Misty has finally left Opaline and her lair behind, but moving out is only the first step of shedding the thoughts and doubts that still haunt her.
Luckily, her new friends are willing to help her adjust and teach her about life in Maretime Bay.
Written after Chapter 4, containing spoilers thereof, and sure to be outdated by future episodes.
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Chapter four of what?
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Not bad. I too am also wonder what’s going to happen to Misty after chapter four. She is too clumsy to keep her secret hidden from Opaline for too long. In anycase this will be my canon (well not the sleeping together because we’re friends… that’s weird and a little too accepting), until chapter 5 releases in September.
Poor broken blueberry. She’s got the social skills of a toddler. She knows something is wrong but doesn’t know how to fix it. Her reticence is crippling her because the rest of the gang doesn’t realize how deep this wound goes.
Credit for keeping the abuse subtle yet still letting us see how devastating it was. Poor Misty...
I like this exploration of the emotional manipulation of Opaline. Keep it up, I’ll watch this story with great interest. Not enough good Misty stories out there.
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Yeah Misty does seem pretty socially lacking. It’s endearing and cute in a way. Poor Misty! At least now she’ll be in the company of caring friends.
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You'd think so, but then again Opaline wasn't the least bit suspicious of Misty getting her cutie mark right as Sunny and the others had broken out of the barrier and allegedly overpowered her.
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Actually, she doesn't know about Misty's cutie mark yet. There was a moment near the end of Missing the Mark where Misty was covering it with her tail when Opaline was talking to her.
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Well Misty did a ploy where She made it look like the mane 5 tied her up with vines and also she hid her mark with her tail and moved things back with her hooves instead of her magic when Opaline came back. Still I do hope she does leave and move in with the other ponies in the Brighthouse. It would be only fitting for her.
This is the sort of thing I'm reallyyyy hoping we get from Chapter 5, but even if we don't, I won't be too upset because I'll have this very excellent fic to fall back on! c: You do a great job capturing the fallout of everything Opaline's done to Misty. Opaline's dialogue in particular is spot-on, and I like how her past words are incorporated into Misty's present. So so good.
I'm especially fond of the way you write the Mane 5—their interactions (both with each other and with Misty) feel very organic and real. I loved Pipp asking Misty if she needed an eye mask, and Izzy waking her up with screaming was very funny. They are all so silly. My babies.
I also really like the dual meaning of the chapter title. Hopefully Misty will get more rest soon. That final bit with the cuddling was very sweet. :)
Thank you for the chapter! I look forward to what's to come. :D
I must say that I relate to Misty in this scenario. I suffer from insomnia, either because of my near-obsession with the laptop or the already-existing lack of sleep as per default. Still, even when none of those are there to torment me, the yelling and shouting of my parents up to 2 am certainly are.
There was this instance in which I couldn't hold it anymore and left the house (I hope you understand me: exams were just around the corner and I needed some mental stability to keep my brain relatively sane), so a friend of mine let me stay at his place for about 2 weeks. But what stood out the most for me, besides the incredibly comfortable bed he and his family had let me sleep in, was that, as soon as my body sunk into the sheets and cushion, a rush of adrenaline ran through my brain. I found myself waiting in my bed for a yell, a shout, a swear... ANYTHING that could justify my sudden sense of alert that eventually kept me up for another hour and a half. The following week, at my psychologist's appointment, I told her about the situation. he said that I got so accustomed to the shouting and yelling, that I developed some kind of PTSD regarding yelling and shouting (I know it isn't PTSD 'cause that's a whole 'nother level of trauma and stuff, but I needed to explain everything understandably, both for you all and for me; especially for me).
So, yeah. The metaphor of the day: Parents suck, especially when they can't differentiate and separate married-couple issues from family ones. Oh, and never let them use you as a shield for their arguments in the middle of an all-out dispute. A word of advice? Screw them until they learn not to traumatize their children with THEIR problems.
Anyway, I REALLY liked this chapter! Hope we get to see more in the future ^^
Really enjoyed this, wish we get to explore more of Misty's feelings and past in the next chapter (of MYM). Looking forward for your next chapters (of your story)!
Some weird tension between Sunny and Misty there. Wonder what that was about. Also… ponies don’t use bits anymore. If you watched one of the scenes where Sunny was passing out smoothies she was hoofed a bill or paper currency of some type. Also in the pegasi city (the name is lost to me at the moment), Zipp and Pipp have already shown they too use some type of paper currency. I feel bits was an ancient type of equestrian currency similar in stature to gold, silver or some other rare metal. But since Make your Mark is in Modern times they now use paper currency.
In closing I like how this is going. Misty still seems to be hardcoded into her social ineptitude. Hopefully the mane 5 can snap her out of it and well… be reborn again.
