As a classics minor, it's my responsibility to be an ass and correct any iffy Latin I see.
Replace the 'nocte' with 'nox' - 'nox' is the nominative form of the word meaning "night," which is used when a noun is the grammatical subject of a sentence. 'Nocte' is the ablative.
Further, 'nox' is a feminine noun, so the masculine 'tuus' should be replaced with the feminine 'tua,' and 'aeternus' with the feminine 'aeterna.'
'Madre' isn't Latin, it's Spanish. Replace it with 'Mater,' the vocative form used when directly addressing someone.
Move the 'est' to the back of the sentence. Mind you, where it is now is acceptable, but verbs generally appear last in a sentence.
The following Latin would be much better than what you have now:
Nightmare had a heart talk to her former host. As they say you usually take a good look at your life when you are about to die. Eris probably never imagine she would come this close to dying.
Damn, last chapter promised this chapter was going to be clop, so when I got to the part where Nightmare told Dusk to rape/torture/etc her as reconciliation I thought he was actually gonna fucking do it.
So glad he didn't, probably wouldn't have been too good on his own mind, not to mention it wouldn't have actually solved anything.
soon the lewds
As a classics minor, it's my responsibility to be an ass and correct any iffy Latin I see.
Replace the 'nocte' with 'nox' - 'nox' is the nominative form of the word meaning "night," which is used when a noun is the grammatical subject of a sentence. 'Nocte' is the ablative.
Further, 'nox' is a feminine noun, so the masculine 'tuus' should be replaced with the feminine 'tua,' and 'aeternus' with the feminine 'aeterna.'
'Madre' isn't Latin, it's Spanish. Replace it with 'Mater,' the vocative form used when directly addressing someone.
Move the 'est' to the back of the sentence. Mind you, where it is now is acceptable, but verbs generally appear last in a sentence.
The following Latin would be much better than what you have now:
"Tua nox aeterna est, Mater."
Nightmare had a heart talk to her former host. As they say you usually take a good look at your life when you are about to die. Eris probably never imagine she would come this close to dying.
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Soon.....
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Hey asses are good sometimes so thanks for being one!
So the clop next chapter is dusk's nightmare, that's got to be rough for Moon.
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Maybe... maybe not...
So they are Losing immortality But what kind of immortality is it we are Talking here?
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So while I dont want to give anything away, its not a permanent thing. I have details wit the foals to go with it
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Ah ok, but else i can't help but feel like Lune and Nightmare is going to become one again
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Damn, last chapter promised this chapter was going to be clop, so when I got to the part where Nightmare told Dusk to rape/torture/etc her as reconciliation I thought he was actually gonna fucking do it.
So glad he didn't, probably wouldn't have been too good on his own mind, not to mention it wouldn't have actually solved anything.
Yea forgiveness for everyone !
a chapter of legend and a doubt in a story you will use that theme of the "children of the night"
I love the family bonding bits and I more then ever really want Luna to join in the future.