how far would you go for love or recognition? How much perseverance would you have after becoming an orphan? would life really be worth living? It's been only 4 months since scootaloo went into foster care. She has suffered alot emotionally but she doesn't pay any mind to at as she just wants her idol, rainbow dash, to notice her and be proud of her. Well her chance comes during the summer when she asks rainbow dash if she could become her flying apprentice. What scootaloo doesnt know, is her training methods. She is forced by rainbow dash to give 110% everyday all day. On top of that she has an abusive foster mother to deal with when she gets home. Can scootaloo survive the torment? Or will she collapse and give up and risk losing recognition from the one she admires most and continue living her life in a sad, lonely, depressive and pitiful state?
Please learn to type. Please.
You've got a good story going here, but you really need to... well... type better. If you need an editor, drop me a PM and I'll make this story shine. Keep it up chief
Besides your grammar and typing issues this is actually really intriguing ^^ and I'm not allowed to talk about grammar so....
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if you're up for it i would love to have an editor. I really wish people would understand that english is my second language and that I'm still learning how to properly write, the main thing that gets me is run on sentences and dialouge, so again if you want to I'll send you the chapters and you can go ahead and put your name where credit is needed to be place. Anyway, I started writing in the first place was to see how I can improve myself. And I went ahead and put a dark tag on the story, sorry about that. Thanks for not being a total jerk about my typing
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138703 ok it took me THREE DAYS to type this chapter and to make look how it is now. I wasn't lucky enough to have English as my first language. Sorry. I'll try some more but just please understand I'm pouring my heart and soul into this.
if you're up for it i would love to have an editor. I really wish people would understand that english is my second language and that I'm still learning how to properly write, the main thing that gets me is run on sentences and dialouge, so again if you want to I'll send you the chapters and you can go ahead and put your name where credit is needed to be place. Anyway, I started writing in the first place was to see how I can improve myself. And I went ahead and put a dark tag on the story, sorry about that. Thanks for not being a total jerk about my typing
138835 well thanks. And yes. I know very well about my grammar issues as English isn't my first language. But I'm glad you enjoy it
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I'll be your first editor to take out the major glaring issues XD. But for the far smaller things I tend not to notice as much. Clean it up before it hits vega?
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I got chapter 3 ready. Im just waiting for vega to finish cleaning it up. once the two edited chapters drop, i'll send you chapter 3 to clean up. Sound good?
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I got chapter 3 ready. Im just waiting for vega to finish cleaning it up. once the two edited chapters drop, i'll send you chapter 3 to clean up. Sound good?139742 whoops I accidently a big typo. I meant to say; I sent vega the first two chaps to clean up and i have chapter 3 unedited, so once he sends me the two edited chaps ill send you the third chap. to clean up
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alright sure ^^ can't wait. I'll be at a debate tournement this saturday, but I think I'll be bringing my laptop so I'll try to get it to you by monday my time.
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Alright sounds good, Good luck at your debate too I'm on a debate team as well and I know how those go.
156707 alright chapter 3 is up. You ready for some editing?
Why does everyone put Scoots into a horrible home and make her life so abusive? Im just curious theres only been a few fanfics Ive reasd where she wasnt in abusive home.
158797 okay i thought this was gonna happen but i dont wanna disclose or spoil anything so ill send you a pm describing what will happen. Please keep in mind that I love scootaloo with all my heart. But the abuse makes for a good story.
Sick.....
and Rainbow seems way out of character at some points
try to ease up on the scoota buse on her end
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eeyup but email me at inquistorsiro@gmail.com before you publish it so I can edit :D
wow, this is way better
165041 well Thanks. Glad to get some positive feed back on my story.
P.s. Love your username btw :)
Edited :D
174108 posting it now
Thank god that Scots got out of that home! Icant wait for your next chapters.
178081thanks mira, I'm glad too.
178091 Im going to be wrking on my first MLP fanfic soon. Want a brief summary of it in a message?
178136 but of course, send me NAO haha cant wait to hear it.
awesome story.. AWESOME...... theres only one thing left to do now, AHEM....... LEEEEERRRROOOOOOOOOOOOOY NNNNNNNNJEEENKINS!!!!!
178677 I say doctor, are you quite alright? You seem a bit, oh how do I put this, um off
I am, however, quite pleased you enjoy this little yarn of mine and I do hope you will be putting in your thoughts on the chapters to come.
First woot! And I cant wait for your next chapter. God I hope Avion gets out of this, and por Zelos..I was wondering what happened to him, as he was never mentioned in the chapter
Hello FimFiction, More specifically the Bronies and the Pegisistas! I am going to be reading this fanfiction and putting it up on youtube, but before i do, I just want all of you people...er....ponies out there to know that this is the best, most descriptive, well written, descriptive fanfiction that I have ever read in my entire life, and I read fanfictions just for fun even before I put them on YT. I am just saying that the author of this story is very talented, and he is a boss for coming up with such BOSS ideas! Just wanted to say that.
From,
JamesIsABrony
P.S. I didn't write this comment in hopes of getting views or subscribers to my YT acount. I already have those!
193971 Mira! good to hear from you again! How goes the fanfic?
194083 well thanks man, I love hearing that I'm doing something right for a change. I look forward to your new video as well my friend :)
Your friend
James Lopez
194303 It goes well, almost done writing the first chapter
194372 I cant wait to read it mira
195137 I cant wait to post it. I might even try to put it on EQD
Wow I never even got a alert that this story updated. I was just looking at your profile when I noticed this updated.
plz make more! NAO! DO IT NAO!!!!!!!!!!!!!
201876 SIR YES SIR *starts typing LIKA BAWS*
more i want to know what happens give me more
201924 working on it as we speak, glad you're enjoying This and il be sure to work extra
Hard for you guys this week.
five's the magic number...
let's go for 5 comments!
Yay! And god I hope there is a sequal! I want to see more of this wonderfl story. And I loved how you had this put up for scootaloo to be taken in by Dash
Wait, "humanity itsself"? What?
lol, moar comments
Fifth comment. Now make a sequel.
you better make that sequel i enjoyed this one a lot
I think this is overall a great fanfic, but it kinda disturbed me to hear rainbow call scoots a "worthless shit"
I thought it was fantastic (besides rainbow being a bitch in most of it), i just need to know what happened to avion!!! he was so awesome but you left his plot kinda hanging!!!!
getting to 15 would be graet to see
good fic though
Great Story
205504 trust me when I say I did that for a reason