Healing. ❤️
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As far as I know, they didn't name the currency anything different, so it might still be "bits", even if in name only.
The US dollar used to be silver and gold dollars as well, but now that the US mostly uses paper bills, it is still called that.
That said, thank you for your feedback.
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Yeah I guess you can think of it that way. Maybe they still call their paper currency bits.
Somepony needs to drop the friendship hammer on Misty! However I can see why she is still stuck in her ways. When live your entire life as a servant and only understand that it’s hard to let go and realize you truly are a free pony. Opaline did a number to poor Misty. Treating her like how she did was terrible. Misty only wanted acceptance and friendship, but only got cruelty and servitude.
Don't be a dick, Posey!
Oh Posey you and your barely contained racism. I hope we get more of her she's one of my favorite side characters from G5.
This has been a really solid start I'm looking forward to seeing were this goes. We really need more good long form G5 stories.
Misty and Posey is a duo I never thought I’d need more of, but here we are. Bonus points for implying that Posey is the idealist of the two.
I love this so much! I wish more people took advantage of Posey running the art museum and how the most artsy pony in town is someone she can not stand.
Now there's a way to start the morning.
I'm not even gonna question that.
you have yours.*
Classic Posey.
Well done Misty.
Poor Misty she clearly has a lot of healing to do after Opaline's abuse.
At least Misty has managed to help a little. She really needs support from her friends to heal.
At least Posey is somewhat understanding towards Misty here. Izzy's Project is a nice touch especially the name she gave it.
Oh, boy! This will only end so well for you, Misty.
I love how this story shows not only that the Mane 5 are Misty’s friends, but that they are good friends to her.
Well, okay Sunny apparently has a bad eavesdropping habit, but aside from that
I like what she did there. Replaced bush with clouds.
need it.*
Zipp was right, opaline tricked you. If you didn't do what she told you, she would've done it herself and then no one would've been safe.
Can't argue there.
Oh boy...
Zipp being a good strong shoulder to lean on for moral confidence. Sunny trying her best to help in anyway possible. A lot of good character building here for Misty. However her wanting to do everything seems well... like a recipe for disaster. I smell a storm clouds brewing! Good chapter! Please continue!
Misty will probably have to learn to accept her limits. When something goes wrong with the jobs she will react poorly something her friends will have to help her with.
Misty's happier then most people I know who work multiple jobs.
It's so cute that Posey was already getting mad at Misty not being potentially tipped.
Boy first day on the job and a grueling twelve hour shift! Boy I know how they feel! Misty gonna be a little sore the next day!
First off, where is she storing the money, second when did she get a phone?
I'm sure Hitch will understand Kenneth.
See, nothing to worry about.
At least she wasn't 100% rude this time.
I'm glad that misty did so well on her jobs.
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She's had a phone in the show for a while, actually.
As for the money, honestly, no idea.
It's a difficulty of the medium that this kind of thing is a lot more obviously strange in writing than it is in animation.
Where are the ponies keeping their phones and other stuff half the time?
In this case I figured it wasn't important enough to draw attention to.
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Oh... I must've forgotten or something, had a busy and stressful week lately.
Good to see Misty feeling comfortable around friends now. This story does make me a little excited to see what lies I store for chapter five and six of Make your Mark, and where they go with it. I am wondering what lies in store for Misty and the rest of the mane five.
These stories here are a really nice thing to have In between seasons to see how the fan base like us keeps telling new and interesting stories. In any case thanks for the read it was a good story.
I don't think I even need to comment on that line.
Fanfiction and abuse have a very complicated relationship. On one hand, the freedom fanfiction provides can allow us to talk in depth about a subject that most media tends to shy away from. Unfortunately, many people seem to confuse the term "real" with "gratuitous suffering" and end up being too shallow and over the top to be taken seriously.
This, however, is not one of those stories. Instead, it's a rare example of someone taking such a tragic topic and actually making it into something uplifting, and showing that even in times when living feels like a struggle there's always hope.
And we can always use more stories like that.
It's good that Misty is doing well and doesn't feel indebted to her friends.
project, just*
to the back of the stand,*
Wait, that's what it was!!!
Proud of you Misty.
While this ending wasn't 100% how I thought it turn out to be, in the end, I really enjoyed it. It's probably something thst might just happen when the next batch of MYM episodes drop on Netflix in jusr a few weeks.
Unless Hitch does get together with one of the mares.
A wonderful little story ^^
Well written!
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Mood I feel that all the time and wonder if I'm better or just better at ignoring my needs
I assume "Tell Your Tale" is not canon to.this story?
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This seems likely.
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I never kept up much with Tell Your Tale, so Make Your Mark was the only canon I took into account.
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That is fine, I just wanted to be sure which sources you were using. Keep doing what you are doing.