Too close to the sun

It's every parent's nightmare, sitting in the hospital waiting on news of their filly. Unfortunately for Dash, adopting a Cutie Mark Crusader was never going to be easy, especially now they are a teenager.

A pretty dire bit of writing I did in a day after having an idea stuck in my head.

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Melody Song

Melody Song #1 · Feb 3rd, 2022 · · ·

Aww...

I think this was a great story! You wrote all the characters very well and managed to give the story comedic moments to punctuate the underlying pain of losing a limb (much less two). I also like how you only brought in bits and pieces of the backstory at a time, so the reader wasn't drowned in exposition during the conversation (though I would very much like to know exactly what Apple Bloom turned into that gave her branches on her head because that just seems hilarious). The bit of lore you added with the wings = adrenaline was interesting too, I might have to use that in the future, if you don't mind!

SamuelK28

SamuelK28 #2 · Feb 4th, 2022 · 1 · ·

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Not at all, I'm surprised people liked it. I just had the idea the other night, what if Poison Joke gave Scootaloo wings that allowed her to fly but took away her sight in the process, i.e the joke. Thus I wanted to write something and gave myself a day to do it. I wanted to slowly unravel the story to keep the suspense there as to what had happened. Overall this didn't go as badly as I feared. That wing bit was just something that came into my head spur of the moment. As for Apple Bloom, she didn't turn into anything, the branches just grew out of her head when she tried Poison Joke, like dear antlers. I thought that would be quite a funny thing to happen to her.

Melody Song