What no! Can't be!! No way!!

I'm OK with this.

Sonia: No! NO!
GA: Yes! YES! So beautiful !
Sonia: Ah!
GA: oh! Yeah!
Sonia: How could this happen! She's only ten years old!
GA: It was destiny!
Sonia: ah! Oh! Aaaaaaaaaahhh!!!!!!!
GA: hunghrrrr!!!!!!!!!!!! Love it! I know you do !
Sonia:ah! ........uh!.........yeeeeeeeeessssss!!!!!
*huff huff huff*
GA: we should read more of these together more often.
Sonia: yes..... Lets do that , this time we're reading the goddess within.

Sonia: No! NO!
GA: Yes! YES! So beautiful !
Sonia: Ah!
GA: oh! Yeah!
Sonia: How could this happen! She's only ten years old!
GA: It was destiny!
Sonia: ah! Oh! Aaaaaaaaaahhh!!!!!!!
GA: hunghrrrr!!!!!!!!!!!! Love it! I know you do !
Sonia:ah! ........uh!.........yeeeeeeeeessssss!!!!!
*huff huff huff*
GA: we should read more of these together more often.
Sonia: yes..... Lets do that , this time we're reading the goddess within.

2133221 Yeah fun fact, no one spell checked this. The only people who read this before it was posted were the other author and I...and as you can probably tell from the rest of the story, our grammar and spelling and whatnot aren't that great

2120249 Thanks for the feedback Chum. And yeah, there's gonna be a fair amount of errors like that, sorry. We're both sort of new to the whole Pony fan fiction thing.

2123685 If by "few" you mean "a lot" then yeah, lol. just try your best to pretend were both competent authors and enjoy this wonderful tale of romance and doughnuts

2130467 are you referring to the goddess within that castertroy wrote?

2143153
Maybe.....

2146181 sorry whenever I hear that as a title I always refer to that story for some reason.

2143274 yeaaaahhhhh, sorry about that man. I am incredibly uneducated on horse grammar. I-im sorry

i fucking loved this, this was so fucking sweet!!!! i want to see more!!!
Also your grammar is effing awful (and i'm not even english native!!), but if you continue the story i'll forgive you

2160703 Thank you ever so kindly for putting up with my less than stellar grammatical skills my good sir, and thanks for all the positive comments as well

Ok... so... I don't know if I like it or not... but I guess it is not like disgusting or anything, but it is scary...

It's ok. As long as rape is not involved. I'm ok with pretty much anything. And no torture

It's always odd to come across pedophilia-suggesting stories like this

BUT... You did manage to make it more sweet & romantic rather than gross & full of rape. For that, I both thank and commend you. A nice little (slightly) innocent story like this is a nice change of pace. I give you 5 licks.

2304427 Why thank you kindly my good sir, but don't be too quick to give out your licks. it was originally going to have one more chapter, full of doughnut joe and Sweetiebelle getting it on. however, after writing out the rest of the story, neither I or the other author could bring ourselves to do that to poor Sweetiebelle. ....rarity was also going to have a threesome with Applebloom and Scootaloo, but once again: neither of us could bring ourselves to write that

2321101 Poor Sweetie Belle? What about my poor boner? :(