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  • E Hooves Holding Hearts

    Can Lyra and Bon Bon navigate the twisting waters of the foster care system to finally become parents! Even if they succeed, can they make a connection with a child without breaking their own hearts?
    27,665 words · 5,669 views  ·  562  ·  10
  • E The Three Whooves

    Lost in time, Doctor Whooves' family must rely on his past and future selves for help!
    36,927 words · 17,598 views  ·  483  ·  9
  • E Doctor Whooves and the House of Daring

    The Doctor and family find danger at the side of Ditzy's great aunt, Daring Do! Can the Doctor save the day before his in-laws kill him?
    38,314 words · 2,797 views  ·  242  ·  3
  • T Choices

    Cheerilee, Lyra, and Ditzy Doo come of age sharing a dorm room at Canterlot University.
    38,367 words · 9,181 views  ·  619  ·  16
  • E The Long Roll of Years

    On her weekly Drudge Day of dealing with political matters, Celestia finds herself feeling old.
    4,202 words · 4,063 views  ·  184  ·  4
  • T Killing Mary Sue

    Twilight can't stand the perfect newcomer in town; that's nothing a sledgehammer won't fix!
    6,871 words · 10,812 views  ·  360  ·  12
  • T A Nightmare in Ponyville

    Screwball and the Ponyville kids must overcome Discord in their worst nightmares!
    48,468 words · 4,855 views  ·  237  ·  12
  • E Chaos and Darkness

    When Tirek steals Discord's power, only Twilight, Iron Will, and Discord himself can save Equestria
    35,174 words · 9,768 views  ·  191  ·  11

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  • 11w, 3d
    Where I've Been

    So, I've been taking writing really seriously over the past year. I got 15,000 words out of NaNoWriMo; not bad for a busy month running science festivals. I finished the manuscript in June, sold my retro game systems the funds for self-publishing e-books, and joined a forum thread on one of my boards to write 500 words a night. I was feeling pretty good, especially considering I'm finally a parent (Lyra's style).

    Then I come back one, and notice the disappointment and cobwebs I've left around here.

    So, I wrote 1,431 words of the next Chaos and Darkness chapter tonight. That brings it up to almost 4K. I'm not going to promise a date, but I'm clearing my writers block on my self-publishing projects to try to come back and finish the backlog of ending I owe people here.

    I'm not sure how time will be, considering I'm teaching honors courses that demand instant grading, but I'll try on day at a time and at least 500 words a night. I owe it to the fans that taught me how to write.

    :EDIT:

    Coincidentally, this is my 100th Blog post. Huh.

    5 comments · 100 views
  • 41w, 1d
    Hooves Holding Hearts contest

    So, working on the next chapter. No one reading the last one got the hints about the new kid, who is the story's main kid. I'll give these out, and the first person (and maybe a few others) who get it right will earn a small OC cameo in HHH.

    Now, the kid's an OC...but the mother is not.

    Here are the first few hints.

    1)  Heartmend said that the "mother is not cognizant, incapable of care and unlikely to change."

    2) I got the idea for this blog post listening to a song about her.

    Any guesses?

    46 comments · 411 views
  • 42w, 4d
    Hooves Holding Hearts Edit

    So, I changed a scene in chapter four. I changed it because it didn't work, and others complained with a reasonable point.

    It happens near the end of the chapter.

    Spoilers ahead.

    I mean, really spoilers.

    If you haven;t read the chapter, it kind of ruins the punch to know this...

    Ready.


    So, when John is confronting the father....

    “You go back inside, and you thank her and the other one and ask those questions, or...” John scratched his mane and leaned in.

    "Tell me if you've heard this one..."

    "There's a pony," he started, "that keeps order. This pony makes sure good things come to the deserving, and that bad things arrive in spades to others. This pony keeps the unjust in anticipation of what they deserve, and ensures that the world flows on as it should, piece by piece. Your little world runs because this pony keeps it running." His mouth was nearly at the father's ear now. "Do you know what they call this pony?"

    The shaking of the father's head was more like a vibration.

    "They call her," John whispered, "the Mailmare. She's the best friend of the crying mare who's heart just snapped." He patted the shaking stallion on the shoulder. "Let's face it, having the mailmare as an enemy is bad enough when you haven't been declared legally dead for months and have legal and financial paperwork on its way."

    He smiled, and the father flinched.

    “Uh. Uh. Okay.” Terrified, the father stepped backwards."I'll get r-r-right on that."

    “Great!” John spoke with relief reached his mouth into his saddlebag and pulled out a napkin and a pen. “Take notes! Make sure she sees you taking notes.” His smiled stayed for a second too long. “Make sure I see her see you taking those notes.”

