English is not my native language, but i hope it's readable and you guys will enjoy it if not i'm sorry about that. i'll appriciate any comment.
Dash meets a new arrival to the town who have some unusual wings and she will get to know the story behind it.
Not the best title and description. :/
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You didn't need to tell us English wasn't your native language.
We could tell from reading the story.
Hey, if you want any help with all of the phrasing or stuff, you could always get somebody to edit your work after you write it.
but are not able to portray them how you want to in english.
Just join a "New Writer" or "In need of Editor" group... you could also just shoot someone a private message and ask them to proofread. These look like really interesting stories, and it sounds like you have great ideas
I really like the ideas, and hope you can succeed!
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Thank you, it means a lot to me
i was thinking a lot about if i should upload it or not because i was afraid about what will people say about my english, i hope some one will want to preread my other stories and do those what you mentioned.
You have some grammar mistakes, but its ok since english isn't your native language. i like the concept of the story.
I thought this was good even though there was grammar mistakes
overall good job
Two stories? By the same author? IN A ROW?
1) You have a lot of the same formatting issues in this one as you did in the last (or next? I guess the other was published second). "Quote marks" are for spoken words, italics are for thoughts. That's the typical formatting for English fiction.
2) Dash's instant attraction to Sky is a bit obnoxious. Real relationships take time to build.
3) Pacing. Slow down and build the world and its characters.
Hope this helps!