*unedited* When heroes aren't there to save you: part 2 (Flight of the phoenix) Chapter 1: Confessions
Chapter 1: Confessions.
It was a dark and quiet night: Scootaloo was sound asleep in her cloud home. Rainbow Dash was curled up next to filly on her right., Rainbow then woke up and went to the kitchen. Scootaloo heard the sink running and assumed she was only getting a glass of water. Once Rainbow curled back up into bed, Scootaloo asked something that has been heavy on her heart for a quite a long while, ever since she was adopted at least.
“Hey Rainbow…A-are you awake?” There was a slight pause between the two but eventually Rainbow spoke up and said.
“Yeah I’m awake, what is it?”
“W-well, I don’t know really how to ask you but…Do you like me living here, y’know with you and all?” Another brief moment of silence went by before Rainbow turned around to look at her daughter.
“Of course I love you being here Scoots, why would you ask something like that?” Scootaloo looked to the side with a nervous look on her face and bit her lip. She didn’t want to make anything awkward but she felt as though she might as well express what she was feeling for a while.
“Well It’s just that…I’ve been thinking and, those times when you and I were training…When you used to call me a….Y-you know, did you really mean all that? And those times when I messed up, you used to hit me on the back of the head, It just…Doesn’t make sense to me how you would all of a sudden adopt me, it actually seemed like you hated me Rainbow Dash and…” Scootaloo couldn’t continue as tears were coming down her little face. She choked a little as she began to speak again.
“And I-I hate myself f-for thinking that, you might actually… In some way…be like my parents. I know you’re nothing like them but… I can’t help but look back on what we did and slowly realize that, it looked you enjoyed hurting me. I’m sorry Rainbow b-but I can’t go back to being scared to come home. I…I just want somepony I can trust. I want that to be you Rainbow, you don’t know how much I want that but…” That was all the poor filly could get out before letting out small hiccups as she sobbed in front of Rainbow.
Rainbow looked at her daughter with a depressed look, she wasn’t sure how to react to that. Tough love was the only thing she knew when she was growing up, she wasn’t sure how to be sentimental but she tried her best.
“Scoots…I know I said some harsh things, very harsh actually. But, you have to know that when I was growing up, being strict and humiliation was the only thing I knew on how talk to ponies and how to train them. It wasn’t until I met you that I learned to praise somepony when they do well and to be caring for somepony when they slip up. That’s why I wanted you Scoots, not just because you’re a great flyer. I need you to help me be the pony I should and I’m proud to call you my daughter. I know you only hear me say things like that when you’re flying but I think it’s time I showed my love to you a bit more.”
Rainbow then grabbed the sobbing filly and hugged her close. Scootaloo buried her head within Rainbow’s blue coat. Scootaloo held Rainbow tight, she wished she hadn’t told her what she was feeling but she was so glad that she did, so in a way she felt as though this needed to happen and was glad that it did. Rainbow lowered her neck onto Scootaloo’s in a full embrace, she wanted to make sure Scootaloo knew that she was loved deeply and that whatever that history has done to them in the past, was now over.
“Scootaloo, I’m sorry... I should have never said those things, it wasn’t because I meant them, it’s because I knew you had something special in you and I just wanted to bring it out. I should have been more supportive and considerate of what happened before we began to train. Can you…Ever forgive me Scoots? I don’t blame you for asking what you needed to Scoots, I think now I see why.”
Scootaloo looked back up at Rainbow who had a bit of tears in her eyes too. Just then Scootaloo knew that she was telling the truth, because in Rainbow’s eyes she saw love. Pure, genuine, unfathomable love for her filly, this was something she never ever saw in the eyes of her parents. They never showed remorse or regret for the unimaginable pain they brought upon her both physically and mentally. This was something completely new to Scootaloo and she was so glad that came to pass. She looked back up at Rainbow and with one last tear filled smile she said.
“Yes mommy, I forgive you…I love you mommy *yawn* goodnight.” Scootaloo then closed her eyes and fell asleep in Rainbow’s arms.
