two out of character is Twilight, this is for a good reason too. Twilight is always the OCD pony and I really wanted to write a story seeing how she "snaps" under pressure. I mean even the latest episode confirmed my suspicious of an insecure perfectionist hiding behind her books. Bottom line: she would do ANYTHING to not disappoint Celestia or her friends (I put a lot of emphasis on this throughout the chapters) :twilightsmile:

As for Dash... well... just stay tuned. You will see :rainbowkiss:

Thanks for the critique! Hope you enjoy the next few chapters!

This is gonna seem really random, but who else thinks we need a crazy Twilight emoticon, or maybe two one for the crazy grin she had in the bushes in the latest episode and one for that weird toothy thing she did like throughout the entire episode?

Good story I'm gonna start reading this now, tomorrow of course. :twilightsmile:

Wunderbar, wonderful pace man. I'm enjoying this story.:twilightsmile:

Heh wow I am liking this, and my classroom was like dead quiet the whole time I was reading this chapter which added to the mood of the whole ordeal, I mean it's so quiet that the teacher told us to start talking cuz we were freaking her out. I've been wondering if the ninjas are going to somehow arrive in Equestria. Anyway great story my favorite part of the way I imagined this whilst reading was when Twilight reached over to unlatch the necklace and Dash turns and gives her a death stare, and if I'm not mistaken even while Dash was invisible she was just glaring at Twi the whole time, that's kinda affable, er funny I mean.

If Dash has a rage moment I will be one happy SoB. I'll probably have to yell out "ALL CAPS RAGE", then the rest of the class either be all like staring at me or someone at the back of the room will yell out "shut up" or "chill fool". Either way I know it's going to be SO AWESOME!!!!!!!!:rainbowkiss:

Ooooooh cliffhanger! How you tease me!

This was a great chapter man. Every time it says "to be continued" at parts like this in my mind at the part leading up to the end there is some kind of music playing for instance in this one there was like a sorta battle/chase type music playing. Then when Twilight's run halted and (remember this is how I imagine it) the camera didn't show why yet, she made an expression of I guess surprise or maybe shock, then the camera shows Luna standing in the gate in a battle stance, then the mind screen goes black and the words "To Be Continued" sort of like come (from right to left) into the bottom right corner of the screen then race to the left out of view, and while the "to be continued" thing is happening there is a sorta deep humming noise in the background, then the end credits start bleach style.:eeyup:

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

“Let me tell you guys something… about friendship…”

Awwwww maaan.

It's getting on like donkey kong in here boy.

Keep writing.

THEY ARE SCREWED. That is all.

Fucking cliffhanger. Can't wait for the next chapter. :rainbowwild:

AND NOW....they are soooo dead BWAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!

Here's a horrifying thought:
A Sonic Rainboom empowered bijuudama? Celestia help us all!
And Canterlot burned with the fire of a thousand suns...

Nice action scenes there! And take all the time you need. Exams are slightly more important! Not by much, though :P

well, everypony's fucked if luna doesnt get there fast.
btw, how many tails does dash have right now?

Dash should go full on six tails on their ass

When I first read the title of the fic, i was like :rainbowwild: now I'm like :rainbowkiss::pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

Omgomgomg this is intense I love it

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