I like writing about the worst day of a character's life; it lets us see the mettle inside. (Pronouns: RB/20 )
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The doctor pronounced it officially: Scootaloo will never fly. However, Rainbow Dash and Applejack introduce her to another pony who has a story they hope Scootaloo can relate to.
Sequel: The Ponies in the Caves
Side-story: Redheart's War
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As both a fan of Scootaloo and Vinyl Scratch I heartily approve of this story.
Very nice! And an interesting idea that Redheart was a Royal Guard.
You know, I hate that idea, that "somepony will never x, medicine can't help". Seriously, what about Twilight? She's a fucking alicorn, she gave wings to Rarity even when she wasn't. And what about Discord, who can make pigs fly with a snap of his fingers?
Still a good story.
I definitely approve. While I'm not a fan of the idea of the idea not even a goddess like Celestia being unable to help, as that just seems like forced power lossage for a plot, everything on in -including the interesting ideas behind Vinyl and Redheart's pasts- is definitely worth the read.
This is a sweet story.
Well, a FiMFiction tale officially made me tear up...
As a big fan of both these ponies, I've always held out hope that one day Scoots will fly, and that Vinyl simply doesn't talk much/hasn't yet on camera, but I gotta say, I loved this story regardless.
Only a few minor errors still remain; I'd focus on cleaning up that run-on sentence where Vinyl's accident is described, but it was still extremely descriptive... especially the unnerving medical procedure that followed. Great job! I actually learned something new from that!
It's also a really touching piece about moving on from one's disabilities and not letting it define them, as well as accepting those who are disabled. I think the message here would make Lauren Faust proud.
Also, part of me really wants to know what the "whoopie cushion incident" was... care to explain, Rainbow Dash?
I'd also kinda like to know how things might go down if Vinyl stopped by the hospital, now that she's grown, to thank Nurse Redheart.
What I liked most about this was how Redheart and the other soldiers were portrayed. Redheart as a vet is an interesting idea, and the thought of her dealing with this as a rookie fresh out of basic is a poignant one. That she kept her cool until she could spare a moment to vomit is something I've heard many times from soldiers. They train you so that you lose your crap afterwards when it's safe to do so.
Is this your first story here? If so, well done. Redheart being a Guard is an interesting idea I haven't seen before.
Thanks to all. I agree with the “Celestia could,” but set myself the opposite initial condition for the purposes of the exercise. I was pleased with this for something I banged out in the Sky Club during a long layover...
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Yes, first story. Thanks.
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If I can think of a whopee cushion incident, I’ll be sure to write it up. For now, it’s just a Noodle Incident.
This is a great story, but the gore is so disgusting.
However, this is still a great story nonetheless.
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Thanks!
Your
Nice fic.
It plays a little loose with ages all around but it works.
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Confound it! I thought I squelched all those.
Thanks!
Vinyl definitely didn't lose her ego.
Oh, and Scootaloo has been shown to be a land flyer and not too shabby in the water.
I came here looking for a Scootaloo story, but ended up with a pleasant surprise. Interesting headcanon that DJ Pon3 lost her voice. Rubbing off what some commenters said, it's kind of tough to balance that magic can/can't do in the MLP universe, and I think it's up to the writer how "magical" they want to make it. Well done.
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Thanks! I appreciate it.
As a singer, Vinyl's story hit me hard in the feels. Sad, but really heartwarming at the same time.
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Thanks! This wasn't meant to be a happy story, but I hope people found it hopeful. I appreciate your words.
This was a good story. There's still a few typos (mainly around the formatting of quotations), but in general, this is a well-thought-through, engaging story. Good work. (And feel free to send me a PM if you want me to tell you what I spotted.)
Wow. I checked out this story because I was bored, but..................ended up being hit with feels. This is...............really good. I really love the concept. I think this gets a favorite from me..............
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Big thanks! Glad you enjoyed.
Come for the Scootaloo, stay for the Vinyl tale, now that's a switcharoo I can like
This is a bit too long and run-on for a paragraph, but of course, this is your first story, plus I suppose it does convey the urgency and escalation?
This was one moment that stuck out to me, though. Scootaloo's a kid, and of course she'll, well, be a little blunt about it, not necessarily in a nice way. So, nice touch!
Is Ponniard a pun on something?
My favourite part was the run-on sentence when Vinyl gets injured. I didn't register that she gained her cutie mark until Scootaloo mentioned it, though.
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Thank you!
Ponniard is a ponification of Juilliard.
The run-on sentence was an attempt to try to write slow-motion, with undertones of terror and panic. I'm glad it worked for you!
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I forgot to say "thank you!" for the comment.
I initially came across "Redheart's War", but decided to read them in order of: A Story to Relate to, The Ponies in the Caves, then Redheart's War.
I got to say, I was really touched by this story. It's written really well, I was completely and undeniably absorbed into this story.
Setting aside the very clever idea of Redheart being a combat medic and you still get this brilliant, if not a heart-rending story of how Vinyl lost her voice, on top of the concept of Scootaloo being told she will not fly. How poignant did you want this to be?
I could go on about how the little things like the mentioned gore, add a sense of realism, emphasizing the actual danger and dread of the story.
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Thanks! I appreciate it. Glad you enjoyed.
Ah, so this was the continuity in Redheart's War that Sledge was talking about.
Poor Vinyl...
But I'm glad she's found a new and equally amazing talent. And passed her wisdom on to Scootaloo, too, of course.
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Thanks! I had this headcanon for like a year, so I created an account to get it out of my head and stop bothering me.
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You created an account for this?
You're doing very well, I must say.
You bastard, you had to wait until I was drinking before you showed me a tale that had best horse as a depressed cripple. It was devastating. And then the Vinyl story started, and that was a really good damn sad story. Poor DJ horse.
10/10 you magnificent bastard.
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh The Feels.
Why is this trilogy so DAMN GOOD?! My God.
And Yes I Read it backward. Fight Me.
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Once again, thanks! And I'm glad you enjoyed.
At first I was reluctant to give this a read, since I am more of an action-oriented-stories guy, and this was your first story here. But now I have to say, its one hell of a debut. You did an Amazing job at conveying such heart-wrenching emotions (if thats a thing), on a wholesome story that I regret not having read sooner.
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Hey, big thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed!
WOW that's good
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Thank you!
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You’re welcome
Came for more Medic Redheart, stayed for heart-touching story. And seeing this was your first story on this site, I can relate to you. Although you definitely did better than me, so congrats! Have a long overdue upvote from me again.
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Thank you again for taking the time!
Excellent story! I cried. The advice they gave Scootaloo was on the nose: things will get better.
I have my own problem my cerebellum is smaller than normal by one half inch
I was born the size of a premee but I wasn't born premature I was just really small
Even my younger step siblings are taller than me I was always the runt of the litter
My little brother is the youngest of the three of us yet he's taller than me
I guess that's what happens when your birth mother is a drug addict
And your birth father is a drunk
And then there's me the labour of love between both drugs and alcohol that probably caused a shorter lifespan maybe 60-65 years at most and 50-55 years at minimum one thing I know is that Will not live to see myself to be 80 years of age that's just depressing
I just wish had a longer lifespan like 90-100 years at most and 70-80 at minimum years
But alas it's not to be had I'd be a lot happier if I could have that wish if God could see it in him to grant my wish I'd be eternally grateful to the holy Father
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I am so sorry.