Concept is good.

Characters are good.

Story is funny as heck.

Nothing like royal mischief to make me chuckle!

Celestia and Cadance are headed to a world of pain.

Nopony messes with Luna!

Two points, go for the extra.

The matching comic makes it work. Slice of Life story for the win!

Thus an incredible comic is explained with excellent storytelling.

Scooooooore! Doughnut tossing is a serious sport!

*picks up doughnut and lines up shot*

Now let me try. Just hold still Celestia................

... and then the lunar rebellion started

EPIC fic!

5 spikes for you:

we seriously need some luna reaction pictures.

Field goal!!!

'cause its funny.

Glad so many people are enjoying this so far!

>>12186721218672

Don't worry, following chapters will be Luna exacting her revenge

Let this be known as the Great Royal Train Food Fight. You may carry on.

Oh this is just brilliant.

Those sick bastards.... Get'em, Luna!

This is hilarious

>>12186611218661 "But how are you going to make that shot from the moon?"

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Celestia.png

oh i can not wait to see Luna's revenge

total mlp regular show

tia:*throws doughnut and lands on luna's horn*ooooooooooooOOOOOOO

candance:OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

tia:OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

luna:*royal canterlot voice*WHAT THE BUCK!!!!!!

Royal mischief for the win

These kinds of happy real-life kind of stories are one of the big reasons I read fan-fics. I could totally see me doing this if I had a unicorn sister. Reminds me why I always make a point of not sleeping in the presence of my friends and siblings

Wonderful little story dear, can't wait to see more

OH. IT. IS. ON !!!!

I always love the idea of Cadence being the sidekick to Celestia and her royal shenanigans, while Luna is the hapless foil. Like Calvin & Hobbes vs. Suzy!

I actually LOL'd when reading this story, and believe me, I do not do that often. Keep going!

>>12187191218719 that was indeed funny.

The most dangerous of prank weapons. The doughnut.  Leaving your face sticky for hours. (you  can't wash it off!  Especially jelly filled!)

Good Job less than 12 hours and your at the number one spot

lool celestia

Not bad.

>>12191241219124 Bah I could make that shot from Pluto if I had to

That was great.

BRILLIANT!

Take all my kissy faces.

How wude!

Oooh this is gonna be EPIC silliness!

Shut up and take my bits! Just take them!

Great story!

Much laughter was had!

My god this was funny keep up the good work

Nicely done, my friend! Have a fun time with this story! I felt this chapter alone was good enough as a one-shot, but if there is more to come, have at it! I did enjoy this read, and it has inspired to me continue my own, Spike's Rainbow Dash. Thanks! Happy writing!

Bravo to you! I'm really enjoying this!

I love this so much! The comic this was based on was my desktop background for like a month or something. So AWESOME!

>>12199231219923 hold on a sec the author of Spike's Rainbow Dash likes MY writing?!

Very first sentence, you're using a period, followed by a dialogue tag. How has nobody else notified you of this?

There's quite a few others errors I'd point out to you, but I'm too lazy.

SCOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOORE

Dat Cover image...

Do ho ho ho ho, that was quite funny.  And rather well written too!  It's harder to give critiques that show no glaring issues or weaknesses.  Honestly, the only thing I notice is you get a little comma happy (though only once or twice are they used incorrectly; I suggest learning to vary your punctuation some, though) and your dialogue punctuation is incorrect here or there.  Otherwise, that was a fun little read, with more depth than I expected honestly.  Cheers!

Every. Meal

Tia's fat omg, I love Luna so much.

>>12195851219585 Pluto is not a planet.  

Image: http://a.deviantart.net/avatars/m/a/man-faceplz.png?1

You had me at "Tia."

Also, in the second paragraph, I'm pretty sure you spelled "Princesses" wrong. It's -Princesses'-

Story Concept:  Beautiful

I love a good comedy especially involving Celestia and Luna

Faved and Liked  

And then Luna was like .....

Oh, and is it wrong if I listed to this song while reading the story?

>>12191241219124 Interplanetary doughnut cannon..........

So that's why unicorns have horns

Funny, oh so funny

When I woke up this morning, this story is sitting in my box as a notice from 'Struggling Authors'

When I got home from work, it's at the top of the feature box.

Well I guess I kind of HAVE to read it now...

Oh Cakelestia, you so funny

Will be looking forward for more, I love fics where the princesses are silly

uh oh this wont end well

I always loved taht picture, this fic is a beautiful example of re-imagining it through the worded medium.

At first I was all like   Then I was all and than Luna was all

And then, the Real Cadance was VANISHED TO THE MOON!.... thus rendering the Crysalis plans useless

Care for a doughnut?

Them's fightin' words...

>>12191241219124

... You know what? You're right... I'll need a whole box of heat-resistant rings. Then all I'd need to do is throw them hard enough they leave the moon's atmosphere, and without air resistance they'll keep going until they get caught in Equis' gravity well, which will then bring down an indiscriminate rain of meteor-like rings upon you and your precious ponies...

