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Paleo Prints

Joined November 2011
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Sequels

  • A Nightmare in Ponyville
    Screwball and the Ponyville kids must overcome Discord in their worst nightmares!

    48,468 words · 4,023 views · 231 likes · 10 dislikes

Stories (13)

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    38,314 words · 2,619 views · 233 likes · 2 dislikes
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    Lost in time, Doctor Whooves' family must rely on his past and future selves for help!
    36,927 words · 17,041 views · 473 likes · 8 dislikes
  • School Daze
    Can Cheerilee make a group of inner city colts and fillies stand and deliver?
    74,614 words · 25,026 views · 1,039 likes · 26 dislikes
  • Choices
    38,367 words · 8,711 views · 605 likes · 14 dislikes
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    6,871 words · 10,629 views · 357 likes · 11 dislikes
  • A Nightmare in Ponyville
    48,468 words · 4,023 views · 231 likes · 10 dislikes
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    4,778 words · 940 views · 39 likes · 0 dislikes
  • Chaos and Darkness
    35,174 words · 9,127 views · 188 likes · 10 dislikes

Blog Posts (99)


After her students release the spirit of Discord on an official field trip, Cheerilee finds herself out of a job.  With no opportunities in Ponyville, the schoolmare takes a job offer in the inner city area of Canterlot's old mining town.  Can even she overcome the insanities of her colleagues and apathy of her students in time to pass her next annual review?  And who is the mysterious backwards-talking filly following Cheerilee around?  Luna's School for Disadvantaged Youngsters will never be the same!

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Cover art based on work by blackgryph0n, used with permissiom.

First Published
7th Nov 2011
Last Modified
14th Mar 2012

Comments ( 757 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 142w, 4d ago · · ·

*Looks at chapter title* Don't tell me what to do! hah, now to read it :pinkiesmile:

#2 · Chapter 1 · 142w, 4d ago · · ·

ok their is some bad grammar but thats forgivable XD so far so good i'm tracking it

#3 · Chapter 1 · 142w, 4d ago · · ·

Okay, your story: Amazing so far, 5 stars and tracking it.

Your writing style: So good, so vivid and humorous, that it makes me look at my work with embarrassment.

All in all: Magnificent,  I'm definitely a fan now, this story better maintain the 5 star it currently holds.

#4 · Chapter 1 · 142w, 4d ago · · ·

>>26395

Hey kid, You can't skate here! :derpytongue2:

#5 · Chapter 1 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

Um, Is all of the end supposed to be bolded? Or just her flashback?

#6 · Chapter 1 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

>>27687 Sorry, first time submission! Anyone tell me how I can edit? Thanks for the comments everyone!

#7 · Chapter 2 · 142w, 1d ago · · ·

lol

#8 · Chapter 2 · 142w, 23h ago · · ·

Awesome! I'm really enjoying this fic, can't wait for your next chapter.

#9 · Chapter 2 · 142w, 23h ago · · ·

Dude, you are on fire with this. I love your pun-tries (Pun+country) and the humor remains constant. Buck yeah, can't wait for chapter 3!:pinkiehappy:

#10 · Chapter 2 · 142w, 22h ago · · ·

This is wonderful and I need to read more of this. There are so many different ways you could go with this fic, and I feel you know what you're doing.

That said, I am going to pick on a few things. You don't need to take any of these suggestions.

1) You're doing a lot to make this a pony fic. By that, I mean that you're putting in a lot of slang, a lot of references, a few quotes from the show, etc. But... slow down? Saturating the early chapters like this makes it hardy to keep up that pace later. It also eventually feels like you're adding references just for the sake of it at time. Consider taking a way a few of these. This might just be personal preference. That said, I did love a few of them, and the story need not be devoid of them. The Large Fun Collider in Geneighva... and the cranberries. :rainbowlaugh:

2) I think you know what you want out of Princess Luna. Just don't swing between moods to fast. "We have obtained walnuts!" to crying to "We shall multiply our friendship at once!" was a bit jarring. Related, keep in mind that not all of your ideas have to go in one fic. It's great to give backstory, but it's easy for a reader to become disinterested when you're going into great detail about the history of Old and New Canterlot, or Luna speaking poetically for adjacent paragraphs about whatever issue. Keep the focus of this story in mind when writing this story.

