It's been years since Twilight took over as sole princess alongside her friends to help. Starlight's been headmare of the friendship school for a few years, and all seems perfect with no new threats or problems... that is, until the princess dissapears. No one knows where Twilight is. Celestia and Luna take her place for the time being, but it does not solve the problem that lingers in everycreature's minds.
The princess of friendship is gone.
Embarking on a journey, Starlight, alongside her best friend Trixie, look for the missing princess; a tale of mysteries, ancient beings and a reckoning from the past...
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This is created alongside a symphonic poem I'm composing over in my YouTube channel. I will upload the chapter alongside the musical piece from the symphonic poem that can be listened to alongside the chapter. If you click Opening and Main Theme you can listen to the first piece of the symphonic poem!
The link to the pieces will be included both on the chapter's writer's notes as well as on the title of the chapter or location where the piece accompanies the story.
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Ah! This is gonna be exciting! :D
I wish you good luck and much success!^^
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Thank you!! Hope you enjoy
An intriguing premise!
I know I'm not your editor, but I wanted to point out a few spots of grammatical bother:
- Unless this misspelling is significant to the narrative, you meant "Sparkle"
- You might also consider capitalizing "Princess"
- "Breathe" is the verb. "Breath" is the noun.
I don't mean to be a "grammar Nazi," but these suggestions would improve readability a great deal.
The overall flow of the narrative could use some dusting, but it is readable. Overall, good job with this!
10370830
Thank you! And thanks for pointing all this out!
10370696
Yaaay! Thank you!
An exciting start!
"Trixie peaked down the abyss" is a typo for "peeked", and you also have one lowercase "starlight".
10374462
Thank you so much for pointing that out!
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Great job! I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
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Thank you!