All Applejack wants is a kind, good-natured, simple stallion to settle down with. Only problem is, the stallion she's fallen for is anything but that.
No matter how hard she tries, she can't stop herself from falling in love with a villain. A criminal. And she doesn't know why.
But she's determined to figure out the reason, even if it means accepting a shameful truth about herself.
Sex is discussed and reflected on, but not shown.
Part of the How We Lost It series, inspired by Fluttershy's Night Out
Proofread by Schattendrache
Other Stories in the How We Lost It series:
Twilight: Running Away from Destiny
Rarity: What is a Worthy Man?
Rainbow Dash: Deathbed Thoughts
Pinkie Pie: What is a Smile Worth?
Fluttershy: Coming soon!
Chapters (1)
Oh boy....
I'm sensing a parallel here...
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Name of Story: A Simple Pony
Grammar score: 7
Pros: Details and depth is pretty good. The character feeling is remarkable. A bit of a well done backstory on side characters.
Cons:
only one thing I noticed is punctuations.
Example:
So when she told her friends that she was ready to settle down, everypony rightfully assumed that it would be with a pony like her.
this is in paragraph 1
So, when she told her friends that she was ready to settle down, every pony rightfully assumed that it would be with a pony like her.
Every time you use so in beginning of a sentence must have a comma. everypony it could be an error not sure but you must separate them for two words instead of one.
In total score In my opinion this is a 7.5/10 for me.
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There's something charming about a lawless rogue and a lawful farm girl getting together that sounds fascinating.
An interesting choice. I can't say I think it's the right choice, but it was her decision nonetheless. Hopefully she understands and can accept the potential consequences of her actions. Nice story!
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Hope you enjoy the other stories in this series too (once they're all out). All six pretty much involve the Mane 6 making "controversial" decisions, for lack of a better word.
The writing was quite good! Very reflective and I liked the oc - he had an interesting personality.
Thanks for sharin’.
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Thanks! Hope you like the other stories in this series too
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Yep, the good ol' opposites attract is always fun. Originally this story was going to be about Applebloom, but then I thought that AJ would make it more fun since she's a lot more stubborn and stuck in her ways than her sister.
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Yeah, Apple Bloom does have a bit rebellious streak after all. And I feel like there aren't enough straight AJ fics (not that I have a problem with the yuri fics). I also never liked the whole "married to work" headcanon. It seems like because Applejack didn't show interest in Trenderhooves, people think she's asexual (dang it TV tropes with the Chaste Hero trope ascribed to her!) even though she had no reason to be attracted to him at all. To me AJ is simply waiting for the right stallion at the right time, something Rarity being filled with more passion than reason, still needs to learn.
Sorry for my long rambling😅. Anyways this was a great fanfiction. I always loved the scoundrel being shipped with AJ too.
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Which is exactly what I always thought too. She has no issue waiting for the right kind of family man to enter her life. And if he doesn't, then she'll ask her extended family for recommendations.
I love comments, so keep rambling haha! AJ being shipped with a bad boy always just felt so natural to me too.
Hope you enjoy the other stories in this series! The Twilight one is already up.
So applejack had one of those alpha chads, but when they get away, she resign herself for the beta provider, if applejack encounters the villain again, she may go for another round, or not, if anything, she had her fun, and hopefully is a one time thing.
My previous comments were me skimming the fanfic and not really knowing what it was about.
Dang this is taking honesty to its extreme. It's a little sad how they won't get together. I am kinda sappy for the thief reforming and marrying Applejack (probably why I like the Flim x Applejack), but you know what?
They both held on to what they believed in. I'll admit I don't think I would agree to not having any compromise if it means you'll be a better and happier person, but this isn't about making best choice. It's about staying true. And that's something I admire. It's bittersweet. But I respect this fanfic. A great fanfiction!
BTW I loved Applejack secretly is a ballerina. Nothin like a cowgirl ballerina!
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To be honest, all six stories in this series are meant to tragically sad and take the six Elements to their extremes (which is what causes the issue). Glad you were able to figure out what this series is truly about
good God he's self-aware! The timelines have merged! Call in Tenet!
It was quite a nice read. It also contained a lot more of immature nonsence from our 'villain' and AJ than I expected.
Useless, as usual.
So I'll make a compromise with myself by sleeping with you and then dating and marrying some other guy I'm not into! Sound logic!
Perfect timing!
I guess it's 'Edgelord McHoofinson' or something like that.
That just sounds great. "I forgive you for running after the bank robber, getting the money back and leaving home soon aftewards. I'm such a calm and understanding type that I'll gladly treat you to another boring date." I think that this stallion's lack of voice hurts the story somewhat.
Great topic to discuss on a second date, especially if the first one went rough. Not awkward at all.
Er... So, one night with a bad boy suddenly makes AJ less bored with her 'Mr. Right, but not really'? I don't buy it. This will probably end in tears (unless one of them comes to their senses and backs off in time). Don't go for a relationship just to be in a relationship. It isn't smart, and it isn't honest either.
P.S. Sorry for being harsh, but AJ is one of my favorites. In my opinion, one of her defining traits is her maturity (considering the show she's in) and common sense. It's certainly interesting to see her in a situation in which she would act irrationally, but the ending to this particular story felt very off.
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I always find it interesting seeing how my interpretation of the characters differs from the interpretation other fans have.
I felt that AJ having her one special night of lust was the mature choice, since it'd allow her to move on to the next stage of her life. If she hadn't slept with the villain, then she would've always wondered "what if?" However, now that she's gotten it out of her system, she can move on.
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