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A long-forgotten villain escapes from Tartaurus Prison, taking Discord's power with him!  Can a motley band of opposites and former enemies work together long enough to save Equestria?

Cover Art provided by the amazing Gina at I AM PONY.

First Published
25th Sep 2012
Last Modified
13th Feb 2014

No comment. Guess I might as well make a joke.


One does not simply sneak into Tartar- DAMN IT, IRON!

I knew it was tirek as soon as I laid eyes on the cover image.

  Man that is one old villain!

Totally read it already.

Still buckin' awesome, though.

Also, I get the feeling I know what the soundtrack for this story is gonna consist of:

>>1333803

Goddammit, dude. I have on job around here, and you just up and take it away from me.

However, I approve of your post.

I feel like I'd be getting more out of this if I could stand to watch the old G1 cartoons and find out who Tirek, No-Heart and the others are.  (Though I think the two-headed monkey dude is Demogorgon, and if he showed up in My Little Pony, I may have to reconsider my stance.)

Nevertheless, intriguing stuff, and I wish to see more.

>>1334220

Tirek should be mostly bearable, at least. Rescue at Midnight Castle is just the regular 80s kind of bad, not G3 bad.

oh I liked it better when i hadn't read the synopsis, it was more fun to not know what was going on!@

:raritywink:>>1334555

I was wondering about that.  Considering making it more opaque.:twilightblush:

>>1334220

Don't worry. It's a Grant Morrison-style reboot of the character. Everything necessary will be present in the story.:twilightsheepish:

Also, Tirek is the ONLY bad guy in the prison from MLP. Everyone else is from a DIFFERENT 80's cartoon. I may actually have a contest to identify them all. :yay:

>>1334362

True.  But you still get "Shoo-Be-Doo" in your head.:raritywink:

>>1334026

You have plenty to do. I expect this to be a very metal story.:rainbowdetermined2:

80's villains.

No holds barred.

Dis gon b gud.

The little throwaway lines like, "Hmm. Misnamed." and "it will be neither chocolate nor water that flows through its streets.” make this a great read already.

>>1334775

O I think that would be wise, the last thing you want is to have the whole first chapter condensed into a three sentence summary.

Try "A routine inspection of the Tartaurus Prison system introduces Twilight to a former acquaintance of a friend and reintorduces her to an old family foe." and then go on from there or something along those lines, I am really bad at these things as mine is particularly clinical and boring. too vague and generic, but I think you can make better with it.

>>1334871

This is true. I want to make sure that the prospective reading who'd like it gets enough clues, though. It's a weird balance.

>>1334865

"I was hoping "Misnamed." wouldn't fly over people's heads.  As a writer, you never know if your jokes are clear.

Fantastic, I can't wait to see how this plays out!  :twilightsmile:

>>1334922

I know what you mean, and I know you know how to do it better than I. Good luck.

Mmm, I'm liking this already.:trixieshiftright:

That misnamed line is amazing.

I read all the villain's lines in their voices.

>>1334362

Okay.  I was ready to say that Tirek, despite being a little goofy-looking, was actually pretty damned badass and terrifying.  I mean, carrying around a beating heart?  Turning ponies into dragon-monsters?  Threatening to murder and decapitate children?  Holy crap.

And then I saw the sea ponies, and witnessed the true face of horror.

"Shoo-Be-Doo" must be the last thing sinners hear before being dropped into Hell.

Well, I recognized Venger, Tiamat, and Lolth from Dungeons & Dragons. No-Heart sounds familiar, too.

I like Iron Will particularly. He comes home and the traditional greeting is a punch to the head? Reminds me of my family.

>>1335029>>1335214

Thanks!  I'm hoping to give you readers another jaw-dropper next chapter.  Ch 2 and 3 will be FUN to write.:pinkiehappy:

>>1335311

Your cartoon-fu is strong.  I actually changed my initial description of No-Hearts voice after checking out YouTube clips.

>>1335358

Yeah, I suffered a surprise when I put my Pony mp3  directory on shuffle and hit a nice synthpop song.  Then I ralized it was Eurobeat Bronies' "Call Upon the Sea Ponies."  STUCK IN HEEEEEEEEAD.

>>1334775

Y'know, I'm inclined to agree with you. Thought in all honestly, if you managed to make Hell not-metal, I'd be amazed.

Breaking Into Heaven - Heaven and Hell

>>1335796

I got to see them before Ronnie died.  It was great to watch them bring Dehumanizer back to life.

>>1334026

No worries, I just had to get that one in there.