    Sooooooooo....

    This takes the chapter back towards the comedic-dramatic life of the Choices girls territory and less obligatory crossover. One one hoof, yes, many of my readers love John yelling at people. On the other hand, it's now something perfectly rational that the town repairman would say. You could have it either way.

    Thanks go to ankyo and  RK_Striker_JK_5.

    19 comments · 286 views
  • 43w, 3d
    What the pre-readers are saying...

    Just so you know, here's some comments on the Hooves Holding Hearts chapter that drops this week.

    "She had a really miserable childhood, didn't she?"

    "Holy freaking s***! Nevermind Jazz, you are not worst parent anymore!"

    "This is both heartwarming and utterly heartbreaking at the same time. You magnificent bastard."

    "Other than that, this chapter does a magnificent job of punching one right dead center of your feelings. "

    "Now, if you will excuse me, I must weep quietly to myself until I fall asleep."

    9 comments · 203 views
  • 43w, 4d
    Story Progress!

    Chapter four of Hooves Holding Hearts is off to the pre-readers! I'm going to try to get a C&D chapter done next, I think. I'm having to split time between pony writing and writing things I actually intend to e-publish for money, but I intend to finish the crop of stories I have, maybe saving a week in summer to write "Doctor Whooves and the Mare in the Moon."

    In other opinions, is the reason Coco Pommel is so popular because the writers could not have made a pony who is more deliberately moe if they tried?

    6 comments · 193 views
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After her students release the spirit of Discord on an official field trip, Cheerilee finds herself out of a job.  With no opportunities in Ponyville, the schoolmare takes a job offer in the inner city area of Canterlot's old mining town.  Can even she overcome the insanities of her colleagues and apathy of her students in time to pass her next annual review?  And who is the mysterious backwards-talking filly following Cheerilee around?  Luna's School for Disadvantaged Youngsters will never be the same!

Tv Tropes page can be found here.

Cover art based on work by blackgryph0n, used with permissiom.

First Published
7th Nov 2011
Last Modified
14th Mar 2012

*Looks at chapter title* Don't tell me what to do! hah, now to read it :pinkiesmile:

ok their is some bad grammar but thats forgivable XD so far so good i'm tracking it

Okay, your story: Amazing so far, 5 stars and tracking it.

Your writing style: So good, so vivid and humorous, that it makes me look at my work with embarrassment.

All in all: Magnificent,  I'm definitely a fan now, this story better maintain the 5 star it currently holds.

Um, Is all of the end supposed to be bolded? Or just her flashback?

>>27687 Sorry, first time submission! Anyone tell me how I can edit? Thanks for the comments everyone!

Awesome! I'm really enjoying this fic, can't wait for your next chapter.

Dude, you are on fire with this. I love your pun-tries (Pun+country) and the humor remains constant. Buck yeah, can't wait for chapter 3!:pinkiehappy:

This is wonderful and I need to read more of this. There are so many different ways you could go with this fic, and I feel you know what you're doing.

That said, I am going to pick on a few things. You don't need to take any of these suggestions.

1) You're doing a lot to make this a pony fic. By that, I mean that you're putting in a lot of slang, a lot of references, a few quotes from the show, etc. But... slow down? Saturating the early chapters like this makes it hardy to keep up that pace later. It also eventually feels like you're adding references just for the sake of it at time. Consider taking a way a few of these. This might just be personal preference. That said, I did love a few of them, and the story need not be devoid of them. The Large Fun Collider in Geneighva... and the cranberries. :rainbowlaugh:

2) I think you know what you want out of Princess Luna. Just don't swing between moods to fast. "We have obtained walnuts!" to crying to "We shall multiply our friendship at once!" was a bit jarring. Related, keep in mind that not all of your ideas have to go in one fic. It's great to give backstory, but it's easy for a reader to become disinterested when you're going into great detail about the history of Old and New Canterlot, or Luna speaking poetically for adjacent paragraphs about whatever issue. Keep the focus of this story in mind when writing this story.

3) You might want to read over this in a day or so with a fresh mind to check for small editing things. For instance: "I’m you’re new teacher.” misuses you're.

Aww. Poor Cherilee. I hope she wouldn't be beaten to pulp or humiliated... She's so nice

So Screwball is Bizarro, eh?

