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ARE YOU SERIOUS?
There is no description... Oh wait, there is a description, but there isn't much of one. You need to write a longer description than just one sentence. You have to give people a summary of what the story is about, but you don't make it to detailed that it ruins the story; you don't make it too short that you don't give them enough information. This description won't attract anyone's attention because there isn't much of one, and it doesn't tell them a lot about what is going on other than that they are staring at a good apple.
You also have an unnecessary capital 'e' in you title. It should be lower cased so that it turns out to be 'The Autumn Apple'.
You shouldn't put your author's note together with your description. You should have them separated, and the author's note should be labeled 'Author's Note:' so that everyone knows it is an author's note. Another thing that I should add: even if it an author's note, you should use proper punctuation and capitalization. It makes your story look better, and it also shows the readers that you put a lot of work into your story. You description should look sometime like the following:
That is all I can put for now. I will think about giving this story a review, but I wouldn't count on it because I have proofreading that I have to do myself. So, that is all and have a good day.
From hell, to you, and back again,
Soto Konoha, TWE Admin
Since when did ponies have thumbs?
Reading the descriptin, when suddenly:
i.imgur.com/a4oGK.png
That is all.
Ok.
Gotta be a troll. There's no other explanation for your continued idiocy.
1379956 Is that seriously a sexual reference, and this is rated Teen? If that is the case then this will be really simple to report.
WHAT
Why is this teen?
Pre-read: Well, I don't suppose this could be THAT bad. Might as well.
Post-read: gifsoup.com/webroot/animatedgifs4/3920662_o.gif
1380089 they passed it this way as teen if you dont like it then ya with all abundance go take it up with them.
1380295 That's... literally what he was threatening to do.
1379956 I was just thinking the same thing.
Apple Short, get an editor. There's nothing I can say about this that hasn't been said eight hundred times on any of your other stories.There could be an interesting premise in here somewhere, but it gets buried under your awkward phrasing and out-of-character characters.
1380295 Yeah, 1380328 pretty much said what I was going to say. That is exactly what I am threatening on doing. Anything that can be referred to as a sex scene is supposed to be a mature story. Simple reason to this: There is not a single PG-13 movie that has a detailed sex scene, and that is what the Teen rate means; it is PG-13. Mature is 18+, and Everypony is rated G. Putting a sex scene on a story, while calling it a Teen rated story, is false advertisement, which is not allowed. So, that is something else you need to change. Either you get rid of all the sexually implied scenes, or you change it to Mature rating.
1380623 didnt know that sorry it has been changed.
Admit it, you're trolling.
Nobody can be this clueless without doing it on purpose.
1380685 go read my latest chapter in willis i am trying to listen to the group and improve! here.
1380876
Why would I bother reading any of your stories? You've shown time and time again that you're either incapable of writing properly or write that way on purpose to attract flames.
Either way it means I'd just be wasting precious seconds reading that tripe.
1380885
Is it lonely up there on your pedestal?
1382369
No, I love the view up here.
So tell me Chris, how are things in Northampton?
1382388
Who the hell is Chris?
1382393
Wouldn't that be yourself? The owner of "rainb0wdashie.com"?
1382400
Nope, that would be the name of the brony who bought the domain for me.
1382443
.Yeah, I'm sure it is.
Doesn't explain why you tried to bluff your way out of it. How many Chris' do you know in Northampton?
1382462
Only this one
1382479
So why the "charade"? Assuming of course that you're not Chris in the first place, you knew a Chris in Northampton which I find odd you would then ask, "Who the hell is Chris?"
Doesn't quite fit now does it?
1382513>>1382479
Oh get a room you two! Nobody cares about your little game!
1382532
She started it.
I'm just having fun.
Why don't you join us and we'll make it a threesome?
1382513
I haven't talked to Chris in over a year since I took total control over my website. So it's not much of a charade. It's more like you grasping at straws.
EDIT: Apparently I'm a girl now. You're pretty bad at this cyberstalking thing.
1382549
To quote Eric Cartman, "screw you hippie".
I'm not into pissing matches with egomaniacs or those with extreme butthurt. I appreciate the critiquing you've done of some of my drafts offline but I'm not getting into the middle of this.
1382551
Well, your avatar is a girl and you've done nothing to show you're a boy and Chris can be a girl's name so there you go.
1382583
So you think my name is Chris because of a domain lookup of my website and you think I'm a female because my profile pic is a female cartoon character. That's pretty funny, man.
1382613
Works for me Chris.
Apple Shorts has outdone himself. 0 likes, very impressive.
Not sure if decent troll
or just really, really bad writer
WHAT IS THIS?
I am so incredibly pissed right now
Bravo! Bravo, dude, that was great!
956 people on this site do not know art when they see it.
Doing my part to make the bar greener.
I'm glad these stories tend to be short. Otherwise I might hurt my smile muscles.
I like eggs ^_^