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304413 Hey thanks, oh and I hope I didnt come off a bit to harsh on my comment by the way, I actually rather thouroughly (or however you spell it) enjoyed your story. It was just something that caught my eye and I actually did rather enjoy it. I really hope you didnt see it as me trying to be rude. I actually am quite intrigued as to what you're going to do with it beleive it or not. I LOVE scootaloo fics so when I read yours it just seemed to remind me of mine. Anyway I love your profile pic btw Scootaloo IS best pony.
304427
*Thoroughly. c:
I didn't take you as rude at all, so don't worry about it.
I'm kinda shocked, though, because one of the OC ponies I plan to introduce has a beta name of "Avion"... It's... really shocking at how coincidental these things are.
But oh well.
Read the second chapter of your story, and I'm liking it. It's more dark than I'd expected it to be... I like that. Mine's just this lil' happy ol' thing, with a little description of pain so far. xD
awwwwww scootaloo called RD mommy
its as sad as "i love you daddy" from my little dashie
304603 YOU GOT THE REFERENCE :D
304629
Wow, how did i not get the reference?
304753 lol it's okay yodudes you're cool with me so it's all good
Cant wait for the next chapter btw
Keep it up RW. I am loving it so far.
305984 hey thanks, will do. Oh an derpy wants to know if you enjoyed her muffin she picked for you
306179
Tell Derpy I loved the muffin...
And still am. Thanks.
FUCK YO SHIT NIGGGGAAAAAAA....
love you
still an awesome story, bro!
321523 Neat! How should I do this? Email you? Or que?
322093 Just post it onto a google document and copy and paste the link in a pm and send it to me. Or just send it to my gmail.
304629
This reminds me...
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VOQh09K2mWM
Reading:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aGAkw8GouoE&feature=youtu.be
726026 I may.....
733727 you should do an alternative chapter where scoots tells rainbow to fuck off and then she goes to the manehattan orphanage
WHERE IS THE ANIMATION? YOU ARE ABOUT 115 COMMENTS LATE!
Absolutely wonderful story. I actually found out about this story through my husband. He follows different FIM fanfics via equestria daily and youtube. He happened across this, and sent me the link on youtube of ChaseWCanon reading this. Such a touching story, and I agree that you should do a sequel! Sorry if I am a bit behind, I'm not able to really keep track of things due to deployment and all. But please do keep up the great work!!
What ever happened to avion after he ran away?
Aveion what happend to him? Will he be in the next chapter?
Dafuq happend to avion
DO IT!
FLUTTERSHY COMMANDS!!!
I'm pondering about Avion! Make the next chapter with him in it!!!
I'd just like to let you know what an amazing story you've written here it is truly beautiful. This is one of the best fanfics I have read.
PS: I understand about the typing English issue being, dyslexic I don't really mind you probably can write better English to me
1940072 times 3 man
This just throws My Little Dashie to the ground
Hey i just want you to know that you did an amazing job on your story. And i'm striving to see more of your fictions. And for the people who complained about your grammer. Just ecnore them. your an amazing writer and not all people understand that english is your second language. Welpers good job. :D
For anyone who hasn't read this story yet, it does get graphic. It might even make you cry. But despite how it might seem at the start, it's not just another of those pointless "scootabuse" stories. There is a real story, with real development that goes on here. This is one of the most touching emotional fanfics I've ever read, not just MLP fanfics. I would even go as far as to say this is my new favorite, and I'm a guy who actually cried at the end of My Little Dashie, and that's a hard story to top. Down below are spoilers, so stop reading this if haven't read the story yet.
That said, Author, because you kept saying to play music while reading this story, the only guy I could find who did a dramatic reading of this story kept playing the music while trying to do the reading. His constant commentary was bad enough, but playing music as well was... ugh. If you ever recommend that on the sequel again, please mention, "the music only works while people read it, not while they listen to it. If you are doing a dramatic reading, DON'T PLAY THE MUSIC." I would have loved to look elsewhere, but tragically your story isn't very famous for some reason, so I had to wait until I got home to read it, or put up with a bad dramatic reading.
Why did you go with a mother daughter relationship when it's always been described as a sibling relationship? Giving the age difference, it would have made a lot more sense to stay with the sibling relationship instead. Rainbow Dash is about the same age as Rarity/AJ only about a year apart. And Scoots is the same age as their little sisters. It was really awkward at the end listening to her call Rainbow Dash mother.