OR, you could stand still and let me attempt to put this sugary ring of goodness around your horn, and let that be the end of it...

>>12203101220310

You're right... he's a dog. But then again, neither is the moon. So your argument was invalid the entire time.

AWSOME

I see a prank war acoming.

oh gods... EVERYPONY TAKE COVER!!!!!

"thou enjoyeth throwing pastries at my face? How bout spiders covering yours"

That's how Celestia and Cadence became afraid of spiders.

Such potential I see.  

Glorious adaptation of the comic. You win so much for that!

Good job getting featureboxed, but the story needs an editing pass.  It's got a number of distracting errors throughout, and I have a hard time warming up to a story when the very first line has two goofs.  (One of those errors is obscure, but there are plenty of others that a simple spell-check should have caught.)

For future reference, the verb "art" (and more generally the -t ending: wert, hast, etc) is an archaic conjugation specific to the second person ("thou art").  Early Modern English conjugates "we are" just like today's English does.

Also, if the attribution goes after a quote, turn the quote's final period into a comma.

“Tia, remind us again why we are forced to take this infernal contraption back to Canterlot,” Luna muttered under her breath, a smile plastered to her face as she stifled yet another yawn.

Cadence we love love love you

>>12227901222790 thanks for the constructive criticism, it shows that you care enough about it to want it to be even better! The specific example really helps me, so I can look for it again.

Not hilarious but decent enough fornme to follow withinerest

>>12203101220310 when I was a lad Pluto was a planet and we didn't let any fasny-pance scietists tell us otherwise

moar donuts!

Classic.

I can never get the archaic stuff right, I keep forgetting.  This is why my Luna is progressing with her speech modernization, only occasionally slipping into the archaic when she's not concentrating!

I think donuts easily qualify as a distraction, so have at thee!

If Luna hadn't woken up, I believe this is how they would celebrate:

>>12232011223201 Seems about right.

Who in Equestria has the ball/gut to tease Tia for her royal flank?

Who in Equestria dares to throw donuts (Straberry flavour?) to Luna's face and horn?

Royal Rumble.. Let's count down.. 3. 2. 1.

>>12229401222940

Andy-025

>> Mr. Knife when I was a lad Pluto was a planet and we didn't let any fasny-pance scietists tell us otherwise

Damn straight!  How would they like it if they're reclassified? From scientist to, say, smartypants?

Besides, if Mickey can be an apprentice, Pluto can be a planet.

Also, can't wait to see Luna get revenge!

And so began the great equestrian donuts wars. A series of battles between Celestia, Luna and Cadance that forever changed the face of Equestria as Jelly filled donuts Air bursted across Canterlot.

It felt like there are missing details that should be in here. Also, time and character focus needs a little work. That aside though, you have warranted another fave, like, and trollestia

SCOOOOOOORE!

Read the comic and had a good laugh. and this makes it a hundred times more funny.

Now commencing Shameless promotion of friends fic.

Luna Shoves A Cell Phone Up Her Plot, the fanfiction.

It's a parody of the Luna does stupid shit genre and it's actually quite well written for something so ridiculous.

Launching distraction maneuver to get noticed and shit.

Image: http://scranton.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw7700-1343867004832.gif

That will be all.

“Oh, good evening, Luna. Care for a doughnut?”  where the last words my dear sister said to me before the bomb set by the NMM cult went off, who somehow managed to recreate one of NMM's most dangerous spells and set it off just below Celestia and Cadance leaving no remains.

The full throne room went silent after Luna's speech, while they absorbed the news of Celestia's and Cadance’s death on the train ride to Canterlot.

Yeah! Yeah! Yeah! Yeah!

And then there's going to be more aaaa

>Revenge is a Dish Best Served Sticky

>Poker face

You, good sir. You. Yes. Have this upvote. 'Tis my only upvote to be given. It's....just....so...BEAUTIFUL!! By beautiful, I mean it is the best pony comedy Ive read

Well, it sure was nice having three princesses, but I suppose Equestria will just have to make due with one. On a serious note though, we now know why Celestia was able to get owned so bad, she was tired from having to defend herself from Luna's vengence.

>>12187191218719

GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOLLLLLLLLL

Loved this story. Love it when the Princesses pull pranks on each other.  Very entertaining and funny =3

It would be great if Luna's prank would be putting SOMETHING in Celestia's donuts...

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Luna_lolface.png

Nightmare Moon mode in 3, 2, 1.

Cool story bro.

lol

i could see do that to luna

>>12261731226173 You spelled goal wrong... I am sorry. I am a grammar nazi at times.

Laughing....LAUGHING SO HARD RIGHT NOW, THAT I....I CAN'T EVEN REPLY TO THE STORY....OH SO MUCH BUCKING WIN!!!!!!!! You have my vote dear sire/madam...100%

>>12284491228449 thank you, and I'm most definitely a sir, just to set your mind at ease