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Now, That's a story I'd follow, seeing how the World of MLP would clash with the violent and corrupted one of The Boys. Can't wait to see more chapters!!!!
Hrm.. Interesting start, for sure. But I do have a few questions that weren't covered in the description or from reading this first chapter. Since Sunset/Alicorn brought up the portal and going back home as a plan, and with how much she's done in this world, here is my first question - How long has it been since she first appeared/when will the portal open again? It's very unclear given everything that she said. She's clearly been there for a while with everything she has done and learned, but she also talked like it's going to be a while till it opens again. Given that the portal is only closed for 2.5 years, placing her timeline is a bit difficult.
My second question is when in the The Boys show is this story taking place?
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It might be the original comic. Just saying.
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Thank you for the reminder.
.................. Right I forgot about that.
The original comics is more "rapey" and is f***** up by itself anyway. So, I can actually side with this version of Sunset with this story.
I don't hate canon sunset. I just don't like some of her versions in your own stories. ( Mostly because of the constant rapey stuff on people/ponies that I think don't deserve it. And her being a total ass sometimes, even if she is "right" most of the time.. )
Your Sunset's that I do like or "tolerate" are just a handful.
Thank God that the show itself totally take a different direction that I could like it myself.
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Taking place in the comic series
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And right before the G-Men arch
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And what about how long Sunset has been in this world?
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2 years
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Well shit, here we go.
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Yup and all the stuff that happen in the comics has happen and the events will mostly remain the same
It would not surprise me if Vought assumes that Sunset was either given a defective injection or a superior one than theirs when she first appeared.
Well this story got my attention!
Well, let's see how it develops here, it's good
Ok never read the boys comic but knows it goes dark and wonder how she meet the boys.
My co worker used to be a singer as well.
Did ok, met a lot of famous Singers, and hung out with them.
He said the Rock life was great at first then got boring, the endless rides gets on your nerves, and thus why the Heavy Metal bands do all the crazy shit.
Because they are bored, stressed, or just testing the waters.
He talked about signing autorraphs, and how ti was hell.
Be four hours to sign goes to 10 hours, hands hurt so much from repeat signing.
worst yet the reason it last so long is the people getting auto graphs go tot he back of the line with new stuff to sign, willing to put up with the repeated standing line as they get stuff signed, books, pictures, instruments, over and over to sell on line.
Finished the second chapter, and I'm thoroughly enjoying the story thus far.
Thanks for writing it.
I would love to see all of their shocked faces, when they find out that Sunset is literally telling the truth. When Celestia does show up as proof.
Says you calling a pot a kettle black.
( Basically, a Class-A Hypocrite he is. )
I hope that Sunset and the Dazzlings being here, that most events from the comics WON'T end up as bad or worse like it usually does in canon. You know what I mean, right?
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Some things thanks to the Drazzlings appearing the same time as the first heroes did. All the sex drugs and violence for the supers who go into music helps deflect some of the bad stuff that happens as would you really think it’s strange for a rocker no matter if they have powers or not trashing up a place?
Hold up.... According to my comment on the previous chapter you said she's only been in the this world for 2 years...
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I changed my mind on that, needed to make it longer once I added the drazzlings
As much as I'm enjoying this bizarre crossover, I wish you'd taken your time while conceiving and writing this. Primarily while using the maxim of 'show, don't tell'.
You spent over 90% of this opening chapter, the most important part of the story since it's what's supposed to draw in the readers, giving us no less than three (3) info dumps and exposition. In fact a good chunk of that exposition was the same material repeated over, if in a different context.
What would've been a more interesting thing to do would've been to show us the differences involved. Show us how Alicorn treated her fans, employees, and 'coworkers'. Show us some of the interactions and tensions between her and the Seven to establish their group dynamics. Show us how she trains her underlings and just how/why they are/were considered defects to their parent company. And show us what led to The Boys coming to the decision to try and ally or at least use the Alicorn for their own ends.
Any and all of those suggestions could've worked greatly as an opening chapter and/or arc for the story. Instead, we're getting a rush job.
I get it. You want to get your story out there as quickly as possible, or don't have a lot of time to spare, or are lacking confidence in your work on the story. So, you compromise with yourself. Better to get it out there while it's still good than to let it fester and fade as you lose interest in it.
I get it. But I still disagree with it.
And yet MORE of the exposition. Please stop telling us this stuff and show us. I mean, can you HONESTLY see these guys talking about how/why Alicorn is so much better than they are in every way so calmly and clearly? With no cussing or derogatory remarks or anything like that?