Great story. I would love to see the original animated into a movie. There is a place taking submissions for MLP work. http://www.dawnsomewhere.com/ They're the ones who do rainbow dash presents and are pretty decent animators now (they've come a long way). They do charge, but I'm sure you can get enough people to donate for them to animate and voice this for you. I know I would.
I know I already commented but... this story just destroyed me. Not in the way of emotional distress, but just in how great it was. Sure it was pretty poorly written in MANY sections, but the raw emotion of it all. I truly pitted scootaloo, and was hoping the whole time she would be able to turn things around.
I've read some good fanfics. While all of them were good, I truly believed, and knew I could do just as good. Even after reading my little dashie. But when I read this... it was very humbling... soul shattering. I'd been working on a project, reading other people fanfics for inspiration, hoping to match their stories, and right something truly great. This story just... destroyed all my confidence. This is what I feel like right now.
Like a man walking through a valley of heroes, starring at the statues erected in honor of those who came before and paved the way for other aspirants. The same way previous writers in the community paved the way for others back when this community was little more than a laughing stock. There are thousands of other pilgrims in the valley, all honoring and praising the works of the heroes in the valley. I wonder beyond the valley of heroes and looked across the land. What I saw made me drop to my knees.
I see is no mere statue, but a monument that pierces the heavens. I then realize I was not a man, but a mere insect. The final vision I had for my work in progress was nothing compared to this.
But it was also a lonely monument. Despite how magnificent a sight it was to behold, it was off in the distance where very few souls were graced by it's majesty. I look back down the valley of heroes. Their statues were surrounded by thousands of admirers. I pitied them, for few of them had witnessed what I had here today. I pitied the lonely monument that would never touch the sight of those in the valley below. I returned to the valley, but it's image was still seared into my mind. Even if I did somehow match the legends in the valley below, and if somehow my work ever reached their heights, I knew deep in my soul it would never match the glory of the lonely monument I beheld that day.
I just feels like... even if somehow I do write something that becomes popular. Even if it becomes more popular than this story (and for some reason, your story just doesn't have as many views as I think it deserves), I just know in the back of my mind, it'll never be as good as the story I read right here.
Then again, maybe it's just the initial shock of emotion I got from reading it. I do recall a similar feeling from my little dashie. But that feeling went away really quickly. It's been a couple days now, and I still can't get this story out of my head.
This is the most criminally underrated fic of all time. This fic is honestly beautiful. Only two fics made my sheds a tear, and this story is one of them.
I HNNNNNNNNNED SO HARD!
This is probably one of two RD and Scoots fics I've read that I've read with nearly spot on character development, the other being What's Really The Most Important, and believe me I read a lot, Scootadiction and all. 9~6 You know how favorite characters and fanfics go I'm sure. Good show sir or ma'am. ^-^
i hate to bring thi up but we never actualy got a conclusion to the race? is scootaloo in the hall of fame.
THOU MUST ADDRESS THIS
Are there any plans to complete this story? I ask because I am going to favorite this because the plot behind it sounds interesting. HOWEVER, until it is completed, I am going to give it a thumbs down. Because while I may approve of the plot behind the story, I DO NOT approve of the fact that it has been 2 years, 9 months, 3 week, and 2 days since the last update. I mean, I understand that greatness can't be rushed, but needing 1028 days in order to update the next chapter means one of three things. A: You've given up on the book (this is the most likely scenario). B: You've decided to come out with the rest of the book on the Christmas of this year (I feel that this theory is the least likely.) Or C: You're dead (this is a scenario with a 50% probability chance, seeing as how people die every day.) If option C makes you feel uncomfortable than that means two things. You are obviously not dead, and I am sorry for having that be one of the three possibilities. Also, don’t give up! Your fans deserve better! I, of course, meant that in the best and most encouraging possible way. If there are no plans to continue this story, then I have just one thing to say, but Patrick Stewart says it better:
disregard the
part of the clip, as it is the author's prerogative if they want to continue with a story or not. It just irritates me when the author decides to go the "or not" route.