I plan to spend the next 10 chapters looking for headbanging gif emotes.

>>1336964

There's a great one of Luna somewhere from the Canterlot wedding.

>>1340207

Yeah, I like that one.  That was one of the samples I gave to my artist as a reference.  There's a LOT of good Tirek art out there.

>>1336064

I don't think you quite understand how insanely jealous you made me with that one statement. At least I got to see most of the original band at Lollapalooza.

So far, my track record is

1) Fear Factory- Faith No More (Terrible position from stage)

2) Iron Maiden (Blaze Bailey)

3) Gwar (Thrown out by bouncer after guy punched me in face)

4) Hammerfall- Dio in Atlanta, then drove back down the next day to South Florida for Blind Guardian.

5) Iron Maiden (Somewhere Back in Time Tour)

6) Queensryche - Alice Cooper- Heaven and Hell

7) Blind Guardian

(And a bunch of They Might Be Giants, Weird Al, and Jonathan Coulton)

So, he's "object 23" huh?

Hail Eris.

>>1341722

:pinkiehappy:

It's like Joel Robinson said: "We never a' Who's gonna get this?'  We always say, 'the right people will get this.'"

This is... brilliant. Is there perhaps a giant purple robot locked up somewhere, his cannon removed and the voices in his heads finally silenced? :D

If you hold a contest for their names, I'd lose. Badly. :pinkiesad2:

As for G1... wasn't that bad, after a viewing a few months ago.

>>1350965

I really, Really, REALLY wanted to have a Transformer cameo.  I was shy of including anything humanoid.  Then again, you've just given me an idea....:pinkiehappy:

During the part at the beginning when Iron Will's mom is explaining the inevitable destruction of Tartaurus, did anyone else think of this?

>>1357150

That was actually the exact thing I was thinking of!:pinkiehappy:

Baron Silas Greenback! (or as I was watching it "Baron Ekel von Etzmolch").

Now all we need is a meeting of Count Duckula and Pinkie Pie and BOOM: instant universal meltdown.

Tirek with Discord's powers? This will be a tough one.

Oh, crud. So far, they've chained up the antagonist on Care Bears, Teddy Ruxpln's arch-enemy and possibly others. Heh. I halfway expected to see Mumm-Ra hanging around.

Wow, Twilight and co. are really under pressure now, while Tirek watches some good friends scream "let me out!"

This one has the makings of a real winner! :twilightsmile:

Ahhh, I've been setting up my own fanfic continuity to have something very similar to this happen. Mine actually involves the Greco-Roman gods of chaos and darkness, though, but was definitely planning on a confrontation between the two. Ooh, and does Tirek have a crush on Nightmare Moon? I have this feeling he does :trixieshiftright:

Oh yeah, I'm liking this!

I didn't get all the references, but they were certainly amusing.

Can't wait to read more.

By looking at the image cover, I'm getting a bit of deja vu with Freddy vs. Jason

“Would that be fear in your eyes, No-Heart? I recognize that flavor. It’s the terror of knowing what this world is about."

Watching some good friend scream, "LET ME OUT!"

>>1385957>>1386619

Hey, I'm the guy who wrote School Daze; I can't get the musical reference bug out of my system. :rainbowlaugh:  I toyed with the idea of making every chapter a Dio song for a while.

>>1386369

The artist is a HUGE Freddy fan.  She has the Freddy rap album hanging in plastic on her wall next to her Vlad the Impaler dish.

>>1386156

Glad to hear.  I also hope to make references that can be missed without loss of enjoyment of the story on a whole.

>>1386085

Crush?:scootangel::duck: Stay tuned for Chapter Two.

>>1385888

Ugh, I REALLY debated having Mumm-Ra in a cell.  More cameos in chapter two!

>>1380984

I grew up watching Danger Mouse everyday. I love that show.

>>1386817

Danger Mouse and Count Duckula were my first contact with British humor at the tender age of ... nine or ten, I guess.

Quite the culture shock back then. The narrator is best pony. :rainbowlaugh:

>>1386817

Just as long as no one uses the phrases "bumbling boobs" or "meddling kids."

>>1334775

Alright, I recognized Quellor from Teddy Ruxpin, No-Heart from Care Bears, and Venger from Dungeons and Dragons...

>>1334220

If you don't want to watch the full episode here's one that basically says what happens in one minute.

I really like this backstory for Tartaurus and where Iron Will came from. Instant headcanon unless we are ever told differently.

“Wait a second.  Did that guy pay the gate toll?”

:rainbowlaugh:

Six people are clearly biased against G1. :rainbowlaugh:

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