Twilight and Spike, siblings in all but blood, go adventuring together in Canterlot. They don't find what they are looking for, but they stumble onto something better.
Written in a universe where Spike acts more mature, and Twilight is slightly more adventurous. Both are young adults, though Spike is still considered a juvenile because 'dragon years'.
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This is my first one shot, so if you feel that something in the story has fueled your ire, please, tell me
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Fueled my ire? Nay, Jenna, for this story has lighted my fire. A fire that will slowly burn and fill my mind with a comfortable warmth, and a fire that will continue to heat up my mind long after it has reduced itself to embers.
I loved this story, Jenna. Loved the way you set the story up, the way Spike and Twilight interact with one another, etc. Loved the way you built the dynamics up until that last line, that last word that wrapped up the story. For that, I can sum this story up into one word:
Perfection.
As one of your editors (the best one, obviously), I may be a tad bit biased to say that this was great. But, I'm gonna say it anyways. This was great. One of the first stories I've read that has made... Spilight? Twike? Neither of those sound right. One of the first to make TwilightxSpike sound not creepy, and even sweet. Your descriptions are awesome and super engaging, and there's just so much that I love about this. I might not be as poetic as Sunlight, but I will have you know that I have enjoyed this thoroughly.
This looks swell
This was adorable, I loved it.
The only way I think it could be better is if Celestia showed up and chilled with them. I was honestly kinda expecting it near the end there.
I would've given this a like for the twispike alone
then you had to go and clog my arteries with the overwhelming sweetness, so thanks for that
if only I could like this twice
So how DID they get out?
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I don’t know, maybe a sequel is in order?
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Sequel or riot
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Sequel or I'm joining you.
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me three
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HERE WE GO
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Mayhap you should. Continue your other stories first please.
Oh, this was nice...more of this world someday would be welcome. ( Woona is a bit of a troll like all siblings can be. )
This felt so weird... I'm shivering trying to shake myself back to reality.
Jarring to see such a different portrayal of both of these characters, but an enjoyable experience all the same. I wouldn't complain if more were to come of this. Looking forward to it.
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I hope you come back safely
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I did, thankfully. On a side note, that story was amazing.
Loved it! This story is super accessible, maintains a cute balance of adventure and low-stakes slice of life, and keeps a good focused tone throughout. Your rebellious and adventurous take on Twilight is adorable, too. Now that the show is over there's a ton of room to re-imagine characters without the confines of canon. I'm feeling inspired to write her going to a punk rock show and having Spike chase her around through a bunch of different sticky, smokey, low-ceiling'd venues trying to protect her
Fascinating. I enjoy the gentle jeering between Twilight and Spike.
Really got a sense for their character dynamic.
I also enjoyed the quizi-adventurous tone, which ended up just being a kind of a sentimental moment. It's a tone I haven't seen played with very often but am curious about. It's like what heroes do on their time off. They still go adventuring but with lower stakes
Wow! Playful and super cute. Great job!
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Write it!
This was SO... very... epic. I adore these two. Somehow, it just... fits. It feels plausible, like your Twi spent far more time with a certain pink alicorn and wound up wilder for it. The world kinda writes itself... Though that may be because these two remind me of my fanon's Bon-Bon and Lyra.
Your interactions are WAY better though!
And both the ending, and your profile pic, have X(squee)4000 levels of cuteness.
Is your pick an OC, or Tia without her regalia? Heckin' adorable, either way.
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Tia without regalia!
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Check it out!
The story would be so good if this one annoying song wasn't stuck in my head at the time