Gilda and Scootaloo are suspicious of their friend Rainbow Dash acting differently during her and Soarin's wedding preparations. They soon discover something every creature else did not know: Lightning Dust had finally returned and is impersonating Rainbow the whole time as revenge for the reckless pegasus' fate the last time they saw each other in 'The Washouts'.
The incomplete fan fiction that motivated this story's creation was written by Skullkittenz the Reaper on fan fiction. I made a few twitches such as getting Gilda involved and making Lightning the antagonist instead of Spitfire, since making good characters look bad is something I will never do. Plus, Spitfire may have shown some bad values before in 'Rainbow Falls' where she reveals her selfishness when she dumped Soarin for a better flyer, and was willing to take away someone else's need for her own desires, alongside Fleetfoot, dishonesty when she deceived Soarin and Rainbow into believing her lies so she could get what she wanted, and immorality when she did what was obviously wrong, but she is not immoral to the point of being evil as a villain.
You know the point of a twist is that you're supposed to not tell everyone and let them figure it out, or try to, before you reveal it. You also need help from an editor because...... DAMN.
Hmm... Rainbow Dash does seem a little bit off. Could be a changleling.
1. The griffon Gilda befriends in S5 is named Greta.
2. Italics are used for a character’s thoughts, or to put emphasis on a specific word/phrase. Don’t use them on every single line of dialogue.
It’s not an original story if you just copy verbatim the plot of something someone else wrote. You can’t just rewrite A Canterlot Wedding and swap the characters and call it your own story.
The point of fan fiction is to take a basic premise provided by the show/comic/movie/book/whatever, and expand on it, making it your own. You can use the canon characters, but don’t just copy an episode plotline verbatim.
A Canterlot Wedding is one of my favorite episodes, but reading this was boring because there were no twists. I knew exactly what was going to happen because you copied the plotline almost word for word.
There’s so many things that episode didn’t address that would make for an interesting story. What is Chrysalis’ origin story? (she gets one in the comics but I don’t like it). How did she know about the gem caves beneath Canterlot if “most ponies have forgotten that these caves even exist.” How long was Cadence an imposter? What happens in the aftermath; does Shining feel guilty for not realizing he was about to marry a bug?
There are over 200 episodes of MLP, and thousands of little details/characters/places you could expand on. And many more Alternate Universes you could create. (Pick a major or minor event that happened in the show, and change it. Then write what happens from there. Instead of Cadence being kidnapped, have Chrysalis kill her instead. Or if that’s too dark, come up with something else.)
You’ll never make ALL the shippers happy. It’s impossible.
For every one of those ships, there are dozens of others that clash with it. If they came out and said that Rainbow married Soarin, it would upset the people who wanted her to end up with:
I love Soarindash. I’ve made dozens of artworks of them, and dozens more inspired by their color palette (very light blue, sky blue, and rainbow). (Delphina34.deviantart.com)
They’re one of the few ships that’s been around since Season 1 and is still getting artwork/stories to this day. The “soarindash” tag on Derpibooru has nearly 5000 artworks under its name, and that’s not even counting the hundreds of fan children people have created for them.
My point is, it’s extremely popular. Hundreds of people have spent the last 9+ years making artworks and writing stories about Dash and Soarin, one of which is the best (and longest) book I’ve ever read. (https://www.fimfiction.net/story/194448/piercing-the-heavens if you’re curious).
You think the show creators aren’t aware that it’s a popular ship? They keep getting little teases in the show, but that’s as far as it’ll get.
One person copying episode plotlines verbatim and swapping out the characters isn’t gonna convince them where thousands of original artworks and stories have failed.
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Sorry about my writing method, I just figured that my dialogue needs to stand out from the passage, that is why I put all my dialogues in Italic.
you keep using these words - I do not think they mean what you think they mean
I'll be honest m8, your entire page - stories included - sound like the ramblings of someone who just discovered the internet and a dictionary and decided to put their newfound knowledge to work despite not having a clear understanding on structuring or coherency
I to agree with you my friend, I also am a huge fan of SoarinDash CheesePie RariSpick and all the other ships names I love seeing, and it also makes me happy about this story and that writer, may be a bit right on the Soarindash parts except i never ship Dash with Zephyr Breeze,Spitfire,Gilda (never with that) applejack, twilight,and not with rarity, pinkie pie, Fluttershy or anyone of them, but sometimes I do ship her with Big Mac and Bread Burn sometimes, but i do love this story and it is almost similar to the Canterlot Wedding episodes 1 and 2 I LOVED IT ALOT TOO!!!❤️❤️❤️❤️
But i also agree that everyone can vote and choose for who is a good ship with anypony they can think of even me, as long as they like it that's all that matters. Also plus I love this story ALOT and happy about it, but what that writer https://www.fimfiction.net/user/288147/Delphina34 I don't like what she said cause I think everyone can make a story book from a episodes as long as they make it different from it just like this one, as long as she the one who made this makes her happy, and the other readers reading this happy, that's all that matters is what the readers think and like about it.
As I was saying I loved it and a huge Fan of this and I love the last episode of MLP and hope to see the new "MLP Next Generation" shows, that is if they ever make it.
May the best writers ships lovers fans have a great story book for all to see.
And if you'd like you can see my new post I made and give me your opinions on it and what you think of it and vote on too.
I really want the others to read it and give me they're answers on it. Can you do that please, for a good friend in need?
I’m not sure I like SoarinDash... sorry
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We make them stand out by using speech marks and a separate paragraph.
And you're not even consistent in that regard!
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Ouch...that was a formatting nightmare.
This sentence is very poorly worded. You badly need a proofreader.
I don't think you know how dyes work...
How convenient.
Ok this was very cute. But i will say i have to downvote for unoriginality. it kind of reminds me of a play by play of the royal wedding script. which in its own made the story kind of repetitive instead of unique in its own way. but the effort was there. so good on that!
Love this! 😍😍😍
Yess! This Day Aria 🥺 I can imagine RD singing this song with her raspy voice 🤣 one of my fave songs in MLP
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True. But, it's Equestria we're talking about. We don't totally know how things work there 🤫😝
What a cute remake of A Canterlot Wedding! 😍
Indeed! I really love this element of their relationship. Makes them super cute!
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Right...