>>29295

I admit, the interest and mannerisms were inspired by her page in the fan coloring/activity book. :pinkiehappy:

This is pretty damn funny, expecting more

In the movie version, Cherillee will be played by Drew Barrymore and Luna by Meryl Streep:pinkiesmile:

But more seriously I'm liking the story :yay:

Having read a "Groundhog's Day" fusion, I am excited to discover a "High School High" fic ;)

Is Paleo's wife... and prereader. So I can also take some of the blame for missed grammar bits. No worries with him frying out or running short of puns. He's good like that. And, 80's music is blaring through the house as I type... so you can guess what that means... lol.

This reminds me of Stand and Deliver.

Yay more awesome references! :rainbowlaugh:

This would be so funny if I weren't feeling bad for Cheerilee :pinkiesad2:

>>32537

It's always darkest before the 80's montage.:trollestia:

Red is awesome!  He's just like my science teacher.

Is this based off of Freedom Writers, cause I really like that movie!?

Excellent read. You have a natural talent for writing. Looking forward to more!

How will she reach these kids?

WE EAGERLY AWAIT TO SEE HOW SHE IS ABLE TO AIDE AND ASSIST YONDER CHEERILEE! ALL HAIL PRINCESS LUNA AND HER AMAZING ROYAL CANTERLOT SPEAKING VOICE! ONWARD, TO GLORIOUS BATTLE AGAINST THE MOST WORTHY OF ADVERSARIES! WORDS...

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

You have a deep sense of humor, and you have an equally-deep appreciation for the characters.  Well written!

I'm enjoying the story very much.

Huzzah! A pony that always speaks in opposites! And the peasants rejoiced! (Trevor is LOVING all of the song and fic references throughout the chapters! XD like that story where that one colt 'caught' the moon to so win fair Luna's heart! Please keep it up! Trevor is intrigued as to where this is heading!

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

>>34190 i can tell a story is good when i find you have liked it

Both funny and well-written.  I'm enjoying this story a lot...

...then again, I also enjoyed Stand and Deliver.

You grew up in the 1980s... didn't you?

Oh, poor Cheerilee!   I love the Screwball cameo . . . AND now we get Luna??

:yay: yay~

>>34334

Cameo? Trust me, she plays a big part in the story.:twilightsmile:

>>34293

January 1980, guilty as charged.:rainbowlaugh:

>>28905

It's got the sad tag:applecry:, but not the Grimdark tag:pinkiesad2:. She's not going to get beaten or shot in the classroom.

"They’ll come back embarrassed in a half hour with thoughts of state-mandated revolution gone. Remember, every time they want to rewrite society, you interrupt them.” The aged councilor walked off. “Trust me, boy. Lifespan of stars, attention span of a gnat.”"

I want the sisters to upset. His. World. :pinkiehappy:

>>33348

yep, i won't lie. He's my favorite. :twilightsmile: Just like my own fave science teacher, maybe with a dash of the 10th Doctor thrown in? :pinkiehappy: And yes, I am terribly biased, and can't wait to get home from my trip to read whatever he's got new... lol

A bizarro pony! :pinkiehappy:  Awesome~

I usually don't comment, But I'm gonna recommend this to my friends purely because of the LotR reference there made by Luna.

...I give her a week until she brings an air horn into class...to "help get their attention"

You don't need to have her get beaten by the student body anyway... everyone in this school is already dead inside.

>>34588 WHICH ONE?

o and great work

this is so full of references that i spend half of the time reading looking stuff up!

i love it! keep up the good work!:trollestia:

Oooh, a "Progress" refrence, nice~

>>34588

Nice LOTR catch!

“I know not how Prince Blueblood was produced from the mighty stock that first gazed upon Nightmare Moon. I worry that the race of ponies is failing. The blood of Dream Valley is all but spent, its pride and dignity forgotten. “

:rainbowlaugh:  I hoped someone would notice that.

dude i love this, its like oc city

and the best part?

you write the ocs well, and with good references to classic 80's movies!

but alas i am a child of the 90's and so only have a limited knowledge of these movies and popculture references, but the writing alone is good enough to keep me coming back.  :pinkiehappy:

Huh? I see people have commented on chapter 4 and I saw a notice about the story updating on EqD, but at the moment I can only see three chapters? Did you take it down?

>>36525

There was an aborted first chapter, unpublished and blank. I haven't been able to figure out how to remove it, so it throws all chapter numbers in the comments off. BUT...I am polishing off ch. 4 to be uploaded by tomorrow morning!

I hope you don't mind, but I'm going to be using Luna's “WE HAVE COME FOR THE TRAIL MIX! WE ARE HOPING FOR THE CRANBERRIES!” line whenever entering any place that sells food when I'm with my friends, if that's ok with you an all *squeak*:fluttershyouch:

I'm loving the references! Especially the one of my favorite song by the Police! Keep it up!:pinkiehappy:

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