Please understand that I DO like the idea of this story. Sunset leaving a positive mark on the world BEFORE she goes back and steals Twilight's crown? I don't see many stories like that. And it TOTALLY makes sense why she doing what she has in this context.
You just need to start showing us the story, rather than dropping so much background info on us!! Seriously, this stuff takes up like 70%-90% of the chapter!! Where's the drama, adventure, intrigue, and romance?! Where's the story?!
Another great chapter. I'm starting to think to watch the boys. Is it a good series?
Didn't expected Alicorn to be that ruthless but it fits Sunset before being rainbowed by Twilight. I don't remember, does she still want to take over Equestria?
Homelander Vs. Omniman
Bully Vs. Warrior
Sunnyset Vs. G-Men
even worse out come since Sunnyset was drawing it out
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Yup she’s been preparing herself for it
Now THAT is a big improvement! Good job! I foresee a...confrontation with Homelander coming.
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Seriously!? Even after her being one of the best, if not THE best "good" superheroine in this corrupt world. Along with having a loyal following, and owns a billion-dollar company, tv show/fandom, AND a amusement park!!!
But, she STILL haven't gotten over for what happened in Equestia!?
I do understand that Celestia f****** up as a "mother".
But, considering that Sunset has seen the worst of the worst kinds of people on earth ( Like Homelander, most of the Seven, and other corrupt "superheroes" ).
That I thought seeing those kinds of bad people over these last seven years disgust her so greatly. That Sunset look herself in the mirror, and decided to finally change her once antagonistic/negative traits and ways. And not end up like the rest of this "heroic pretenders", and their greedy corporation.
Still felt it's immature for her if she still goes her through with her conquest/hostile takeover/coup plan over her mother's throne?
Do you understand what I'm trying to say?
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Yeah I know but that’s the driving force that kept Sunset going for all of those years. Like in cannon of the series.
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Well, hopefully Celestia has a very damn good excuse to stop Sunset from doing something she will eventually and "probably" regret. ( Like making that coup/hostile takeover plan of hers for example. )
Then again, why the hell that after these so many years. Didn't Celestia freaking didn't contact Sunset at all!?
Or have the audacity to replace Sunset with Twilight ( That IF Twilight, Spike, their five friends, Trixie, or especially Luna learn the whole truth. They all will be rightfully disgusted with Celestia too. Celestia really has some f***** up family issues. )?
Even in this corrupt superhero-centered society and different world. This earth still have the alternate human versions of our favorite Equestria/Equis characters ( Just like Equestria Girl's world was before. ).
And it seems that Sunset herself finally met her own human counterpart called Samantha.
Along with Sunset knowing the dreadful truth that Celestia is really her real mother this whole damn time! Uh oh, Celestia. You're in huge trouble.
Yeah, Celestia has some frickin explaining to do on why she didn't tell Sunset, or treat her a whole lot better from before?
I can still understand why Sunset wants to take the throne from her "mother, after she gets back to Equestria.
Yeah, you can't make that over cliche excuse that you can't read or speak english, despite that you are a foreign here.
The amusement park rule's ( Or any other public place in general. ) always have different language versions to warn everybody not to do these type of criminal shit.
Breaking property is still illegal.
That is actually very wholesome and nice for this version of Sunset in your stories.
So her mansion, property, and the amusement park is basically once apart of this version of the Everfree Forest this whole time?
That totally explains on why Sunset is a OP Powerhouse in here. And the possible hundreds ( Or even Thousands ) of those magical geodes with various hidden potential and magical abilities, is straight overkill too.
Heck, I bet she use those to "upgrade" or "enhanced" her loyal superhero ally/followers as her personal army against Homelander, most of the Seven, the other corrupt and bad "superheroes", the Vought Corporation itself ( And even Billy Butcher himself, IF he snaps near the end from the original comics. Hopefully for his, and the others from the Boys sake, it won't come to that, and that they'll survive. And might take Sunset's potential future offer to join her. ). ) when it comes down to it.
And later on, against Celestia too, right?
P.S. Okay, clearly Sunset has some mental and emotional problems that she eventually needs to deal with.
Since she is clearly having her "hidden agenda and quite nefarious" anti-hero/anti-villain monologue to a literal fricking corpse of Megan William's own grave of all people!?
Now with the legendary Rainbow of Light from the original G1/G3 era added in her magic arsenal. Celestia is clearly f***** a hundred times over.