3) You might want to read over this in a day or so with a fresh mind to check for small editing things. For instance: "I’m you’re new teacher.” misuses you're.

#11 · Chapter 2 · 142w, 13h ago · · ·

Aww. Poor Cherilee. I hope she wouldn't be beaten to pulp or humiliated... She's so nice

#12 · Chapter 1 · 142w, 2h ago · · ·

So Screwball is Bizarro, eh?

#13 · Chapter 2 · 142w, 1h ago · · ·

>>29295

I admit, the interest and mannerisms were inspired by her page in the fan coloring/activity book. :pinkiehappy:

#14 · Chapter 2 · 141w, 5d ago · · ·

This is pretty damn funny, expecting more

#15 · Chapter 2 · 141w, 5d ago · · ·

In the movie version, Cherillee will be played by Drew Barrymore and Luna by Meryl Streep:pinkiesmile:

But more seriously I'm liking the story :yay:

#16 · Chapter 2 · 141w, 4d ago · · ·

Having read a "Groundhog's Day" fusion, I am excited to discover a "High School High" fic ;)

#17 · Chapter 2 · 141w, 4d ago · · ·

Is Paleo's wife... and prereader. So I can also take some of the blame for missed grammar bits. No worries with him frying out or running short of puns. He's good like that. And, 80's music is blaring through the house as I type... so you can guess what that means... lol.

#18 · Chapter 2 · 141w, 3d ago · · ·

This reminds me of Stand and Deliver.

#19 · Chapter 3 · 141w, 2d ago · · ·

Yay more awesome references! :rainbowlaugh:

#20 · Chapter 3 · 141w, 2d ago · · ·

This would be so funny if I weren't feeling bad for Cheerilee :pinkiesad2:

#21 · Chapter 3 · 141w, 2d ago · · ·

>>32537

It's always darkest before the 80's montage.:trollestia:

#22 · Chapter 3 · 141w, 1d ago · · ·

Red is awesome!  He's just like my science teacher.

#23 · Chapter 3 · 141w, 8h ago · 1 · ·

Is this based off of Freedom Writers, cause I really like that movie!?

Excellent read. You have a natural talent for writing. Looking forward to more!

#24 · Chapter 3 · 141w, 7h ago · · ·

Bueno.

#25 · Chapter 2 · 141w, 7h ago · · ·

How will she reach these kids?

#26 · Chapter 1 · 141w, 7h ago · 1 · ·

WE EAGERLY AWAIT TO SEE HOW SHE IS ABLE TO AIDE AND ASSIST YONDER CHEERILEE! ALL HAIL PRINCESS LUNA AND HER AMAZING ROYAL CANTERLOT SPEAKING VOICE! ONWARD, TO GLORIOUS BATTLE AGAINST THE MOST WORTHY OF ADVERSARIES! WORDS...

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

#27 · Chapter 1 · 141w, 6h ago · · ·

You have a deep sense of humor, and you have an equally-deep appreciation for the characters.  Well written!

I'm enjoying the story very much.

#28 · Chapter 3 · 141w, 6h ago · · ·

Huzzah! A pony that always speaks in opposites! And the peasants rejoiced! (Trevor is LOVING all of the song and fic references throughout the chapters! XD like that story where that one colt 'caught' the moon to so win fair Luna's heart! Please keep it up! Trevor is intrigued as to where this is heading!

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

#29 · Chapter 3 · 141w, 6h ago · · ·

>>34190 i can tell a story is good when i find you have liked it

#30 · Chapter 2 · 141w, 4h ago · · ·

Both funny and well-written.  I'm enjoying this story a lot...

...then again, I also enjoyed Stand and Deliver.

#31 · Chapter 3 · 141w, 3h ago · · ·

You grew up in the 1980s... didn't you?

