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Dreaming My Life Away, Sorry

One little dream is all it takes to brighten your life,

But how long until you make the dream a reality.

Fourth Part of the Magic is Love Series

Twilight X Fluttershy

Disclaimer: Aside from the basic story idea I make no claim to anyother material unless otherwise noted

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ShadowWing09

ShadowWing09 #1 · Jan 11th, 2013 · · ·

I do like the concept, but the overall pacing felt like it was going by too fast. I'd advise focusing more on telling the story then reaching the end, and maybe the ending could be open to interpretation in this case, rather then coming off as a definite no

silverspawn

silverspawn #2 · Jun 17th, 2015 · · ·

I don't have any problems with the concept, but I think the writing needs polish - also the spelling. Grammar errors break immersion, particularly the 'your' instead of 'you're' in the line "The least I can do is make sure your comfortable,"