I love to see how the Rainbow of Light will fare against the Elements of Harmony in a colorful laser blast struggle like in Dragon Ball. ( IF Twilight and her friends are still in Sunset's way. )
I admit, I will slide with Sunset this time, with this overarching issue in the fandom. Where Starswirl or even Celestia stupidity dump all of these highly dangerous, and quite OP magical items/artifacts into a very inhabited planet like our Earth for example!!!???
What happens if the Vought Corporation itself, or Homelander, or even Billy Butcher get to them first!!??
Thank God Sunset have them all, so far!
Why the hell can't Starswirl or Sunbutt find a different planet that is totally 100% uninhabited ( Like the other planets in our solar system. ) to dump all those rather dangerous op artifacts instead?
Or dump them all inside an asteroid, or inside our moon, or inside the sun/star, or even a freaking black hole if they were smart enough?
But clearly they freaking aren't.
P.S. Does Sunset also found that face mirror 🪞 artifact that Jupiter has in that one Equestria Girls episode.
Or found that second hidden portal under the sand, on that small tropical island from that other particular Equestria Girls episode as well?
Welp, due to Starswirls and even Celestia's own incompetence. Sunset has now two additional very OP magical Artifacts/Items ( And many more to come ) in her collection.
Keeping and hidden the first portal of Equestria ( The high school horse statue pedestal. ) is very logical and smart, once Sunset is ready to go back there.
And I like to see on how Celestia will bumbly come up with a clear weak-ass excuse on why the heck didn't she try to contact or even found a way to get to Sunset this whole time!?
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Sunset in the story is morally grey, where she does heart warming things and can do nightmare fuel things. Which with her planning on becoming the ruler of equestria she be making choices that will help some and hurt others, like in real life. Where some things that were good choices at the time turn bad later.
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It’s the reason why her costume is grey
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So about that face mirror, and that second portal under that tropical island?
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Future chapters
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Do you agree of what I said about Celestia's and Starswirl's incompetence of dumping those magical items/artifacts on earth?
And also dumping the Dazzlings there too.
And I'm clearly questioning Sunset's mentality when she's talking to the grave of Megan Williams?
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They’re just like they are in cannon, throwing and ignoring things till they come up again. The out of sight and out of mind thing where instead of taking care of it, they just leave it for later and a small problem is now a big one.
As for grave robbing, it is for the rainbow of light which would just be forgotten and left there if she hadn’t. I never got why you would be buried with something as you can’t take it with you and if it’s valuable why not just give it to someone instead of having it buried with you.
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To me I think it's cause she wants to know...she wants to know WHY Celestia her "mother" never wrote in the book she knows Celestia has access to the pages like she does after she had put in a plea for help YEARS ago... if my mom suddenly just never texted me again but I knew she was alive and this had gone on for years I would get angry and wonder why she never texted back and that it better be a DANG good reason.
And she would get more magic stuff than she needs just in case she has to fight her so she has a 100% chance of winning if it comes to it....atleast from what I know about any version of sunset anyway.
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Well, it will obviously bite those two morons in the ass. Since Sunset will of course use every single one to take out Celestia, possibly Twilight, her friends, the elements, and her army.
It should really be kept in the Canterlot vault for safety.
But............... Sunset: Finders keepers.
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One more thing;
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Yup Sunset in my stories are mostly her getting back at her mother figure for just abandoning her and never even mentioning her or talking about her. Plus seeing how Sunset would have been still a young pony, and she’s still in high school would mean Celestia left a child with no support and only what she had on her to fend for herself in another world. Like you still in elementary or junior high being left in another country with just what you had when you got there.
Nice and twilight being forced to train rather then relied on the elements looking forward on se what happens keep up the great work👍👍👍.
SAVAGE, Sunset.
I can't believe you already gave yourself a very good "clue/hint" on who the "thief" ( Sunset ) really is. Because come on, WHO ELSE knows your cake stash in the first place?
You could have already figured out that Sunset is the thief if you THINK hard enough, or even care enough that Sunset is back for payback against you?
Celestia really sucks ass at mystery games or as a detective.
And "not important" my ass. Sunset is literally your freaking daughter for pete's sake! I actually don't blame Sunset for doing all of this against you, in the long run.
Suck it, you sunbitch!
Smart thinking on breaking through the floor instead. And Celestia really is a moron on not thinking things through like this?
So Discord is still caught!
I think it's possible that Zecora or Butcher found the portal! and the twilight irgent how dafon erfärt!
the funniest thing would be Luna and Twilight solving it ((not Celestia)) HAHAHA