#32 · Chapter 1 · 141w, 3h ago · · ·

Oh, poor Cheerilee!   I love the Screwball cameo . . . AND now we get Luna??

:yay: yay~

#33 · Chapter 3 · 141w, 1h ago · · ·

>>34334

Cameo? Trust me, she plays a big part in the story.:twilightsmile:

#34 · Chapter 3 · 141w, 1h ago · · ·

>>34293

January 1980, guilty as charged.:rainbowlaugh:

#35 · Chapter 3 · 141w, 1h ago · · ·

>>28905

It's got the sad tag:applecry:, but not the Grimdark tag:pinkiesad2:. She's not going to get beaten or shot in the classroom.

#36 · Chapter 3 · 141w, 29m ago · 2 · ·

"They’ll come back embarrassed in a half hour with thoughts of state-mandated revolution gone. Remember, every time they want to rewrite society, you interrupt them.” The aged councilor walked off. “Trust me, boy. Lifespan of stars, attention span of a gnat.”"

I want the sisters to upset. His. World. :pinkiehappy:

#37 · Chapter 3 · 141w, 8m ago · · ·

>>33348

yep, i won't lie. He's my favorite. :twilightsmile: Just like my own fave science teacher, maybe with a dash of the 10th Doctor thrown in? :pinkiehappy: And yes, I am terribly biased, and can't wait to get home from my trip to read whatever he's got new... lol

#38 · Chapter 3 · 140w, 6d ago · · ·

A bizarro pony! :pinkiehappy:  Awesome~

#39 · Chapter 2 · 140w, 6d ago · · ·

I usually don't comment, But I'm gonna recommend this to my friends purely because of the LotR reference there made by Luna.

#40 · Chapter 3 · 140w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

...I give her a week until she brings an air horn into class...to "help get their attention"

#41 · Chapter 3 · 140w, 6d ago · · ·

You don't need to have her get beaten by the student body anyway... everyone in this school is already dead inside.

#42 · Chapter 1 · 140w, 5d ago · · ·

ME GUSTA :twilightblush::pinkiegasp:

#43 · Chapter 2 · 140w, 5d ago · · ·

>>34588 WHICH ONE?

o and great work

this is so full of references that i spend half of the time reading looking stuff up!

i love it! keep up the good work!:trollestia:

#44 · Chapter 3 · 140w, 4d ago · · ·

Oooh, a "Progress" refrence, nice~

#45 · Chapter 3 · 140w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

>>34588

Nice LOTR catch!

“I know not how Prince Blueblood was produced from the mighty stock that first gazed upon Nightmare Moon. I worry that the race of ponies is failing. The blood of Dream Valley is all but spent, its pride and dignity forgotten. “

:rainbowlaugh:  I hoped someone would notice that.

#46 · Chapter 3 · 140w, 4d ago · · ·

dude i love this, its like oc city

and the best part?

you write the ocs well, and with good references to classic 80's movies!

but alas i am a child of the 90's and so only have a limited knowledge of these movies and popculture references, but the writing alone is good enough to keep me coming back.  :pinkiehappy:

#47 · Chapter 3 · 140w, 4d ago · · ·

Huh? I see people have commented on chapter 4 and I saw a notice about the story updating on EqD, but at the moment I can only see three chapters? Did you take it down?

#48 · Chapter 3 · 140w, 4d ago · · ·

>>36525

There was an aborted first chapter, unpublished and blank. I haven't been able to figure out how to remove it, so it throws all chapter numbers in the comments off. BUT...I am polishing off ch. 4 to be uploaded by tomorrow morning!

#49 · Chapter 2 · 140w, 4d ago · · ·

I hope you don't mind, but I'm going to be using Luna's “WE HAVE COME FOR THE TRAIL MIX! WE ARE HOPING FOR THE CRANBERRIES!” line whenever entering any place that sells food when I'm with my friends, if that's ok with you an all *squeak*:fluttershyouch:

#50 · Chapter 3 · 140w, 4d ago · · ·

I'm loving the references! Especially the one of my favorite song by the Police! Keep it up!:pinkiehappy:

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