Berry Snowdrift lives in a small cottage on the outskirts of a wintery forest. Living away from the village has its ups and downs but when Berry goes into the forest one day to gather firewood, she comes across a very strange and mystical glade. And in it's center is a humble tower bearing a strange and otherworldly Guardian with a stranger story to tell.
This story is a what if kind of story. It's a take on what happened to Merlin after his supposed defeat in the old legends. I hope you guys like fey, magic and the teasing of two very royal sisters cuz there will be that abound in this.
Wow Featured the day of approval (6/17/2022). Lol that's a first for me. Im pretty aware of the temporary feature function as I've seen multiple fics of mine appear on the featured list temporarily. but this fic has been on it for hours now, so Im inclined to believe that its actually an enjoyable story so much thanks and I hope the rest lives up to the hype lol.
#TheGuardianOfTheForest
Aw man! I like it!
This was a pretty good first chapter. Can't wait to see more.
Nice beginning
Even if you were to leave it here Which I hope you don't, WONDERFUL start
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It definitely will not be left here. Its a foray into new territory for me and I want to have absolute fun with it. Silly funny random fey magic fueled fun.
wonderful beginning, can't wait for more soon. good job.
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Well done.
The title had me suspicious you were going more the druid/ seer from the older versions of the legends, and I'm pleased to see that it looks like I was right.
Definetly worth a follow to see where it goes.
Ok I'm interested, I think I will follow.
A very nice little story. A smattering of grammatical errors, but nothing so egregious that it took away from the story. Just a misplaced apostrophe here and an odd capitalization there... Very pretty descriptions regardless.
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any chance you could point out the errors? As a writer I can't improve if my mistakes aren't shown to me, especially if I missed them in my own editing process. Any and all help is always appreciated. Ty :)
awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter
awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter
I could literally see rverething you wrote...Good job mate!
Well, this is interesting to say the least, and has two chapter. I look forward to seeing where this goes. I am enjoying Merlin thus far.
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It seems you had two times the excitement haha
minus a few negligible punctuation errors, this is a competently put together story with a neat premise
i'm eager to see where you take it next
though if i had to pick a gripe besides the punctuation errors, i'd have to say that the chapters are just a wee bit too short for my tastes
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Ill have to remedy that I suppose XD
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Any chance u could point out some punctuation errors? Id love to edit this so that it looks good for future readers.
Here are the grammar and punctuation errors I noticed.
cost
I'm
The
Merlin's behavior provides quite the laugh. I'm definitely looking forward to more.
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Ty so much for pointing those out. It helps a lot. And I am having so much fun writing Merlins character. It makes me laugh as I write it XD
this is more the length of chapter i like
just long enough to properly savor
anyways, a question: will Discord be showing up in this?
The issues I spotted. Tossed in some spoilers just in case.
The highlighted sentence is a bit confusing with 'corner' used twice. Would suggest changing the underlined section to 'between' since a hammock is being referenced.
sight
thought
tone
him
they
You should consider splitting the sentence into two, between 'yet' and 'however', and change up the second sentence for grammar. Or place a comma after 'yet' and remove 'however'. This will remove the run-on sentence.
The ending of this chapter is priceless.
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I'm laughing as I read it. Keep up the good work. I'll point out anything else I notice as I read along.
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He absolutely will :) And I think it'll be a fun chapter.
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Thank you so much for the help. I've fixed the aforementioned errors and hopefully it comes off better now.
Merlin is so. slick? smooth? suave? one of those
I am having some trouble understanding that explanation about nature magic, but the tree root system thing was a very nice touch
Can't wait for Merlin to meet Discord. Both looking into each eyes and snap in rhythm like a old movie.
Noticed a few typos.
your
Should be a period/full stop after 'have'.
of
As it seems the story takes place after The Ending of the End, but perhaps before The Last Problem, I would think Applejack would more amused than angry about the pear since she is now aware of her mother's heritage. But that is just my view and not me saying to change it. Keep writing as you see fit, the story is amazing as it is.
Looking forward to seeing Merlin's interactions with the other Mane 6, especially Pinkie and Fluttershy.
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Nature magic uses natural energy and manipulation to form magic. As old magic was coming up with an explanation for scientific happenings that people back then just didn’t understand.
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Haha true but there is a reason for that. Yeah she has no issues, but don’t you dare turn an apple into a pear. Thats just blasphemy. Apples and pears are fine but apples should stay apples and pears should stay pears.
XD
the second half of this chapter made me realize that Discord's gonna love this guy
also you seem to have had a catastrophic apostrophe spill, and you used the wrong your in the second paragraph
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Any chance you could let me know where the spill happened so I can clean it up? And ty for pointing out errors. Much obliged.
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hate to sound like a prick here, but if you got an editor/beta reader you wouldn't have to rely on me
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Fair lol, and u don’t sound like a dick. Just the truth.
The Administration shall monitor this world.
The CHAOS that will be unleashed once he is introduced to the Pinkness that which is Pinkie Pie
oh joy, the Discord chapter(or, as i'm hoping, the first of many Discord Chapters)
and it was good, if a bit fast
loved the little bits of backstory in this one
speaking of fast, we've got miss bluefast up next
Chill. That's how best to describe this fic. It's a nice change of pace.
Good story so far!
Yeah, can see. Most stories that tell of Merlin, call him a old man of the forest\hermit so he would connect to Flutters far quicker and more deeply than any of the others. Though he'd probably get on well with Granny Smith,
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true. As far as Im concerned Fluttershy wouldn't care too much for age either. She far too kind for that kind of nonsense. Lol
My Arthurian lore is rusty as hell but it was my understanding that Merlin was supposed to be an arrogant asshole with the power to back it up.
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That's arthurian history. My story is loosely based on it, with my own additions and changes to make the story unique. I have added some little bit's in there but this Merlin is a little less arrogant and a little more fun.
y'know, it just hit me
Merlin hasn't yet met Spike, has he?
mayhaps he could also meet the Student 6 in future chapters
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Hey, stop reading my mind. It's full of spoilers and junk.
A crush on Flutters? Won't Discord be a little jelly... and jealous?
Kinda surprised Merlin never encountered Changelings, although they are the closest analogy to "Fae" this world has. Surely he must have been aware of that failed invasion and later involuntary ejection from Canterlot? For that matter, what about when a certain magic-eating centaur deamon was stomping around draining magic from the entire area?
Just trying to pin down where he popped into a chaotic 9 seasons...
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So this is loosely set after the events of mlp:fim, but before Luster Dawn, and with some events changed to fit the narrative.
Uh oh, the Ponk is missing. What sneaky schemes is the premier party pony up to in her concealed celebratory command center? (Probably trying to find out what flavor Merlin likes the most...)
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Shhhhhhhh, not so loud, she might hear you!
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I hear that if you spin in place really fast and say her name three times, she appears...!
...or just get dizzy and fall over. Maybe both.